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Epilogue:


I don't know how long it's been now. Master Discord sometimes messes with my perception of time. Sometimes it feels like eons, and others -if I didn't have clear memories of LiarJack's little sister growing up and dying of old age (after Scootaloo died as an adult mare defying master) I'd think it all happened yesterday.  The Elements of Chaos seem to have rendered us immortal.

Master Discord has no need for servants, minions or slaves, but he keeps us around anyway.

Liarjack is almost the only one of us who seems to remember how things were before . . . everything began.

She smiles and tells me that everything was rigidly frozen with order before Master Discord took 'control.'  That nothing and no one ever changed, the world was caught in a predictable monotone cycle.

I'm relatively certain she's lying, it's hard to tell though, she's gotten much better since things began. I know she's only saying it though so I don't get upset, so I'm not angry and I'm glad she's willing to lie for my sake.

I sometimes go into a daze and wander the palace aimlessly until I somehow end up in the gallery. Nothing is ever the same once, except the statues in the middle: a solid gold statue of a large Alicorn that shines like the sun, and a smaller silver one that simmers like the moon.

I don't understand why, but I always end up crying while looking at them. FlutterCruel thinks I need to grow up, of course Rarigreed doesn't care, Angry Pie is always asking what I'm crying over, Liarjack just says I'm crying because the statues are so beautiful, Traitor Dash always begins to tell me something, then stops before saying anything meaningful.

By that time, I have to feed and wash Spike. It takes a long time since he's so big, and Master Discord is always riding him around like Spike was a party horse for fun. It always leaves Spike so tired.

Rarigreed is always in her bedroom, or storage room for her 'jewels': they're about the same thing. She's always so dirty, her coat is practically matted with dust from her collection and digging up more to add to it.

She rubs herself against the rocks and stones in her room the way you would a lover. She has rooms full of the things, it's a wonder they haven't fallen over and crushed her. She's always getting more.

She venomously insists they're diamonds rubies, emeralds, what-have-you. We're all sure she's quite crazy.  

Liarjack spends the most time with her, always complimenting how 'beautiful' Rarigreed's collection is, and asking finer details about them. Rarigreed is happy to comply and goes on for hours about her 'treasures.'

Rarigreed's caretaker used to be a white unicorn with a cutie mark for singing until the sweet mare died of old age.

Angry Pie once said they were just 'dumb rocks.' Rarigreed gave her a broken jaw. Traitor Dash said that was the first time Rarigreed had given -anything- in a long time. I can't remember when Rarigreed has given away anything ever.

Liarjack told Rarigreed Angry Pie was just seeing things and of course her treasure weren't rocks, there was no reason to be upset or unhappy.

Whatever you do, don't laugh around Angry Pie, it'll be the last mistake you make. Just take a look at at the fully grown alligator skin on her wall to know what I mean.

She almost seems to hunt down ponies, Dragons, diamond dogs, Griffons, Zebras, -anything- that laughs. Master Discord approves.

Master once laughed near her, she reacted naturally . . . mercifully all she got was a limp for the rest of her life. Hasn't slowed her down one bit.

Don't ask what FlutterCruel does, you don't want to know.

Traitor Dash is always trying to protect or save ponies who get in the way of Master's games. Strangely she always ends up having to let one suffer to save another, master oddly laughs harder during those games.

There's this one pegasus who walks around the palace each day, her wings don't seem to work right, or her legs for that matter. Her eyes always looking in different directions.  She has a pale blond mane and a gray coat, but then again all ponies have gray shades to their colors.

She starts out each day as a fillie too small for a cutie mark then by the time she finishes a full circle for the day, she's so old that you'd think it was only force of will keeping her heart pumping.  

She's always carrying a unicorn filly shaped muffin on her back. Keeping it safe from hungry birds.  She speaks to it.  "No please, she's my muffin, she's my baby, sneeze don't!" She rambles, she doesn't seem to even notice when I try to speak to her. She's always counting down a number of laps each day, telling the muffin everything will be okay once she's done them all. Last I check she was down to only eight quad trillion. "He promised, he promised, you'll be okay, as soon we finish Dinky, he promised, you'll be you."

This pale blue unicorn with a magic wand cutie mark wandered into the palace once, she was older than old, practically skin and bones.  None of the others gave her much mind but me, LJ, and Traitor Dash. LJ just told her sweet nothing that made her smile though I didn't hear them. Traitor Dash looked like she had seen a ghost. She looked at me almost intensely, trying to recall something, as if we had met before. But the look of recognition faded from her eyes and she left the palace never having once raised her head or spoken a word.

Despite Liarjack's best efforts, I sadly found out she died of a heart attack soon after and Traitor Dash and LJ buried her body on the palace grounds.  Kinder than letting Master reanimate her corpse and send it to eat the brains of who she had loved most in life.  Wouldn't be the first time that happened to an unburied body. Applebloom had had to defend herself from her own husband's zombie.

About once a week or so (it's hard to tell) Traitor Dash shows up in my bedroom after 'midnight' (not that night and day really exist anymore, you expect a world run by master to -make sense-?).

She just shows up unannounced at the end of my bed unnoticed when I'm not looking. Glancing at the two house plants I keep but I can't remember why they're so important to me that I keep them watered and in the sun.

I've long since stopped asking questions when she begins speaking.

"Twilight Tragedy," She begins saying my name. "Master promised he'd put everything back the way it was before, -everything!- Every detail, every memory: except mine . . . all," Dash began to tear up, "All I need to do," She hiccuped, "Is murder the pony I care about the most!" She breaks down sobbing, hugging me.  "I can't do it Twilight! I want AJ to be honest again! I want Pinkie to laugh again! I want Rarity to be sane again! I want Fluttershy to be FLUTTERSHY again! But . . but . . I CAN'T DO IT! It's for the sake of everypony, it's for the sake of everything!  But I can't kill my best friend . . . I'm  .. . I've always thought I was strong, ya know, deep down . . . I'm not .  . I'm weak . . . I'm a traitor . . . I'm a traitor . ..  I'm a traitor . . ." She falls asleep in my forelegs.

I wonder about it the next morning, the layout of the palace having changed again, as usual. I wonder what Dash meant in earnest, confused on how she described the others.

Then in all comes back like a crack of thunder. I remember! I remember! Celestia! Luna! Mom! Dad! All of us! This is wrong! This can't be real! It isn't real!

I use my horn to guide me! I'll cure them! I'll lead them! I won't fail! I can't fail! I mustn't fail! Blood pumps through me as I feel my colors returning to me after too long! If I can wake up then so can everyone!

I think about where everyone normally is, Pinkie Pie is closest! I'll start with her!

Discord appears out of the blue before me before I've made it five steps.  I draw in power ready for the fight of my life and . . . he snaps his fingers and the worlds turn gray in my eyes again.

"Oh Twilight, Twilight, Twilight. My little Twilight Tragedy. You forget each time. The only reason you ever wake up each time at all is when and if I want you to . . ."


I don't know how long it's been now. Master Discord sometimes messes with my perception of time. Sometimes it feels like eons, and others -if I didn't have clear memories of LiarJack's little sister growing up and dying of old age (after Scootaloo died as an adult mare defying master) I'd think it all happened yesterday.  The Elements of Chaos seem to have rendered us immortal.

I'm informed by My Master that some foalish ponies in Ponyville are trying to practice magic. Duty calls. Time to show these little ponies that Magic Is Tragedy.

~Fin
UPDATE 2012 Feb 16th The audio adaption (complete with original art for the piece and original music and voice actors!) for this chapter is here! [link]
[link]

The POVs of the Elements of Harmony Squad as in Season Two Episode One where Discord breaks them one by one. And some truths behind of these events you may not thought of.

And we've come to the epilogue. Tell me what you think and what you feel, because I feel this piece is meant to speak for itself.


Other Parts In Chronological Order:

LiarJack: [link]

Anger Pie: [link]

Rarigreed: [link]

FlutterCruel: [link]

Traitor Dash: [link]

The Pathetic And Irrelevant Trixie: [link]

Twilight Tragedy: [link]

Epilogue (here)

Link to the Gallery of the Discord Ponies POV Series, dealing with their descent into darkness by Discord's games and epilogue. [link]

And here is a link to the sequel of this series: the Reharmonized/Recovery/Healing Ponies POV series! Dealing with after the defeat of Discord and the mane six, along with all people of Ponyville dealing with the emotional stress in their own way of what they did while under Discord's control. Here's a hint, IT ISN'T EASY TO JUST PUT YOUR HOOVES FORWARD! Who will be able to face the future, and who will need a lot of help to face themselves? [link]

MLP:FiM Copyright Hasbro.


AND NOW WE HAVE OUR TV TROPES PAGE! YAY! [link]

Image used with permission. [link]


Eine psychologische Auseinandersetzung mit dem ersten Zweiteiler der zweiten Staffel von My Little Pony: Freundschaft ist Magie, erzählt aus der Sicht der sechs Heldinnen der Geschichte:
Equestria steht am Rande einer Katastrophe. Ein Feind, so alt wie das Land selbst, hat sich aus seinem Jahrtausende-langen Schlaf befreit, und hat die königliche Hauptstadt und Ponyville ins Visier genommen.
Discord, seines Zeichens Gott des Chaos, will den Thron wiedererringen, von dem ihn Celestia und Luna einst gestürzt hatten. Und dieser Tyrann bedient sich zum diesen Zweck seiner zerstörerischsten Waffe; und das sind Equestrias Ponys selber. Als Herr über Verstand und Wahrnehmung, weiß er sich jeden noch so starken Willen untertan zu machen.
Nun liegt es an den sechs Elementen der Harmonie, Discord Paroli zu bieten, bevor das Land unter ihm im Chaos versinkt.
Doch dann kriegen auch sie die volle Breitseite von Discords Macht zu spüren. Eine nach der anderen stellt fest, dass Discord in seinen Begründungen doch sehr 'überzeugend' sein kann....
Dies sind ihre Geschichten.


Sechs Knechte
Was wäre wenn... alle Bemühungen doch umsonst waren? [link]
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This is very deep, and doesn't give you the so-called "Happy ending" that most stories have. In it's place it gives you a heartbreaking story ending, that you and no one else wants. But, it tells that not all stories end happily, and the same goes for real life. I may be young, but i'm not one to think that EVERYTHING ends in peace, love, and happiness, and this fan fiction shows it.

Although, it was depressing to see that now being immortal, the mane six had to watch everypony else die. Not that they cared enough to notice, having been too busy being, greedy, cruel, or angry.

Other than that, I simply loved the story, and it got me in the heart every time Twilight said something about the cutie mark crusaders, or her Discorded former friends. Also, the one part that almost made me cry, along with a lot of the other parts of the story. Was the part where Derpy had to walk around the palace every day, while aging rapidly over and over again, from a filly, to an old mare. Along with the fact that Discord promised to turn Dinky back to normal from her muffin form if she did over eight quad trillion laps.

Another part that made me sad was that Traitor Dash/Rainbow Dash remembered everything. From their true names, to how they were before all this happened, before discord took control, when they were the "ELEMENTS OF HARMONY". I was really excited when Twilight turned back to normal after remembering what Rainbow dash meant, and was actually rooting for her as she ran for the door to find and cure Pinkie Pie. Then, when Discord stopped her, and re-corrupted her, it was like nothing happened and we with Twilight were sent back to the beginning clueless of what had happened just minutes ago.


Overall, the whole fan fiction was terrific, and doesn't deserve anything under five stars. I like how you put the reader in Twilight's eyes, seeing all that had happened after Discord took over and what happened to all of the mane six, 5 stars for Vision! Although, Discorded mane six fan fictions and art have been done to death, you found a much more original way to turn the story up-side down in a good way, 5 stars for Originality!

The emotion and feeling put in to this is at master level, and there are no details left out. The writing is excellent in every way, and doesn't fail to transport you there as if seeing it all yourself. Along with the dramatic speech pauses, and brilliant use of caps lock to help you understand the intensity in Traitor Dash's voice, 5 stars for Technique. Last, but not least, is the impact it had on me. Well, how do I begin?

It started when I realized that instead of the child friendly chaos we see on the cartoon, no not at all, it was completely more twisted, and heartless. I felt bad for Traitor Dash the most, because she was the only one who knew that killing her best friend would save all the others. I could feel my heart being broken when Discord said he was the one who snapped Twilight out of it, just to make her forget the whole thing again. I think I speak for everyone when I say that the impact this made on me, while toying with my emotions, 5 stars Impact.
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epilogue:


I do not know how long it was now. Master misunderstandings sometimes confused with my perception of time. Sometimes it seems like forever, and other -If I had a clear memory of my sister LiarJack mature and die of old age (after Skutalu dead bodied mare stops wizard), I think it all happened yesterday. Things to chaos seems to have been given us forever.

Master Disagreements do not need employees, servants or slaves, but keeps us around anyway.

Liarjack almost the only one of us who seem to remember how it was before. , It all started.

She smiles and tells me that that was hard freeze before the Master of disagreement, "control". This is nothing, and no one ever changed the world was caught in the very near monotonous cycle.

I believe that sleep is hard to tell, but it got a lot better since all began. I know it's just saying, though, so I'm disappointed, so I'm not angry, I'm happy that he is ready to go for me.

Sometimes they go in a daze and aimlessly wandering the castle while I somehow ended up in the gallery. There is one every time, except for the statue in the middle of a solid gold statue of the great corners shining as the sun, and limited funds fire as new.

I do not know why, but I always end up crying, looking at them. FlutterCruel I think it would grow Rarigreed do not worry about angry pie always ask what salary Liarjack just say that I cried, because they are idols good, always a traitor Dash started to tell me something, then stops before as some say what is reasonable.

At this time, I have to feed and wash Spike. It takes time, because it is a very big misunderstanding between still riding around like a happy member Spike horse. Always leave Spike was very tired.

Rarigreed always in your bedroom or in a room to save the "pearls": they are the same. It is always so dirty bed cover almost dust from their collections and more to dig for it.

She is rubbing against rocks and stones in your room if you were a lover. It has rooms full of things, it is surprising that they did not fall over and crush. Always more.

Anger insists that diamonds, rubies, emeralds, though-you. All we are convinced that this is pretty crazy.

Liarjack spends most of his time is always a reputation as a "good" collection Rarigreed nuances and ask for them. Rarigreed happy to obey and lasts for hours on her "treasure".

Holder Rarigreed once white buffalo for cutie mark singing, but sweet mare died of old age.

Anger once said that the only "rock stupid. Rarigreed his jaw fracture. Traitor Dash said that he first gave -anything- Rarigreed long I can not remember when Rarigreed never gave anything ..

Liarjack said bad Rarigreed pie was just seeing things, and of course that is a treasure of rock, there was no reason to be worried or unhappy.

Whatever you do, do not laugh about anger pie that would be the last mistake you. Just look alligator and solid wall to know what you think.

It almost seems to be prosecuted Pony, dragons, Diamond Dogs, Griffins, zebras, -anything-, laughing. Disagreements Teacher says.

Master laughed along with her, she responded normally. , Lucky, all they got was soft for the rest of his life. It does not fall down even a little.

Do not ask FlutterCruel, which do not want to know.

Dash traitor always trying to protect or rescue pony that interfere with the teacher. Ironically, it always ends with one had to suffer in order to save another wonderful laugh master difficult in these games.

Here is one of the pegasus walk around the castle every day, and leaves it does not seem to work well, or feet on this issue. His eyes are always looking in the opposite direction. Is there a blond mane and gray coat, but then again, all in shades of gray paint pony.

Each day begins as a very small Fill cutie mark, and then by the time it ends the entire circumference during the day, in the past, what do you think it will only make your heart.

He always brings a unicorn mare in the form of lines on the back. Keep it safe from hungry birds. She tells her. "No, please, she's my bread, she's my baby, sneezing, no!" Walking, she did not seem to even notice when I tried to talk to him. Always count the number of laps each day, talking muffin everything will be better when they are all set. Finally, I checked, there were only eight quad trillion. "He promised, promised, you will be fine when we leave Dink, has promised you."

This light blue unicorn with magic wand cutie mark once lived in the castle, he had over the years, almost skin and bones. No other does not have a lot of heads, but I, LJ, and betrayed dash. LJ has just told its proper place, that is her smile, though I have not heard. Traitor dash seems to appear spirit. He looked at me focus on trying to remember something, as we met. But by looking at the recognition disappeared from sight and he left the castle never once raised his head and did not say a word.

Despite efforts to Liarjack, I unfortunately found out that he died of a heart attack shortly after the traitor and LJ boards and buried his body in a cage. Kinder than allow the Master to revive his body and sends it to the brain to eat what she loved most in life. This will be the first time that happened nezahlyblennoho body. Applebloom had to defend against zombies with her husband.

About once a week or so (hard to tell) betrayed dash appears in my room after "Midnight" (instead of night and day, there are really a lot, you expect the world to run the wizard -Make wisdom?).

This only shows unannounced late my bed, without being noticed when I was looking for. Check all houseplants I was there, but I can not remember why they are important to me that I keep them watered and not

I pray not when you start talking.

"Twilight tragedy," she begins to say my name. "Teacher, has promised to put everything back as it was before, -All - every detail, every memory ... my all," Dash started to vomit, "All I had to do," hyknuv "Murder pony worries me more!" She breaks down sobbing, hugging me. "I can not do it in the dark, I want AJ to be rediscovered, Pinky again, I want to laugh, I'm no longer very common, I want to be Flattershay Flattershay again! But .. But .. I can not do! Because ponies, so that's all! But I can not kill my best friend ... I ... I always thought that I was strong, I know deep. .. I .. I'm not afraid ... I was becoming a traitor ... I'm a traitor. .. I betrayed him ... He They fall asleep on my feet.

I wonder about that morning, and change the location of the castle as usual. Interestingly, dashes mean really confused as described next.

Then it all back, crack of thunder. I remember! I remember! Celestia! Month! Mama! Papa! For all of us! This is the same! This can not be true! This is not true!

I use my horn to help me! I am healed! I love them! I conclude up! I can not! I must not fail! Blood was pumping me how I feel about my color back to me too! When I woke up, so we can all!

I think this, if anything, usually Pinky Pye everyone! I will start with it!

Disagreement arises out of nowhere in front of me before I step five. I draw the institution is willing to fight for their lives. He clicked his fingers and the world is more gray in my eyes.

"Twilight, Twilight, Twilight. My little Twilight disaster. You'll have to forget all the time. The only reason you ever wake up whenever anyone is where and when I want ..."


I do not know how long it was now. Master misunderstandings sometimes confused with my perception of time. Sometimes it seems like forever, and other -If I had a clear memory of my sister LiarJack mature and die of old age (after Skutalu dead bodied mare stops wizard), I think it all happened yesterday. Things to chaos seems to have been given us forever.

I told my boss that some foalish pony in Ponivile try practicing witchcraft. Call duty. During that these little ponies that tragedy magic.

~ Fin

So now, Liarjack is Twilight's zombie sister, Scootaloo is apparently spelled Skutalu, Discord's new name is Disagreements, and Trixie apparently lived in Eden before Discord and the Discorded Mane Six, will take language requests.
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the61scissors Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
My thoughts on Season Zero:

Before Discord took over, "the world was caught in a predictable monotonous cycle." MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!!
Anyways, this was a good season, but things would really get awesome during Reharmonization.

My personal favorites here are Pinkie, Rainbow, and Trixie's chapters, due to feeling the most natural, as opposed to the others, where there was definitely a sense that they had some "help" getting to where they were. 

Speaking of Trixie, your backstory for her was well done, though I wouldn't come to really like Trixie's character until around Butterflies.

Negatives? Well, there's AJ's accent, but aside from that, I have no problems with the story or characters. Like I said, while later seasons would be better, this is still pretty good.
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JakeRulez17 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013
I remember finding this a long time ago while browsing random pages in August 2012, when I first started watching the show. This may be one of my favorite pieces of literature in the fandom, and it's one of the best darker interpretations :)

It reminds me a lot of I Have No Mouth and I Must Scream.

Makes me wish I could write as effectively with little detail (less is more/Nothing is Scarier kinda thing)

Anyway, excellent work. Keep writing! :)
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013
Thank you. I hope if you like the deconstruction, that you'll like the reconstruction in the Reharmonized Ponies stories I've written just as well.

It's weird something I wrote in a week still seems to be my most popular work.

Thank you for your comment dude!
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LordGodsServant Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Well, congrats, very good job.

I've read you're original POV series, the Reharmonization series and the Princess Gaia arc (just finished that one recently) and I have to say that you do an extremely good job with this series. I also admit to reading a smattering of the Epilogue timeline but I'll probably try to fully read that one in order after the others.

The thing is, I usually don't read grimdark stuff because . . . well . . . it just leaves me feeling sad and rather empty. It just makes me so sorrowful about how far our heroes (who used to be very pleasant loving people) have fallen. I can tell that's what you're going for here so, congratulations, you succeeded marvelously. This is the sort of story that makes me want to go and write a fix fic in which a Mary Sue (which will pretty much be an author avatar) comes in and completely tears Discord apart and fixes everything. I want to do this because I care about the characters so much, so take it as a compliment that I'm so invested in them that I want to do that.

Anyway, back to my original point. Like I said I don't usually read grimdark stuff, but I got interested in this because it came as a recommended fanfic on tv tropes (and it had some very detailed pages all to itself to boot) so I looked at the descriptions. I tried it out and it was pretty good, very sad, but very good. But my point is that, unlike other stories where the villain just wins and that's the end of it, I liked how your series stops and basically says "nope, that's not the end of it." While the world is undeniably dark, hellish even (I'm mostly talking about the Dark World Epilogue timeline) as far as I can tell, there is still hope. The line "hope springs eternal" may be a bit cheesy but it is probably the best line to describe it. Discord thinks that he has won totally and completely, that the mane six and even the whole world are nestled under his thumb forever, that he will spend the rest of eternity laughing and using everyone as his own personal toys whether they want him too or not, and that he will go on forever being a complete monster just short of Satan (and loving every second of it.)

But no, one person laughs. I say again, one person laughs and gets away with it. And that is all it takes. Twilight (though it quite realistically takes a while) is not beyond saving. Discord cannot completely destroy her, she still (very vaguely and unknowingly) retains some core parts of what made her a good person. I say again, Discord literally cannot just outright or even psychologically completely destroy all that made Twilight a good person and a good friend. There is a light at the end of the tunnel (and though the tunnel is longer than almost any, there is still a light at the end.) [link]

So, long story short, I love it because your stories aren't trying to be all "happy ending erases all problems and psychological damage" or "happy ending is easy", the characters are legitimately messed up and Discord does end up winning for a long time. But there again, there is a happy ending at the very least possible. Your story doesn't trivialize just how traumatizing what Discord puts everyone through is, but it reminds us that however traumatizing it may be, there is still hope and opportunity for the situation to get better. Discord and really any other villain can't endure forever, they can't destroy what makes life and friendship worth having.

The fact that you go to such an extreme (but kinda logical) with just how depraved and hedonistic Discord is makes the fact that there is still hope and a chance to beat him so much more gratifying.

All in all, I say be proud of this series, because honestly, its one of my favorites, and one of the best Pony fanfics I've read, maybe one of the best fanfics I've read period.

Thanks for writing this. :)
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Hope the audio adaptions have entertained you too. And I hope you're checking out the recursive and the 7 Dreams/Nightmares, or at least, giving them a try.

But seriously. I'm happy my story is still attracting readers. And that you found MEANING AND DEPTH IN EVERYTHING!

Thank you so much for this.

BTW was your link supposed to take me back to deviantart's front page?

Again, THANK YOU MUCH FOR THIS! IT IS EPIC!!!!!!!

I hope you'll share more thoughts eventually.
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LordGodsServant Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
The link was supposed to be one of those face's in the comments options like Anger, Sadness, and Fear. For whatever odd reason they didn't work and I thought I'd gotten rid of them. Must of missed that one so just ignore the link.

Thanks for responding. Oh, and on the subject of recursive fanfics, my favorite (pretty much the only one I've read,) is the Chaos Theory Universe where canon-Discord reforms.

Another way I'll put in how I feel this series stands out is that it takes all the stuff other grimdark fanfics have and replicates the sad hopeless feeling. But along with that, you don't trivialize themes like love and friendship. In other grimdark stories as I understand, they tend to simply deconstruct the mane six and throw out what makes them friends and good people to begin with (or heck this is one of the reasons I dislike grimdark fanfics to begin with in general, not just MLP.)

This is basically brutal deconstruction of the show if Discord were to truly be an uncaring hedonist with an extremely sick sense of humor and god-like powers, he wins for a long time or he leaves deep scars in the case of the Reharmonization timeline. But after that, you reconstruct values like loyalty, generosity, kindness, honesty, and laughter. Laughter starts Twilight Tragedy on the road to recovery, and as I understand it, Applejack/Liarjack is saved by the inherent fact that she lies out of an attempt to be kind, not any sort of malicious intent. Basically, you don't simply throw out all morality, making the heroes into sadists to destroy Discord, you remind the characters and readers that just because the world may be dark, doesn't mean that those values that made the mane six friends and good people don't hold water anymore. It's these things that save the characters. After the deconstruction of the character is done, you rebuild the characters better than they ever were. They become stronger for all their hardships.

Sorry if I'm waxing philisophical, I just really like your stories.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
I LIKE waxing philosophical.

And I'm happy to hear that the decon/recon cycle appeared here.

IMHO these make the best stories because you don't just have the heroes overcome the outer obstacles or their emotional ones, but also their META ones, where they show readers that stories where people BELIEVE IN THINGS aren't just roads to destruction.
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CottonSnourth Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Professional Writer
Comments like that make all our hard work worthwhile.
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LordGodsServant Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Thank you, I hope I brightened up your day. :)
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Kendell2 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Wow! Epic comment dude!
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LordGodsServant Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Thanks :)
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Kendell2 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
:)
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Serefin99 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
All I can say is, I am so f*cking glad I didn't discover this when it first came out. And that I have a habit of reading the Tropes page for stuff before reading the stuff itself.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
"And that I have a habit of reading the Tropes page for stuff before reading the stuff itself."

So you loaded up spoilers?

"All I can say is, I am so f*cking glad I didn't discover this when it first came out."

Why?
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Serefin99 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
Not necessarily spoilers. I really only read the Awesome moments and Funny moments pages.

I'm glad because this would be a prime spot to end the story. The bad guy has won, all the characters are under his control, it just screams "end of series".
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
It was originally going to be the end of the series. I often wonder if I made the right decision to continue this epic in Reharmonization.
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Serefin99 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013
Of course you did. Never doubt yourself for making something that manages to bring out the emotions of just about everyone who reads it.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013
*hugs*

I only home I manage to get this monster of a fanfic to the happy ending.
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Hawkehy Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Student General Artist
I cried at the part with Derpy and Dinky. D:
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
In season six things get better in the dark world timeline.
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ardashir Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
I still remember how heart-rending this was when I first read it. It was made worse by the fact that the second episode of the season hadn't been aired yet and we didn't know what was going to happen. I didn't think the girls would end up discorded forever, but I had this idea about Twilight being healed but having to spend the rest of the season dodging Discord and hunting her friends down to save them before they stopped Discord in the season climax.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
"I still remember how heart-rending this was when I first read it. It was made worse by the fact that the second episode of the season hadn't been aired yet and we didn't know what was going to happen. "

I know. That is precisely what I had to get it written as fast I could, so it would HAVE that impact!!!


"I didn't think the girls would end up discorded forever, but I had this idea about Twilight being healed but having to spend the rest of the season dodging Discord and hunting her friends down to save them before they stopped Discord in the season climax."

Indeed. Which is part of why I wrote the Pony POV Series Reharmonziation.
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ardashir Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
I know. That is precisely what I had to get it written as fast I could, so it would HAVE that impact!!!

Well, you certainly did a good job with that!

And in retrospect I suppose that my own idea was rather foolish (like they'd do something that dark in a lighthearted children's' show!), but they'd already done some surprising things with the show, so it didn't seem completely beyond the realm of possibility.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
Personally I think it's too bad that no one is gonna allow the moral 'emotional and mental scares take more than a day to heal' on a kid's show.
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ardashir Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
They're probably afraid it'll fly over the kids' heads, or that it'll get some self-appointed censor all bothered.

Or of course, they just don't see it as fitting the show's style.
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BrutalityInc Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012
I finally got the courage to read this. The sheer, stark hopelessness of the situation for everyone and the fates of the Discorded Six are so very well conveyed from the POV of Twilight Tragedy.

Tragedy's manner of speech gave us a pony who had utterly given up on everything except for her devotion to Discord - mechanical, monotonous, devoid of emotions and life, and so very, very lonely. She's like a robot, an extension of her Master's will, carrying her orders without a shred of empathy. This is ironically what happens (albeit, very extreme portrayal) of what happens if Twilight never made friends. Her tone also gives us the impression of resignation to ones fate, a complete contrast from what we expect out of heroes. The sheer lifelessness in Twilight shows how far her Discorded state taken to the extreme, and just how far they had fallen.

Other Discorded Six' fate is similarly extreme and heartwenching. Angry Pie is, like Pinkie Pie, eccentric and crazy, but rather than using it to spread joy she uses it to spread pain and death in her maniacal attempt to make everyone take her serious, becoming literally deadly serious. Traitor Dash is still Dash herself, but had been utterly consumed by self-loathing of what she had done. Some don't even know how utterly f**ked up they had become, like Greedity with her rocks and ignoring her own sister. Fluttercruel had gone Cupcakes, and only Liarjack seemed to have any redeeming qualities, and even then she's still a liar and an obedient servant of Discord.

Being the only hope this world had against Discord, their fates show just how dark things had become, how little hope had been left in the world, if at all, and help bring the utterly bleak atmosphere of the Discorded Ponies series to climax. Discord's way of 'playing' with them only make things worse (Discord, you sick snake-shaped bastard...)

I'm not going to elaborate on the other fates, like Derpy and the Princesses. I don't know if I would stop crying if I did. And the implied time-skip between the last story and Epilogue - the remark about by Twillight about how she had lost count of how long time had passed, is simply chilling to the bone. Powers-That-Be, how long had these ponies been spending in what's essentially Hell?

In short, this story had utterly broken my heart. Alex Warlorn, like in the other stories you have a real way with words and touching the readers' hearts. You are a genius, as always.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012
"I finally got the courage to read this. The sheer, stark hopelessness of the situation for everyone and the fates of the Discorded Six are so very well conveyed from the POV of Twilight Tragedy. "

Thanks.

"Tragedy's manner of speech gave us a pony who had utterly given up on everything except for her devotion to Discord - mechanical, monotonous, devoid of emotions and life, and so very, very lonely. She's like a robot, an extension of her Master's will, carrying her orders without a shred of empathy. This is ironically what happens (albeit, very extreme portrayal) of what happens if Twilight never made friends. Her tone also gives us the impression of resignation to ones fate, a complete contrast from what we expect out of heroes. The sheer lifelessness in Twilight shows how far her Discorded state taken to the extreme, and just how far they had fallen."

Ironically I didn't give much thought into Tragedy's portrayal when I wrote from her POV. Incredible how things work out!

"Other Discorded Six' fate is similarly extreme and heartwenching."

Extreme was the idea. Basically, Discord has no shame, and would be WILLING to do the worst and even make the worst even worse!

"Angry Pie is, like Pinkie Pie, eccentric and crazy, but rather than using it to spread joy she uses it to spread pain and death in her maniacal attempt to make everyone take her serious, becoming literally deadly serious."

And little more than a mad animal that needs to be kept on a leash. Her shallowness some say is what makes her completely tragic.

"Traitor Dash is still Dash herself, but had been utterly consumed by self-loathing of what she had done. "

She can't see that DIscord IS effecting her, or doesn't want to.

Some don't even know how utterly f**ked up they had become, like Greedity with her rocks and ignoring her own sister."

She is the most insane of the lot.

"Fluttercruel had gone Cupcakes,"

And loving it.

"and only Liarjack seemed to have any redeeming qualities, and even then she's still a liar and an obedient servant of Discord."

Mostly cause she has nothing left from her point of view.

"Being the only hope this world had against Discord, their fates show just how dark things had become, how little hope had been left in the world, if at all, and help bring the utterly bleak atmosphere of the Discorded Ponies series to climax. Discord's way of 'playing' with them only make things worse (Discord, you sick snake-shaped bastard...)"


"Oh you're making me blush! I'm one of those types who doesn't run away and hide from what they are!"

"I'm not going to elaborate on the other fates, like Derpy and the Princesses. I don't know if I would stop crying if I did. And the implied time-skip between the last story and Epilogue - the remark about by Twillight about how she had lost count of how long time had passed, is simply chilling to the bone. Powers-That-Be, how long had these ponies been spending in what's essentially Hell?"

SUPPOSEDLY a thousand years, SUPPOSEDLY, but her sense of time is so twisted, it could be anything.

"In short, this story had utterly broken my heart. Alex Warlorn, like in the other stories you have a real way with words and touching the readers' hearts. You are a genius, as always."

Thanks. :-D
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BrutalityInc Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012
I'll see if I can do more reviews like this. Hopefully by the end of the Dark World arc they will all get their happy ending (except Discord).

Or maybe bittersweet at best. I mean, over a thousand years, and so much damage... how can they ever recover? How can anyone else in Equestria ever forgive them?
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012
"I'll see if I can do more reviews like this. Hopefully by the end of the Dark World arc they will all get their happy ending (except Discord)."

Everything for Discord is up in the air.

"Or maybe bittersweet at best. I mean, over a thousand years, and so much damage... how can they ever recover? How can anyone else in Equestria ever forgive them?"

BIG THINGS will happen.
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BrutalityInc Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012
Aye, until then.
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KurseofKings Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012
Where can I read more about Scootaloo's fight with Trator Dash?
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012
[link] It happens as a nightmare RD and Scoot have in this chapter.
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CharmingChaos2012 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
this was... depressing. I am sad now. Time for some OctaScratch to cheer me up!
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
How THIS to cheer you up? [link]
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CharmingChaos2012 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Yes. Yes it does.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012
Keep on readying.
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Jarkes Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012
Soooo... when does the "Twilight writes herself a note during one of her brief moments of freedom" scene happen? It was mentioned somewhere on one of the TV Tropes pages, and several other parts of this timeline were mentioned on those pages, even before you had started posting the "Dark World" arc. I'm a little confused...
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012
See AJ's reharmonization chapter when you get to it for your answers.
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Photochad Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
This series was amazing and the epilogue has been really well done, the descriptions of how far they have fallen are chillingly aproperte. I enjoy(not the right word but i can't think of a better one) The fluttershy is a twisted cereal killing pony and pinkie is a violent psycho now angles.

The fate of both derpy and trixie are heartbreaking and disturbing,

the fate of derpy in particular reminds me of the Greek myth of Prometheus, who was basically chained to a Mouton, to have his liver chewed out by vultures, only to be brought back to life to have to live it all over again the next day for 500 years. Expect in this case its derpy walking forever while ravens devour what may or may not have been her child.

Twilights indifference and apathy toward the state of the world now is tear jerking, she has truly just given up completely, her mind totally and completely raped.

broken defeated and lost she simply carries out "masters" orders no matter how horrid or gruesome they may be. whats the point of defeing him now the world has fallen apart everything is gone she doesnt even remberwhat it was like before..shes just a tool now.

Applejack i personally think..knows completely how utterly hopeless and wrong the world is now..but must lie to keep her "friends" doing the bidding of there twisted master.

but Dash..oh man..dash's situation is what got to me the most..she IS trying to stop it,she's trying to stop EVERYTHING but throws herself into one losing battle after another..seeing more and more and more ponys die at the hands of those who where once her freinds as discord just laughs at her weakness and inability to actually affect ANYTHING.

She knows that she could end it all but that would meen killing her best friend...shes already watched discord kill the little(or not so little at the time)) girl that was her biggest fan. And though she knows she will fail the poor thing keeps on fighting..and will keep on fighting because she cant even end her own life sense discord has rendered them all immortal.

this being said i like to think that there may be hope..probly not for the mane six there pretty fucked..but at least the world..maby one day the rebels will develop a mega spell and seal discord and these twisted shells the main 6(or 5 if dash isn't with them) have become, in stone forever.

maby traitor dash will actually find away to strike a fatal blow one day. maby she will pull an IM TAKEING YOU WITH ME moment and blow her self and discord to hell..maby one day when discord lets twi rember the world before just to fuck with her, she will be able to resist being turned back and burn him alive or something fitting for such a prick as he.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012
*printing this one out!*
AND THE SERIES ISN'T OVER YET!

As soon as the edits to t he reharmonization series are done, I plan to continue this, and bridge the two series together!

Expect in this case its derpy walking forever while ravens devour what may or may not have been her child.

Sadly yes that is Dinky. Sparkler is decorating the gallery as a purple crystal statue.


Twilights indifference and apathy toward the state of the world now is tear jerking, she has truly just given up completely, her mind totally and completely raped.

Ironic given that I didn't give it much thought at the time, but apathetic and machine like indifference is what MANY people get when they read Tragedy.


"but Dash..oh man..dash's situation is what got to me the most..she IS trying to stop it,she's trying to stop EVERYTHING but throws herself into one losing battle after another..seeing more and more and more ponys die at the hands of those who where once her freinds as discord just laughs at her weakness and inability to actually affect ANYTHING. "

We get another peak of this during the mind games arch.

Applejack i personally think..knows completely how utterly hopeless and wrong the world is now..but must lie to keep her "friends" doing the bidding of there twisted master.

Which ironically, makes her the most kind hearted of the corrupted six.


She knows that she could end it all but that would meen killing her best friend...shes already watched discord kill the little(or not so little at the time)) girl that was her biggest fan. And though she knows she will fail the poor thing keeps on fighting..and will keep on fighting because she cant even end her own life sense discord has rendered them all immortal.

Oh it's FAR WORSE than that!


this being said i like to think that there may be hope..probly not for the mane six there pretty fucked..but at least the world..maby one day the rebels will develop a mega spell and seal discord and these twisted shells the main 6(or 5 if dash isn't with them) have become, in stone forever.

You'll see eventually. Got a lot of editing and notes to type in and notes to arrange first. And upload this whole mess to FimFiction too.

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maby traitor dash will actually find away to strike a fatal blow one day. maby she will pull an IM TAKEING YOU WITH ME moment and blow her self and discord to hell..maby one day when discord lets twi rember the world before just to fuck with her, she will be able to resist being turned back and burn him alive or something fitting for such a prick as he."

Karma will find Discord . .. eventually.

The story is NOT over yet!
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
This tale isn't over yet. Read the pony POV series to see how thing go from . . . a while back, or rather taking a completely different course. Either way, Fluttershy Fluttercruel Pearls is technically the next part of the story.


Also. Check this out. Let there be light? [link]

Should I include this link in the description?

These two series don't LOOK connected, but believe me they are. And this is NOT the end of things. I promise.
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ImRaidAccount Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
Wow just wow and this fic isn't even that scary yet.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
Really? Lots of people said this one was plenty scary and is my most faved piece.
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ImRaidAccount Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2012
Never said it wasn't but I know it gets worse.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2012
There's light at the end of the tunnel. All will be well.
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ImRaidAccount Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012
Not if your twilight and the constant mind wiping.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012
You'll just have to find out.
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ImRaidAccount Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012
yes yes I will.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012
Thanks.
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