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My Little Pony friendship Is Magic
Reharmonization Pony POV Series
Episode Title: "Pearl Necklace Part 3 of 5"
By Alex Warlorn

My name is Screwball… Well, not really, but that's what everypony here except the nice doctors call me… I wonder why?

All my fellow residents are back to normal after the fog tried to touch and hurt them, except that pony on the other side of the wall of my room, I can't hear her.

Oh hi! Hello! Didn't see you there! I'm sooo bored right now. It's so nice to have somepony to talk to! It's a shame, the world made sense, but I didn't get to spend any time with my little princess…

My room doesn't have padding in it like a lot of the other rooms here, the other ponies say I'm not dangerous to myself, just… unpredictable. I don't know why they think that. I mean yeah, the orderly didn't seem to like the chiropractor job I did on him, but he really needed it! It wasn't my fault he didn't want one! And none of his bones were permanently dislocated! And I guess I do have a habit of leaving the hospital without permission, but it isn't my fault they kept saying no. All I want to do is see my prince and little princess again, I wish they'd understand that!

There sure are a lot of foals playing outside today, it makes me think of my little princess. I really want to visit her! The last time I visited her at our house, it was right after they added to this lock to my cell door… It's been awhile. Still, it was so nice of her to bring me that lovely gift! She's such a thoughtful and considerate widdle-filly-willy.

Still, that fog out there. A lot of the other ponies started screaming a lot when it touched them. It's a good thing I decided to climb up here and hang from the ceiling like this! The doctors don't seem to like me doing this, but what do they know?

Oh, look at all those cute yellow and pink song birds in my window! Looking at me with those blue eyes! There's something you don't see every day! The little birds opened their beaks to sing, but before they could give me a little song, this huge white and pink falcon with blue eyes swooped down at the them and they shattered in a flurry of feathers.

Oh look! A little sun bird with the falcon's coloring just landed outside my window! I'd better tell it what its friend did!

"That wasn't very nice." I said to the sun bird. "Your friend just scared all those other little birds away."

"Sorry. But I wanted to ask you a question."

I tilt my head in confusion, "Okay, I know I'm not that crazy. Birds don't talk."

"Maybe I'm not a bird. But will you answer my question?"

I tilt my head the other way, "Depends on the question."

"Would you like to see your prince again? Even if it's for just a little while?"

My heart skips a beat, "Yes! Yes yes yes yes!" I answered so fast I didn't even blink! I start hopping around from just the excitement of it all. The sun bird gives me a nostalgic look, I wonder why?

"Okay, I promise you'll be able to find him outside. Not right outside but-"

I poke my muzzle against the window, "THANK YOU SO MUCH! I'll be going now!"

"What? But-but don't you need some help to-"

"It's okay! Don't worry about it!" I said, waving her off with my back leg. I know just what to do!

I calmly remove the Plexiglas from the see through hole in my door (I got it loose awhile ago), and, using my front and back legs, pushed the little sliding-door in the door open.

I peek my head outside to take a look around, I didn't see any of the orderlies or doctors outside. I can go!

"No really, you don't need to-" the bird started, but I'm too excited to reply!

They make it so hard for me to open the latch on the door from the inside, but I know the trick. All ya gotta do is dislocate a major bone or three, ugh, just like that. Then ya slide your dislocated hoof through the tiny door like that ... then pull~, and it's field trip time! Now, just excuse me while I ... ugh . . push these ...back ... into PLACE! THERE! GOOOD-AS-NEW! Whao. If I wasn't crazy, I'm sure I'd have passed out from the pain there. Maybe I should tell the doctors I jammed the lock last time I had my bath. Huh, the bird looks at me a little sickened, it should get that checked.

I trot out of my cell like I'm going down to breakfast, with the traditional royal swagger of course, got to keep up my appearances if I want to see my prince!

I jump when I see this little colt in a doctor's coat just their size outside below my range of vision (maybe the doctors were right and I do have tunnel vision). This day is starting to get really odd, they normally don't let foals wander around here unsupervised.

"Hello! You really need to go back inside your room now please."

Dang. There goes that trick! I'll have to think of a new escape method, again. Oh well, it gives me something to pass the time between sessions with the doctors!

"It's okay, a birdie said I could go outside."

"Oh?! Really? Okay! If Her Kindnesty says you can go outside! Then it must be okay! Have a nice day!" The little colt waves me off and I do the same with my back hoof.

"This is easier than usual." I said to myself. I pass the big orderlies, who haven't become small and cute, but are now SMILING! Seeing them smile is enough to make me shiver.

I trot through the halls unopposed, this is really weird. It almost takes the fun out of this... Oh well! I still get to see my prince! That makes it worth it!

"Hello and well met!" I jump, coming face to face with the pegasus without wings from the cell next to me, except she isn't in her cell anymore. She's standing in the entrance room, talking to the doctor colts and orderlies with a voice of authority and kindness.

"Hello. You look really great!" I reply. The pink pegasus is wearing platinum armor engraved with a butterfly symbol. She has the most beautiful pair of giant butterfly wings I have ever seen! The ones she gets on the weekends from that nice unicorn don't come close!

"Thank you!"

"A little birdie said I could go outside today!"

"Have a nice day!"

I walk out, the colts in the security booth undoing the door-locks for me with smiles on their faces. This is getting so weird, I almost feel bad escaping when it's this easy…

The moment I step hoof outside the house, I realize I had forgotten an important detail about this little adventure.

The fog is still outside. But the sun seemed to be keeping it away from me. It was funny ... I didn't think the sun could be so bright when the fog was out, pegasi are so clever, and the sun is so warm, so enveloping… It's like getting a nice hug from mom…

I feel so calm and serene. I remember myself being like before things became so confusing…

It's like back when I could look at a map and tell north from south, when I could look at words and not see just a jumble of confusing letters, when I could put my dresses on without being told I had put them on backwards…again. When I could look at the schedule I had just written down myself and see how things connected instead of lots of separate boxes. I used to love doing that for my prince and our little princess. To plan all our stuff out for us… Now I can't even draw the boxes without ending up with a bunch of circles…

Circles? Why does that ring a bell?…

Oh! Circles, like my roller skates, where are they? Oh! There are they are! How'd they get here? And now they fit me again, that's weird… Why wouldn't they fit me? Mom custom ordered them for my birthday! Doesn't matter. There we go, now let's go see what we can discover today! It's a big wide world and I'm not gonna miss any of it!

~

Onyx Tiara huffed and puffed, he couldn't remember when he had last had time to interact with other foals so much! Oh sure, he had friends, foals of other rich earth ponies, but they didn't really ever get to hang out or play by themselves, it was always at big, stuffy social things, which were so boring! He was catching his breath, but was still smiling. His father told him that Earth Ponies were always stronger and had more endurance than Pegasi, but these fillies were proving them wrong! He hoped his papa didn't see.

But he had never felt so free, he had used his silver namesake collar as a hula-hoop, which he knew his parents would never approve of, it made him grin! The pegasi had clapped at his performance. They weren't nearly as bad as papa and grandma had said they were.

The unicorns were a little intimidated to play ball, worried they might actually stick the ball with their horns and ruin the game, but Onyx had encouraged them to simply play using their back hooves rather than their front. They weren't anything like papa and grandma had said either, he began to get the feeling maybe they'd just never met any pegasi or unicorns for real.

Onyx didn't care if this day EVER ended! He wished it would last forever! He was free!

"You call that fast?! This is fast!" A purple and gold blur zoomed right past Onyx, making him spin! He landed on his flanks and looked to see a purple filly on gold colored roller skates passing the air-born pegasi foals and reaching (more like hitting) the tree that had been the finish line. How was she skating on grass? The filly picked herself up and put her beanie back on her head, "HA! I win!"

"No fair, you cheated!" Protested a yellow pegasus colt. Never mind the she hadn't actually been part of the race in the first place.

"How?" Asked the purple Earth pony filly looking up at them, cocking her head in confusion.

"You used wheels!"

"And you used wings."

"My wings are a part of me!"

"So if I grew wheels then that wouldn't be cheating?"

"Er, that is-Hey! Saria!"

A green pegasus with a darker mane and blue eyes nudged her friend out of the way, "WOW! You're fast! What's your name?"

"I'm Golden Skates! But you can call me Goldie, or Princess."

Onyx finally reached the tree, why did everything seem farther away when you needed to catch your breath? Being dizzy from the spin Golden Skates had sent him into didn't help either.

"Oh. And who are you?" Golden Skates asked lowering her head and looking at the Earth pony colt.

"I'm-I'm Onyx Tiara."

"Onyx Tiara, huh?" Goldie said smiling, "You always this slow?"

"AM NOT! And I bet I could go as fast you if I had skates!"

Skates grinned, the pegasi all looked at each other.

Sometimes I ask myself
What am I doing here
I think of all the reasons
But it's still not clear


Now bare hoofed Goldie trotted around Onyx, who was now shaking in Goldie's roller skates. "Ready?"

Onyx was having second thoughts, "Er-maybe-I-"

"Okay!" she pushed him.

I look at places to go
There's nothing near
So take me away from this
Cause this place I'll hardly miss


Onyx let out a scream as his roller path took him straight into an orchard, leaving the pegasi behind. His brain in full panic mode, he miraculously dodged every tree and breathed a sigh of relief and looked behind him at his accomplishment, and predictably smacked straight into an apple tree, looking like a splatted insect against the tree trunk as he slid down. Inevitably, the mandatory pile of apples only fell to bury him once he had gathered enough wits to look up.

So take me back in time
To another world
Then you can be mine
We don't have to worry
When you're by my side


Goldie skipped merrily to the pile of apples and casually knocked a few apples off the top of the pile to reveal the colt underneath. "Hiiii!" She smiled. "Not bad for your first go! Maybe next time you'll hit the tree so fast it'll get uprooted."

Tears in his eyes, Onyx snapped, Goldie noticed he had a bloody nose, "You big bully! Why do you hate me?! What did I ever do to you!? Just take your stupid skates and go away!" Onyx pulls his forelegs out of the pile and tried to undo the straps with his teeth but wasn't quite sure how to get them off. After half a minute of futile trying he just broke down and sobbed.

There's nothing I don't know
There's nothing to decide
Apart from where we want to go


Goldie got on her rear legs' knees, "I ... I don't hate you."

"Yes, you do! You just wanna see me hurt! You just wanna laugh at me!"

Goldie felt tears of her own, "I don't wanna laugh at you."

"Yes, yes you do! All you wanna do is laugh!" Onyx cried harder, not able to get the skates off.

Goldie cleared away the apples, and undid the straps on the skates and tossed them aside. She used her beanie and tried to clear away some of the blood, not working as well as she'd have liked. The filly hugged the colt and said, "I'm not laughing. I promise I'm not laughing. Listen, I'm not laughing. I won't laugh if you don't wanna. I promise. I'm sorry I hurt ya. I just wanted ya to have fun. I didn't want ya to get hurt. I'm sorry. I'm sorry. I'm sorry."

Onyx didn't verbally respond, but he didn't shoot any more hateful words at her. They stayed that way for so long that both the foals lost track. Goldie led Onyx to a small water pool where he could wash the blood off.

What I am I doing now
By coming back for more
Is it me or I have I been here before


"You ... you really did do good," Goldie said in a small voice. "I thought you really did a nice job until you stopped looking the way you were going."

Onyx said nothing.

"Seriously, you were great!"

Onyx looked at her passively.

Goldie struggled with what to say, she was so used to being in control of any situation, not having control and not knowing what to do next really scared her. The little filly struggled against panic with herculean effort.

"When I first started skating, my legs would start going in different directions! My parent told me I should just give it up before I hurt myself, and I did hurt myself, but I didn't want to give up, I just had to remember why I got hurt so I wouldn't do it again. You did WAY BETTER than me on my first try!"

Onyx looked at her, and wasn't able to figure out if she was lying or not. "Really?"

"Yes really!" She grinned ear to ear. She trotted up to him and held his hooves, "Wanna be my prince?"

"Huh?!"

I want to go somewhere
That we can explore


"Every princess needs a prince! That's what mom and dad say! So can you be mine?"

"What do princesses and princes together do?" Onyx asked confused.

"I... have no clue." Goldie confessed. "Uh, wanna play? For real this time? I promise I won't use my skates."

The filly looked at him pleading.

Onyx then remembered how his mother said you need to be always polite to fillies. He sighed. "Okay."

She hugged him again, which took him off guard. He stumbled, and they both fell into the natural pool. The splash was epic, something both foals could appreciate. Thankfully, as it turned out, both ponies could swim.

They looked at each other, their manes soaked, and laughed.

Just take me away from here
To somewhere that's no where near


Observing this were three small creatures that looked like miniature ponies with butterfly wings and long thread-like antennae. They fluttered about the apple tree branches, their breathing and motions in sync. They were white with pink manes and blue eyes, their wings were the color of pastel rainbows with a sunburst pattern. They giggled to themselves in an echo.

The fairy-like ponies flew over the two foals sprinkling pixie dust.

Goldie then laughed and beeped Onyx on the nose, "Tag! You're it!" She dove under the water, her lower half's flukes splashing him the face.

"Hey, no fair!" Onyx laughed and dove down after her, his tail propelling him fast after. He'd only heard about things like this in bedtime stories, now he was one! Of course, why wouldn't he be one?

Onyx chased after her, the pool now a lake. An angry squid raised its head, ready to deal with a few more ponies who had intruded on its home, only to get bowled over by a pair of hippocampi. The two nearly created a whirlpool as they spun around each other. Then Onyx got an idea and stopped, causing Goldie to crash into him.

The two swam up together and broke the surface, leaping so high into the air, it was like they could fly.

The two pegasi foals broke apart and spread their wings. Now it was Onyx's turn to fly away as he folded his wings, dove back down, opened them up again at the last moment, and had his wings skim the water's surface. Goldie followed, twirling in a corkscrew. The two flew up again, Onyx kicked a cloud in the way to make Goldie take the long way around but she just crashed through it head first instead. Onyx repeated his trick several times with the same result. Why had his papa said such mean things about pegasi? It had always been great to be one!

Take me there
Take me anywhere you want to go
To a place that we both know


Finally Onyx made the mistake of letting himself be cornered by clouds on all sides and she reached out to hug tackle him. Instead he teleported away. Goldie made a noise of disappointment, then sensed him and teleported too.

Goldie reappeared in the apple orchard, the unicorn looked this way and that in search of her playmate. She spotted him and teleported right next to him, only for him to teleport away an instant later. Goldie just laughed and teleported to his new location just a couple trees away, only for Onyx to teleport away the next moment once again. This cycle repeated several times until the orchard was a viable lightshow of teleportation spells.

Finally the two unicorns teleported right next to each other, and Goldie brushed against his side. "Gotcha, prince."

"Got you too, princess." Their horns touched and sparkled fireworks.

Now Onyx wished this afternoon could last beyond forever.

Back in time
I'm going back in time
Back in time
So take me back in time
So take me


A while later the two earth ponies came back to the main group, each introducing them to their new best friend. The pegasi and unicorns clapped.

Sunny Day sighed at the lovely sight. Then she noticed the fog was beginning to break up. 'Oh well. Nothing lasts forever.'

She called out in a powerful voice, "I'm sorry, everypony! Looks like playtime is over."

All the ponies turned at Sunny Day's compelling voice. A chorus of "Do we have to?" "Not yet please!" "I don't wanna!" flooded back at her.

Mary Mare looked at Sunny Day with a disappointed and wistful look on her face, "Aaaahh!~ Does it have to be?"

Sunny Day nodded sadly, "Yes, sorry dear. I'm afraid it has to. I'm very sorry dearie. I know that it would be nice if it didn't have to end, but Mary, nothing does last forever. But I think this day has done all of you some very much good." Sunny Day lowered her head and nuzzled the slightly younger filly. "And you all did have fun with your best friends, right?"

Mary Mare accepted the nuzzle and nodded, "Yeah! Yeah I did! Me and Ravvey both did!"

"There! Then this day wasn't a waste! I think being without your troubles for a day has done you some good indeed."

Mary Mare didn't quite understand but nodded in response.

"I want you to know, you and all of you are my bestest friends. No matter what happens, do not forget that," Sunny Day said to her. Ravvey joined in the nuzzle.

Feeling too tired now for the field trip through Everkind Forest to see Princess Gaia's amusement park, the ponies began nuzzling each other and saying goodbyes. Little Redheart led her special friends back to her clinic.

Sunny Day felt her heart ache with regret (a price for this form) seeing Redheart subconsciously lead the foals back to their hospital beds that some would never leave again, but also gave a small smile, knowing they got to have the chance to run and play at least one last time before that happened. She knew Lulu would extract restitution from her for extending the day a little.

The fog was much thinner now. She felt Princess Gaia's essence given to Spike and Owlowiscious fade, and it was a slow scalpel along her side feeling the despair from a pegasus whose replacement wings dissolved along with her armor.

The fog was now just a few wisps, and they were coming. She rolled an eye to see them, half-formed shadows of ponies. Some raging, some weeping, but all moving like the wind toward the innocent and pure foals that she loved so dearly. Sunny Day was so tempted, so very tempted to annihilate them out of existence. It would take more magic than she had used in centuries, Luna would have to raise and lower the sun on her own for a few decades, but she could do it. Let these foals remain foals, either remaining in their simple happiness if they chose, or growing up into fine mares and stallions without these taints. Yes, it would be so easy, just a thought, just a gesture. She was an Alicorn, she had a right to make this decision if she chose!

Sunny Day sighed and let the shadows pass unopposed. She wondered if the foals could see them, likely not. Maybe it was kinder that way.

The little foal Berry Punch was trotting back to her house when a shadow dove inside her.

ADDICTION

The mare Berry Punch shook her head dizzily, finding the world suddenly a lot smaller.

Blueblood nuzzled Apple Smith, and told her how he hoped that they could play again tomorrow before they parted way, Apple Smith trotting alongside Little Mac. Blueblood stayed along side his guardian.

Barely out of sight, a shadow wormed its way back inside the agile hyperactive green filly with a pie cutie mark.

REGRET

The elderly Granny Smith slowed down to a snail's crawl. It was going to be a long walk home.

Another shadow dove inside Little Mac, returning to where it was born from.

FEAR OF OSTRACIZATION

Big Mac let his grandmother lean on him, hoping no one saw him playing with Smartypants today.

Onyx looked around for Goldie, wondering where she had gotten to. There seemed to be a lot less foals and more and more adults suddenly. Where were they all going? Then a partially ugly shadow entered and took its throne that it had been torn from before.

PREJUDICE

Onyx Tiara shook his head, what was this? Had he . . . had he really spent the entire day playing with feather-dusters and narwhals-?! And enjoyed it?! That couldn't be right could it-?! But that would mean all that time with his Princess today had been... the surreal play-date swam through his mind. He hadn't been, couldn't have spent the afternoon happily as one of -THEM- could he? Onyx Tiara fled back to his house and his room in terror at the confusing emotions that refused to leave him.

"Blueblood?" Sunny Day said to the little white unicorn, fifty-two generations removed from an Alicorn.

"Y-y-yes?"

"I want you to know, your Auntie Celestia really does love you and care about you. She doesn't hate you, and never has, and never will, though the way you act sometimes does make her very upset. But she still wouldn't want a world without you, and she's very sorry she could never spend enough time with you. She had something very important to do for her sister and everyone, she was preparing for it while you were growing up, but that's no excuse, it was her own fault for not wanting to see the warning signs with her sister when she should've in the first place. She just wants you to know that she's very sorry. And she hopes she can still make it up to you."

The confused, innocent colt still looked at her as a shadow dive bombed into him like a tidal wave.

HUBRIS

Sunny Day vanished in a flicker of light, and the goddess of the sun herself stood in her place, wearing her heavy mantle.

"Auntie?" Blueblood said, the spoiled stallion of a prince's head spinning. "What happened?"

"The one thing you wanted your entire foalhood, nephew: To be a colt rather than a prince, I'm sorry I couldn't give it to you longer."
~~~
Appleloosa

Sheriff and chief looked looking at the kissing couple. Ah, young love.

INTOLERANCE

Between species-?! DISGUSTING!!! But they'd spent the entire day accepting it! How was that possible?! It wasn't right, was it?! They were different species! Everything seemed so confusing… Maybe they both just needed to sit down and share a tall glass of whisky with lots and LOTS of salt mixed in…

~~~

Blueblood nearly had a breakdown finding himself in such a nowhere town like Ponyville, but glad it was within relative trotting distance of Canterlot, that meant his carriage to carry him back would be there all the sooner. Blueblood was no mage unicorn and had no mastery over teleportation magic. Celestia let him be, like everypony else, he'd have a lot of confusing thoughts and feelings to work through and needed time to do it.

Celestia saw a collection of tiny stars, sparks of existence whose only trait assigned to them was 'alive' float down into Ponyville and enter a number of round bellied mares, two enter a bakery called Sugarcube Corner and return to a blue mare. Celestia had never thanked Her Parents so much as in that moment.

She felt a foal hug her leg, she looked down and saw Golden Skates hugging her distressed. "I-I don't wanna go." She sobbed.

"I'm sorry dear. There's a filly who loves her mother very much, who is waiting for her mother to heal and overcome her shadows."

"But I don't wanna go! Everything isn't confusing anymore. I can see! I can read! I can understand!... I don't want everything to go back to being confusing."

Celstia gently nuzzled her, folding her wings around her, keeping the shadow at bay just for the moment. "Everything won't be confusing forever. I promise you'll get better. I promise you'll find your way through the fog and find your family waiting for you. You'll become a stronger self. And hopefully, being reminded of the good times he had with you will help your prince guide you out of your fog."

"I don't wanna die." Goldie sniffed rubbing her eyes, begging.

Celestia eyed the shadow, just a gesture, just a thought, and leave only a foal behind who could enjoy life and eventually become a mare who wouldn't be dragged into the fog and tear apart her family. Sure, destroying all the shadows might not be right, but would anyone care if she destroyed just one? So easy. But Celestia knew it wasn't that simple.

"You're not dying, you're just becoming something new. I promise, what makes you 'you' will never disappear. You're not vanishing, you're growing."

"But I like being with my prince! I like... wanna, wanna see my little princess... I wanna... please..."

"If I could grant that wish I would. I'm so sorry, my little pony. Just rest now. Just listen to my voice, and rest...



My Little Pony, My Little Pony,
Isn't it time we started home?
My Little Pony, My Little Pony,
Who ever dreamed how far we'd roam?
Crickets are calling, evening is falling,
Over the meadow and glen.
My Little Pony, My Little Pony,
When will I see you again?
"

Celestia's divine voice almost broke, but she knew it would do no good for her subjects to see their princess on the verge of tears.

Celestia gently telekinetically lifted up the sleeping foal. She unfolded her wings.

The shadow pounced.

MANIA-OBSESSION-DENIAL

Celestia lovingly nuzzled the still sleeping mare, and put the gold roller skates in her forehooves, far too small for her, being made for a little filly. Then, without a word, Celestia teleported to Golden Tiara's hospital room, deposited her on the bed, and teleported away.

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BEHOLD: A dramatic reading of how this entire series started! [link]



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And a reharmonization you wouldn't expect! [link]

Discord's beaten, but invisible scars take the longest to heal for the mane six and all of Ponyville. Anyone can die, living is the actually challenge.

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Edit: more edits to make things run more smoothly. The last thing I EVER wanted anyone to think of this chapter is is -filer-.

Edit 2012 01 15:
A rather gruesome bit of fridge logic was recently pointed out to me by Jawmax. [link] I've added a few lines to address this. Also going to had A LOT of lines in part 4 to address this. Sorry Shy'.

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We start our story with Golden Tiara, still struck as an insane adult in the asylum. She thinks back about the time Chaos ruled everything and she regrets that she couldn’t spend the day together with her daughter. She talks nonchalantly about dislocating the bones of the orderly and often leaving the asylum to visit her family. Golden doesn’t really understand why the ponies working here don’t like that. Just like many others she is sure that the problem lies with everyone else, instead of herself. All the foals playing outside remind her at Diamond Tiara and at least she is still able to remember the special gift she obtained from her daughter. Then Fluttershy’s birds find her and prepare to trap her in the fog as well but a part of Celestia, disguised as a falcon, appears and destroys the constructs. Another aspect of Celestia, disguised as a sun bird, lands outside her window and she has a polite conversation with it, despite pointing out that birds don’t talk. Just hearing the question if she wants to see her prince again lets her jump around in happiness. While the Sun Goddess clearly had a plan to get Golden out without any difficulty, the pony just removes the glass and opens the lock from the inside by dislocating her own bones. She did practise this trick quite often and causally mentions that if she wouldn’t be so insane, she would pass out in pain. Outside she meets one of the doctors who is now a foal and still tells her to go back into her room. Now that is dedication to the job but as Golden Tiara tells him that a bird told her she could leave. Since Fluttershy’s constructs take very often the form of birds, the foal thinks that Princess Gaia allowed the insane pony to leave and doesn’t question it at all. By complete accident the escape became ridiculously easy. Golden Tiara seems somewhat disappointed by this lack of opposition. Soon she meets the overseer of the asylum: The pink pegasus who did gnaw her own wings off and apparently the only insane pony that Fluttershy managed to heal with her fog. When Princess Gaia noticed that, she immediately made the suffering pony one of her knights and gave her new wings. Golden Tiara notices how much better those are compared to the ones the pegasus gains from the gossamer spell. If this knight would try to stop her Golden would likely have no chance to escape, since even the six heroes had difficulty defeating knight Cheerilee. But even the knight doesn’t stop her when she tells her that a bird allowed her to leave. The fog is everywhere but the sun is protecting her and its warmth makes her feel secure and nostalgic. She remembers the time when she was able to read words and maps and make schedules. Then she goes back even further and remembers her roller skates. And there they are and they are fitting her perfectly, showing that she did turn back into a foal as well.

Onyx Tiara is exhausted from his exercise with the others, he was never used to it and spend most of his childhood in rigid social interaction. Now he had witnessed himself that pegasi can have just as much endurance as an earth pony, unlike what his father did teach him. Everything he experiences with the other races contradicts what is was told and believed, the pegasi enjoyed his antics with his collar and the unicorns listened to his advice when playing around. He feels so free, all his inner demons of racism gone. Then Golden Tiara rushes past him and right into the tree that is the finish line. But even as a child she was incredible durable. The two foals with them are apparently reincarnations of Link and Saria. Onyx Tiara is the last one to reach the finish line and the two start to talk to each other and soon she gives him her beloved skates to see if he could be faster with them. The entire scene is accompanied by a familiar song: Back in Time from Sonic R, which is not only fitting thanks to the lyrics but also because it IS a racing game. He is unsure but she doesn’t take a maybe as an answer. At first he managed to dodge every obstacle despite his lack of experience but when he looks back he painfully crashes into the next apple tree. She just thinks that it is funny but he isn’t as durable as she is and starts to cry that she just did that to hurt him and wants to remove the skates but he can’t. Golden is hurt by this claim, she didn’t want to injure him but she did it accidently. She removes the skates and tosses them away like they are nothing. In a heart-warming scene she hugs him, tells him that she won’t laugh about him and is sorry for this. This finally calms him down and they continue their conversation. She tries to cheer him up by telling him that he did well for his first attempt but only when she talks about her own failures, he begins to understand her. She did hurt herself with her first attempts but against the advice of her parents, she didn’t give up until she could become better. Then she innocently invites him to be her prince, despite having no idea what this means. Soon both are just playing around and enjoying the time together. Another aspect of Celestia in the shape of three flutterponies is watching over them and with a bit of her interference they have an adventure together, become hippocampi fighting a gigantic squid, pegasi flying in the air and unicorns teleporting around. After playing around for some time, they rejoin the others but their time of innocence is over. Nightmare Whisper was defeated and Fluttershy released the pain and suffering back onto the world, now they can’t hide from their own darkness anymore.

Celestia, still in her Sunny Day disguise, tells everyone that playtime is over. She did enjoy the time she could spend with the mortal ponies but now that is over as well. The Sun Goddess reminds them that the one day without worries did also allow them to recover from Discord’s taint. They all go home and Little Redheart instinctively leads the sick ponies back to the clinic. Celestia regrets to know that once they return to normal, some of them will never leave their beds again. But she finds comfort that they had at least one final day of fun before their suffering continues. The knights return to normal, including the wingless desperate pegasus. Now the shadows are coming to rejoin with the mortals. Celestia is tempted to destroy them before that happens. It would take an incredible amount of power and Luna would have to control sun and moon for several decades before the Sun Goddess would be able to do it herself again. But this loss of power doesn’t frighten Celestia at all, she would do that for her ponies. Then the mortals could choose between staying innocent foals or becoming adults without their weaknesses. It wouldn’t be forced, they could decide themselves and Celestia is an Alicorn, she has every right to do this. But she can’t. She knows that it wouldn’t be the same as if they would overcome their personal demons by themselves. She knows that they couldn’t become stronger for what lies ahead. She knows that all of these personal demons are part of life as well.

Her addiction returns to Berry Punch and very soon the world seems so small to her. Granny Smith is struck down by her own regrets and her movements become slow and painful. Big Mac tries to support Granny Smith as his fear of ostracization makes him wonder if anyone saw him playing with Smartypants. Onyx Tiara suddenly feels his prejudice again and flees in terror of his own happiness of spending time with pegasi, unicorns and his princess and even shifting into the other races. Before Blueblood is reclaimed by his personal demons, Celestia talks to him and reminds him that he is loved and the Sun Goddess could never hate him. She is sorry she was so busy preparing her sister’s healing that she wasn’t there for him when he needed her. Soon his hubris returns to him and his head is spinning with conflicting emotions. In Appleloosa the chief of the bisons and the sheriff of town stop enjoying the love between their children when their intolerance returns to them. Just like many others they also have second thoughts about things they never questioned before and decide that to drown their sorrow in salt water instead. Celestia sees the unborn lives return to their mothers and is overjoyed that those beings didn’t fade. Golden Tiara begs her to spare her, she doesn’t want to become insane again and loose her ability to understand the world. The Sun Goddess keeps her darkness away for the moment and tells her that there is hope for her, she is strong enough to overcome these demons by herself and her family will wait for her. For now the experience might give her husband the strength to eventually overcome his own pain. Again Celestia is tempted to destroy at least this one shadow. But ultimately she believes in Golden Tiara’s strength and that she will become stronger by herself. To comfort her she sings the credits song of the My Little Pony Special. In a heartbreaking scene as the pony starts to fall asleep the Sun Goddess almost breaks down in tears herself but she knows that she is never allowed to show this to others. Finally the mania-obsessed-denial returns to Golden Tiara and Celestia teleports her back into the asylum.

Overall this was a very unique chapter that did show several positive aspects of the world created by Nightmare Whisper. She really loved her foals, every one of them and tried her best to help them. The scene with the wingless pegasus and all ponies just having fun and playing together, beyond all social borders nicely shows why she did call this world a paradise. The Sun Goddess tried to use this chance to allow Prince Blueblood and Golden Tiara some very much needed happiness. Maybe this one day of being free of their own darkness will give them more strength fighting against it. Even Celestia is very tempted to get rid of the personal demons and she would have taken an even more drastic method than Princess Gaia. Instead of sealing them away, she would have obliterated them. She knows of their pain and especially Golden Tiara’s burden. But ultimately she can’t choose the easy way. After watching the world for such a long time and having seen life always finding a way, she just can’t do it. She truly believes in the mortals.

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Persona22 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013
What follows is what was going through my mind when I read this and in no way should be taken as anything more than that:

She felt a foal hug her leg, she looked down and saw Golden Skates hugging her distressed. "I-I don't wanna go." She sobbed.


"I'm sorry dear. There's a filly who loves her mother very much, who is waiting for her mother to heal and overcome her shadows."

Yes she is, and is dying inside every day! You can end all that, right here right now. Do it! Do it! Please!

"But I don't wanna go! Everything isn't confusing anymore. I can see! I can read! I can understand!... I don't want everything to go back to being confusing."

Celstia gently nuzzled her, folding her wings around her, keeping the shadow at bay just for the moment. "Everything won't be confusing forever. I promise you'll get better. I promise you'll find your way through the fog and find your family waiting for you. You'll become a stronger self. And hopefully, being reminded of the good times he had with you will help your prince guide you out of your fog."

Doctors have seen her, her family has been there for her, but she still hasn't gotten any better! Even if they want it more than anything, it's not 'guiding' her anywhere! You can end it all here, all the pain and suffering of an entire family, just use your Alicorn powers! Do it! Come on!

"I don't wanna die." Goldie sniffed rubbing her eyes, begging. 

Celestia eyed the shadow, just a gesture, just a thought, and leave only a foal behind who could enjoy life and eventually become a mare who wouldn't be dragged into the fog and tear apart her family. Sure, destroying all the shadows might not be right, but would anyone care if she destroyed just one? So easy. But Celestia knew it wasn't that simple.

But Celestia, please, she's not getting better, she's not healing! Can't you see!? Please if you have one ounce of love and understanding for what this pony is going through, to what Diamond Tiara goes through, you'll do just this one thing! It is simple, what is there to think about? Please! Just let Diamon Tiara have her mother back. You're Celestia, you CAN do it.

"You're not dying, you're just becoming something new. I promise, what makes you 'you' will never disappear. You're not vanishing, you're growing." 

No, she's not! She's a shadow of her former self! She's not changing or growing! It's a freaking downright spiral, sure, she recognizes Diamond Tiara now, but in a few more years she won't even remember her name, or recognize her as her daughter. Just do it, help her. Even if she stays young, it will do more good to Diamond Tiara to have her mother as a sister than as... this creature wearing her mother's face!

"But I like being with my prince! I like... wanna, wanna see my little princess... I wanna... please..."

"If I could grant that wish I would. I'm so sorry, my little pony. Just rest now. Just listen to my voice, and rest...

My Little Pony, My Little Pony,
Isn't it time we started home?
My Little Pony, My Little Pony,
Who ever dreamed how far we'd roam?
Crickets are calling, evening is falling,
Over the meadow and glen.
My Little Pony, My Little Pony,
When will I see you again? 
"

Celestia's divine voice almost broke, but she knew it would do no good for her subjects to see their princess on the verge of tears.

The sadness you're feeling right now is nothing compared to what Diamond Tiara goes every day Celestia...

Celestia gently telekinetically lifted up the sleeping foal. She unfolded her wings. 

No! Come on! It's your last chance to make it right!

The shadow pounced.

MANIA-OBSESSION-DENIAL 

Celestia lovingly nuzzled the still sleeping mare, and put the gold roller skates in her forehooves, far too small for her, being made for a little filly. Then, without a word, Celestia teleported to Golden Tiara's hospital room, deposited her on the bed, and teleported away.

Damn you Celestia... Damn you, and your knowing all attitude, and your stupid sense of morality of what is right and wrong... damn you to the Sun and the Moon! Poor Diamond Tiara... how could you let this happen to that poor filly! Why didn't you use this chance to make things right! You stupid, useless, sun raising 'Princess'... damn you...
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013
Diamond Tiara was shielded the entire time by Discord. She never got to experience any of that. 
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Persona22 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013
I was talking about Celestia letting Golden Tiara go back into madness.
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ardashir Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012
I still weep when I read that last bit with Celly and poor little Golden Tiara. And now it feels worse to read it, knowing how she regains her sanity, and then what she remembers.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012
After showing how twisted Princess Gaia's methods and goals were, I thought it only fair to show the END RESULTS and leave even more fuel to the fire on who was right and who was wrong.
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gromhellscrea12 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2012
Well, Screwball certainly earned her name. Dislocating your own bones..ouch.

Nice to see Celestia again, though I do wonder what she was doing between the start of the trouble and this point.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012
"Well, Screwball certainly earned her name. Dislocating your own bones..ouch."

Not really ouch for her, she barely even feels it.

"Nice to see Celestia again, though I do wonder what she was doing between the start of the trouble and this point."

Likely figuring what the heck was up! And she has her own reasons for doing what she's done this way.
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Cloudedguardian Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2012
When Celestia sang the Lullaby to Golden, i teared up.
*sniffle*
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2012
I was wondering if that scene was ever going to touch the heart of anypony. THanks. *hugs*
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Guilrel Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012
Grammar Problem:

>"So if grew wheels then that wouldn't be cheating?"
*"So if I grew wheels then that wouldn't be cheating?"
-Missing word.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012
Edited.
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Guilrel Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2012
'Kay. :thumbsup:
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Guilrel Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012
Okay I thought it was that whole Scewball episode that I've read about in TVTropes, but it wasn't it was showing how the changes affected everyone INCLUDING CELESTIA :omg: . I should've remembered that Sunny Day was Celestia, I can't believe she actually fell for it too and "Princess Gaia" would have never known what happened to Celestia and the mane cast would've fallen into her trap forever unless that was her plan all along. :iconjustasplannedplz: So that's how the shadows get back into them, while it was creepy, it's good that everyone is back to their old selves.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012
INCLUDING CELESTIA :omg: .

Nope. She assumed that form of her own will.

Okay I thought it was that whole Scewball episode that I've read about in TVTropes, but it wasn't

It was.

I should've remembered that Sunny Day was Celestia, I can't believe she actually fell for it too and "Princess Gaia" would have never known what happened to Celestia and the mane cast would've fallen into her trap forever unless that was her plan all along.

Celestia never 'fell' for anything. She was keeping the foals out of the way of the mane six saving Fluttershy.

So that's how the shadows get back into them, while it was creepy, it's good that everyone is back to their old selves.

"I'm so happy to have racism and paranoia as a part of me again."

"I'm happy to have addiction and low-self esteem as part of me again."
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Guilrel Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2012
Nope. She assumed that form of her own will.
Celestia never 'fell' for anything. She was keeping the foals out of the way of the mane six saving Fluttershy.
Yeah, I figured that out pretty much later. :shrug: But you did had me going there. ^^;

It was.
Oh.

"I'm so happy to have racism and paranoia as a part of me again."

"I'm happy to have addiction and low-self esteem as part of me again."


1a. "I don't how you did it but you somehow managed to convince me to hate 'professionally.' But seriously, Fine, I won't go out of my way to make people/ponies I hate racially miserable, but I still won't trust them."
"That's fine by me. :D"
":steaming:"
1b. "Once again your paranoia has saved us from yet another stupid death, I don't know how to thank you enough. :D"
"I still don't trust you."
":|... this is why I like him guys."

2a. "Your addiction somehow saved us from being killed by that monster, whether it was you built up a strong tolerance or it really was 'it wasn't good as the real deal,' I appreciate your help."
"Where is it?"
":|"

2b."By finally conquering my low-self esteem, I finally have the strength to save my friends!"
"What, impossible! Your strength can't possibly get that powerful from just doing that."
"Well there's this bond that I have with my friends, but yeah most of it comes conquering that. ^^; "
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DracoDei Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
SPOILER ALERT!!!






My name is Screwball… Well, not really, but that's what everypony here except the nice doctors call me… I wonder why?
-Oh dear... we DO have another villian waiting in the wings, don't we? A full re-release of Discord seems a bit... too much of a cheat. Probably only Nightmare Tiara if that. Somepony might stop her before she gets through. Rarity would come to mind if she wasn't so busy... then again the Everfree isn't her most efficient adventuring location, so she might SOMEHOW get to Diamond Tiara before DT gets to her mother.

except that pony on the other side of the wall of my room, I can't hear her.
-Her reflection? The nearest orderly?

All I want to do is see my prince and little princess again,
-Little Princess visits occasionally now, right? Didn't before Discord? Of course, I may have been confused by the fan art, and Screwball may not be Diamond Tiara's mother. I think she is though. The "Prince and Little Princess" bit sounds right. Anyway, she might not remember DT's visits.

Still, it was so nice of her to bring me that lovely gift!
-Right... is DT's mother.

It's a good thing I decided to climb up here and hang from the ceiling like this! The doctors don't seem to like me doing this, but what do they know?
-I would call that a symptom at worst and thus not something to discourage directly(from my limited knowledge of psychology), and not a very effective form of escape if they have any reasonable number of pegasi on staff. Maybe it is just that they don't like Toon Physics any more than Twilight likes Pinkie Sense? They should accept super-powers as they find them... who knows, she could retain them even after her cure...

this huge white and pink falcon with blue eyes swooped down at the them
-Celista fighting fire with fire (or birds with birds in this case)? Wouldn't call her eyes BLUE though... Fluttershy cleaning up after herself when she talked to her friends?

and they shattered in a flurry of feathers.
-Purely magical constructs rather than transformed birds? Guess the materializing dragons would argue for that, although she could have altered some of the ones in Everkind, then teleported them.

A little sun bird with the falcon's coloring
-Or maybe the falcon was one of the guards.

But I wanted to ask you a question."
-Celly knows how important Diamond Tiara is?

"Would you like to see your prince again? Even if it's for just a little while?"
-Going to teleport her away from where Diamond Tiara is heading? Or just away from Diamond Tiara herself, assuming she is getting close by this time (this is probably a time-skip so it is hard to tell, although the fog could be as slow to fade as the spells on the Sunnyvillians, or the effect could be spreading out from Fluttershy at about the same speed as the fog itself did)? Also, I just realized the importance of the fact that the GOOD healing magic, is, in fact harder than what Gaia was using... explains why they don't use it in hospitals (except when it is the only way to save a life?).

The sun bird gives me a nostalgic look, I wonder why?
-Good way of reminding the reader who this is...

"It's okay! Don't worry about it!" I said, waving her off with my back leg. I know just what to do!
-She can Toon-Teleport? Or is there some secret exit in the ceiling? Kick the window out? Would think the place would be pegasus-proof as a matter of course. Is this the same way she escapes every time?

(I got it loose awhile ago)
-Ok, much more mundane...

little slid door in the door open.
-"slide" I think, or "sliding". Also, I wonder why she needs both her front and back legs to do this? Did she stick her legs through the hole where the plexiglass was? Doesn't she have to go down into the fog to get to this? Did the fog go away(for instance if this is in Canterlot, which I forget, but seems plausible)?

Maybe I should tell the doctors I jammed the lock last time I had my bath.
-So she damaged the lock breaking out to go bathe (in a fountain perhaps...). Or she kicked it when they dragged her off for her weekly cleaning (her room might only have a half-bath?)?

"Hello! You really need to go back inside your room now please."
-This should be an interesting confrontation... good thing that Gaia and the demon in DT's head aren't talking to eachother (and hate eachother's guts anyway... Gaia is stagnation, and Discord is a BIG DUMB MEANIE).

Dang. There goes that trick! I'll have to think of a new escape method, again.
-The swagger, or did he see her open her door?

"Oh?! Really? Okay! If Her Kindnesty says you can go outside! Then it must be okay! Have a nice day!"
-Fortunate coincidence... also, I wonder if she IS in the fog now, but is immune because Gaia knows she can't fix insanity?

Seeing them smile is enough to make me shiver.
-Because they never do? Or they only do when they are going to be especially firm or even nasty?

The ones she gets on the weekends from that nice unicorn don't come close!
-Twilight isn't much for asthetics... or the wings reflect the recipient's mood at the time the spell is cast...

The moment I step hoof outside the house, I realize I had forgotten an important detail about this little adventure.
-The dress, or something crazier? The dress could be interesting once Onyx reverts...

The fog is still outside.
-Ok, so there WASN'T fog in her room?

But the sun seemed to be keeping it away from me.
-Yes, more than you know...

pegasi are so clever
-No...not in this case.

and the sun is so warm, so enveloping… It's like getting a nice hug from mom
-More like getting sheilded from harm hug than social hug, in this case, but yes...

Circles? Why does that ring a bell?…
-Circles in eyes?

How'd they get here?
-She hammer-space summon them, or did Celestia read her mind and teleport them? Or maybe she had them all along and forgot...

And now they fit me again, that's weird… Why wouldn't they fit me? Mom custom ordered them for my birthday!
-Oops! Maybe she got filly-fied! Then again, the sun WAS keeping the fog back so I am not sure if that makes sense.

but these fillies were proving them wrong! He hoped his papa didn't see.
-Well, yes, exercise is necessary to develop potential. Also it seems that "perfect physical health" wasn't part of the package, just "youth".

He landed on his flanks and looked to see a purple filly on gold colored roller skates
-Ok, so she DID get youthened... maybe Celestia did it to disguise her, just as she did to herself?

How was she skating on grass?
-So could she always do stuff like that? Maybe over-using it is what CAUSED the madness, rather than the reverse. Of course, she IS still insane.

"Er, that is-Hey! Saria!"
-Gaia tweaked something? Don't THINK the arguement meant that the Box had been opened.

"Onyx Tiara, huh?" Goldie said smiling, "You always this slow?"
-She forgotten that is her husband, or does she just not connect it because he is a colt, or what? Don't think she has the subtly to fake it, since she doesn't even connect that there is any reason TO fake being anyone other than who she is. Golden Skates was probably her maiden name... maybe Celestia did do some mental tweaking? I dunno... she might be completely under Gaia's general influence, but not specific influence... or Celestia may have gotten rid of the birds ONLY so she could talk and NOT to keep them from affecting Screwball?

"Not bad for your first go! Maybe next time you'll hit the tree so fast it'll get uprooted."
-Yep, still crazy...

After half a minute of futile trying he just broke down and sobbed.
-Thinking the box MAY have been opened.

and undid the straps on the stakes
-skates

I didn't want ya to get hurt. I'm sorry.
-And the lesson he needs to REMEMBER when he gets reverted is coming to him soon...

she was so used to being in control of any situation, not having control and not knowing what to do next really scared her.
-Hyper-organization and losing ability to organize was part of the problem? Or maybe not even hyperorganization so much as independant and powerful personality.

but I didn't want to give up, I just had to remember why I got hurt so I wouldn't do it again.
-This MIGHT figure into the lesson... but I don't know if it really applies... I guess she probably caused him a lot of embarrisment before she was locked away.

Observing this were three small creatures that looked like miniature ponies with butterfly wings and long thread-like antennae.
-Rainicorn saved them?

They were white with pink manes and blue eyes, their wings were the color of pastel rainbows with a sunburst pattern.
-No, Gaia just somehow tapped into the pattern and recreated the species. EDIT: WRONG COLORS! Celestia is making everything better so that Discord will have nothing better to offer Diamond Tiara? Better to have a beloved madwoman for a mother than a sane person who hates and is hated by her husband. Of course, that would mean that Celestia know about discord!DT, and figured out what the bargain was (not too hard in comparison to knowing who to investigate in the first place). Maybe they took a peek in the Pool of Truth.

She dove under the water, her lower half's flukes splashing him the face.
-Not the traditional effect of fairy-dust, but... wonder if they are going to end up as Roaneo and Juliet? Probably not.

An angry squid raised its head,
-Guess Gaia hasn't gotten around to making everything harmless... especially not stuff outside Everkind... she probably knew about the squid as Fluttershy, but maybe not.

The two pegasi foals broke apart and spread their wings.
-Interesting... I guess wonder DOES help whirl-wind romance.

Why had his papa said such mean things about pegasi? It had always been great to be one!
-More memory tweaking than i would have expected from Celestia, but this IS a nice side benefit (to whatever degree he remembers it).

Goldie made a noise of disappointment, then sensed him and teleported too.
-The hippocampi were just warm-up, this is the main point. But... did they just teleport in mid-air, Twilight needs to learn that level of control so cliffs will stop being a problem. Or are they alicorns now? I doubt it...

the unicorn looked this way and that in search of her playmate.
-That answers that...

Their horns touched and sparkled fireworks.
-Nice touch.

-Reviews may take a dip in quality for a while, I was printing out stuff and reading it while eating (laptops and food don't mix for me). I took notes in red pen, but that having to work with the availible white-space etc may limit my words.

Awhile later the two earth ponies came back to the main group
-Space between "A" and "while" perhaps? Also, I note they have now returned "home".

Nothing last forever.'
-Just enjoying it while it lasted, or wasw she under the spell at least a little bit?

I know that it would be nice if it didn't have to end
-Do the mortals have some idea what this really means?

some very much good.
-Almost certainly an error. NOTE AFTER READING FURTHER: Actually it looks like the spell Celestia used on herself DOES affect her grammar, or maybe she affects poor grammar as part of the disguise.

you and all of you are my bestest friends.
-See above note, this is where I figured it out.

Feeling too tired now for the field trip through the Everkind Forest
-Good foresight seems like the were INTENTIONALLY doing very little agains Gaia(knew there was no need?)

special friends
-The patients?

(a price for this form)
-Ah, that explains the vocabulary if it changes her mind, guess at that age she hadn't learned equilibrium? Or she intentionally surpresses it for a more "mortal" feeling?

hospital beds that some would never leave again,
-crippled for life, or terminal? Probably terminal.

She knew Lulu would extract restitution
-Lulu owes her a few hours unless I have forgotten something...

despair from a pegasus whose replacement wings dissolved along with her armor.
-I know she expected to keep THESE wings, but it isn't like she doesn't lose her wings every weekend... (And BTW, was it me who suggested that spell to you originally?)

half-formed shadows of ponies.
-Ah...

tempted to annihilate them out of existence.
-If they are SIN this would actually be... perhaps justifiable (although ultimately a bad idea?) if they are SUFFERING... well, we already went over that. Looking ahead they seem to be a mix of the two.

Let these foals remain foals,
-Huh? Why is letting the sin/suffering back in necessary to give them back their memories(perhaps with a filtered view of them, or perhaps not ALL of them), access to all skills, and their adult bodies?

a shadow dove inside her.
-Guessing this is her alcoholism (and yes I saw the titles below).

Barely out of sight, a shadow wormed its way back inside the agile hyperactive green filly with a pie cutie mark.
-Granny Smith doesn't seem like an addict. Might have overcome it. Which makes these PAST sins.. or the bolded words could apply more to the sentences directly before and after each one such word...

throne
-Good word choice, LATER EDIT: even as just "what he lets rule his life"... wasn't even thinking the first time through about how he puts himself on a throne.

confusing emotions that refused to leave him.
-The start of cognative dissonance... excellent.

She had something very important to do for her sister and everyone, she was preparing for it while you were growing up,
-Interesting point

it was her own fault for not wanting to see the warning signs with her sister when she should've in the first place.
-Good point.

wearing her heavy mantle.
-How symbolic...

Maybe they both just needed to sit down and share a tall glass of whisky with lots and LOTS of salt mixed in…
-Again, sounds good to me... LATER: Luna wasn't lying when when she said that Fluttershy had done some good.

Blueblood nearly had a breakdown finding himself in such a nowhere town like Ponyville, but glad it was within relative trotting distance of Canterlot,
-Rather suspect it might take a while what with people recovering from another mind-warping... also it is interesting that you are shifting back to Blueblood. Maybe you are going to do a second run-through of all the ones you couldn't cover in a short enough time to keep the "everything happening at once" feel of it... EDIT: Also how many places is Celestia in at once? Just one?

Her Parents
-Why caps? Also I approve... EDIT: This is the unfortunate implication you removed, right?

"I'm sorry dear.
-Oh horseapples...

I promise you'll get better.
-Good to know...

I don't wanna die.
-innocence/mind dying?

You're not dying, you're just becoming something new
-True

wanna see my little princess
-Can... maybe every week soon...

"If I could grant that wish I would.
-Or maybe no visits any time soon? EDIT: Probably meant BEFORE she looses her mind again... wonder if Celestia knows that would complete Discord's bargain?

-Which generation is the song from?
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012
except that pony on the other side of the wall of my room, I can't hear her.
-Her reflection? The nearest orderly?

The wingless pegasus in the room over.

All I want to do is see my prince and little princess again,
-Little Princess visits occasionally now, right? Didn't before Discord?

She's STOPPED visiting when she ran away, and she has to do it behind her daddy's back (not that Screwball knows this for her 'home visits.')

It's a good thing I decided to climb up here and hang from the ceiling like this! The doctors don't seem to like me doing this, but what do they know?
-I would call that a symptom at worst and thus not something to discourage directly(from my limited knowledge of psychology), and not a very effective form of escape if they have any reasonable number of pegasi on staff. Maybe it is just that they don't like Toon Physics any more than Twilight likes Pinkie Sense? They should accept super-powers as they find them... who knows, she could retain them even after her cure...

She just has a good grip and her reach is enough for the corners of the walls.


this huge white and pink falcon with blue eyes swooped down at the them
-Celista fighting fire with fire (or birds with birds in this case)?

Yes.

Wouldn't call her eyes BLUE though... Fluttershy cleaning up after herself when she talked to her friends?

No. Blue eyes have to do with her SunnyDay guise.

and they shattered in a flurry of feathers.
-Purely magical constructs rather than transformed birds?

Yes.


A little sun bird with the falcon's coloring
-Or maybe the falcon was one of the guards.

No. It was Celestia too.

But I wanted to ask you a question."
-Celly knows how important Diamond Tiara is?

To Screwball, not how important she is to Discord.

"Would you like to see your prince again? Even if it's for just a little while?"
-Going to teleport her away from where Diamond Tiara is heading?

She said prince, not princess.


The sun bird gives me a nostalgic look, I wonder why?
-Good way of reminding the reader who this is...

Thanks!

little slid door in the door open.
-"slide" I think, or "sliding". Also, I wonder why she needs both her front and back legs to do this? Did she stick her legs through the hole where the plexiglass was? Doesn't she have to go down into the fog to get to this? Did the fog go away(for instance if this is in Canterlot, which I forget, but seems plausible)?

She braced her back hooves against the wall, and used her front hooves to push against the door.

Maybe I should tell the doctors I jammed the lock last time I had my bath.
-So she damaged the lock breaking out to go bathe (in a fountain perhaps...). Or she kicked it when they dragged her off for her weekly cleaning (her room might only have a half-bath?)?

She secretly broke it when she taken for her weekly cleaning.

Dang. There goes that trick! I'll have to think of a new escape method, again.
-The swagger, or did he see her open her door?

Her open the door I think.

Seeing them smile is enough to make me shiver.
-Because they never do? Or they only do when they are going to be especially firm or even nasty?

Up to the readers.


The fog is still outside.
-Ok, so there WASN'T fog in her room?

The fog retreated from the patients rooms remember?


Circles? Why does that ring a bell?…
-Circles in eyes?

And she has insane swirl eyes.

How'd they get here?
-She hammer-space summon them, or did Celestia read her mind and teleport them? Or maybe she had them all along and forgot...

Brought to her as a gift.

And now they fit me again, that's weird… Why wouldn't they fit me? Mom custom ordered them for my birthday!
-Oops! Maybe she got filly-fied! Then again, the sun WAS keeping the fog back so I am not sure if that makes sense.

Celly is having it happen in a controlled way.

but these fillies were proving them wrong! He hoped his papa didn't see.
-Well, yes, exercise is necessary to develop potential. Also it seems that "perfect physical health" wasn't part of the package, just "youth".

Yes. Well, 'perfect health' is debatable, she did remove diseases.

He landed on his flanks and looked to see a purple filly on gold colored roller skates
-Ok, so she DID get youthened... maybe Celestia did it to disguise her, just as she did to herself?

It's all therapy.

How was she skating on grass?
-So could she always do stuff like that?

She's crazy good at least.

And it wasn't the source of her insanity.

"Onyx Tiara, huh?" Goldie said smiling, "You always this slow?"
-She forgotten that is her husband, or does she just not connect it because he is a colt, or what?

Reliving a version of their first meeting.


she was so used to being in control of any situation, not having control and not knowing what to do next really scared her.
-Hyper-organization and losing ability to organize was part of the problem?

Or forcing herself to be.


Observing this were three small creatures that looked like miniature ponies with butterfly wings and long thread-like antennae.
-Rainicorn saved them?

HER NAME IS NOT RAINICORN! IT'S GALAXIA! 'RAINICORN' WAS ANARCHY BEING A JERK BY CALLING HER THAT!!

They were white with pink manes and blue eyes, their wings were the color of pastel rainbows with a sunburst pattern.
-No, Gaia just somehow tapped into the pattern and recreated the species. EDIT: WRONG COLORS! Celestia is making everything better so that Discord will have nothing better to offer Diamond Tiara?

No. She's just giving the couple a time of happiness to remember what they had.


An angry squid raised its head,
-Guess Gaia hasn't gotten around to making everything harmless... especially not stuff outside Everkind... she probably knew about the squid as Fluttershy, but maybe not.

She's not as perfect as she wants to think she is.


Why had his papa said such mean things about pegasi? It had always been great to be one!
-More memory tweaking than i would have expected from Celestia, but this IS a nice side benefit (to whatever degree he remembers it).

He'll remember every detail.

Goldie made a noise of disappointment, then sensed him and teleported too.
-The hippocampi were just warm-up, this is the main point. But... did they just teleport in mid-air, Twilight needs to learn that level of control so cliffs will stop being a problem. Or are they alicorns now? I doubt it...

Not Alicorns.

Their horns touched and sparkled fireworks.
-Nice touch.

Thanks.

-Reviews may take a dip in quality for a while, I was printing out stuff and reading it while eating (laptops and food don't mix for me). I took notes in red pen, but that having to work with the availible white-space etc may limit my words.

I can appreciate that.


Nothing last forever.'
-Just enjoying it while it lasted, or wasw she under the spell at least a little bit?

Enjoying it while it lasted.

I know that it would be nice if it didn't have to end
-Do the mortals have some idea what this really means?

Not most of them.

some very much good.
-Almost certainly an error. NOTE AFTER READING FURTHER: Actually it looks like the spell Celestia used on herself DOES affect her grammar, or maybe she affects poor grammar as part of the disguise.

How can that grammar be fixed?

you and all of you are my bestest friends.
-See above note, this is where I figured it out.

THAT was intentional.

Feeling too tired now for the field trip through the Everkind Forest
-Good foresight seems like the were INTENTIONALLY doing very little agains Gaia(knew there was no need?)

They trusted Twilight and co.

special friends
-The patients?

Yes.

(a price for this form)
-Ah, that explains the vocabulary if it changes her mind, guess at that age she hadn't learned equilibrium? Or she intentionally surpresses it for a more "mortal" feeling?

As a deity she's normally not allowed to feel regret.

hospital beds that some would never leave again,
-crippled for life, or terminal? Probably terminal.

I'll let you decide.

She knew Lulu would extract restitution
-Lulu owes her a few hours unless I have forgotten something...

Luna was insane at the time so that wouldn't be fair.

despair from a pegasus whose replacement wings dissolved along with her armor.
-I know she expected to keep THESE wings, but it isn't like she doesn't lose her wings every weekend... (And BTW, was it me who suggested that spell to you originally?)

Likely it was.


tempted to annihilate them out of existence.
-If they are SIN this would actually be... perhaps justifiable (although ultimately a bad idea?) if they are SUFFERING... well, we already went over that. Looking ahead they seem to be a mix of the two.

They are shadows of the ponies' Egos.

Let these foals remain foals,
-Huh? Why is letting the sin/suffering back in necessary to give them back their memories(perhaps with a filtered view of them, or perhaps not ALL of them), access to all skills, and their adult bodies?

Innocence =/= true adults.

Barely out of sight, a shadow wormed its way back inside the agile hyperactive green filly with a pie cutie mark.
-Granny Smith doesn't seem like an addict. Might have overcome it. Which makes these PAST sins.. or the bolded words could apply more to the sentences directly before and after each one such word...

No, her shadow is REGRET.


wearing her heavy mantle.
-How symbolic...

Thanks.

Maybe they both just needed to sit down and share a tall glass of whisky with lots and LOTS of salt mixed in…
-Again, sounds good to me... LATER: Luna wasn't lying when when she said that Fluttershy had done some good.

YES.


Blueblood nearly had a breakdown finding himself in such a nowhere town like Ponyville, but glad it was within relative trotting distance of Canterlot,
-Rather suspect it might take a while what with people recovering from another mind-warping... also it is interesting that you are shifting back to Blueblood. Maybe you are going to do a second run-through of all the ones you couldn't cover in a short enough time to keep the "everything happening at once" feel of it...

Can cover everything.

EDIT: Also how many places is Celestia in at once? Just one?

She likes to be in one place normally. But her avatar can be Sunny Day depending on the location be somewhere else (the Sunny Day Twilight spend the day with WAS Celestia!!!).



Her Parents
-Why caps? Also I approve... EDIT: This is the unfortunate implication you removed, right?

Can't remember.

I don't wanna die.
-innocence/mind dying?

YES!


"If I could grant that wish I would.
-Or maybe no visits any time soon? EDIT: Probably meant BEFORE she looses her mind again... wonder if Celestia knows that would complete Discord's bargain?

No clue.

-Which generation is the song from?

G1. Original special's theme.
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Professor-Evans Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012  Student General Artist
Oh dear god I'm crying over a story... Noooooooooooooooo!!!!!
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012
Sorry to see Princess Gaia's ideal world go after all?

I was hoping to get some mixed emotions from this part. Considering the readers would naturally be cheering for the heroes to END this ideal world. But once the sense of 'enemy' is already gone, it becomes tragic instead IMHO.
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Professor-Evans Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2012  Student General Artist
The mental patients... Their time of innocence... That ending was so damn POWERFUL and MOVING. How could anyone NOT cry after reading it??????
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012
I hope that the series continues to provide you with laughter and tears.
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Kendell2 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Ah, nice addition, and actually it's kind of cute. I hadn't thought of that, but it's worth mentioning.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Get ready for the REAL hard ball in a new scene in part 4.

Also.

Dude. I need your help.

Badly.

I just re-read Celestia's profile.

She has MAGENTA eyes.

Shouldn't logically then should Sunny Day and her other avatars (the flutter-ponies, the bird of prey and the flock of sun birds, except the one that was Blueblood of course)?

You said you were busy. But when you have the time. Could you go hunting through the Playtime, Pearl Necklace Part 3, and Part 5, and find the places where Celestia's avatars are mentioned? And correct their eye color? The fact they're pink rather than rainbow color has more to do with how in fanon Celestia looked before she grew into a mare.
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Kendell2 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Oh dear...

I can tre, but right now I'm revising a 30 page chapter for my own story.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
I understand. BTW: New scenes at the end of part 4 are up. I'll remove them if enough ask.
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Kendell2 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Reviewed them and sent the revisions to you. Same as always, use what is helpful.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
I saw.
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jawmax Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Glad I could help. Somthing like that did come up in an anime i heard about before and they never really answered the question.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
One comic strip I can no longer find said flat out that if a pregnant woman was regressed it would kill her child. It was also used in a 'add your own chapter' thread on cyoc.net where I was doing my best to deconstruct the AR thing just a tad.

When vampires, zombies, and werewolves show up, the pregnant, the infants, the children, and the elderly (and until recently all women too) spontaneous teleport into another universe. I've always found that cowardly writing. This IS however Equestria, so that sort of thing wouldn't feel right or at least in this instance.

Get ready for a new scene in part 4 to see the REAL results of you pointing this out to me.
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jawmax Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Can't wait.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
New scenes at the end of part 4 are up. I'll remove them if enough ask.
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Saphroneth Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Ah, I see it. The unborn children.

Well, A Wizard Did It solves all ills.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Except if a Wizard Did it. Then what wizard? And why did they do it? And how does the wizard feel about having to do that? Get ready to find out in an added scene to part 4.
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Saphroneth Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Right then.
Good thing that physics will get out of the way if asked hyperactively enough in this universe.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
And now the new scenes at the end of part 4 are added. I'll remove them if enough ask.
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KarrinBlue Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012
I didn't see any more errors, and the ending made me almost cry. Although, I really have NO idea why the Flutterponies and Sea Ponies were there, or why Goldie and Onyx could change specieses...Was it just part of Celestia or Gaia's magic?
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012
The two of them changing species was part of Celestia's magic. The flutter ponies were Celestia in another disguise.
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Richforce Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2011
Like the edits, figured Celestibird woudn't have had no reaction to Screwball dislocating a leg. Also I think it might have been important as to know a little about if she was predjudiced before she lost her mind (something tells me if she was it would have been the inadvertant cause of her madness, like she was warned about a certain danger but she would have snobishly ignored the advice from a non-earth pony).
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2011
"Like the edits, figured Celestibird woudn't have had no reaction to Screwball dislocating a leg."

Thank my beta-reader for that one!

"Also I think it might have been important as to know a little about if she was predjudiced before she lost her mind (something tells me if she was it would have been the inadvertant cause of her madness, like she was warned about a certain danger but she would have snobishly ignored the advice from a non-earth pony)."

*copy and pastes that one to notes*

I'll say this. Prejudice doesn't just feed itself, it feeds OPPOSITE prejudices as well.

Earth Pony, "Unicorns think they're superior to everyone because their magic can be seen."

Unicorn, "Earth ponies think they're the only ones who WORK for what they have because they can't see the work that goes into magic!"
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LongshotLink Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Just wanted to point out, when Blueblood retains his former self he mentions Ponyville is a short distance from Equestria, and I assume you meant Canterlot.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011
Damn. I was sure I got all the bugs and misspelling, me and my pre-reader. Dangit. Thank you for your help.
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LongshotLink Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
No problem, it's kinda what I'm good at, glad to help.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011
Hope the revisions to the STORY here work out too.
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LongshotLink Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
So, got home from work to read the fifth part of this arc, and really liked the revisions (what ones I could recognize). Still an amazing story, and I liked how you brought canon into this. If I'm reading it right, are you implying all of this happened before Spike's birthday or Rarity's visit to Canterlot? Because that's pretty cool, gives a nice timeline for this section. (Would also help explain some of Fluttershy's more assertive moments recently, 'Hello Fluttercruel!')
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011
"So, got home from work to read the fifth part of this arc, and really liked the revisions (what ones I could recognize). "

Sorry I didn't include a list. There were so many.

I also added Mare Do Well to Rainbow Dash's True Healing Plus Chapter.

"Because that's pretty cool, gives a nice timeline for this section."

Thanks.

"(Would also help explain some of Fluttershy's more assertive moments recently, 'Hello Fluttercruel!')"

Which is exactly the point.

I'm keeping this story from being Jossed until the bitter end!

:-)
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LongshotLink Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I can't wait to see more from you.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2011
:-) Keep an eye on me.

Got 359 messages to go through.
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KiraNinja Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2011
Tears. Tears for Tear Water Park. This part made me cry like nothing else oh god. :crying:
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2011
Then it didn't come across as filler or meaningless fluff then? Good.

I've felt people are so fixated on the 'let's make everyone happy where they want to be or not' being inherently wrong, that they don't stop to think about how it would be from the perception of those that WERE in that society.

I REALLY wanted to hammer home these foals were still individuals and not merry little puppets. So their returning to adulthood would MEAN something!

My original script called for Screwball to just hang out on top of the mental ward's tower observing the fog and being the one not effected and all that making her seem all the stranger when she tried to explain it.

Instead, her getting time to spend with her husband came about. And I think it did it's job of showing the two do indeed love each other.

Was Celestia's lullaby to Golden Skates a good choice?
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KiraNinja Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2011
This definitely did not come across as meaningless fluff. This meant something, and it was powerful.Even though Fluttershy's choice was wrong, it wasn't all bad. Each of the foals was an individual and you could tell through it all. Their pain, their personal shadow, each of it added a piece of heart-warming/tear jerker to this arc.

The decision to have Screwball spend time with her husband was a great one - it was sweet and sad and amazing. And Celestia's lullaby was a good choice - I like all the songs you put in their. :)

My only curiosity now is Discord - he's bound to be coming and with how dark his mechanizations were in this series, I can't help but wonder what he'll be like.
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