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"Disappearing Pony Act"

Lo and behold the Great And Powerful Trixie! The all-powerful and greatest magician in all of Equestria! There is no feat of magic I cannot perform! There is no skill or talent that my magic can not surpass! Truly all are honored in be in the presence of the Great And Powerful Trixie!!!

My legendary tales have spread across all of Equestria! There is none who don't know my name! There is ... there is ... none who doesn't love the Great and Powerful Trixie!

Certainly you have heard that on one of my many travels I came to the small hick town of Ponyville, that wouldn't even be on the map if not for the regular visits by Princess Celestia.

How after performing my magic show, and proving my greatness and power once again, two foals didn't wish to take one of my ... stories ... on face value and put ... the Great and Powerful Trixie to the test ... and ... she was ... publicly humiliated, she, I lost everything I owned in one night and had to flee the small no-face-town to save what little face I had left.

The Great and Powerful Trixie finds herself now in self-imposed exile, seeking to increase her already great power to take back her place as the greatest user of magic in Equestria. It has NOTHING to do with being laughed off stage at every burg that Trixie attempted her show at after!

Trixie did NOT break down in tears after her last show ended with jeering and mocking neighs from the crowd before it even started! No she didn't! No the Great and Powerful Trixie is not crying now from the memory! Don't be absurd!

How did the Great and Powerful Trixie begin her path of being a magician and discovering her cutie mark? Pst. It was obvious from the start what Trixie's destiny would be! No. No don't, please don't make Trixie, don't make me remember-


"I don't understand Trixie," ask the magical school's councilor, a gray pony with a black mane and a lightning bolt cutie mark wearing a scarf. "You're upset over your performance review? I've seen your performance review little filly, what are you upset about?"

My parents had practically shoved me into his office after I had broken down crying after reading my teachers' reviews the first time.

I didn't need to read my own review again to repeat it now, it was -very- easy to memorize. "Transmutation: Average. Illusion: Average. Telekinesis: Average. Conjuring: Average. Weather Control: Average. Mental Suggestion: Average!"

"That just means you have lots of potential-"

"That's a nice way to say blank flank!" I snapped back. The fact I was one was besides the point. Or maybe was the point. Being a 'late bloomer' was beginning to be noticed by my classmates.

"Trixie you should be proud. Most unicorns excel in one area of magic and are almost helpless in others. Most Unicorns can't even DO weather control. There isn't a field in the books you aren't capable in. The last time I saw a record like this was this one filly whose about your age in Canterlot-"

As if I cared about something like that.

"But I'm not spectacular in any of them ... " I had been trying to stand out in my classes since the first day. But no matter what I did, no matter how hard I tried, there was somepony doing it better.

I thought when my parents finally scraped together the money so I could attend a fully blown school of magic that I'd finally be noticed! I had been chosen! Where I didn't have four sisters and two brothers to compete for attention with. My parents picked me. ME! Not any of my siblings, but me! But it was the same story! Only multiplied by a hundred.

It didn't help that back home my parents had had all the imagination of toadstools when it came to names. Mixie. Pixie. Nyxie. Lexy. I was just another face in the herd.

The councilor spoke in a calm kind voice. "The old saying 'a pony of all trades but master of none,' actually says fully 'a pony of all trades but master of none, is often better than a master of one.' "

I didn't hear him. All I heard, was no matter what class of magic I choose, I'd be just another face in the crowd, might as well not exist ... Unless I wasn't -in- the crowd!

I ran away to try and join the circus. That afternoon. I got about ten city blocks and caught that same afternoon. Got sent to the councilor again and spent two weeks confined to my room; which of course I shared with my siblings.

Then I met master, who was substitute teaching that one time, an old magician pony who wanted to pass on his tricks. The class loved the cantrips he threw into the stuffy mundane lesson.

I thought one thing, 'He knows how to get attention.' I jumped at the chance. I wouldn't have taken 'no' for an answer but he accepted an apprentice readily.

I originally wanted for my stage name 'The One and Only Trixie,' but master felt it lacked impact, and convinced me to go with 'The Great and Powerful Trixie.' I can not say in the least it was bad advice.

My first practice show at school didn't get the crowd of fillies and colts I wanted, but my next one did from sheer word of mouth! The moment the crowd cheered at my first pyrotechnics I knew this was what I wanted to do with my life, and I felt the tingle on my flanks.

Then for the first time, I said those magic words that gave such a sweet warm feeling in the pit of my stomach. "Anything you can do, I can do better." I never realized how satisfying and how comforting those words would sound until I finally said them. I was finally no longer just an interchangeable horseshoe, the one and only Trixie! The Great and Powerful Trixie!

The crowd ate it up as I tore down the top students with their own signature magic tricks! One unicorn whose specialty was fire magic, red coat and black mane with a blue flame on her flank actually shouted, "I challenge you to a game of catch the fireball!" And she shot it right at me with the full intention of burning off my new cutie mark... The crowd laughed and stomped their hooves as I used my telekinesis to make it chase her instead! People LOVE seeing those who were better than they were get pulled down to their level, and I was happy to oblige this basic need in my show.

I made myself a costume based on my master's (with a little help from my mother), but with a more eye-catching color scheme than my master's grays and whites.

Later I read up somewhere that there were members of high society that spoke in third person. Well, if it was good enough for upper crust snobs then it was good enough for the Great and Powerful Trixie! And the crowds loved that too.

And meanwhile I still found myself invisible the moment the spotlight went out.

I had no intention of staying in Hoofington knowing that.


"Thank ... thank you for listening ... to my story. The Great and Powerful Trixie does not share herself with just anyone."

"Oh, listening to ponies' thoughts has been a habit of mine lately," so said the floating magic wand with blue twinkles behind it just like Trixie's cutie mark.

It told me, er, Trixie how it was my friend, my ally, a force of magic that only sought out the best and brightest and the most worthy.

It wished to aid the Great and Powerful Trixie by giving her the greatest magic tricks she could hope to perform! Yes! Finally! A break! After having her life stolen from her, the Great and Powerful Trixie would be on top where she belongs! I can't wait to see that purple pony's face!

Ugh! How dare the Twilight Sparkle I imagined look at me with -concern and worry-! How dare she ask me if this is what I really want! Of course it is what I really want! Ugh! Just go away, Trixie does not care for your sad eyes!

The strange visitor who is a giant version of my cutie mark gives me a couple of scrolls, promising that any one of these spells will be the grandest displays of magic I could imagine as I read the almost swirling letters. I memorize them with ease, they're rather simple, but the results seem rather elusive. But the swirling pattern just draws my attention in, almost like they're moving.

A pony wearing a tuxedo gallops into the rundown apartment I've been staying at and shakes me. "Miss Great and Powerful Trixie! What are you doing? You're on in twenty seconds!"

Huh? I don't have any shows arranged! I haven't for months! Ha! Another worthy gift from my benefactor. Normally Trixie would never lower herself by accepting the kindness of strangers, but if this strange visitor was really some abstract embodiment of herself, then it wasn't really help from others was it?

I'm in full costume before I even know it, I rush out the door and instead of finding the shoddy apartment complex I find myself on my old magic stage but several times improved in a theater! THE GREAT AND POWERFUL TRIXIE gets into her act with new flourish and zeal!

Trixie can't remember the last time she had a crowd this big! All of them looking at her! Looking at her! She was the reason they were here! They had come for her!

Trixie begins her act with her flashy fireworks display triggered by her magic, getting the 'oohs' and 'aahs' Trixie only deserves which quickly became stunned silence at her display of power! Then Trixie shows off her spectacular illusions and beautiful imagery, then getting into her fantastic tales that swooned the crowd to no end! In no time at all she came to her climax! Biggest spell ever? One of the rules master had taught her was never do a trick you hadn't rehearsed first. But the more Trixie thought about it, the less she can resist! The more I want to see it! The more I have to see it now!

The words still swirling in my head as I think about them, I cast the spell, creating the wildest more fantastic display of lights and colors I could have ever imagined! The sun and moon rose together, stars swirled into a living ocean, colors of every shade clashed against each other in a symphony! Stars swirled into the shapes of the living constellations, all of them dancing to Trixie's whim! The sun and moon eclipsed, a galaxy spiraled around Trixie sparkling a thousand colors! The audience was blast by encompassing sounds that would knock anypony off their hooves! And with the adrenaline still running high it was over.

"I ... I did it . . I DID IT!" I panted, joy tingling inside me.

No one clapped or stomped. No one smiled or frowned. They stared through me with casual indifference. A few yawned. A couple began talking about yesterday's hoofball game. They simply got from their seats and began to calmly hoof away.

I stare in shock, heckling I was used to, cheering I lived for, mockery I had been forced to endure, but ... no reaction at all? Like I didn't exist?

"Wait!" I shouted, no one even looked back at me. They didn't even snigger, they might as well have not heard me. They didn't stop. They were all leaving. They didn't even turn back to look at me. "No! Don't you dare turn your flanks on the Great and Powerful Trixie!" Not even a fiery retort which I would have welcomed.

I galloped in front of the last two ponies to leave, a finely dressed unicorn stallion and Earth pony mare. They bumped right into me like I was an invisible wall and looked about for a bit before I began.

"How dare you! You should feel honored to witness the grandeur of a performance by the Great And Powerful Trixie! How dare you treat her like some cheap background act! My arcane performances are not some ... some ... sideshow!" I Trixie's words twist she so angry!

The unicorn didn't look intimidated at all and acted like they were trying to explain something to a tree. "Well yeah, I guess it was really good, for magic I guess. It's not like anyone actually pays attention to that sort of thing anymore. Everyone's figured out already any unicorn can do magic. It was just a fad watching magic for entertainment."

A-a FAD?!

The mare said, "We heard how you had taken it to the next level, thought we would give the idea one last try, we've seen so many. It was better, but only in it's own mundane, ordinary, average, run of the mill way. It only shows show magic is nothing special." The mare giggles to herself.

N-nothing special?! No, Trixie will never cry before an audience.

The stallion said simply, "In the end it's just magic, and any unicorn can do that… the fad for actually ENJOYING show-mages is so five minutes ago." I fell to my knees. I didn't stop them from leaving, but they still -pushed me aside.-

"Poor poor Great And Powerful Trixie ... " It was my benefactor.

"YOU! What went wrong!" Trixie demands!

"What 'what' went wrong?"

"Your spell! Everyone just left! It was like they couldn't see me!"

"There's nothing wrong with the spell Trixie ... maybe you just didn't do it right, after all, that above average spell IS impossible for just a mundane -average- unicorn to properly perform! Twilight Sparkle did it without breaking a sweat! Everyone loved her when she did it. That spell just reflects the real skill and power of the user ... how people react to it is exactly what the unicorn is like ... if they just walked away like you don't exist ... maybe it's cause you don't. Maybe you don't really know magic after all, maybe magic is just a little too hard for an -average- unicorn like you to handle."

"No ...! Shut up!"

"What kind of entertainer can't take a few simple honest reviews Trixie? Don't you know that's part of the show? Maybe you should go home to your family, maybe your parents will have time for you now that your brothers and sisters are all famous and known, unlike you, of course. Of course there's isn't Trixie the daughter anymore, just average Trixie the magician who can't even do one spell right."

"YOU BE QUIET! QUIET I SAY! TRIXIE C-C-COMMANDS IT!" I feel tears begin to sting.

The giant magic wand floated right in my face, it was -looking- into my eyes, "Oooooh Trixie, maybe I'm being too hard. After all, there is one trick you've managed to do spectacularly. You're completely invisible, always have been, it comes very natural to you."

"NO!" I cried, I had to get away, as far away as possible from the taunting voice. I ran outside, the ponies outside didn't even pause for me, they bumped into me like I wasn't there, I called out and no one even turned their ears.

"PLEASE! Can't anyone aid Trixie? Anyone-?!" No one apparently. I grab a random pony in panic and they just shrug me off not even looking at my face. They keep bumping into me again and again from both sides throwing me off balance. I fall into a heap, I grind my teeth, the memory of the swirling letters makes my head hurt... . Were the words for the spell ... too much for an average unicorn to hold onto? ... Why do I keep trying? Just to keep failing? Why do I keep entertaining people, who forget my name five minutes later? Why should I put so much effort into something that's gone in an instant?

No one cared about just another unicorn.

" . . . I hate theater, I hate being a magician, I HATE MAGIC!" I scream at the top of my lungs, the tears coming freely now. No one even looks at me, too busy with their own lives to have time for a stranger in need. No one ever does. People are only your friends when they feel like it. So what's the point of being friends at all?

I hear some noises around me now, it doesn't matter. The Average and Invisible Trixie. I'm not anything special, I'm not anything. I'm nothing. Who cares for a unicorn that's the same as any other?


The ponies of Hoofington, kind-more-often-than-not ponies as they were, gathered around the poor pale blue unicorn with unnatural looking muted gray colors. She couldn't seem to hear what they were saying, begging to be heard even when they asked what was wrong. It was like she couldn't even see them.

Then she went catatonic. She went from not being able to hear them, to not caring.

An unicorn mare claiming to be the unicorn's sister screamed in her face in horror trying to get the grayed out unicorn's attention.

High above, Discord shape shifted into his true from from his disguise.

"You weren't anything too special my dear ... just the only other Element of Magic to be born through one or two unicorns a generation ... I had to 'test out' breaking the weaker, stunted, underdeveloped version before trying it on the major deal. You have my thanks my dear. Now I know how to crush the other Element of Magic that has actually realized her potential and the meaning behind her power. A Element of Magic that has no one to support it, with no bonds connected to it, is a glass doll waiting to be crushed."

- The Pathetic and Irrelevant Trixie
THE AUDIO ADAPTION OF THIS CHAPTER IS UP! Check it out! Surprises in store! And featured on Equestria Daily!

It comes with its own ORIGINAL FANART NOW TOO!

Personal Pros Of Poor Ponies Possessing Possible Post-traumatic Stress Disorder Brought On By Discord The Deity of Chaos' Mind Games Forcing Them To See the Flip Side Of Their Element Or Appealing To Their Worse Nature Or Outright Cheating With One.

We are the sixth and it's . . . TRIXIE?! You've had something precious your whole life. But you never noticed it, appreciated, or even realized how much it was a part of you until it was gone.

Link to the Gallery of the Discord Ponies POV Series, dealing with their descent into darkness by Discord's games and epilogue. [link]

Other Parts In Chronological Order:

LiarJack: [link]

Anger Pie: [link]

Rarigreed: [link]

FlutterCruel: [link]

Traitor Dash: [link]

The Pathetic And Irreverent Trixie (here)

Twilight Tragedy: [link]

Epilogue: [link]

And here is a link to the sequel of this series: the Reharmonized/Recovery/Healing Ponies POV series! Dealing with after the defeat of Discord and the mane six, along with all people of Ponyville dealing with the emotional stress in their own way of what they did while under Discord's control. Here's a hint, IT ISN'T EASY TO JUST PUT YOUR HOOVES FORWARD! And some want to trot backwards back into the night where the pain can't find them. [link]

And now the sequel to this:

MLP:FiM Copyright Hasbro.

EDIT: Added a scene of Trixie talking to part of her 'audience' after her magic show.


Edit: Fixed up some minor grammar errors, felt this needed a little re-reading. Wish I knew how to use commas properly.

EDIT 2012 01 28th Firedrake's [link] illustration has been completed and added![link]

Eine psychologische Auseinandersetzung mit dem ersten Zweiteiler der zweiten Staffel von My Little Pony: Freundschaft ist Magie, erzählt aus der Sicht der sechs Heldinnen der Geschichte:
Equestria steht am Rande einer Katastrophe. Ein Feind, so alt wie das Land selbst, hat sich aus seinem Jahrtausende-langen Schlaf befreit, und hat die königliche Hauptstadt und Ponyville ins Visier genommen.
Discord, seines Zeichens Gott des Chaos, will den Thron wiedererringen, von dem ihn Celestia und Luna einst gestürzt hatten. Und dieser Tyrann bedient sich zum diesen Zweck seiner zerstörerischsten Waffe; und das sind Equestrias Ponys selber. Als Herr über Verstand und Wahrnehmung, weiß er sich jeden noch so starken Willen untertan zu machen.
Nun liegt es an den sechs Elementen der Harmonie, Discord Paroli zu bieten, bevor das Land unter ihm im Chaos versinkt.
Doch dann kriegen auch sie die volle Breitseite von Discords Macht zu spüren. Eine nach der anderen stellt fest, dass Discord in seinen Begründungen doch sehr 'überzeugend' sein kann....
Dies sind ihre Geschichten.

Was könnte Discord schon der großen und mächtigen Trixie, der selbstsichersten Showdame aller Zeiten, anhaben? [link]
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An absolute masterpiece, much alike the end of the series.

A tragic tale about how ones own pride, ambition, and ability can twist and contort your emotions to a complete darkened state.

The fan art that goes along with this and the rest of the series really sets the mood, by giving us a visual outlook into the characters emotions.

The dramatic reading in the youtube video had quite an impact as well, but i suppose that's not completely related.

I honestly think that this series will make more of an impact then cupcake has over the ages.

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I hope you continue on to do great things.

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Translation mix-up for this chapter.

"Disappearing Act residents."

Lo and behold, the Great and Powerful Trixie. The most powerful and one of the greatest magicians and all of Equestria. Not a good luck charm, right? No skills or talents that I have a fetish. All true honor to be a great and powerful Trixie !!!

The famous story spread around Equestria. No one knew my name. There ... there ... there is no one who does not love a great and powerful Trixie.

Of course, he had heard that one of his many trips to small towns Nick Dagan, even on the map, except for regular visits to Princess Celestia.

How is the performance of magic and prove his greatness, and the power to change both of these young people do not want to get a story ... a great and powerful Trixie denominations and tried ... to humiliate him publicly, they have lost all their possessions in a night I was forced to flee to save a little form the rest of the way.

The Great and Powerful Trixie appeared in self-imposed exile, trying to increase the power to take the largest employer behind the magic of Equestria. Nothing to do with who laughed at each step Trixie Medieval tried after the concert.

Trixie regularly in tears after the show ended in ridicule and contempt neighing to the public before they start. Do not do it! Powerful Trixie by heart, and not cry now! Do not be ridiculous.

The Great and Powerful Trixie was magical and teens sign: PST. Of course, in the beginning, which Trixie luck! Do not Trixie, not me husk-


"I Trixie», - said the magic school counselor, a small white horse with black hair and lightning cutie mark scarf. "Sorry, I saw a documentary on the performance review of the performance of sick children what you're poor."

My parents pushed me to the teacher's desk when I fell, I cried when I read the first replay.

Without reading recovery restore it now -very- easy to remember. "Turn them: Current illusion: Current telekinesis: Current address. Current Weather Control: Current mental suggestion: Current "

"It just means that we have to be very potensyal-»

"How wonderful, how the gaps Lankan» I snapped again. I was beside the point. Or maybe the idea. A "late bloomer" to see his classmates.

«Trixie will be happy to excel in a magical unicorn, and there must be something else. The majority of domestic animals who can not do the monitoring period. a field book that you can not. The last time I saw such a list is that Hill Canterlot- years. "

When you think about such things.

"But not good for them ..." I tried to stay in school for the first day. But what I did, although I tried hard enough, some ponies better.

I thought that when my parents last scraped together the money to attend school full-blown charm that I noticed last. I chose. I have four sisters and two brothers take the attention of others. My parents brought me. ME! None of my brothers, it's me! But it's the same story. Many hundreds.

It does not help that the mushroom house, my parents thought him if his name. Maxie: Pixie. Nyxie: Lex. I'm just another face in the series.

Council members said in a quiet voice to a friend. "The old adage" everything a little, but not ownership, "all" all the little horse, not the owner, is always better than a teacher. ""

Do not listen to them. I've heard all kinds of magic to choose, I also just another way people can ... If -in- people!

He ran, trying to join a demonstration this afternoon. It was ten in the streets, and took the afternoon. Sent to the Council and two weeks in the house. but the way he shared with his brother.

Then a man, who the governor's education, once again, the old magic horse Miss pressure. The cast cantrips world-class lessons.

I think that's one thing, "He knows how to get attention." I took a chance. I can not answer, but soon received an apprenticeship.

It was the stage name "The one and Trixie, the title does not feel strong enough to convince me that the" great and powerful Trixie »I can not say the least, not good advice.

The first one shows the amount of school experience for young horses, I love that all the neighbors mouth. As soon as the audience applauded the pyrotechnics, I knew that I wanted to do with my life, and I feel that my spine tingle.

So, for the first time, I said I was a witch, who gave such a sweet feeling of warmth in the pit of my stomach. "Whatever you can do, I can do better." I never realized how good and pleasant words that sounded until I finally said. I did not work, the horseshoe, the only Trixie. The Great and Powerful Trixie.

The audience ate when students above his signature magic tricks. The Unicorn specializes in fire magic, dressed in red and black hair blue fire Lankan crew. "I challenge you to a game fireball fish" and he sent me straight in the ass ... The burn brand new audience laughed and stomped her nails when used telekinesis to the chase, it is not. The people we see that people who are better than the ones that need to be dragged along the ground, and I am happy to fulfill this basic need in costume.

I made me a dress based on the master (with a little help from my mother), but the master and gray color scheme more attractive.

Later, I read somewhere that there are members of high society to speak in the third person. Well, if high enough snobs and the crust is divided into large and strong enough to Trixie. And the people loved him.

Until then, I'm still not out of the picture lamps.

I can not think of a life Hoofington know.


"Thank you ... thank you for listening to my story .... Great and Powerful Trixie can not share or whoever."

"Oh, listen to the attention of a horse," said Wanda blue water Twinkles when Trixie Teen sign.

My friend told me Trixie, his colleagues in the power of magic that only the best loved and brilliance and excellence.

I want to support a large and powerful Trixie providing the largest Tricks surprised that we hope to accomplish. Yes, it is. At Last! A ghost. After they had stolen from him, the Great and Powerful Trixie. I can not wait to see the purple form of the horse.

Hugh. How dare Twilight Sparkle, and I think that I look at you- -concern concerns. How dare you ask me if this is what I want. Of course, this is what I want. Hugh. He just does not fit Trixie sad eyes.

Another prominent example of the anal celebrate me turning, promises to be the greatest magic spells concert imagined when I read the swirling letters. I remember him always easy, simple, beautiful results that seem boring. For the spiral model of attention, such as videos.

Small Wool Tuxedo gallops destroyed I stayed home and shake me. "Great and Mighty Miss Trixie What are you doing? 20 seconds. "

Huh? Has organized Gig. I am not the moon. Ha! Other worthy gift to the distributor. Trixie is often not bring himself to accept the kindness of strangers, but if others are just some of the other to create an abstract only, and does not really help.

I fully dressed before I knew it, she was rushed to the door, and not finding the best house I saw my old magic, but a few times into the theater. The Great and Powerful Trixie actions when a new flowering and zeal.

Trixie can not remember the last time there was a big crowd. They all look at him. Look at him. He is the reason why they can. Then it came to him.

Trixie began his career with a spectacular fireworks caused magic to get «oohs» and «aahs» Trixie quickly be amazed using the power of silence and Trixie shows the fascinating and beautiful illusions pictures and stories from the audience was very tired. in no time at all, he came to the final. Great eternal spelling principles taught by the teacher did not do the trick, you do not have to tell you. But as Trixie thought about it, do not resist. The more you want to see it. I can see it now!

Published still in my head when I think about them, and cast his magic, so wildest more spectacular light and color, I thought. The sun shone and the moon, the stars whirled living marine multicolored hue across both the symphony. Stars swirled appearance of the animal stars, they all dance Trixie whim. The sun and the moon is eclipsed, the galaxy around Trixie thousand bright colors. A large audience through loud explosion knocks anypony nails. The adrenaline is going on.

"I ... I did it, I did it!" I cried, tingling, joy for me.

No one applauded or trampled. No one smiled or frowned. They looked at me through simple negligence. Some yawned. Some people began to talk about the game yesterday hoofball. They are the only ones on the throne and began to calm others.

I was startled by the appearance, heckling habit, I sat crying shame I had to endure, but ... no emotion. Love It?

«Hold On!" I called, no one even looked at me again. Not giggle, they also do not listen to me, to carry away from it all. Does not come to see me. "No one will dare to hold the Great and Powerful Trixie» Although the fire response is welcome.

First Trip to leave the last two ponies, wild horses and a finely dressed in his conversation. Bumped into an invisible wall, and I looked around a bit before starting.

"How dare you should feel great testament to the greatness of the performance of a great and powerful Trixie: Why do you treat her like light, some easy things. Mystical thoughts are that ... some second or Sideshow scene »Trixie hurt nonstop.

The Unicorn is not afraid and did as they tried to explain what the tree. "Yes, I think that the best magic, maybe. Who knows what is good. Everyone thinks that unicorn magic, what is this just to see the magic of fashion entertainment. "


Hoppen said. "We have heard how God brought them to the next step, I think that we should give the idea that the end of the trial, he found it better, but only simple words, it is clear, then, run of the mill It not only shows that the magic show anything special. "The Mare giggles to himself.

N- ?! No, I have not seen since Trixie viewer.

The horse simply said: "In the end, the magic unicorn, or you can actually get ... Enjoy the plate witch five minutes ago." I fell to my knees. Do not keep them, but I still -pushed aside.-

"Poor Poor Great and Powerful Trixie ...»: This is a philanthropist.

"What happened» Trixie needs.

"What happened?"

"The spelling But all for nothing. Just can not see me."

"There is something wrong with the Magic Trixie ... probably not doing it right, after all, more than about witchcraft is not possible without religious -average- Unicorn hard to do. Twilight Sparkle was not breaking a sweat. I love them all when it's done. Spelling demonstrated capacity and power users ... feeling like a unicorn. .. If you just went there ... maybe it's because it's not. You can not learn magic, maybe a little repellent wild -average- you like to control. "

"No, teghnere"

"What is art, not just a simple review Trixie Do you know that this part of the performance. Maybe I should go home to your family, you may have some time for you, my brothers and sisters, all well-known and popular, you will love of course. Of course, there are female Trixie, Trixie approximately witch spelling do not do it properly. "

"Peace, Peace, I say. Trixie CC to pick them up. "I felt that my tears begin to sting.

Wanda large floating right in the face, -looking- my eyes »Oooooh Trixie, I can be complicated. In the end, there is a trick to do admirably. You just completely invisible, it is clear that there must always be for you. "

"No," I cried, I was so much sound as possible. I ran out, the horse without a break for me, and hit me because I was not there, and he cried, and no ears.

"Please do not support Trixie: To what ?!" It is. I'll take the chance that my personal feelings of fear and not just look at my face. They often bumps me consistently on both sides to throw me off balance and I fall into a pile, I grind My teeth hurt reminded swirling letters in my head .... the magic words ... too much in the middle of the unicorn. ... Why do I have to keep trying. Pay only the deficit. Why do I always fascinating people in the name of five minutes. Why am I appreciate the efforts of a sudden.

No one cares about the other unicorns.

"... I hate the theater, I hate to be a magician, magic, I hate it." Complain that the lungs free of tears. Without even looking at me, too busy with their own lives, to others in times of need. Nothing is forever. Except for the people on your friends when they feel like it. So what we need friends.

I have heard some voices around me right now, it does not matter. Current invisible Trixie. What I am special, I am nothing. What? Who cares, the Unicorn, which is different from the others.


Hoofington horse, professional horse often as they gathered to poor natural light blue unicorn find a simple grays. Did not seem to hear them say: asking to be heard, and asked what was wrong. And since you can not even see them.

Then he went catatonic. He will not be able to travel to listen to them, they do not care.

The Unicorn Mare said the unicorn face sister screaming in panic trying greyed attention unicorn.

High above, the difference is transferred to the design aspect.

"But you do not have a favorite ... the only other element Magic buffalo ... born a generation or two trials violations, stunted, deformed version before trying a lot of things. You're welcome, my dear. I know how to to destroy the other elements, Magic feel the potential of the concept of power. Elements Magic, no one to support them, no communications connection, wait a doll glass will be crushed. "

- The tragic and unnecessary Trixie

Will take language suggestions.
Persona22 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013
A masterpiece. Perfect narrative. Everything was just perfectly executed. 10 out of 10.
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013
Thank you, very much. It's always a balance with these characters. You aren't trying to justify their 'it's everyone else's fault' mentality, but show what MADE THEM that way. 
WolfGoesMeow Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Student Writer
If you'd like, I can add the commas for you. It's completely understandable if you say no, just thought I'd offer c:
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
If you think it needs them. 
WolfGoesMeow Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Student Writer
Nah, I just noticed in the description you mentioned them
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
Nintendogamemaster Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
...The other element of magic?
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
It's meant to show that Trixie COULD HAVE been as strong as Twilight, if she didn't keep taking the EASY WAY out in her life. (Just meant to show she doesn't have excuses for not being as good as Twilight.) 
Nintendogamemaster Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
Oh, alright. Thanks for the info. :)
And poor Trixie. :(
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
Read reharmonization to see her get better.
Nintendogamemaster Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
Ok, thanks. :)
JoeTisCool Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013
So sad. :(
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013
She finds light in the Reharmonization Series.
Serefin99 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
I need to keep reminding myself that not everyone's interpretation of the characters will act the same. Seriously, going from the hammy, vengeful, R rolling Trixie of the Phoenix Wright crossover Turnabout Storm to this Trixie is a major mood whiplash.
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
This Trixie is still a drama queen. I just tried to give her a reason for being what she is beyond 'she's just a jerk.' While at the same time, it's a balancing act trying to not make it seem like I'm trying to make excuses for her.
herostalker Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
All too familiar
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
Ironically I THOUGHT OF THAT when I wrote this, but ironically it was based on that four Trixie clones were used in the background of a shot in the cartoon once.
ardashir Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
I remember how surprised I was when I first saw this one; Trixie was the one pony I didn't expect to see at all! But you made such a great group of stories work around her. I like how you were able to redeem her in a way that worked so very well.
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
Redeeming a villain in fanfiction is something that is always a challenge without making them seem like you're making excuses for them.
ardashir Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
Yeah, aside from your work and Past Sins (which managed to believably redeem Nightmare Moon, of all ponies) most 'redemption' stories with the MLP seem more like they're just excusing the villains, usually by making the heroes into total jerks.
Jarkes Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012
Huh... for some reason, I was thinking the whole "Trixie is another Element of Magic" thing wasn't revealed until much, much later... (Did I already mention that I know a lot about this series thanks to its various TV Tropes pages? I think I did)
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012
Yes you did.
Nichy27 Featured By Owner May 21, 2012
This just broke my heart. Poor Trixie.
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner May 21, 2012
This isn't the end of her story. It gets resolution (and ultimately redemption though it takes a lot more than one chapter) in the Pony POV Series.
ImRaidAccount Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
You would think Trixie would notice a floating magic wand.
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
She did. Discord was going with his motif of using their own cutie mark against them.
ImRaidAccount Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2012
It's just another example of ponies' inability to explain things or ask follow up questions.
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2012
ImRaidAccount Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012
It's a reference to :iconchadrocco:'s Let's Play of Story of the Blanks. It can be found here [link] and it is hilarious.
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012
No comment. THough Story of the Blanks ends up playing big roles around here.
Guilrel Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012
Wow, what life Trixie had and what a nightmare that Trixie had to go through. Her nightmares were more or less my nightmares of seeing and experiencing things that weren't really there while in reality, people just looked at you like you were crazy and/or had no idea what was really going on.

It was a pretty good story about Trixie and I noticed you kept switching from 1st person view to 3rd from time to time, kind of like what I've been trying to do in my Xanadu X story. You managed to pull off this kind of transition very well.
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012
Trixie's delusion was that no one was paying her any attention at all. Like she wasn't even there. Like she was invisible. Like she was a ghost. (Some people say that's how homeless people feel.)

"It was a pretty good story about Trixie and I noticed you kept switching from 1st person view to 3rd from time to time, kind of like what I've been trying to do in my Xanadu X story. You managed to pull off this kind of transition very well."

That's because this is being done by Trixie's POV, and her speaking in third person comes naturally to her.
Guilrel Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012
Trixie's delusion was that no one was paying her any attention at all. Like she wasn't even there. Like she was invisible. Like she was a ghost. (Some people say that's how homeless people feel.)

I think I can actually relate to that, but more in the opposite spectrum, since I'm off in my own little world all the time. :worry: Anyway I kinda figured that was the kind of illusion she was expereincing.

That's because this is being done by Trixie's POV, and her speaking in third person comes naturally to her.

Makes sense.
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012
Happy that works out.
Guilrel Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012
Yeah, it did.
GrimWolf001 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012
Perhaps you should mention that the Audio Adaptation was featured in Equestria Daily
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012
I do now! Or at least for Trixie's deharmonization. Not that she had much harmony to begin with.

Thanks dude.
Zalius Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012  Student Writer
I actually feel bad for her :|
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012
That's what happens when you get to KNOW people and learn WHY they're jerks rather than it just them being spontaneously born that way.

If you've begun reading the Reharmonization Series you'll know the irony of that statement.
Saphroneth Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Just a check, does Trixie tend to switch tenses when talking about herself in the show? Because there's a lot of that sort of thing to work with, and if I can just leave it that'd be nice. Otherwise, I'd have to work out if (say) the stage scene works better in present or past tense.
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Truth be told, I think Trixie would switch tenses depending on the situation in this particular interview. Of course, the stuffed shirts at Equestria Daily IMHO will mistake anything for a grammar mistake.
Saphroneth Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
The concern with grammar things (and once I get onto the later chapters that have been around for less time, there'll be much less dubious ones) is that it breaks the flow of reading.
pumpkin-tlof19 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2011
Okay, review time. This is long overdue. Given what we know of Trixie, and how she's portrayed, this is probably the closest anyone could get towards making her sympathetic AND a genuine braggart. The backstory allusion to Twilight is interesting, and shows a fork in the Myriad of Ways with interesting results...but I digress. My real problems with this are that I can't help but think that someone who had grown up as a showpony would develop a different response to being found out than to go into self-imposed exile - namely, acquire a new story! The Trixie you build here is friendless and weak, and that's how Discord is able to break her so easily...but it seems to me she could be just as friendless and weak searching for a new foe to defeat so that she can get back onstage, as she is...apparently living in a dingy apartment complex. She's terrified of her own memories early on, and then it's shown that she's just mentioning it all to a representation of her cutie mark...which seems somewhat out of place, considering she was begging someone to not make her go through all that again. Further, the memories don't seem to be all that bad. It just comes across as weird.
All in all, though, this was a much better chapter than I previously gave it credit for; the character of Trixie is explored to a great degree here, and given how little you had to work with you've done an impressive job of recreating her for the story. It all feels very natural, and despite the fact that we jeered at this pony in the show, I think even the most diehard of Trixie haters would take a hit to the gut seeing her go through this. Plus, it hits a personal button for me, since one of my own greatest fears is oblivion, and I am...upset at the concept of being able to do nothing to help someone in trouble, or make someone feel better when they get down, or affect anything in someone else's life for the better...
ANyways, this was a great chapter, and other than what I've said above, I think it's excellent.
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2011
The giant floating cutie mark of course was Discord in disguise. And Discord made Trixie relive those memories just to put her further emotionally on edge to have the core of her psychosis' on the forefront for when he broke her.

And if Trixie was searching for a new fictional foe to defeat to create a new lie . . . no one would believe her. Remember the part of being boo'ed off the stage before her show even started?

Sadly the fact you had to read it twice to tell it was a good story doesn't say good things about it. A good story should be able to tell you it's a good story on the first go. Or I think so.

And that's the thing with Trixie I've said over and over again, I wanted to give her actions here MOTIVE and REASON for what she does, but not pile on the excuses for her selfish behavior. And all the same, like many bronies, I hope there's a shred of goodness somewhere in that selfish heart.

And actually one Trixie hater said Trixie 'finally got what she deserved' yes, those exact words.

All the same. It is positive to know that you approve of this chapter.
pumpkin-tlof19 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011
Re: New foe
True. However, the defeat of a new foe helps her to affirm her own capabilities, meaning that she can get back on her A-game onstage. A good half of her shtick is dealing with hecklers, so if she's being laughed off stage and has her confidence...well, her talent at picking out the best and brightest and bringing them down a peg should come into play easily enough, yeah?
Re: Read it twice
To be honest, one of the reasons I had to read it twice was because of my own preconceptions, and that's something that's difficult to overcome. So, for what it's worth, sorry for letting my preconceptions of Trixie get in the way of my appreciating your work. As a critic, I should be better than that, and it is something I'll be working on in the future. (Well, aspiring critic, but you get the point.)
Re: Haters
I read back through the archive, it was actually the first comment you ever got. Observation, he didn't get the full implications of what he'd said straightaway, and received an appropriate "What the Hell, Dude" response readily enough. Preconceptions aside, even I was horrified that Trixie had been singled out, if confused as to why she was being dragged into this in fanon-canon. As I said earlier, the only reason I had to read this twice was because of my own preconceptions of Trixie; the chapter itself was incredible. It managed to be heart-wrenching and tear-jerking for a character I'd previously held no sympathy for...(note to self: power of words rant later)...and for someone to say she deserved something like that, DESERVES to be so brutally harmed, because she dealt with hecklers somewhat harshly? ...perhaps I should think about something else for a bit, before I "love and tolerate" something to pieces. You've got a new Dev up, I'll go look at that.
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2011
"True. However, the defeat of a new foe helps her to affirm her own capabilities, meaning that she can get back on her A-game onstage. A good half of her shtick is dealing with hecklers, so if she's being laughed off stage and has her confidence...well, her talent at picking out the best and brightest and bringing them down a peg should come into play easily enough, yeah?"

True enough, but her being in her home town made her being found by her family seem a lot more plausible.

"To be honest, one of the reasons I had to read it twice was because of my own preconceptions, and that's something that's difficult to overcome. So, for what it's worth, sorry for letting my preconceptions of Trixie get in the way of my appreciating your work. As a critic, I should be better than that, and it is something I'll be working on in the future. (Well, aspiring critic, but you get the point.)"

Hopefully with the latest chapter I've finally explored all the pieces of what makes Trixie tick.
pumpkin-tlof19 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2011
Re: Home town
Fair point. Maybe she's between rumor exploration, or perhaps she came home following a manticore...something to consider. ^U^
Re: Latest Chapter
You will get a review of that, probably a critique, possibly as a christmas present. Short term, yes. Yes you did, and then some.
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2011
Granted. Trixie's Ego may not be the type to give up. But the idea here is that Discord targeted her when she was at her weakest.

"You will get a review of that, probably a critique, possibly as a christmas present."

I look foreword to that gift then.

And Merry CHristmas.
pumpkin-tlof19 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2011
Pretty sure I've already said this, but at this point it's a response, so Merry Christmas!

Anyhow, gift coming along in a bit, I just finished writing something really big. Can't wait to unveil, making sure it flows right beforehand though.
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