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"Laughter Can Make Others Cry"  

HELLO! HELLO! I'm Pinkamina Diane Pie but everyone calls me Pinkie Pie, I call me Pinkie Pie, except for that little bit just now I guess!

I still remember when Equestia was created how about you? The Sonic Rainboom hit my family's rock farm like this big KA-POW! It gave me this great mane style too! I was so happy I wanted to share it with everyone! My happiness, not my mane! I'd be bald if I did that! So . . . I threw a party! Yes Maneonnites dance! And I think I'm good too! My family loved it and I felt the tingle on my rump! I'll tell you how I got my cutie mark some other time!

I've always been able to make others laugh! I just giggle at the ghosties and they just fade away!

Chocolate Rain! CHOCOLATE RAIN! Oh, right, and the Elements of Harmony got taken by this draco-something or other that really knew how to dance on Twilight's head! Tee-hee!  OOOOH! A Balloon Garden! COOL!!

Everyone's laughing. Everyone keeps laughing when I stop. Everyone keeps laughing when I cry. Everyone keeps laughing when I beg them to stop.

They aren't laughing at my jokes, I AM THE JOKE!

Twilight didn't laugh when I gave her a surprise party in exchange for her extra ticket! That meanie Gilda never laughed at my pranks! That dragon didn't laugh at my routine and tried to eat me!  The poison joke thought it would be funny if I couldn't laugh!

None of the other friends I made in Ponyville ever came to visit or hang out with me when I wasn't throwing a party! The only reason they kept coming was cause I was always having one!  The other girls HAVE NEVER TAKEN ME SERIOUSLY!!!

They think I'm crazy for singing in public just trying to have fun! They thought I was -insane- for laughing at the scary trees until I proved it worked!  Twilight didn't believe me when I said Gilda was mean!  No one even paid attention to me when I needed to put a band together to lure away the Parasprites! THE WHOLE TOWN GOT REDUCED TO RUINS AND THEY DIDN'T TAKE ME SERIOUSLY UNTIL IT HAPPENED!  

AND I JUST WANTED MY DRESS TO BE FUN! I KNOW WHAT FUN IS! IT'S IN MY CUTIE MARK! But all those other ponies! They don't know what fun is! They just laughed at me with the rest!  

Twilight Sparkle thought I was a liar like that Trixie unicorn when I explained how my Pinkie Sense worked (weird, why does it feel like it's gone away?). SHE HAD TO BE CHASED BY A HYDRA until she admitted I wasn't a faker!

I tried to show those ponies and buffalo they just needed to -share- what they had and not fight over it! BUT THEY IGNORED ME! Even when they realized what they had to do no one even thanked me!

And . . . everyone . . .o-of my . .. f-friends . . . threw that surprised birthday party for me no . . . no one's ever thrown a  . . . a p-party f-for me . . .b-before . .  I BET THEY THOUGHT IT WAS ALL A BIG JOKE! MAKING ME THINK THEY DIDN'T WANT A PARTY! Guess what Pinkie? YOU FORGOT YOUR OWN BIRTHDAY! I SHOULD HAVE LISTENED TO ROCKY, MR. TURNIP, SIR LINTS-A-LOT AND MADAME LEFLOUR FROM THE START!

AGGGH! And those pompous selfish ponies at the Grand Galloping Gala! Going around all slow! Listening to boring music! No one there even smiled!

The only time someone laughs is when they think I'm funny, not when I'm BEING funny!

IF THAT'S WHAT LAUGHING IS ALL ABOUT THEN I DON'T WANT ANYTHING TO DO WITH IT! I'M NOT A JOKE! I'M ME! I'M PINKIE! You can't just torture me for your own fun! No one takes me seriously until they have to!!! GRRRR! Even the Cakes treat me like I'm some retarded pet!!

I hate laughing! I hate it! I hate it! I hate it! I HATE IT!  I'm not your toy!

I finally see! I finally understand! The only way to be taken seriously, the only way for them to stop laughing, is let them know there is nothing here to laugh about!  Now Rarity's gone nuts carrying around a worthless rock! Tell me how that's funny! Fluttershy is being a nag! Rainbow Dash has stabbed us all in the back! Equestia is gonna shatter into a million pieces! Just you DARE try and say there's anything funny about that!

-Angry Pie
NOW LISTEN TO THIS STORY'S OFFICIAL SOUND TRACK! [link]

AND NOW WITH AN AUDIO ADAPTION! GET READY FOR NIGHTMARES GALOR! [link]

Personal Pros Of Poor Ponies Possessing Possible Post-traumatic Stress Disorder Brought On By Discord The Deity of Chaos' Mind Games Forcing Them To See the Flip Side Of Their Element Or Appealing To Their Worse Nature Or Outright Cheating With One.

Second up, you're a clown and you know it and parties are where you shine. But why should the joke be on you? Why should you suffer just for their amusement?

Link to the Gallery of the Discord Ponies POV Series, dealing with their descent into darkness by Discord's games and epilogue. [link]

Illustration by Firedrake368 [link], made specifically for this series. Original drawing found here. [link]

Other Parts In Chronological Order:

LiarJack [link]

Angry Pie (here)

Rarigreed: [link]

FlutterCruel: [link]

Traitor Dash: [link]

The Pathetic And Irrelevant Trixie: [link]

Twilight Tragedy: [link]

Epilogue: [link]

POV of Pinkie Pie's Recovery In the Healing Ponies POV Series:
[link]


And here is a link to the 'sequel' known as the Reharmonized/Recovery/Healing Ponies POV series. Dealing with after the defeat of Discord and the mane six, along with all people of Ponyville dealing with the emotional stress in their own way of what they did while under Discord's control, here's a hint, IT ISN'T EASY TO JUST PUT YOUR HOOVES FORWARD! And some want to trot backwards back into the night where the pain can't find them. [link]


MLP:FiM Copyright Hasbro.


AND NOW WE HAVE OUR TV TROPES PAGE! YAY! [link]

EDIT: AND NOW WITH AN AUDIO ADAPTION! GET READY FOR NIGHTMARES GALOR! [link]


Eine psychologische Auseinandersetzung mit dem ersten Zweiteiler der zweiten Staffel von My Little Pony: Freundschaft ist Magie, erzählt aus der Sicht der sechs Heldinnen der Geschichte:
Equestria steht am Rande einer Katastrophe. Ein Feind, so alt wie das Land selbst, hat sich aus seinem Jahrtausende-langen Schlaf befreit, und hat die königliche Hauptstadt und Ponyville ins Visier genommen.
Discord, seines Zeichens Gott des Chaos, will den Thron wiedererringen, von dem ihn Celestia und Luna einst gestürzt hatten. Und dieser Tyrann bedient sich zum diesen Zweck seiner zerstörerischsten Waffe; und das sind Equestrias Ponys selber. Als Herr über Verstand und Wahrnehmung, weiß er sich jeden noch so starken Willen untertan zu machen.
Nun liegt es an den sechs Elementen der Harmonie, Discord Paroli zu bieten, bevor das Land unter ihm im Chaos versinkt.
Doch dann kriegen auch sie die volle Breitseite von Discords Macht zu spüren. Eine nach der anderen stellt fest, dass Discord in seinen Begründungen doch sehr 'überzeugend' sein kann....
Dies sind ihre Geschichten.

2. Nicht lustig
Was wird aus der lustigen Pinkie Pie, wenn sich die Fröhlichkeit - das Brot und die Butter ihres Lebens - gegen sie wendet? [link]
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EndermanBoss Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2015
Here is the chapter filtered through multiple languages, then back to English.

"Some shouted in derision"

Hello! Hello! I JadeMiner but everyone calls Pinkie Pie, Pinkie Pie, except for a bit before I call me !!!!

Questia Yes, I remember you talking about? KA-POW Sonic Rainboom family farm is a strike stone !!!! It's a great way to give me Fardeen! I would like to share with everyone so excited !!!! Happy, Fardeen that !!!! I make my bald !!!! So. . . I gave a party !!!! Which together Maneonnites !!!! And I think I am very good with them! My family and I loved scratching rump !!!! I was trying to say that some cute !!!!

I was able to make others laugh !!!! I laughed about ghosts just missed !!!!

Brown Pula !!!! Brown Pula !!!! Oh, right, Harmony and Elements do not really know how to dance in the morning, Draco-something or other from the head !!!! Tea cry !!!! Ooooh !!!! Balloons in a garden !!!! Cool !!

Each item in the block. Each block has not stopped yet. Keeps everyone in the dark when I cry. Black keeps all asked to stop.

They are black and they are a joke, I joke !!!!

I gave him a surprise party for him in exchange for an extra ticket for the meso laugh !!!! Gilda never looked me laugh !!!! Naga jokes and laughing at my table was not trying to eat me! I thought it was funny that I do not laugh at jokes toxins !!!!

Or visit any of my other friends in Ponyville ever come out with me when I'm throwing a party !!!! The only reason I would come've always done !!!! Some of the girls have never been to me !!! main

He is trying to argue that the public is not only fun singing crazy !!!! I work until he is trying to scare -insane- black tree !!!! I understand Gilda said meso not believe me !!!! When I need to put a group together to pull Parasprites have no one to take care of me !!!! Does not apply to me, the most important of the entire city was reduced to rubble !!!!

KA BA I want to dress up and have fun !!!! I do not know what fun !!!! Cutie mark !!!! But all the other horses !!!! I do not know what they like !!!! He just laughed at me !!!! other

Overflow Meso (? That's not a surprise, why does not feel like something) until it has been approved by the scammers. Pinkie sense of how I work, she sought Hydra "I explained that I thought it was a false unicorn Trixie !!!!

I just horse and buffalo fight for what they do and do not need -share- tried to show !!!! But they ignore me !!!! They understand what they have to do, but if I wanted to thank you!

And so on. . . How. . The-off. .. Father-friend. . . Do not give a surprise birthday party for me. . . The only thing that was never released. . . P party, my protector. . First .b. . I bet you think it was all a big joke !!!! I do not think they do not want to party !!!! Pinkie budget? Do not forget your birthday !!!! I stones, MR should be heard. , Initial Tolo Sir Linchinghsien- lot and Madame LEFLOUR !!!!

AGGGH !!!! The Grand Gala of the selfish and the galloping horse !!!! By slowly !!!! Drilling to listen to music !!!! No smile !!!!

Only someone I'm funny, I think I'm funny, laugh !!!!

Now I want to create a black and IT that is not all about !!!! I like a joke !!!! Me !!!! Pinkie is !!!! You can not punish me happy !!!! Nobody took me seriously until you get !!! GRRRR !!!! Keck I'm not in the sense of some of the pet treat me !!

I hate black !!!! I hate it! I hate it! I hate it! I hate it! I have not played !!!!

Finally I see !!!! I finally understand !!!! The only way to serious, dark, only to stop, I know no one laughs here !!!! Rarely crazy now take almost useless rock !!!! "Tell me ridiculous !!!! !!!! In Fluttershy Rainbow Dash was stabbed in the back !!!! Questia is surprised to say a million pieces !!!! Not only do you have the guts to try and tell you that there is something funny about it!

-Angry Pie

I will take any language suggestions.
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WeirdalPolkapower Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
O_O i wanted to punch discord so bad for this. oh pinkie......:cries:
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2014
You listen to the audio adaption yet? www.youtube.com/watch?v=Tl3BfZ… And I'd say Pinkie Pie was the one who was hurt the most on the inside out of the mane six.
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WeirdalPolkapower Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Yes I did and it made me cry. poor pinkie she really is the most angst ridden of the mane six. Honestly thats why she is my favorite character she is so misunderstood i mean there is more to her then just being a comic relief.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2014
Continue to watch the audio adaption. www.youtube.com/watch?v=ClMeWb…;

Once you get past the Discorded ponies, there's an episode in reharmonized ponies were Pinkie Pie faces her demons, and is touched upon more in Rainbow Dash's second reharmonized chapter. :-)
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ShaD-23 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2014
... I suppose Discord must have a gift for making ponies go to dark places.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2014
You have no idea. 
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ShaD-23 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2014
I watch a lot of Joshscorcher
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KirbyFluttershy Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Wow... this is amazing... you really fleshed out Pinkie... I love that....
I mean... the original show didn't do this with her...
And I do agree with Angry Pinkie... I really do...
But she just doesn't seem to notice her so-called friends doing that until this... or perhaps she notices and shoves it aside just so she can stay happy...
It's pretty interesting to think about...
And I listened to the music... it's very nice. =3
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DianaGohan Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
"Pinkamina Diane Pie "

- Oh see that's why she's crazy, just like all of us Dianas... no wait Diana wasn't insane, that was Samantha before she became supreme and... well hey look I went off topic randomly just like Pinkie Pie.  Maybe that's what us Diana's have in common: pointless tangents.

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 I just giggle at the ghosties and they just fade away! "

- Why didn't you giggle at the Manitcore then or that dragon? Really if laughter makes things go away you'd think you'd use that more.  Then again this is pinkie pie we're talking about.  Even two years ago I knew that meant tangling with insanity, but now I know so much more.

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Chocolate Rain! CHOCOLATE RAIN!"

RANDOM FISH: CHOCOLATE-
TAY ZONDAY: Rainnnnnn!

... sorry I just love that variation of that joke.

- You are doing a better job conveying just how tramuatizing this is for Pinkie Pie then the epiosde.  Again I feel they did that with Applejack and Rainbow Dash and though the effect was there for Pinkie Pie again didn't really feel that.  I'm feeling this though especially since I get being annoyed at never being taken seriously or being disrespected and getting ticked off at that.

"
when I explained how my Pinkie Sense worked (weird, why does it feel like it's gone away?)"

- Eh they did wind up bringing that back... twice so far in what I've seen.  I do still not like the idea of having a power and never really using it but eh maybe it really only gets going every so often.  Maybe it signifies Pinke's time of the month... she gets those body twitches and... man this joke just got more awkward didn't it?

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I SHOULD HAVE LISTENED TO ROCKY, MR. TURNIP, SIR LINTS-A-LOT AND MADAME LEFLOUR FROM THE START! "

- But then someone would of went "what are you doing? Stop being creepy" cause... that's a channel awesome with ponies reference. Also thinking about it should of linked this to the bit with Rarity carrying the rock.  Something like "so Rarity gets to carry a rock around and we don't say anything about that but no one takes my rock friends seriously?"


- Have to say, even as someone who has uses swear or naughty words in quite a lot of fanfics, I just feel... wrong hearing Pinky say something like retarded.  I don't know why maybe just the idea of so "innocent" characters saying stuf like that squicks me out but it does so.  


- "
 Just you DARE try and say there's anything funny about that!"

I think it's funny that Discord was able to make balloons a more scary metaphor then Stephen King's It.  And he had a reaso nfor getting under everyone's nerves and at least proved effective at getting more what he wanted... yeah sorry Mr. King but the MLP:FIM writers are better then you and I think you know it.

Again this works better then the original show in conveying the message you were trying to get across with the dissoance of harmony Pinkie was going through so good job there.  


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Serefin99 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
You know, this story actually gives credit to the idea Pinkie is just insane instead of a Fourth Wall Breaker. I mean, if she could actively look into our world, wouldn't she be able to know how her friends really thought of her? And yes, I know this is part of the episode, but I'm talking about this explanation for why Pinkie turned into, well, Angry,
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
"You know, this story actually gives credit to the idea Pinkie is just insane instead of a Fourth Wall Breaker."

She can't be both? Or one can't be the result of the other?

"I mean, if she could actively look into our world, wouldn't she be able to know how her friends really thought of her?"

Maybe she can look OUT of the forth wall, but not INWARD.
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Starbolt1515 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
This is really good :D
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012
Thanks! Hope you read the rest!
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ardashir Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
Poor hurting and heartbroken Pinkie Pie! Yeah, she gets better, but still... *gives the party pony a hug*

And you did an amazing job of getting across how her mind and personality just fell apart under Discord's attack. :fear:
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
Pinkie Pie is normally too innocent to realize how she's brushed off by others what happens when she isn't?
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ardashir Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
Well, you showed us. I don't think they actually gave a reason for the change in the show itself, did they (aside from 'Discord messed with her mind')?
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ImRaidAccount Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
You know your life sucks when you rage at a plant.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
Hmmm?
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ImRaidAccount Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
You know the poison joke.
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siathedragon Featured By Owner May 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
whats the poisen joke
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ImRaidAccount Featured By Owner May 14, 2012
You know the plant from Bridle Gossip.
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siathedragon Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
oohhh thanx :)
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TeaDrinker92 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love this but I the stories need to be longer with more details. But this fits what I think of Pinkie, I think she is way more serious than she shows. I think she is one of those people that pretends that their problems don't exists cause that makes her happier. She is not good at handling rejection either. I mean just look at the latest episode! She didn't even accept rejection as something real. Discord just needed to make some clever uses of truth to break the mane 6 in his episodes, this makes me wonder if the Equestrians have had too easy a life considering Discord managed to break it so easily. :iconcerealguyplz:
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012
"love this but I the stories need to be longer with more details. "

They do. Believe me they do. They get so long and detailed I can't put them into one posting anymore do to file size. :-(

"But this fits what I think of Pinkie, I think she is way more serious than she shows. "

Everyone is built of contrasts and contradictions.

"I think she is one of those people that pretends that their problems don't exists cause that makes her happier. "

Read her reharmonization to find out the full truth of that statement.

"I mean just look at the latest episode! "

She couldn't accept defeat. In fiction that's always a virtue when you're the hero, and always a fault when you're a villain.

"She didn't even accept rejection as something real. "

Indeed.

"Discord just needed to make some clever uses of truth to break the mane 6 in his episodes, this makes me wonder if the Equestrians have had too easy a life considering Discord managed to break it so easily. "

Strife, "I keep asking for more influence on this world but no one will give me any. It's prejudice towards draconequi I tell you."
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TeaDrinker92 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
By the way, are you going to have one chapter in any story from Discords POV, as a fan of Discord I'd love to see what you'd do with him. By the way, thanks for your reply. :icontwilighthappyplz:
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012
I ironically had one scene where this was the case in one of the latest chapters.
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TeaDrinker92 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I look forward to reaching that chapter then. :)
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012
Good luck.
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DragonmanX-90 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012
Discord made one of the few characters to genuinely make me laugh into a bitter angry wreck? Just like me... Ok that's it, Discord is officially on my "Kill on sight" list. *Gets reality warping gun loaded* Oh what you didn't think I was gonna try something normal to get rid of that freak did you!? Yes I'm breaking the fourth wall; clearly Pinkie's in no mood to do it and I can't afford Deadpool's rates!

And now that I've had my insane moment of the day; Poor Pinkie. A good Laugh can be the best thing you can experience, or the worst pain you can endure. It's all about perspective, and it's sad to see her normally joyful one so tragically skewed. And the worst part is that some of her arguments in this make sense. Pinkie sense, parasprites, the trees. I mean really; they were freakin' trees! The parasprite one I can rationalize, just tell 'em "Music makes them go away, they multiply like mad and eat...EVERYTHING!" Pinkie occupys a place in my heart and it's simultaneously great and sad reading this. Great because we can see why she fell to Discord's manipulation, sad because we get to see just how damaging that experience potentially was. Well done, well done sir.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012
You really think even a caster-level gun could kill Discord? You can't kill random probability.

And . . . seriously, no matter how many of these I get, I have no clue how to respond.

I wonder again if I'm just riding the wave of the TV show's popularity, or if there's some actual good writing here of this POV based on the episode.

All the same, thanks *hugs*

And I can't believe Trace Memory 2 was never released in the united states! It's criminal for those of us who loved the first game.
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DragonmanX-90 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012
Dude, I'm speaking the honest truth here; there is genuine talent in these works. Does the show bait the hook, yes. But it's the new perspective you give each character's change and development in your works that make them a quality read. Would this story have made me hate Discord even more if you'd just said: "Pinkie became angry simply because she couldn't take being the joke instead of telling one" No, because that doesn't change my perception of anything.

That's surface stuff; giving her a greater depth and a genuine desire to be taken seriously once in a while takes the character to a new place, and I love stories that do that. Honestly I really want to see your take on Twilight bringing her back to normal; I was ticked that we never see what Pinkie did that brought her back. The thanks and the hug are appreciated! Keep up the good work.

As for my Discord death threats...dude, he's a statue again and these bullets could kill Galactus. *Loads up reality gun* If nothing else, I'm gonna try my luck; and have the elements on standby in case I just make things worse.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012
"That's surface stuff; giving her a greater depth and a genuine desire to be taken seriously once in a while takes the character to a new place, and I love stories that do that. Honestly I really want to see your take on Twilight bringing her back to normal; I was ticked that we never see what Pinkie did that brought her back. The thanks and the hug are appreciated! Keep up the good work."

Sadly I have so much planned already that it would kill me to add more. :-(

And . . . nice to know you're stayin' cause this is a GOOD STORY that you want to know what happens next but can't guess what'll happen next but it'll make sense when it does. There's no point to a story that offers NO surprises.
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Guilrel Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012
Wow, you've really gone into Pinkie's head in this one and pretty much pulled out everything that should've made Pinkie angry come to light. I'm starting to understand why you have a Trope page now, and not to mention, I think this is the kind of thing that I was looking for in my own fic. I couldn't really figure out how to um, talk like Pinkie Pie (which the harmonized story might be the better way for me to understand her), but you manage to pull her character into light in this story as she was being discorded...

I think after reading this I realized what was my problem in trying think up of a story like that or have her becoming the kind of character I wanted in their. I mean sure, she'll end up becoming some sort of deus ex machina at one point that will help everyone earn their happy endings, but her origin in her own part of this story, was... alot more darker than the other ponies and I think this helped me understand the dark side of things a little more.

Anyway, you really got her fury down in the end, which is why your/her story is so great.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012
"I couldn't really figure out how to um, talk like Pinkie Pie (which the harmonized story might be the better way for me to understand her)"

Maybe it's easy for me cause my mind wanders a lot too. I mean a lot.

"but you manage to pull her character into light in this story as she was being discorded..."

Thanks. There were no points of view on them being changed, and I felt that was wrong. So I wrote my own.

And all of this because of that.

"I mean sure, she'll end up becoming some sort of deus ex machina at one point that will help everyone earn their happy endings,"

What? Where is she a ex machina? A random outside force with no foreshadowing that resolves everything? HOW?! 0-0

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Anyway, you really got her fury down in the end, which is why your/her story is so great."

Thanks.

"alot more darker than the other ponies and I think this helped me understand the dark side of things a little more."

Cool.
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Guilrel Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012
Maybe it's easy for me cause my mind wanders a lot too. I mean a lot.

That might explain alot. Also I took a personality test that might also explain why it's so hard for me to understand Pinkie Pie. ^^; [link] My mind doesn't really wonder with a bunch of interesting stuf in my head, just wonder with alot of problems.

Thanks. There were no points of view on them being changed, and I felt that was wrong. So I wrote my own.

And all of this because of that.


Well, they really don't have as much time to do all of this. I guess that's why you've done a better job at this.

What? Where is she a ex machina? A random outside force with no foreshadowing that resolves everything? HOW?! 0-0

Only in my story actually. If I don't write the "Pink Report" of how my Pinkie became some sort of semi-vengeful spirit (She's not a ghost but with her abilities it looked like she would act like this [watching Supernatural as I write this]) and how my Fluttershy found a way to contact her for help, my Pinkie Pie would appear to be like that when the mane cast get together in the final battle.

Thanks.

You're welcome.

Cool.

Hm, I might send you a link if I ever get around to doing that.
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Kimberly-AJ-04-02 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012  Student General Artist
Poor Pinkie. I think she has been insulted by Discord.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2012
Heh. You think?
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Kimberly-AJ-04-02 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2012  Student General Artist
Yep.
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Saphroneth Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
In editing this one, the main issue is that the use of caps is a bit profligate. It's supposed to indicate really, really yelling - normal shouting is just an exclamation mark. So I'm making the emphasized bits stay capitalized and converting the rest back to sentence case. Hope that's OK.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Again. Equestria Daily is likely to turn this down for ANY REASON. I've given up trying to figure them out. I feel like I'm sacrificing my creative style for their approval like I was submitting this to a publisher.

Pinkie Pie being over the top here IMHO was supposed to be the point. Sigh. Ugh. But . . .sigh. I feel broken at this point. No matter how much I fix things or revise thing, the grammar is always said to be below acceptable levels. So when I take a creative twist (say like a part of a story being told from their POV and when their brain gets scrambled, them speaking nonsense in the narrative is supposed to be intentional!) it's interpreted IMHO as me being awful with grammar again.
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Saphroneth Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
To be honest, I can see where they're coming from on the later bits. But this first section - have you tried submitting it in isolation? It's mostly fine in my opinion.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
They said it felt too much like a conversation piece than a story.
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Saphroneth Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
How strange. I've run into quite a few first person pieces on there before. Ah well, here's hoping.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Ditto.
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WOLLFFEEY Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2011
I'm so happy I got to voice act this! I normally never get to play such a sad, angry emotion in any of the projects I'm involved with, but this one... well, let me just say that it never fails to bring a tear to my eye hearing Pinkie lose her spark, even when it's my voice I'm hearing.
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Guilrel Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012
That was great. I'm replying to you right now, when I got to your part. You really did show a big difference from how I read it, I mean sure I made her seem like she was angry, but you made it into a very emotional and heartbreaking experience for Pinkie Pie. Thanks to you I now feel more sorry for her in more ways than one. Good job. :w00t:
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Kendell2 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2011
I have to say, you did an AWESOME job. Particularally when she starts to realize what's going on in Discord's balloon garden.
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WOLLFFEEY Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011
Thank you! n.n
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Kendell2 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011
And I wish you luck with the Reharmonizing, since you'll presumably be pretty busy there.
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