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My Little Pony
Pinkie Pie POV
Side Story
Prologue
(Optional-Canon)

So you really wanna know? Okay.

I didn't know why I always got all nostalgic when I used my balloons to fly, but it always felt so good. Of course the trio of flutter ponies thought it was a hassle to always have to bring me down, but it was all in good fun.

It also provided me a chance to spot any new faces in Ponyville, I did have a reputation to keep as everyone's best friend of course and that meant knowing everyone in town before I could be friends with them.

Rainbow Dash thought I could use some more glamor in my steps if I wanted to be the town's most popular pony, she said I'd be 'Simply dashing.' But fashion sense was Dashie's special talent, not mine. And I didn't want to be the most good looking, just everyone's best bud. Thankfully, while Rainbow Dash wasn't one to ever hold back her high culture opinions, she wasn't one to impose them.

StarSong's latest performance at Celebration Castle had gone well. It never ceased to amaze me how StarSong could be so in command of an audience on stage, but be so shy around ponies when offstage.

Spike, however, was in the castle wearing his reading glasses, running about reading notes and cards in his own claw writing mumbling to himself, "My word, not right, not right at all, something is definitely wrong here. I know I keep getting my stories mixed up, but these don't make any sense." But the intellectual dragon wouldn't let any pony get a word in edgewise, not even his 'Princess' Wysteria.

Of course I wanted to celebrate.

"How about a party?" I suggested at once on the way back home.

"We had one yesterday." StarSong pointed out causally.

"Yeah isn't it great?"

"How about one of Cheerilee's story-times instead? After that concert, I could use some quiet time."

I wondered. 'Which friends to invite?' At the time, I missed StarSong's implication about 'quiet time.' Didn't matter which friends I invited since they were all great. Maybe Toola-Roola, she did help StarSong with the decorations for the show after all.

"Pinkie Pie, look." The pegasus StarSong whispered shaking me, her friend, out of my planning.

I finally noticed the town around us. Things were very wrong. The world's colors looked muted, desaturated, like someone had put a thin sheet of gray over everything. The ponies themselves were either looking a bit confused about it themselves or trying to ignore it. Some galloped to Celebration Castle to see if the ponies there knew what was going on.

Then I saw Toola-Roola come running like mad towards us. She bumped past two ponies, but they looked around as if they had been shouldered by 'The Invisible Mare.'

The pony looked outright panicked. "GUYS! Can you see me?! You know it's me?!"

"Toola-Roola? Of course we can see you!" StarSong said, confusion plain in her face.

"Thank goodness! I came back from the market with new paints and my house was gone! I tried to ask everyone what happened, but it was like they couldn't hear me! Rainbow Dash bumped right into me! I said 'Sorry Rainbow Dash' and she seemed confused a second before noticing me and asking if we had ever met! And . . . look." She showed us a picture we had all taken of our core seven group of friends. Me, Dashie, Cheerilee and her sister Scooaloo, little Sweetie-Belle, StarSong, and Toola-Roola. Only Toola-Roola wasn't there anymore. "What's happening?! I'm so scared!"

We hugged our friend, not sure what else to do as she looked on the verge of tears.

"Dang! There you are! I've been looking all over for you! I don't get why I was told in particular which ones to deal with." Said a causal somewhat snarky voice hold a trace of attitude. "Ya bunch of soulless identical Mary-Sue Clones."

The three of us looked in shock at the . . . thing before us. It had the body of a furred snake, it had the tail of a rattle snake, it had the head of a horse, and the wings of a dragonfly on one side and a vulture on another, its legs were those of a dingo, fox, coyote, and raven, its eye were green in yellow. It was like a bad dream come to life.

Before any of us could speak he grabbed hold of Toola-Roola's head from behind and said like he had scored a goal at a soccer game, "Character retgon!" Toola-Roola didn't even scream, she just looked at us sadly as she vanished like a magic trick.

StarSong gasped, "What did you do to- . . . to .. . " The Pegasus singer/dancer realized with horror; she couldn't remember the name of her friend who had been standing there a moment ago. She tried to remember what she looked like but it was all coming up blank. A horrible feeling came over her. "What did you do?"

"Meh." The mix of animals shrugged, "We're just cleaning out the closet. Cutting out the dead weight. And now I've got to do more work to erase what Miss Deleted did while I was looking for her! Great, just great! And I was almost done too!"

"Friends aren't dead weight!" I shouted.

"Pst. You're all identical anyway, why so upset?"

"SHE-" StarSong said as she grappled with her memories, biting and kicking away for the precious bits still there, "SHE WAS AN ARTIST! She painted! She has a taste for design none of us have! You can't just call her nothing!"

Finding it horribly, horribly hard to focus on her friend who had been standing there a moment before, StarSong looked around, her sense of wrongness growing, like shadows were moving among them.

Ponies were arguing, okay nothing too special there (you should have seen me and Minty bash heads at the Spring Promenade), but ponies were having different ideas of how to do things and not compromising like we always do! I saw some ponies vanish and their faces and names vanishing from my memories, some were (better? worse?) changed into completely different ponies.

I saw Rainbow Dash trotting confused to the edge of town, maybe she was trying to figure out why she knew she should have known the pony she bumped into earlier? A shadow passed over her, this one, however, took shape; it was a pegasus. It moved about as if blind, moving towards the first warm body it sensed.

It became a transparent image: its mane blue and its hide pink while it's cutie mark was two blue lightning bolts. Then it seemed to overlap Rainbow Dash!

"Dash it all! What is--" Rainbow Dash gasped out in her high-culture accent, looking ill.

Her customize designed scarf and hat vanished, her coloring changed. Then her cutie mark, the definition of her soul became a single cloud and the rainbow arch became a lightning bolt. Her eyes widened as I saw maturity, experience, all her high culture experience and diction drain from her as a pair of pegasus wings sprouted from her back and her entire figure changed, her lady-like voice turning to a rough-and-tumble one.

I felt like I was looking into the eyes of a stranger rather than one of my friends. The (new?) Rainbow Dash flew away in a daze, not knowing what she had been doing there.

I felt a weird form of inverse sickness, I don't know what else to call it, like I the world was changing and I wasn't a part of it anymore.

The dutiful and ever present trio of flutterponies were in a panic as they tried to figure out what was wrong with the much larger ponies.

"Flutterponies!" StarSong yelled at them.

"StarSong?! What's going on?" Zipzee asked as she fluttered her wings.

Starsong blew them a kiss, "Run, stay safe. Get back to Breezy Blossom Way and tell the others there to stay clear of Ponyville!"

"We can't just-"

"Please do it!"

The tiny fairy like ponies looked at each other, finally nodded and fled as fast as their wings could carry them.

The mix-and-matched thing asked like it discussing cake. "What makes you think there's anywhere they can run to?"

StarSong felt anger. I had never seen it before so greatly, but I recognized it all the same. It was confusing. But she held onto it. "I WON'T LET YOU HURT THEM!"

The mix of things scratched his nose, "Meh. Don't get so worked up. They're not my department. You girls sure didn't give us this much hassle when we did a semi-retool last time . . . but just goes to show; some things just can't be fixed, you just need to tear it all down and start from scratch! This entire age of Equestria must be cut out of the story books. I mean, I told those stuffed shirts that they were just making this universe worse with their 'improvements' they handed down. At least this place was interesting before they had to throw in a bunch of political correctness! You were at least a little bit CUTE before! And I thought a well-spoken scholarly Spike was a nice change of pace. Ugh! Of course, who'd listen to one of the Draconequi? Of -course- we'd want to get back to rebuilding something we just finished 'patching' with bad ideas!"

"Who ARE you?" StarSong cried out.

"I'd say that doesn't matter since you won't remember this, but I never get tired of saying it. The name's Anarchy. Got it memorized? Yeah yeah, and I'm in a pecking order by commission, so sue me.

"I'm called a Draconequus, Draconequi for plural. We're called in along with the Alicorns by those in charge to 'fix up' things if a reality has turned hopelessly static and all nearly the souls become generic. Of course my parents never do a thing all day! Ya'd think being the embodiments of primal fear and heat-death that pops-Havoc and ma-Entropy would do more than sit on their tails parroting orders all day. Oh well. Time for you to go."

"No!" StarSong shuddered.

"Oh don't worry girlie, didn't mean you. Ya see, you have a tiny bit of depth that can be explored. That makes you a bit interesting. You got something that can grow and evolve. That means you get to become a somebody, opposed to a nobody destined to fade into the heartless darkness, unversed in your own emotions. You're unique, so you get to stay," He pointed at me. It was like my heart stopped. "But nobody cares about a pony whose always happy and who makes friends with everyone fixated on parties like everyone else every day here. Talk about boring and generic! That's the kind of thing that have got to go!"

I felt a spark of something well up inside me. "We throw parties to GET TO KNOW each other! Each party is based on that pony's heart! And we don't do them every hour of every day! I just like them! We did a lot in a row because a lot of us met in a row! Of course I helped with everyone's else's party so much that I nearly ruined my own until everyone helped and-"

"-and Bye-bye."

StarSong rammed him from below the jaw, making him shut up. "Mah toaung, yoh made me bit mah toaung!" He rattled his head. "Hey you little punk! Watch it! You don't want to make me angry!"

"I won't let you touch her!" StarSong said tears in her eyes.

"What makes you think what can effect anything of what's going to happen next?" He asked almost sternly. Anarchy teleported right behind her right in my face, StarSong however proved just a little bit faster and kicked him in the back of the head making him grunt.

His rattle snake tail lashed at her but she dodged nimbly as only a dancer can.

I couldn't take this anymore! We didn't fight! We comprise. We hug and make up. This is all wrong. I just curled into a ball and whimpered wanting it to end.

"Alright, now you're just getting in my way!" Stated Anarchy angrily as he snapped his fingers and a dozen giant swords fell from the sky, StarSong was past being terrified, past being afraid, everything she knew and loved was dying around her, if she could protect one thing, then nothing else mattered. It was like I was outside my body knowing all this.

She felt one of the swords slice her leg open, it was the most horrible horrible horrible pain she had felt in her entire life, she wanted to break down and cry then, but the adrenaline running through StarSong was keeping the pegasus going.

She rammed him in the gut, knocking the wind out of him. "ENOUGH!" He snapped his fingers, she fell to the ground skinning her belly. She looked behind and saw with horror her wings were gone.

"Now time-out you! Now, back to business! One less generic cookie cutter ponies -delete-." He made a grab at me, I didn't try to run. He'd stop trying to hurt StarSong if I just disappeared.

StarSong screamed and leapt at his face, by sheer reaction he grabbed her, he realized his mistake too late. "AW DAMMIT!"

I finally looked up StarSong looked at me, she began to mouth one final song, but she vanished into nothing before the air could leave her lungs.

"Ah fudge!" Anarchy cursed.

"Bring her back! Take me and bring her back!" I cried desperate trying to hold onto the image, voice, and songs of my friend. I began hammering at his body with my fore hooves blindly.

"I can't dumb horse! She's gone! " For a brief moment, it looked like Anarchy was -scared- of me.

"Anarchy! Stop torturing them! You're here to do a TASK remember? This entire world needs to be revised before the 'improvements' from before cause it to collapse totally! And where's that donkey you call a brother Discord?" Boomed a stern but young(ish) female voice.

It was a horned pegasus/winged unicorn, she was a lot larger than any other pony I had seen. Her cutie mark was a spiral galaxy. Her horn was longer than any pony's I've seen. Her coat a mix of silver and black. Her mane sparkled white.

I didn't even try to comprehend this new being's appearance, the unifying happiness of my world gone, they had ruined it, I had nothing.

"Meh, I saw him making some blue flower or another, or turning those butterfly ponies into fast multiplying bugs, I forget which. Let him do his thing."

"'His thing' tends to cause more damage than good! And I don't remember him having orders to do anything to the Flutterponies!"

"Pst. You didn't, maybe he did. Ya can't pick your family Your Starriness or whatever yer title is. Or I'd have put myself up for adoption by now. At least it's six relatives and not an organization of nobodies."

"Did you return the ponies to the source as you were supposed to? We don't have time for your slacking with this entire world's fate at stake."

"That eager to know that a couple of the Perfect Ponies went bye-bye?"

"I am eager to have this horrid business over with!"

"Yeah, yeah I did." Anarchy lied perfectly. "And now it's getting hard to even remember their names now isn't it? Surprise?"

I asked meekly, "Whose Surprise? Wait, how'd I know you meant a pony named Surprise?"

The horned pegasus/winged unicorn one pointed at me. "What about her? Pinkie Pie? Your orders were to make them all unique individuals."

"She's the last one. That makes her unique now. I'm finished with the ponies, you can start on the setting."

I had never cried before, but now my eyes were gushing rivers. "Please! Change them back! Change them all back! PEASE! What did we ever do to you?"

The flying unicorn/horned pegasus looked me in the eyes, it was like I was looking at every star in the sky, I felt so small as she lowered her head. "I'm so sorry my little pony. You've done nothing to deserve this, but what's done can't be undone. If there was another way to stop entropy, we would have already done it. We can't simply 'undo' the misguided 'improvements', too much damage has already been done."

"Preaching to the chorus 'lady rainicorn', if there was an easier way to fix this whole mess, I'd be the first one to suggest it," grumbled Anarchy, looking rather annoyed. "A total retool is just way too much work for my tastes."

I could tell from the mean way he said it that that wasn't her real name or species.

The horned pegasus gave a look to Anarchy before returning her gaze to my eyes, a somewhat compassionate look in her eyes. "I am afraid what we're doing now is kind compared to what happens if we do nothing. There's nothing else that can be done. The only thing I can do for you is have it so that you won't remember this life."

"NO! I don't want to forget them! They're my friends!" I screamed.

The flying unicorn/horned pegasus startled in full surprise at me. She then lowered her head to look back into my eyes, a serious look on her face. "… Listen closely to what I am about to say… Your world will never be the same and some of your friends will no longer be with you, and those that do will be different than you knew them. But I promise you parts of them will live on, as they always do…"

"I… I don't understand…" I replied, confusion clear in my eyes along with the tears.

Anarchy grunted at me annoyed as I prepared to say something else and grasped my head in a dingo's paw. He lifted me off the ground. "On second thought. Maybe a depressing childhood to balance out all that cheerfulness."

I realized what that meant. "NO! Please! Leave my mother alo-" And I felt my inner self torn asunder.

I felt new memories flooding into me. A new truth. A new reality. But I remembered the old ones too. I still do. Though I don't know how much I remember is true anymore and how much is just me trying to fill in the blanks. And I held onto the image of StarSong trying to sing her last melody.

Goodbye~
Funny how that's such a hard thing to say

Now it's time to let go but
Never thought I'd feel this way

Promise not to be sad but
We both knew I'd be lyin'.
Gotta fight back the tears, cuz
Can't let you see me cryin'.
You're more than just my best friend!

What makes me misty most of all
In my final curtain call
Is knowing that I won't see you
Aga
Optional-canon. Decide if this side story is Canon or not of your own freedom of will. Repeat, this part is canon or not of your own free will. You may also consider the idea of this being 'optional-canon' optional and accept it as a stand alone story or not a part of the POV series in any shape or form. Or Optional-optional optional-canon if that makes you feel better and not part of my writing at all.

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Pinkie Pie sure breaks the forth wall a lot, just why IS Pinkie 'just being Pinkie Pie?'

This is from the imploring of my pre-reader who thinks I should have made this a stand alone story or posted this AFTER the series was complete and have this as a mini-prequel or post it after the Princess Gaia arch was done.

And for those of you wondering, Anarchy's voice actor would be Quinton Flynn. Cupcakes for those who figure out the joke.

"Misty's Good-Bye" Copyright Nintendo.

Discorded Ponies POVs:
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Healing Ponies POVs:
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Our Tropes Page:
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BEHOLD: A dramatic reading of how this entire series started! [link]


Fanart of Mimic's iconic moment before her death. By the one and only Firedrake.
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YET ANOTHER tribute fanfiction has been written! CHECK IT OUT! This one takes a rather unique POV on the subject of Discording.
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And a reharmonization you wouldn't expect! [link]



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EDIT: Thank you to [link] Kendell2, and [link] Twilight Gamer 92! Who did a TON of edits for this one.

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EDIT: Edited by Dracodei. I also corrected some details that contradicted elements in Celestia's story later. [link]

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Let us take a short break from Princess Gaia and take a look into Pinkie Pie’s past. Once she enjoyed to use balloons to fly but couldn’t quite understand why this felt so natural. Maybe she felt the memories of another past life. Back then she already tried to be best friends with everyone. In this long forgotten life the pink pony was very similar to her present character. The others however were completely different. Rainbow Dash was the master of fashion sense and tried to make everyone as good looking as possible, while she was still able to accept the others as they were. Spike was a somewhat scatterbrained scholar that sensed that something was wrong. Cheerilee was a story-teller instead of a teacher. There were others like the songstress StarSong or Toola-Roola. But suddenly the entire world around them started to fall apart, colors vanished and the ponies had no idea what was going on. Toola-Roola was absolutely horrified that almost nobody was able to recognize her, her house was gone and her image started to disappear from photos. Then one of the beings responsible for this found her. It was a Draconequus but a very different one from Discord. Without hesitation he erased Toola-Roola and now her friends weren’t even able to remember her name. He didn’t care the slightest about what he did, since to him all of them were just identical anyway. As StarSong tried to explain how her artistic abilities made Toola-Roola unique, the world around them continued to change. Some ponies vanished, while other became something completely different. Rainbow Dash encountered a shadow of Firefly and both merged and formed the current Rainbow Dash. Everything about her changed: Her clothes, her color, her race, her character, her voice and even her Cutie Mark, the symbol of her soul. Some Flutterponies arrive but StarSong sends them immediately away as this place isn’t safe anymore. The Draconequus quickly points out that there is no safe place left.

Pinkie Pie did never in her happy life see so much anger in a pony as she saw right now in StarSong. But the being wasn’t after the Flutterponies as someone else was already responsible for them. And the other Draconequus is a lot worse then this one. Then he revealed that this is not the first time they have done this, but the last time they just changed a few things and ultimatively made it worse. He genuinely liked some aspects of the earlier version like the look of the ponies or Spike’s more mature personality. Finally he revealed (in a matter very similar to Axel from Kingdom Hearts) his name: Anarchy. Together with the Alicorns the Draconequi have to purge this world before all souls become generic and reality collapses into itself. He also complained that the parents of the Draconequi, Havoc and Entropy, did nothing and left the entire work to their children. StarSong would have a place in the new generation, as she did have at least some character, but Pinkie Pie on the other hand will not see the new generation, since she was judged as boring and generic and now it was her time to fade together with the world around her. Who did pass these sentences? Who thought he could decide who can live and who has to die? Pinkie Pie tried to defend her parties and show that they are there to meet new friends but it was too late. But without any combat experience StarSong fought against the Draconequus and tried everything in her power to defend her friend. But this kind of brutal conflict was too much for the partying pony, who never had any experience with a real confrontation. Even an injury didn’t stop the determined StarSong but Anarchy just took her wings away and prepared to delete Pinkie Pie anyway. But StarSong sacrificed herself instead and he accidently erased the songstress. In a heartbreaking scene the pink pony immediately asked to disappear in her place but the Draconequus couldn’t reverse the process. Her friend was truly gone.

Then one of the Alicorns arrived. She reminded him that they need to hurry before reality collapsed around them. They talked briefly about Discord, who spent his time here creating Poison Joke and turning Flutterponies into Parasprites. Nobody ordered Discord to do this, he merely did it for his own fun and even Anarchy wished that he had a different family. The entire thing was much worse for the Alicorn then for him; she truly hated to do this, while he didn’t really seem to care and was more annoyed about how much effort this entire event took. When the Draconequus talked about a pony that wasn’t even present here (Surprise) Pinkie Pie recognized the name form somewhere. And maybe to hide his own mistake Anarchy declared Pinkie Pie as the last surviving pony of her kind unique and therefore worthy to live in the new generation. The Alicorn tried to explain to Pinkie Pie that it would be much worse if they did nothing and then there wouldn’t even be a new generation to come after this one. The only thing she could offer the pink pony was to remove her memories about this life. But to her surprise Pinkie Pie didn’t want to forget her friends, even if they didn’t exist anymore. The Alicorn then promised that parts of her friends will live on in the new generation. But the Draconequus decided to give her a depressing childhood to balance out her happiness. And as new memories enter her mind she remembered StarSong’s final, sad and incomplete song.

Now this was a truly depressing way for an entire generation to vanish. And this is still nothing compared to what we later see about the rest of this cosmic retgon. While most other chapters did end on a happy or at least hopeful note, this ending is absolutely crushing. After seeing this, Pinkie Pie’s reaction to the puppet recreation of her world and her friends is completely understandable. Anarchy is an interesting character that does show that not all Draconequi are as unredeemable evil as Discord is. He isn’t evil but appears to be amoral and not really caring about what he is doing to others but despite this he still has some standards and borders that Discord clearly not has. And this is not the last time that horrible things are done for good reasons. Now it is time to continue with Princess Gaia.

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This is vaguely sick.
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:iconalexwarlorn:
Given how much hate a lot of people put on the G3 verse . . . this metaphorically speaking, meant to be a 'are you happy now?' At previous gen-haters.
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"Got it memorized?" An "organization of nobodies?" Kingdom Hearts much?

Also, how is it that this part is optional canon, but the rest of Generation Transitions is definitely canon?

I actually haven't gotten to the Princess Gaia arc yet. This one was actually listed in between "Second family" and "Steed and Alicorn" in the folder, so I ended up reading this first.
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""Got it memorized?" An "organization of nobodies?" Kingdom Hearts much?"

Yes.

"Also, how is it that this part is optional canon, but the rest of Generation Transitions is definitely canon?"

Plans change and I can never keep anything small.

"I actually haven't gotten to the Princess Gaia arc yet. This one was actually listed in between "Second family" and "Steed and Alicorn" in the folder, so I ended up reading this first."

Interesting.
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Skipped this the first time because it was 'optional cannon'. While it was certainly an interesting reason for Pinkie to be capable of breaking the fourth wall, I kind of prefer my Deadpool-syndrome idea.

Might have cared more if I knew the characters that were disapearing or being altered for longer than one chapter. Only thing that stuck with me when I looked at Gen 3 was pain.
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Wait till you read HAPPY CAKE ADVENTURE and Generation Transitions. See if it touches your soul then.
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DracoDei Mar 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
As for whether to include this in the main sequence... I dunno. It probably depends on how much the reader knows about G3.X?
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Added them in to the main list.
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DracoDei Mar 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
But you should definitely have a clear link to the chapter of the main story that this is most relevant to... or maybe the chapter after that so people who take the detour can find the main highway again?
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DracoDei Mar 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
SPOILER ALERT!!!




but poines were having different ideas of how to do things and not compromising like we always do!
-ponies

some were (Better? Worse?) changed into completely different ponies.
-Parenthetical is good, consider removing capitalization, but keeping it could be work too.

A shadow passed over her,
-Literal or still a metaphorical shadow?

It became a transparent image: its mane blue and its hide pink while it's cutie mark was two blue lightning bolts.
-The ghost (or probably more like the CONCEPT) of Firefly?

and diction drain from her
-Good eyes if she can see speaking styles. Maybe have some screaming with a smooth (or abrupt if you have to) change of how you write it. Still not sure if this is reality returning in Gaia's village, and Discord is symbolic rather than actual, or (more probably) this is just Pinkie Pie remembering the transition.

like I the world was changing and I wasn't a part of it anymore.
-She managed to eject from reality using her meta-awareness, thus avoiding some/all of the memory-wipe?

and her entire figure changed.
-Art style change?

"Run, stay safe. Get to Breezy Blossom. Tell the others to stay clear of Ponyville!"
-Good... but who is Breezy Blossom? Also, I don't think that will be far enough unless that part of reality gets separated off instead of deleted. Too bad they don't have the Utter Flutter in this version.

"Please do it!"
-She know something, or just basing this on what she has seen in the past few minutes (which is plenty).

"What makes you think there's anywhere they can run to?"
-As I said...

I had never seen it before so greatly, but I recognized it all the same.
-Is it the magical change, or just the situational motivation that is giving her this strength? This might do something. Loyalty is one of the Elements, power of Love, etc etc.

a semi-retool last time
-Well, since this is the transition to G3, this would probably be referring to the G3->G3.5 transition.

You were at least a little bit CUTE before!
-And G3.5 was fugly? Or was that just the newborn cuties?

Yeah yeah, and I'm in a pecking order by commission, so sue me.
-Well, that explains who he is, and who he is working for. Of course, more detailed information might be coming later.

Ya think being the embodiments of mass destruction and heat-death that pops-Havoc and ma-Entropy would do more than sit on their tails parroting orders all day.
-"Ya'd" perhaps.

opposed to a nobody destine to fade into the heartless darkness,
-destined

That's the kind of thing that have got to go!"
-Oh, a little chronic depression, and being the ONLY Pony left with that as their primary motivation... and actually being the one THROWING most of the parties, rather than just ATTENDING... if that was actually true.

Each party is based on that pony's heart!
-Same thing that makes Rarity better than most real world fashion designers.

Of course I helped with everyone's else's party so much that I nearly ruined my own until everyone helped and-
-Was this an actual episode plot?

I couldn't take this anymore! We didn't fight! I just curled into a ball and whimpered wanting it to end.
-The third sentence was not the outcome I expected from the first of these three.

stated Anarchy angrily
-You have an extra space.

It was like I was outside my body knowing all this.
-Meta-awareness as a stress-induced super-power activation.

She felt one sliced her leg open,
-"sliced" is wrong, and you might want "She felt one of the swords slice her leg open,".

it was the most horrible horrible horrible pain she had felt in her entire life,
-triple "horrible" emphasize the "The sugarbowl has just been poured into the frying pan".

but the adrenaline running through her was keeping her going.
-I assumed this was StarSong, but it COULD be Pinkie Pie, since she can read StarSong's mind sorta.

He snapped his finger,
-"fingers"

He'd stop trying to hurt StarSong if I just disappeared.
-Awfully noble for a character with no depth. ;) Then again Anarchy isn't exactly interested in being diligent about his background work.

StarSong screamed and leap at his face,
-leapt

he realized his mistake too late.
-She can wink? Or he let her get close enough to kick? Seems like letting go would fix that pretty well... or is she going go get her wings back? Probably not since Anarchy isn't holding them.

but she vanished into nothing before the air could leave her lungs.
-So she took him with her when she vanished? I thought of that, but I didn't think he was deleting her...

"Bring her back! Take me and bring her back!"
-Oh, so he was just annoyed because his hands were set to "delete" and he got one he didn't want.

For a brief moment, it looked like Anarchy was -scared- of me.
-Physical force, or power of Love? If the first, he must not have Discord's level of defenses.

This entire world needs to be revised before the 'improvements' from before cause it to collapse totally!
-Celestia(I saw the description of the voice before I wrote this comment)? She is harder than she is in the show, but I guess we knew that the Alicorns were in on the process... I would have expected her to give them some explanation, some reason why their death's are necessary. Then again, perhaps she figures ignorance is bliss. Not EVIL in any case, just... hard.

And where's that donkey you call a brother Discord?
-Ok, that makes sense, the only question was the exact nature of the relationship. Also provides sufficient explanation for why he says she is "so grim" in the hall with the giant stained glass windows. There could, of course, be other reasons.

Her cutie mark was a spiral galaxy.
-Ok, so Celestia and Luna's mother probably.

Her horn had a crown of tiny smaller horns around it.
-So the same character as in The Real Story by Nimaru?

I saw him making some blue flower or another, or turning those blutterfly ponies into fast multiplying bugs,
-"butterfly" I think, and both of these fit him, although the second actually managed to find an ecological balance in the end apparently... although it may be that creating the few species to balance them was easier for the Alicorns than deleting the species (or maybe enough of the minds of the Flutterponies remained that it would be murder...).

Or I'd have put myself up for adoption by now.
-At first I thought that was a positive thing, but they I realized that OF COURSE they wouldn't get along, they are non-cooperation incarnate... of course they might still choose eachother over a paragon of Order.

At least it's six relatives and not an organization of nobodies.
-So the Alicorns don't have family relationships? Interesting.

Did you return those two ponies to the source like you were supposed to?
-Was he only supposed to do two? Or is "return to source" not the same as "delete"? Is it the difference between soul-death and later reincarnation?

She's the last one. That makes her unique now.
-My point exactly.

lady rainicorn,
-Ah, is this the one from Adventure Time or something? Or is raincorn a species? If it is a personal name and title i think both should be capitalized (and definitely "rainicorn").

"NO! I don't want to forget them! They're my friends!"
-She gets this... halfway. Maybe raincorn gives her this, or maybe she beats it out of her by shear will... maybe rainicorn goes so far as to not take more than she already took... of course, the fact that Pinkie Pie remembers stuff from BEFORE G3 (I think?) would indicate she gives her more than what she is asking for. Perhaps everything is taken, but then the meta-awareness is given as a gift (or reward for standing up to Anarchy when Rainicorn finds out what REALLY happened)? Also, I wonder if the "going away" from before on Surprise's part was a psychological thing, rather than a metaphysical thing.

The flying unicorn/horned pegasus startled in full surprise at me.
-Showing a bit of personality that was unexpected?

She then lowered her head to look back into my eyes, a serious look on her face.
-Sizing up the soul she has displayed? Or could be noticing that she was one of the ones who was supposed to be deleted.

Your world will never be the same and some of your friends will no longer be with you, and those that do will be different than you knew them. But I promise you parts of them will live on, as they always do…
-Guessing the next line will be "So are you SURE you want to remember?" Also it occurs to me that turning the identical characters to stone (heh... if she is Celestia's mother that could be the source of that particular dig at her), and letting them be released every few years would dilute the problem, while avoiding murder. Of course if the problem is like toxic waste and would spread from them even in statue form, or there are only so many they can arrange to have survive the massive upheaval of remaking the universe...

Maybe a depressing childhood to balance out all that cheerfulness."
I realized what that meant. "NO! Please! Leave my mother alo-"
-She thinks that means he is going to delete her mother? He apparently didn't, just made her really boring.

I felt new memories flooding into me. A new truth. A new reality. But I remembered the old ones too. I still do.
-Reminds me of something that someone by the nick of "Orthodox_Gozerite" came up with in a discussion of "A Friend in Deed", which you almost certainly read. <a href="forum.rpg.net/showthread.php?615140-WiW-My-Little-Pony-FiM-3-Another-Day-Another-Dungeon/page7&p=15066712#post15066712> She is Pinkie Pie. She took a good long look into the Abyss, smiled, and said "Come and have a go if you think you are hard enough.". Also is Lady Rainicorn a letter scramble of something? Nah, probably not.

-The song proves she was creative enough, and deep enough to have earned the survival she was owed. Also, I wonder if Anarchy was lying about the numbers he deleted or if he was actually sparing Suprise's life (if only to cover the fact that he was behind schedule)?
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