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Discorded Twilight Sparkle, Magic Isn't

Twilight Sparkle"Alone In A Group"

Greetings, my name is Twilight Sparkle. I am a unicorn and I am -not- a goth. These are my natural colors.  Yes I am the personal apprentice of Princess Celestia and holder of the central Element of Harmony 'Magic' and basically the leader of the Elemental Harmony Squad (Pinkie or Rainbow came up with that name, not me).

Huh? I am NOT a Mary Sue!

Ahem.

1) If I was a Mary Sue I'd have been teaching my new friends what it -meant- to be friends when I first came to Ponyville instead of the other way around.

2) My spell to redirect the parasprite's hunger wouldn't have backfired.

3) My failsafe spell wouldn't have failed.

4) Also I would have defeated an actually Ursa Major instead of pacifying an Ursa Minor.

5) I'd have won the Running of the Leaves race instead of coming in fifth place.

6) I wouldn't have a nervous breakdown every time a plan of mine blows up in my face.

AND I'D HAVE ALREADY FIGURED OUT WHAT IS WRONG WITH MY FRIENDS!  I know I'm supposed to talk about myself and my life and my Element first but I can't stand it!

AJ's been wrong or stubborn about things but I've never heard her -lie!-

Rainbow Dash told me about Pinkamina, and I guess that's some precedence, but Rainbow didn't describe her as being this . . . snappy. Pinkamina was melancholy, angry, and did not want anything to do with us, but she didn't act like the whole of Equestia was against her!

Okay Rarity likes jewelry, I'll admit it. She likes things beautiful and they help make things beautiful! But why a rock-?! Okay she told us about her cutie mark and the 'dumb rock' full of gems and maybe she thinks there's one in there . . . but why is she being so paranoid, er, obsessive, over it? I know she flipped out over the idea of her Gala dress getting stained, and she'll go nuts if her hard work at making herself or something pretty goes to waste . . . But why is she treating it like it's the husband she never had?!

Fluttershy . . . I know she has different shades to herself besides the pure as freshly fallen snow waif we're all used to. We've all seen The Stare in action, and we all try not to think about the incident at the Gala . . . maybe that was a mistake.  

I really can't imagine this being a side of her we've simply never seen yet. It's not that she's now assertive, is no longer afraid to talk above a whisper, it's not even that she's now speaking her mind without reservation . . . -she's vicious!-

It's almost like she -enjoyed- seeing me hurt when she reminded me I longer had my horn.

You have no idea how horrible a feeling that is, imagine losing a foreleg, and multiply that a few times squared. I imagine Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy feel the same about their wings.

Not so fun a fact: losing my horn doesn't make me an Earth Pony. My musculature is still built for charging not kicking and my bones are between an Earth Pony and a Pegasus' in terms of strength/fragility. (Rainbow Dash should be happy she doesn't shatter her hollow bones more often.)  And I now have a bunch of major arteries crisscrossing at point in my forehead with nothing!

I'm like a foal without her skull yet fully formed.

The way Fluttershy is acting is not right at all! I compare it to how Princess Celestia acted today. Even when she was angry (It was really scary, I don't think I've EVER seen her angry before) the Princess was still thinking of us and everyone: I still recognized Celestia.  I don't recognize Fluttershy at all!

The others I know it's them, I can still see them there, but is this even really Fluttershy? Sadly I can tell that at least she's not Discord in disguise or just an illusion . . . but . . . what is WRONG with her? Can't she even tell-?!

And finally Rainbow Dash . . . she wouldn't leave us . . but she did. It doesn't make sense! Nothing makes sense! Confusion tears through my, my mind like a, like a maelstrom!  This has to be a dream, an illusion, an alternate reality or something!

"It's all right Twili'. Ah know everythin' is gonna turn out okay."  I feel AJ's kind-hearted nuzzling and look at her. I can't tell if she's lying this time or not. Is she being honest now, or is she getting the hang of lying? Either way, I want to believe what she has to say. I want to believe her kind-hearted words.  

Kind? Is that what this has been all about? She's been lying to be kind?

If what AJ is saying is a lie, then I think I prefer it to the truth. If there's no chance, I prefer to pretend that there is.

Rarity is still being viciously protective of her 'diamond.' Even as the world falls apart she wants to be with her precious treasure until the end. I guess things can't fail her like we've failed each other.

Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie still have those vicious and angry looks on their faces. But I can't blame them now. Maybe they could only be kind and playful because the world was able to allow it.  

Maybe once the world stops being kind, maybe when the world stops being playful, maybe that's when we stop too.

With Applejack -the first of my friends I formally made in Ponyville- still next to me, I look at the part of the sky Rainbow Dash flew away towards. Why did she leave us? She wouldn't without a reason. I know whatever it was it had to be important. Maybe loyalties only last until something bigger comes along. So much for the ponytail of the loyal Samurai.

Maybe friendship only lasts until the world applies just the right pressure.  Is this the truth Applejack didn't want me to see?

Princess . . .help . . . I feel sick. My head swims. My heart feels like there's a needle in it. My legs waver even as Applejack supports me.

Princess, are THESE the lessons I should have been learning from the start?  

I've always thought I knew so much, but I see I've understood so little.

I'm so confused. But maybe the confusion is better if understanding is so horrid? Everything is darker now. I feel cold but I'm not afraid.

Why is my coat turning gray?

- Twilight Tragedy

(continued in Epilogue)
EDIT 2012 May 9th

THE AUDIO ADAPTION! I CAN'T BELIEVE I FORGOT TO PUT THIS HERE! [link] Great voice acting and ORIGINAL MUSIC!

THIS COVER ART WAS DONE PRECISELY FOR THIS STORY BY FIREDRAKE368. [link]

The POVs of the Elements of Harmony Squad as in Season Two Episode One where Discord breaks them one by one. And some truths behind of these events you may not thought of.

And things come full circle with a smaller part.

And now we've to Twilight Sparkle. Nothing more to say now. Read for yourself.

Other Parts In Chronological Order:

LiarJack: [link]

Anger Pie: [link]

Rarigreed: [link]

FlutterCruel: [link]

Traitor Dash: [link]

The Pathetic And Irrelevant Trixie: [link]

Twilight Tragedy: here

Epilogue: [link]

Link to the Gallery of the Discord Ponies POV Series, dealing with their descent into darkness by Discord's games and epilogue. [link]


And here is a link to the sequel of this series: the Reharmonized/Recovery/Healing Ponies POV series! Dealing with after the defeat of Discord and the mane six, along with all people of Ponyville dealing with the emotional stress in their own way of what they did while under Discord's control. Here's a hint, IT ISN'T EASY TO JUST PUT YOUR HOOVES FORWARD! And some want to trot backwards back into the night where the pain can't find them. [link]


MLP:FiM Copyright Hasbro.


AND NOW WE HAVE OUR TV TROPES PAGE! YAY! [link]


Eine psychologische Auseinandersetzung mit dem ersten Zweiteiler der zweiten Staffel von My Little Pony: Freundschaft ist Magie, erzählt aus der Sicht der sechs Heldinnen der Geschichte:
Equestria steht am Rande einer Katastrophe. Ein Feind, so alt wie das Land selbst, hat sich aus seinem Jahrtausende-langen Schlaf befreit, und hat die königliche Hauptstadt und Ponyville ins Visier genommen.
Discord, seines Zeichens Gott des Chaos, will den Thron wiedererringen, von dem ihn Celestia und Luna einst gestürzt hatten. Und dieser Tyrann bedient sich zum diesen Zweck seiner zerstörerischsten Waffe; und das sind Equestrias Ponys selber. Als Herr über Verstand und Wahrnehmung, weiß er sich jeden noch so starken Willen untertan zu machen.
Nun liegt es an den sechs Elementen der Harmonie, Discord Paroli zu bieten, bevor das Land unter ihm im Chaos versinkt.
Doch dann kriegen auch sie die volle Breitseite von Discords Macht zu spüren. Eine nach der anderen stellt fest, dass Discord in seinen Begründungen doch sehr 'überzeugend' sein kann....
Dies sind ihre Geschichten.


Scheußliche Fremde
Was sind Twilights Intelligenz und Talent wert, wenn man ihr die Freunde nimmt, die sie erst zu ihrem Element gemacht haben? [link]
 
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Language mix for this chapter.

Twilight Sparkle Discorded, the Magic

Twilight Sparkle "Alone In Group"

Greetings, my name is Twilight Sparkle. I unicorn Goth,. This is the natural color. Yes personal apprenticeship Princess Celestia and mid-holder Harmony "Magic" and basically led Harmony Tree Squad (Rainbow pinkie or with a name, not me).

Who? I'm not Mary Sue!

Ahem.

1) If I taught Mary Sue new friends -meant- became friends when I first came to Run not vice versa.

2) music mantra to drive hunger parasprite not turn.

3) Yes, I'm talking about will not fail.

4) I also beat the truth instead of Ursa Major and Ursa Minor calming.

5) I win the leadership race instead leaves come in fifth place.

6) I do not have a nervous breakdown every time I plan to explode in my face.

And I know what is wrong with your friends! I knew I had to talk to me and my life and the first element, but I can not stand!

AJ has a stubborn about you, but I've never heard of her -lie! -

Rainbow Dash said JadeMiner, and I think that is a priority, but the Rainbow describes itself as such. . . clear. JadeMiner is melancholy, angry, and do not want to deal with us, but do not act like the entire Questia him!

Okay lack of love jewelry, I admit it. He likes things nice and they help make it beautiful! But why rock?! Okay, he told us about his grades and "stupid stone" Sweet full of pearls and perhaps he thought no one was there. . . but what worries, uh, obsessive, it? I knew he was turned down by the Gala rich stained idea, and I will go mad if their hard work to make themselves or something that you just lost. . . But what does he treat her like her husband ever?!

Jung Min. . . I know that it has a different feel than pure self as new fallen snow stranded that we all used to. We have already seen that look consistent, and we all try not to think about what happened at the Gala. . . Perhaps it is wrong.

I really can not imagine this is just our side ever seen so far. This does not mean that it is now strong, not afraid to speak up in a whisper, not even speak his mind without reservation. . . -he devil! -

It's almost like a man -enjoyed- see me sick when he reminded me again that my horn.

Do not know how you feel, consider a front legs, and multiply it several times square. I thought Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy feel the same way about the line.

Fun fact: to make me lose my horn earth pony. My muscles are still built for charging and not kick the bones between the earth and the Pony Pegasus "in terms of health / weakness. (Rainbow Dash should be glad she did not destroy the bone empty always.) and now I have a lot of the main arteries crisscrossing the point on the forehead of anything!

I want to get pregnant without his skull yet fully formed.

Who conduct that is not true at all! I compare to act as Princess Celestia. Even when he was (It really awful, I do not think I ever saw him angry before) The women still think of us and for all: I still know Celestia. I do not know all the meaning!

The people who know who they are, I am still there, but it is not even really mean? Unfortunately I can not say that it is divided secret or illusory. . . but. . . what is wrong with it? He will not even tell?!

And finally Rainbow Dash. . . He will never leave us. . but it did. It makes no sense! It makes no sense! Confusion in my eyes, my mind is the same, like a whirl! You must be a dream, fantasy, and another truth or something!

"Et in Ammadu. Ah know the village" ice change. "I feel kind of AJ snorted and looked at him. I do not know if I lay this time or not. What is the truth now, or getting the hang of it located? Either way, I think what he said. I want to believe the word of good heart.

Tap? Is that what this is all about? He lied to be good?

AJ said a lie, then, I think I prefer the truth. If there is a chance, I want to pretend that there is.

Shortage is more protective of the 'diamond cruel. "Even when the world is falling apart prominence lasting wealth. Probably not fail those who failed the other.

Jung Min pinkie pie was still fierce and angry look on his face. But I do not blame them. Perhaps they would be the best and have fun because the world will not have it.

Perhaps the world is not beautiful, perhaps when the world stops being fun, perhaps even when we stopped.

Applejack with the first of my friends, I was officially created in Ponyville- beside me, I saw the aerial part Rainbow Dash flew away in the direction. Why leave us? It is not without reason. I know what is important. Perhaps just hold allegiance to something greater to come. So many of the faithful samurai ponytail.

Only friendship lasted until World intake pressure just right. This fact Applejack did not want me to see?

Daughter. . .help. . . I feel sick. My head swam. My heart felt like it was a needle. My legs were weak even Applejack support me.

Daughters, his teachings THIS I learned from the beginning?

I always thought I did well, but I found that I understand so little.

I was very confused. But confusion as well as a better understanding of it is so bad? Everything is dark now. I felt cold, but I'm not afraid.

What color my gray hair?

- Tragedy Twilight

(Continued closing)

Will take language suggestions.
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THINGSNEVERCHANGED Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2014
nope, not like losing a leg and multiplying it
overreacting
not sensitive
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2014
We're gong to have to agree to disagree. 
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THINGSNEVERCHANGED Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2014
probbly
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WolfKomoki1 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Except that you ARE a mary sue.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013
If you get as far as to read SA's storyarc, you'll see an ACTUAL mary sue in action and how destructive they actually are. 
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THINGSNEVERCHANGED Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2014
sa?
tell me more
i want to see one fucking example of a mary sue.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2014
Shining Armor. You'll see. 
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THINGSNEVERCHANGED Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2014
GIMMEGIMMEGIMMEGIMMEGIMME
link
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2014
Just read the reharmonized saga. 
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THINGSNEVERCHANGED Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2014
okay...
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CommanderEX Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
Poor Twilight, without horn she is not Earth Pony, and yet she was carrying 2 tons TOM around for Rarity, AJ not even bothered to help, it had to be very tough for studious Unicorn, unless Celestia make her practice more then just magic.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
Just another weight, more like a drop in the bucket to the damage she was suffering from her corrupted friends.
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CommanderEX Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
Heh, thats true, they were hurting her more mentally then physically.

But on the other side, it was nothing in front of pain she felt on the wedding where her friends not believed her and walked away from her after she tried to tell them that Cadance was evil, what's more her own brother almost disown her like he would never forgive her, and even her mentor was disappointed ( how could Celestia think that Twilight would be so selfish to ruin her brother wedding for no reason, or that she would be so stupid to mistake head-ache killing spell with brainwashing spell ), and for Twilight, Celestia words hurt far more then what Nightmare Moon and Discord thrown at her.

After all in episode with Discord, Twilight learned fast that her friends were turn again her again they will, but on the wedding, they all turned again her because they not trusted her, because they though so low of her.

So yea, I think short moment on the wedding episode hurt Twilight more then all what she passed in Discord episode.
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ardashir Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
I'm not sure why, but every time I read this story and hit that "I am NOT a Goth!" line, it cracks me up. Maybe it just affects me so much more because right after that I get to the part after that where Twilight has her heart torn apart.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
You truly are my biggest fan.
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ardashir Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
*blushes* Thanks. And when I look at the original Discorded Ponies POV, wow, whoever thought that the entire POV-verse came from these beautiful little jewels?

By the way, any chance of seeing a new Hearth's Warming Eve one-shot special from you for Christmas? Maybe this time Discord could meet up with Krampus or Knecht Ruprecht, who goes along with Santa on Christmas/Hearth's Warming to spank naughty children while Santa rewards the good ones. Just imagine the licking Discord's earned for his naughty behavior! :rofl: Okay, won't happen, but fans can dream of Dissey getting his.

And once again, thank you so very much for posting these stories in the first place; and for allowing me to contribute even a little bit to them.
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ardashir Featured By Owner May 10, 2012
Poor Twilight! I remember reading this story back when the episodes were first airing, and it was just as affecting then. Okay, now we know what's going to happen with the girls (both in canon and in your own version of their world), but still, you made it obvious that she was so utterly in despair.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012
Strange given I have so much trouble expressing myself in reality. Or it's only negative emotions my mind registers from others.
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ardashir Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012
I seem to have that problem myself. But whatever your troubles with expression in real life, the stories do a great job of it.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012
:-)
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ImRaidAccount Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
Twi is considered a Mary Sue?
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
Everyone is considered a mary sue by someone.
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ImRaidAccount Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2012
Good to know.
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Guilrel Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2012
I can't say much since I've gotten really tired now, but this is probably one of the more creepier moments of being discorded. In the end it's almost like Twilight just saw a zombie or something just broke into her hideout before the sudden cut off.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012
The 'why is my coat turning gray?' thing?
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Guilrel Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012
Yeah, the "Why is my coat turning gray?" thing was more or less like how someone's message got cut off as they either become a monster or attacked by something.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012
Cool.
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Guilrel Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012
Yep. :nod:
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Charanty Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011
All this "discorded thing" strongly reminds me of how child learns that world can be harsh and first reaction is denial by...well... we saw several versions of that.
Later they grow -spiritually in this case - and gain understanding. And when they fully gain it, they get healed.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011
If the ordeal doesn't destroy them.
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Charanty Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011
Yeah.
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HMorris73 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2011
I'm guessing this is the main diverging point between the two timelines, since Reharmonized seems to follow the show's version of Twilight's fall.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2011
Logically. I'd assume so. Yes.
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pumpkin-tlof19 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011
Twilight Sparkle is surprisingly observant; I have to wonder if she's got a similar thing going for her that Pinkie Pie does (that is, ability to see past the fourth wall.)
I have to wonder, though, that she doesn't analyze things beyond this. Once she's separated from her friends? Yeah, it hurts like a ten foot pole jammed through your eyes. But to avoid the pain, you retreat behind walls of disconnect, and that would only make her a stronger, if harsher, pony.
It says something that what ultimately breaks her is AJ being kind. Somehow, dust gets in my eyes every time I realize that. It kinda hurts...
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2011
"Twilight Sparkle is surprisingly observant; I have to wonder if she's got a similar thing going for her that Pinkie Pie does (that is, ability to see past the fourth wall.)"

I doubt she realizes the ponies she's talking to aren't really ponies.

"I have to wonder, though, that she doesn't analyze things beyond this. Once she's separated from her friends? Yeah, it hurts like a ten foot pole jammed through your eyes. But to avoid the pain, you retreat behind walls of disconnect, and that would only make her a stronger, if harsher, pony."

Actually, according to how magic works in the setting, it would make her -weaker-.

"It says something that what ultimately breaks her is AJ being kind. Somehow, dust gets in my eyes every time I realize that. It kinda hurts..."

It's not what happened in the cartoon since I wrote this before the second episode was released, and chose to keep it as is, to have it slowly dawn on the reader things weren't going according to script.

I hope you read and enjoy the Reharmonization Series and the Audio Adaption on youtube just as much as you have these babies.
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pumpkin-tlof19 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011
Re: Surprisingly Observant
I'm not quite talking about the ponies she's talking to; you implied early on that all this was going on in each mare's head as a stream of consciousness... more on that in the overall at the epilogue. I'm referring to the fact that she observes the grayscale, something nobody else noticed during their discording.
Re: Magic
To be honest, magic isn't the only kind of strength, even in this setting. Yes, 'tis the most powerful strength, but no one should be (and I apologize in advance for the bad pun) a one trick pony. Everyone has their skills, and is able to adapt to a given situation; Rarity is proof enough of that. (Heh..."THIIIS IS WHIIINING..." cracks me up every time.) Hrm. Anyways: in this case, I'm talking about the analytical capabilities of our favorite magic mare. At the start of the series, Twilight was sort of like Trixie, if for a different reason: No friends, but fairly powerful with magic anyways, due to long years of training and application. Twilight was also building her skills as a student, teacher, and generally curious person. Other jobs that require curiosity? Private Investigator. SO: what happens when you distance yourself from a situation, inevitably? You get an outside view of what is going on, and can better act on what you're seeing. (Story Idea, may need to act on it: Take Twilight's Discording in a different direction...) AW: While Twilight's magic WOULD get weaker, her skills in analysis would allow her to, for lack of a better term, engage the Xanathos Drive to create an unbeatable plan to repair the damage Discord was causing. Friendship would still ultimately prove the most powerful, but there would not be an implied "friendship is the only possible weapon you possess" theme...and I've ranted about my beliefs again, haven't I. Dangit! Next Topic!
Re: According to Script
That...fits in perfectly with my epileptic tree from RD: Discord does the Time Warp at the close of the deal, talks with Luna, and pops in to keep Twilight from breaking when she does by distracting her with his shenanigans...meaning they've all been playing into his hands (claws?) the whole time. Oh snap.
Re: Other series(es)
...First point: Series is hard to pluralize. Second point: Reharmonization is better than Discording. And Discording is awesome. Therefore, Reharmonization is Awesome. And yes that capitalization is intentional. The Audio Adaptation is good too, though I can't help but think that it would be cooler if they somehow got the original actors to do it. Meh, beggars can't be choosers. Can't wait for them to get to reharm, though: right now the whole thing sounds...well, it sounds like we're listening to the voice tapes the actors submitted to qualify for the roles. And it'll be interesting to see how they handle narration in the third person...
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2011
"I'm not quite talking about the ponies she's talking to; you implied early on that all this was going on in each mare's head as a stream of consciousness... more on that in the overall at the epilogue. I'm referring to the fact that she observes the grayscale, something nobody else noticed during their discording."

Ah! Well that was to let the readers know what had happened. But at the same time I think it FIT with things and how broken Twilight was at that point.

": right now the whole thing sounds...well, it sounds like we're listening to the voice tapes the actors submitted to qualify for the roles."

They did say it was an ADAPTION.

Do you think if I submit the Discording chapter as a PROLOGUE to reharmonization it might go better?

Though I do have one idea. Of Tragedy seeing four stars aling with the moon again after a 1000 years that begins to trigger her realization of the truth. Or that's one idea at least.

The thing with RD like I said, strangely feels like a cheat to me. I'm not sure why. :-(
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pumpkin-tlof19 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011
Re: EQD
I'm pretty sure that they would work with the prologue idea more than as a Part 1, based on their dislike of "conversational pieces." So, to answer your question, yes.

Re: The Stars Align
Hoom. I think that, given Discord's tendency to wipe her brain when she remembers stuff, the memories would have to be redistributed in a way that he didn't notice...but that's me. You probably have a better idea somewhere up your sleeve.

Re: Cheat
If it doesn't work for you, it doesn't work for you. There are a million ways you could connect Disc to Reharm, but only one will really work for you: the one you use.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011
Any other suggestions on how to make it work is fine by me. One of them is bound to fit my logic eventually.

ANd thank you for everything so far!
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pumpkin-tlof19 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2011
Ask and ye shall receive, apparently. New submission up, feel free to confirm or deny anything within as canon. Inspired by you, obviously, but also a certain picture...you'll know which one before the end. I'll include links to make certain.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2011
You're added to the journal entry.
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00blazzer Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2011
Alright. I understood the cynical ideas going through Twilight Tragedy's mind. I used to think that way as well; ambling through those dark, ambiguously true, life lessons, what a downer right? But regardless, if I were to take those lessons to heart and build my perspective around its pessimism, then my social experiences would be gloomy (like Tragedy's), fruitless, frustrating (like AngryPie's), un-satisfyingly depressing, and even offensive to others. Those lessons are essentially useless to my condition, and to the experiences of those interacting with me.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2011
I am so using this in the finale arch.
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00blazzer Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2011
Dam she's so understanding. You create a wonderful Twilight. Insightful, intelligent and not annoyingly oblivious; I can relate to her. I found myself wavering, questioning if the "lessons she should have learned", were indeed in someway more true. I'm deciding to call them "true but useless to the human condition"... Should I have said "pony" there?....
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2011
"lessons she should have learned", were indeed in someway more true. I'm deciding to call them "true but useless to the human condition"

Whao! PLEASE expand on that please! 0-0 Seriously! I want you to explain your meaning behind your words there!!
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lTofSMITIA Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
As always, very nice. It reads just like a train of thought from the intellectual, logical mind of Twilight. I especially like how she succumbs to all of the others' corruptions in one way or another; it serves to tie it all up like a dark, depressing present nicely. Expertly written, my friend.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011
Twilight's element is the one that binds them all together and is both the strongest and weakest one.

And I tend to be very negative thinking myself. So of course this all flowed naturally. It's thinking positively that's a challenge for me. Just wait till you read the epilogue.
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Senthai Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011
While it was funny, I dunno if it fits Twilight to break the fourth wall and discuss her being or not being a Mary Sue. Feels like a Pinkie stunt there. Apart from that, definitely a very in-depth look on Twilight's fall, even though it's somewhat different from the way it really happens in the show.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011
I purposely wrote this before the second episode came out, because I had my doubts that Twilight would fall too. I considered rewriting it to make it fit canon, but I thought that it was good the way it was, and aded some surprise to the reader with everything being canon up to this point. And makes the epilogue itself TAHT MUCH more powerful.

And the wall breaker was meant more to show Tiwlight's frustration if anything at her seemingly hopefully situation. And I felt it needed to be said.

Thank you for your praise and comments.

I've used this POV to TAKE APART these ponies' ideals.

The sequel series is me PUTTING THEM BACK TOGETHER STRONGER THAN BEFORE. [link]
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