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I've always been a follower not a leader. I would always just follow along, doing what I was told. Mom said find a nice stallion to be the trophy wife of before your beauty faded. Dad said be a prim and proper lady. Don't be friends with the hired help mom says. Just pretend to agree when Mr. Rich/Tiara talks about how only Earth Ponies earn what they have dad says.

Diamond Tiara said laugh at the fillies who didn't have cutie marks. I just did what I was told. It was a simple and easy way to live.

I never thought about how big my bed felt, until I suddenly didn't have anypony to sleep over with. I never thought about how shallow my dreams were, until they were all I had.

I never thought about how big my house was before, or how empty.

I never thought about any of it, until it all came crashing down. Strange how that works out, isn't it?

School field trip to Canterlot Gardens. Blank flanks arguing in front of ugly statue. Moving on. Back in Ponyville. Special hoofshake with Diamond Tiara. Heading home. To very weird weather. What are those pegasi doing-?! Can't they do their one job right-?!

Then the Alicorns go crazy and start raising and setting the sun and moon like they were fighting over a doll.

Then the ground turns into a checkerboard. Then houses start floating.

My mother's pet bird starts breathing fire and had a neck as long as a giraffe's.

Outside ponies go crazy, turn into monsters, or both.

I saw Diamond Tiara's mom flying in the sky.

I heard my mother screaming. I found her in our private beauty parlor. Or I thought it might be her. She had the body of a filly and wrinkled face like Great-Granny Silver had had. She was crying. She was putting on so much make-up it reminded me of a clown. But I could still see the wrinkles plain as day. Her tears made it into one big ugly mess.

She finally eyed me, she hid behind the parasol she always has, now twice as big as her. "Don't look at me!" She screamed.

That was when father kicked in the door. Holding the spoon shaped battle axe our family had owned since before Equestria was founded. "HA-HA! I HAVE FOUND MY TROPHY AT LAST! YOUR HEAD WILL LOOK GREAT ON MY WALL MY LITTLE SPOON!" He shouted like we were going to the carnival.

I shivered. Suddenly, I was looking out FROM my glasses, instead of through them. Confused and thinking my father was just being funny I rubbed my eyes. My eyes were gone! It was then it hit me; when I took off my glasses that my view had changed with them. I noticed in one of the parlor's giant mirrors (mom always did focus on appearance)... My eyes were on my glasses. My eyeballs were on my glasses! I took a step back. It hurt.

I looked myself over. My hide was now shimmering silver, but it was soft like tin foil. I poked it, and I pierced my skin.

In the reflective surface, I saw my father bring the axe up over my head. And it finally hit me that dad wasn't playing a game.

I ducked and ran, as the axe cut into the fancy polished marble floor. Mom just continued to shiver on the floor in disgust at herself. I ran out of the room. Father followed. "Come now my little Spoon! Just stay still and it'll be over quick! Honey is always saying how you need to preserve your looks! Well, as my trophy head, you'll always be pretty! Now just stay still so I can get your little head to the taxidermist!"

Tears came down from my glasses. I bled and left a trail as my thin silver skin broke as I tumbled over an imported couch. I thought if I made myself small enough he couldn't find me. "Come here dearie! Let papa make you a nice, pretty trophy! You'll look great on the wall! And you'll never need to worry about losing your looks like honey has! And think of all the weight you'll lose! Now just stand still for papa!"

Father cut the couch in two. I screamed looking into his grinning muzzle. "Now now! See all the trouble you're causing? I might have to clean the blood off your head before it's fit to be mounted! Now obey your father!"

We ran through the house like on a fox hunt. Father cheering and calling out to me as my heart tried to bust through my rib cage. I hid in a closet. He just smashed through it. I ran between his legs. I hid under my bed. I lost a good deal of my tail as I scurried out like a rat as the axe came down through my mattress.

I jumped off the indoor balcony that surrounded the first floor living room. I landed with a cracking skid. The silver skin on my belly nearly slid off. I tried to run as father took the stairs. I was stabbed by my own bones when I tried to put weight on two of my hooves. I was going to die. And I didn't even know why.

"Very good girl. Now stay still this time. Like the good little filly I know you are."

The wall of rainbow light hit everything. Father dropped the axe to the floor with a loud clank. He wanted to kill me with his bare hooves? His eyes looked on me with horror. I was looking out my face again. My skin wasn't paper thin foil. "Dust Mop! Clean Dishes! Somepony! Call a doctor!"

I was really leaving a big red stain on our ancestral family rug.

Clean Dishes as it turned out knew first aid. Apparently her name had been Clean Bandages before her scholarship ran dry. Guess that wasn't a wash rag on her flank after all. Who knew?

Apparently I wasn't the only hurt pony in Ponyville. Nurse Redheart and Tenderheart and the local Doctor were scrambling like crazy and doctors from outside of... whatever had happened, were being brought in by Pegasi and unicorn teleportation as fast as they could bring them. No pony would tell me what had happened. Maybe they didn't even know themselves.

When mother came in an hour later, now her normal self she saw me, screamed and fainted. When she came to, she stood up so fast that she bumped heads with Clean Dishes. "Where's my baby?! She is alright-?! Oh Celestia! Is she going to be okay?! Are these going to scar?! Will she walk again?! Why isn't anyone telling me anything?!"

Finally, the medical ponies came. Dad used words I never heard him use before when he snarled at them for being as late as they were. They looked exhausted and dirty when they came in. One was a medical unicorn with that red cross all medical ponies seem to have some version of as their cutie mark.

Skin mended, bones reconnected. He was apparently the best. Father kept yelling at him with words I didn't know the meaning of but I think he wanted him to work faster.

Clean Dishes took care of me for the next day.

I didn't have a single scar you could see.

Then, the next day, father came in, I screamed. I tried to jump out the window. Instead I got a face full of carpet and stuffed dolls and hooves tangled with blankets.

I curled into a ball and tried to make myself as small as possible. He hugged me, he kept whispering apologies. I tried to make myself smaller.

He left eventually. When he came next I just tried to hide.

Then came the time to get up and go to school again. I shrank before my glasses. The first day I wore contacts that made my eyes red, it was unbearable. I tried to go with neither. Falling down the stairs twice cured me of that fear.

I spent as much time as possible at Diamond Tiara's, school, anywhere as long as it wasn't home. Anywhere so long as I didn't have to be with father. I spent all of Nightmare Night at her house.

For a while, I was able to keep up appearances. But Diamond Tiara seemed too distracted for us to taunt the blanks as normal. Or at least when that white unicorn blank was around. Don't ask me what that was about, Diamond Tiara wouldn't tell me. She wouldn't tell me what that chaos monster had done to her either. That hayseed blank Apple bloom finally got her cutie mark, and spent all day showing it off at school. Diamond was actually angry, then again, the little blank did rub it in.

Then she went and got a -second- cutie mark? We knew this had to be bogus and called her out on her -second- special talent. But Applebloom pulled it off anyway. We looked like fools, again.

Then it turned out she had contracted some crazy ancient disease that made cutie marks appear all over her and act on them whether she wanted to or not. Princess Celestia's student or that zebra found the cure before she worked herself to death.

I thought Diamond was going to jump on the chance for revenge on the fraud. But again, she was being so distracted by nothing! She didn't do a thing! Even when we chatted between just the two of us it was like she was somewhere else!

Then came family appreciation day, and DT told me her newest plan to break the arrogant little blank by showing off her completely loopy grandmother to everyone at school! It was a brilliant and flawless plan, I knew Diamond Tiara was best pony.

This blew up in her face like Miss Pie's prototype Party Cannon MK II.

Turned out Granny Smith was the coolest pony around! She had single-hoofedly found the fruit that became her family business' staple, and had put their tiny farm on the map and had even brought Diamond's family income. And that was what caused Ponyville to exist in the first place and Diamond Tiara's family to make their fortune. It was so cool! It was incredible! The little blank had a history with Diamond Tiara's family that went back generations! The two were connected by fate! Maybe they weren't so lame after all! How couldn't I clap at that?

DT was livid. After she blew up in front of the class her dad figured she needed a lesson in humility.

Silver and diamonds look good together, Mrs. Golden Tiara had always said. But after that day ...  everything changed. I just didn't know it yet.

After Diamond Tiara's 'lesson' she ignored the Cutie Mark Seekers or whatever completely, like they were ghosts, or maybe she was a ghost. I saw her actually turn in a test to Miss Cheerilee totally blank! Diamond Tiara might be a lot of things, but she wasn't one to do something like that...

I asked her what was wrong. She told me to be quiet, and I obeyed. Diamond Tiara had always loved her dad, I could tell. Even after the day everything went crazy, she hadn't changed how she'd thought about him at all. Me? I barely knew the stallion who fathered me. But with DT and her dad it was different.

Now it was the day of the monsters all over again. It was like Diamond had taken all the viciousness she had poured at Applebloom and her friends, and had redirected it full throttle at her father. It was actually kind of scary.

She had gone from seeing him as her world, to not being able to standing the sight of him! This wasn't like me and that stallion! Had the world gone crazy again? Now I did insist on knowing what was going on and didn't let up (like I thought friends were supposed to). Big mistake.

I had never been on the receiving end of Diamond Tiara's talent to rip ponies apart with just words; it was like the sound of her voice tore my ribcage apart and clawed my heart to shreds.

It's one thing to KNOW she's a bully and have her do it to you, it's completely different when you think you're friends!

I didn't want to believe anything she said was true, I didn't want to think she meant anything she said to me. You have no idea how horrible it was seeing that fury in her eyes, it was like she, or I was a stranger!

Diamond, had hurting Applebloom really become that important to you? Why? You said they were nothing. Blanks. Why should it matter if Applebloom is proud of her family or not?

Why, why did you turn on me? I've always been there for you. Even when nobody else wanted to be. I knew you were pretty inside. I stood by you no matter how much things backfired, even if I was humiliated right along with you. I didn't care if you were popular or not. Or that's what I kept telling myself.

And I suddenly found myself with nowhere to go.

Then the worst hit me, I was all alone.

Cheerilee kept asking why I was staying after school so much. I said I was just trying to study some extra, after all, I wear glasses, that must mean I'm supposed to study a lot right?

Cheerilee didn't believe me. I'm not as good a liar as Diamond.

I didn't want to be near the stallion who nearly cut my head off. And I didn't want to be near the princess who had torn my heart out. I had nowhere to go...  No matter how much money my family had, I had nothing...

Then Applebloom and her friends thought it would be funny to be in my face! Jerk! What made a trio of talentless, blind, disaster prone blanks think they were better than me-?!

Cheerilee said if I ever needed an adult to talk to, I could talk to her. But how could she understand?

Then that orange pony, Applejack I think it was, spoke to me out of the blue. She assured me she was no kidnapper. She told me not to mistake my name for my destiny. That Cheerilee's name and cutie mark didn't imply she was a teacher but she was one all the same. And she asked, if I really thought my father would hurt me. And she told me that if I didn't even know the answer, it was time I got to know my father.

Easier said than done.

And those three fillies never stopped making sure I came to class, and they never stopped asking me what was wrong. Couldn't they tell-?! Weren't they laughing at it behind my back? To go from being best friends with the greatest filly on the planet to being all alone?

Gabby Gums. Those three hypocrites. All the times they looked down on me for helping Diamond Tiara tease ponies they go and do the same. Then they abandon her too. And Diamond didn't even demand I take over her 'job' as school printer? How could she forget me?

The last day I saw her was Hearts and Hooves day, I don't know why I smiled when I saw Alula given her that card. She had just looked so miserable until that day. But she looked confused instead of happy.

Then Cheerilee took us to the fog. And I was given everything I wanted. I was best friends again with the pony who had hurt me so badly. Then those stupid ponies had to end the dream! And I found out I had been hugging Applebloom! Why? Princess Gaia, why? I finally had her back! I finally had my friend back! And the worst part? The worst part was realizing just how badly I really did want to be her friend again!

Cheerilee led us away from the fog. I wanted to go back into it. Princess Gaia, I wanted to so badly! But the others would never let me! And that freaky gray filly with yellow eyes kept leading us out of the fog's warm forelegs! Ugh. No, not Derpy Hooves, when I say yellow I mean solid-her-whole-eyes-yellow!

Then the fog just vanished. And with it my world where Diamond Tiara was my friend again was gone forever.

Then the celebration happened. The one to celebrate what Princess Gaia had done. Apparently all the adults in Ponyville got to be foals again for a day and this made them all free of what the chaos monster had done to them. But what about me-?! I wanted the dream back! I wanted Diamond Tiara back!

Anyway, my parents absolutely refused to let me stay home from the celebration... But I couldn't stand to be with father at all! Even after he changed his name and melted down that... that axe into silver spoons, I still got cold chills just being near him!

So the first chance I got I snuck away and tried to find somewhere to hide... Except I had nopony to run to, and I couldn't stand being alone, not after being reminded of how much Diamond Tiara's friendship meant to me!

I had nopony to turn to I trusted... Except maybe... When you're a desperate pony, you'll turn anywhere...

Those three blank flanks had a show going on at the festival, which was pretty much empty when I got there, except for that white unicorn mare, who looked like she was struggling not to throw up. At least I knew my parents wouldn't come within fifteen feet of this mess.

So I took a seat and watched the single most violent thing I'd ever seen next to what my own father tried to do, and that's saying something. I had no idea where three fillies got that much fake blood.

I sat through it every time. At first, it was just to hide... But the more times I watched, the more I noticed how much effort they'd put into this. That they actually had fun doing it, even for a crowd of one. They actually appreciated that I was there and even gave me a smile once or twice... I MEANT something to somepony. I wasn't useless like Diamond Tiara had told me, I mattered...

So I decided to do the one thing I thought I'd never do... I asked if I could hang out with them... I had nowhere else to go...

And you know, I don't regret it... For the first time since that chaos monster turned the world on its head, I had FUN... They didn't once try to embarrass me or take revenge, the only thing they tried to do was make sure I was having a good time... It felt good...

Then Princess Gaia got up to make her big speech. Even if those blanks had given me a good time, there was still a void... I still missed Diamond Tiara... And it burned me up that she'd TEASED me with the idea of having her back! And now she was getting a festival for it?!

I got ready to kick a rock straight into her face.

Somepony beat me to it. Contrary to logic, it shocked me out of doing the same. Maybe it was because Princess Gaia didn't scream, she didn't call out to have the one that had done it lynched... She accepted it. She accepted that somepony had nailed her in the head with a rock?! How is that even possible?! She put it right in her speech how she knew some ponies would never forgive her for what she did. That she wants the good and the bad she did to be remembered ...  Then she said that she just wanted to become a better pony than she was before... That hit me kind of hard...

Then she sung, in two different voices. I'm not sure how she did it... But one of them sang about how they'd felt so alone, like they didn't really exist... And how they belonged and now saw the world as it truly was...

I'll admit it, that made me cry.

The weird duet ended. The herd broke out into stomping hooves and cheers. I noticed Applebloom and the other two were crying too. I'm sure they probably had different reasons for it, but it felt good that I wasn't alone.

I heard Miss Cheerilee shout out over the herd, "Three cheers for Princess Gaia! Three Cheers for Princess Fluttershy! Three cheers for the Mother Princess!"

Everypony didn't need to be told twice. "Hip-hip horay! Hip-hip horay! Hip-hip horay!"

I can't say I didn't enjoy the rest of my time with the fillies that day. It felt good to be with them. And it wasn't just the ice-cream talking.

One thing I found funny was how none of them seemed to be really 'in charge' more than the others. Applebloom put this crazy club of theirs together right? Shouldn't she be the leader then? But none of them really dominated the others. But didn't groups just naturally have leaders and followers? That was how herds worked right?

It felt... weird. I obeyed my parents, they follow Mayor Mare's orders, she follows Princess Celestia's orders, and the family servants follow my orders. But these fillies, they were just together. How could any herd not be just some aimless blob without a pecking order? But these fillies kept inventing and pulling off strange, daring, or patently dangerous ventures all the same. They were all different, but they acted more like one pony than three when they put their minds to do something.

The inevitable had to happen, and I was found by my parents. Father was relieved I was alright, and mother was upset I had wandered off.

I'm sorry about being brief about it, but seriously, those aren't details I want to go over. Oh, how did they react when they saw I was hanging around common ponies?

Mother told me kindly, "Dear you really shouldn't just try substituting Diamond Tiara just because you had a little tiff and she's been missing for a little while. I know that when they find her, that you'll go right back to where you were, being best of friends!"

Substitute? Is that what they were? Was I really just replacing Diamond Tiara with them?

"HEY!" Scootaloo snapped in my mother's face, "We're not 'substatoot' anything! Silver just asked if we could hang out! And we let her! End of story."

"You shouldn't tell your daughter not to make friends because she's lost a friend!" Applebloom added, ears pinned.

Sweetie Belle looked like a deer caught in the train lights.

Mother turned red and gritted her teeth. "You, little, urchins, how dare-"

I had never heard any pony talk so fast. "My big sister owns Carousel Boutique, we sell to Canterlot and super-stars! Applebloom's family founded Ponyville! Scootaloo is apprentice to Best Young Flyers' Reigning Champion and world record holder for Sonic Rainbooms!" Sweetie Belle threw in a quick bow while pushing her friends' heads down, "Madam!"

I actually looked at Sweetie Belle with appreciation at how she had laid it on thick with that last one, Diamond Tiara would have been proud. She had just single hoofedly averted making a lifetime enemy out of my mother.

Mother tripped over her words and coughed at Sweetie's sudden etiquette, "Well, still, little fillies should not talk back to their elders. Your parents should teach you better manners."

Applebloom and Scootaloo looked like they had been stung by a bee.

"Come along, Spoon." We managed a wave as mother pulled me along, with father remaining silent and keeping his distance.

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I can't fly, and there was no way on this side of the Everfree Forest I was getting near a farm, where I was likely to get covered in fertilizer or something. So that left me with only one real place I could go the next morning with Miss Cheerilee having put classes on hold once again. (I was shaking in my hooves at the amount of make up work we'd have to do.)

Getting out of the house wasn't as hard as it should have been. After all, what reason would I ever have for leaving the grounds if Diamond Tiara wasn't about for me to visit? All the same I told Dust Mop where I was going to be so my parents could know if they asked. She was confused, but having lived in my family's house as long as she had, she did as she was told.

"Welcome to the Carousel Boutique, how may I help you this fine, erm, day young miss?"

Miss Rarity seemed rather surprised and uncomfortable to see me. She acted like she saw a ghost. "Is Sweetie here?"

"Erm," The marshmallow colored unicorn shook her head, but it wasn't at me. "Why do you wish to know?"

"I want to talk to her."

"What about?"

I stopped in my tracks. What did I want to talk to her about? The filly who I barely knew anything about? "Anything she wants to talk about."

Miss Rarity looked at me, looking surprised. She breathed in deeply and let it out slowly. "She's upstairs in her room dear. She currently has guests at the moment already. I am very sure that they won't mind an extra playmate. Upstairs past the 'off limits' sign down the hall on the left, second door you'll see."

Foal's play for somepony whose lived in a house as big as mine. I thanked her and trotted where she directed.

"And Silver Spoon?"

I looked back at her, when had she learned my name? "Yes?"

"Friends and family are both incredibly important things to have, don't ever throw away either. And just because you love one pony, doesn't make you love another pony less."

The way she said it, there was something almost... pleading about it. There was something familiar in her voice.

I was left totally confused but I just nodded like a good filly and trotted up the stairs. As I walked, I could tell Sweetie Belle wasn't bluffing to my mother about her elder sister's fame. Some of her designs were set out in rooms I passed, clearly labeled, and just as Sweetie Belle had told mother, many of them were for famous ponies whose names I knew. I half expected to find one for one of the Princesses by the time I was done. I couldn't help but think how mother would react if she saw all this.

I found the Cutie Mark Crusaders all present and accounted for. Sweetie Belle's room was... fairly impressive. She certainly had the proper tastes of a high class filly. The room felt cluttered, but that was what happened when you didn't spend the money on a live in maid I guess.

"Oh, hey Silver Spoon." Sweetie Belle said like we were old acquaintances instead of former enemies. "Come on in."

"What brings ya'all here?" Applebloom asked happily.

"Oh, I, I just wanted to see how you were all doing, after yesterday. I mean, you put so much effort into that show yesterday and -"

"Yeah! Isn't it great? Rarity said she never saw anything like it!"

"And AJ called the entire thing unbelievable!"

"And Dash said she loved the part where I tore the eye out of the cyclopes and crashed the monster into the army of zombie pegasi!"

"Though I think nopony liked where you beat up the bad version of Princess Celestia." Sweetie Belle said.

Scootaloo shrugged, "Yeah, I thought everypony would be laughing their manes off at that part. I mean, how much silly can you get? But I think that white Earth Pony hanging out with Twilight seemed to like it."

Just how oblivious can these fillies be-?!

"Maybe... " I heard my own voice saying, "Maybe they thought you were being bullies to Princess Celestia?"

The three gasped. "What in tarnation?"

"Applebloom language!" Sweetie Belle said on reaction alone.

Scootaloo protested, "But that wasn't what it was about! Twilight's book said comedy was absurd or silly violence. What's more silly than anyone being able to beat up The Princess and The Princess being bad?"

How was I going to explain the refined tactics of bullying to these three pure innocent naive fillies?

"Well, you see, lots of ponies love the Princess, so um," I'm more used to dishing this out than explaining it. "What if someone did a show where your big sisters were shown as mean nasty ponies? And Scootaloo, what if someone did a show where your teacher was a sadist who threw fillies into the Pegasus Machine?" Sure, I wasn't a pegasi, but knowing all the urban legends and boogiemen of the other tribes came with the territory of being a bully.

"That wouldn't be fair!" Sweetie and Applebloom shouted together.

"Rainbow would NEVER do that!" yelled Scootaloo, looking rather upset. "And that thing isn't real... "

I must admit, I was rather impressed Scootaloo had already come to realize that.

"Ponies feel the same way about The Princess. And let me sum it up another way: 'Gabby Gums.'"

Applebloom gasped, "But this is a show! Not news!"

"Lots of adults are too busy living their lives to notice."

Then my spotlight got stolen by the advent of one scaly purple baby -dragon- walking into the room. I yelped and scurried back.

"Hi, Spike." Sweetie waved.

"Hey Sweetie Belle." The dragon waved back.

"Hey," Said Scootaloo to the new invader.

"You-?" I looked about in confusion seeing their calm faces. "You know each other?"

"Sure Silver Spoon." Sweetie Belle said, "Spike's... a good friend of big sister's."

"You're friends with a dragon?"

"Sure. Why not?" Sweetie Belle asked.

"Erm, that is, don't dragons eat ponies?"

Spike just grinned. "We can actually eat anything. I prefer gems."

My head spun.

"Saaaay, aren't you one of those ponies who's always making fun of Applebloom and her friends?"

"We... made up?" I answered like it was some lame brain excuse.

"That so?" The tiny fire breathing monster eyed me carefully. The others nodded. I wondered if he was going to eat me. "Whao kay."

"HUH? That's it?"

"You say you've made up? I think I'll give ya the benefit of the doubt this time, I mean for now."

This time?

"What ya'all doin' here?" Applebloom asked the dragon. I swear, couldn't the Apples afford elocution lessons like Diamond Tiara's dad had for her?

Sweetie broke in. "You see, when I told Spike about our Cutie Mark plan we've been getting the fireworks for, I realized that he could really help us."

Scootaloo asked, "Really? Help how?"

"Well, remember how none of our families will let us near matches after we accidentally summoned that fire elemental?"

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Us four fillies and one baby dragon stumbled away from the wrecked rocket. Its wheels still spinning in the air from its fall off the old railway tracks our group now staggered alongside. The smoke from the burned out fireworks slowly rose into the air. Dr. Whooves had already borrowed back the flux-capacitor the CMC had borrowed from the scrap pile in his backyard.

If I told you what had just happened, then you'd probably never believe me. I was there and I hardly believe it! Just know that we probably violated at least half the known laws of physics and, according to Dr. Whooves, several unknown ones!

"Nothing-can-stop the Smooze~," Applebloom sang in a rather contrarily upbeat voice, her eyes still spinning.

"Smooooooze," said a tiny purple blob on Applebloom's shoulder that Spike efficiently incinerated on the spot.

"Rainbow Dash always dresses in style," Scootaloo sang skipping along fluttering her wings, "I'll teach us games to play. Maybe we'll hear a story from Cheerilee, or maybe one of... whose melody again?"

"I had no idea Rainbow Dash's ancestor was a fashion designer," Sweetie Belle said using me as support.

"I think I'm going to have to apologize to Lickety-Split for laughing at his family stories," Spike said checking Applebloom and himself over for any more hitchhikers, then the rest of us and the surrounding area. I was never going to laugh at Lickety-Split's stories again.

"What," I panted, not used to running for my life, "What do you think, Doctor... Doctor Whooves meant... when he said that was... was only... only the second time he had ever seen... anypony... travel sideways through time?"

"Doctor Whooves says a lot of things." Applebloom brushed it off. "At least we didn't alter history or somethin' like that."

"Well, we didn't learn what our Cutie Marks were going to be. What do you think those humans in business suits meant by 'cancelled?' " Scootaloo asked.

"Who cares? It's not like it's the end of the universe," Applebloom said as thunder boomed in the far distance.

"Are all your... expeditions, this hazardous?" I asked.

"Naw, normally we just blow up Sugar Cube Corner or set Twilight's house tree on fire." Scootaloo waved off.

My jaw dropped.

"Kidding!"

I let out a sigh of relief.

"Though we did get chased by that squid one time." Sweetie Belle chimed in.

"What was it doing in that lake anyway?" Scootaloo asked, giving an eyebrow.

I looked at them in amazement and confusion. "How? How can you be so cheerful about it? It sounds like you've done a hundred things, and none of them made your cutie mark realize. I'd have given up and just stayed a blank flank. I'd live longer."

"I'd agree with you there," Spike huffed.

"Ya know." Applebloom stopped suddenly with Spike bumping into her. "I never really thought about it. It's just what we do?"

"So it's routine?" I asked.

"No, it's not that," Sweetie Belle said. "We all just like being together, and trying to earn our cutie marks is a great reason to be together."

"But-but being blanks is the only reason you're together."

"No," Scootaloo said, "Being blanks is what brought us together. We've stuck together because of each other. Did me and Sweetie dump Applebloom when it looked like she earned her Cutie Mark or she dump us? You and Diamond Tiara didn't stay together just because your parents both had money, right?"

Was it? Would I have stayed with Diamond Tiara if her family had gone broke? Who am I kidding? My parents would have said it would have been unsightly to be seen with ponies who had lost everything and I would have abandoned my best friend like the good little obedient filly I'd always been. I felt horrid. I don't care what anypony else said, Diamond deserved better than that.

Good little docile Silver Spoon, always doing what she's told, no more, no less. Make friends, don't make friends, be kind, be cruel, like a good little filly should.

"Come on," Scootaloo said thankfully taking me out of my reflections, "I left her over here."

"Her?" I asked.

"My scooter, duh," Scootaloo said with a smile while taking out of the bushes the little thing with the familiar wagon.

All four of us got in, abandoning the wreck in the middle of the woods that the defunct rail line cut through. No, we didn't bother to douse the fireworks, so sue us. My parents could buy your law firm.

"Ugh. Geeze Spike, you sure you eat jewels and not bricks?" Scootaloo grunted as she supplied the motor power.

"Pst. I'm a dragon. I'm gonna be able to pull the whole lot of you along while you're all in the old pony's home."

"You should invest in a bank account now," I said thinking of my economics lessons I hadn't slept through. "By the time you're an adult dragon you could buy Ponyville."

"Really? Hmmm."

"If I don't get the strength to fly after pulling you guys all back to Ponyville, I'm taking a long flight off a short cliff."

"Scootaloo!" Sweetie Belle snapped.

"Only joking."

"Not funny."

"Hey I ever tell you guys about the time I saved Rarity from a horde of Diamond Dogs?"

Sweetie Belle eyed the dragon. "Big sister says she saved herself, and you all showed up in time to help her cart along all the jewels she collected from them in pennies."

"That's penance," I said.

"Well, that's how she tells it. Now are you going to believe your big sister, or the guy who's gonna be able to arm wrestle Ursa Majors when he grows up?"

"Big sister."

"Ouch."

I watched as the girls' attention was all directed to the small fire breathing monster as he spun together one recounting of his adventures after another, each one with him as the hero and Miss Rarity as the damsel.

He was also the one who saved Miss Rarity from the giant dragon who stomped through Ponyville. I wouldn't know, mom stuffed me in the basement until she was sure the monster was gone.

Apparently also he was the Number One Assistant to Princess Celestia's Personal Apprentice Twilight Sparkle. That one I almost believed on account of it being too crazy to be made up.

I let out a low growl I had learned from Diamond Tiara. Was I just the flavor of the week? First these ponies want to be my friend more than anything, and now that the big lizard shows up I'm pushed aside for the new show? What right did he have?

"Friends and family are both incredibly important things to have, don't ever throw away either. And just because you love one pony, doesn't make you love another pony less."

Where did that come from?

"What right do I have?"

"Huh?" Applebloom looked at me.

"I'm, I'm a good pony right? I always do what I'm told, that makes me a good pony right?"

"Always doing what you're told? Everything?" Spike asked. "Oh come on, that's not good, that's boring. What if someone told you to jump off a cliff?"

"Well," I thought, I crossed my forelegs and leaned over the side of the wagon looking outward. "What if it was somepony important? And they knew something you didn't?"

"Look kid-"

"Silver Spoon." I looked back at him.

"Silver Spoon. Take it from somedragon who takes a lot of orders. If I just did whatever Twilight told me, well," Spike scratched his face. I knew that face even if these fillies didn't. Twilight had done something bad, and Spike knew it, but if he said it now, he'd be stabbing her in the back. Dragon or pony, his body language screamed it. "A lot of the mistakes she made when she wasn't thinking straight would have hurt a lot of ponies. Big part of being loyal to someone is to know when they -wouldn't- be telling you to do something if their head was on right."

Diamond Tiara's snarling face flashed in my head.

"I see," I whispered.

+++

"And you built all this by yourself?" I asked unbelieving.

"Well, AJ had the club house before us, I just kinda fixed her up some." Applebloom blushed.

"'Some?' Applebloom, this place was good as condemned when we first saw it."

"I gotta agree with Scootaloo on this one." Sweetie Belle said.

The club house the fillies put together for themselves was amazing. Well, it wasn't fantastic or anything, but the idea that one Earth Pony had been able to put all this together, I was left in awe.

I also noticed a small box in the corner, covered in locks and chains and 'danger do not open!' 'This means you!' stickers with the lid welded shut.

"What's in there?" Seriously, they might as well have painted a neon sign above it to draw attention. No, I wasn't stupid enough to want to open it.

All three shuddered.
Scootaloo said, "Something really bad."

"Then why don't you just get rid of it?"

Apparently something about wanting to dump it or bury it in the ground but worried the plants might absorb it and pass it through their fruit. Or dumping it down the drain but worried it might then infect the entire water supply. And wanting to give it to Miss Twilight Sparkle for safe keeping but panicked when they thought Spike might use it on Rarity.

"I might use what now?" Spike scratched his scalp.

"Just what's in here?" I tilted my head.

"Nothin'."

"Rarity's ugly reject dresses!"

"Yeah! No way it's a love potion! Oops." Scootaloo said, then banged her head against the floor boards.

"Love Poison actually." Sweetie Belle corrected.

Both Spike and I were rolling on the floor ready to bust a gut by the time the CMC finished recounting their tale start to finish. "And Miss Cheerilee really said Honey-Woomy-Bear?" I gasped out.

"That was the abridged version." Sweetie cringed at the sickeningly sweet memory.

"So that stuff works?" Spike asked.

Sweetie looked ready to skewer Spike where he stood.

"It replaces the pony's real personality with that of a love sick idiot who acts nothing like their real self," Applebloom said.

"Oh. So it doesn't secretly reveal their true feelings they've just kept hidden?"

"No."

"Dang."

Scootaloo dove into a pile of comics she had apparently gotten on loan from her mentor. The others all gathered around her. I simply followed the herd.

"Hey," Scootaloo read, "Superstallion needs to tune out ninety-nine percent of the cries for help around the world he hears with his super hearing to keep from going crazy?"

"Well," I launched into thinking about it without thinking. "If you have senses like that, and you want to have a normal life. If you were a hero constantly, how would you ever sleep?"

"I think I liked these comics better when they just had Superstallion and Batmare with her Bat-Cannon redirecting the course of the Planet of the Zombie-Ponies from colliding with Equestria."

I noticed Applebloom give a little shiver at the mention of 'zombie-ponies.'

"Actually," Sweetie Belle said reading through another comic, "They retconned it to being a dream caused by ScarePony's Ghostie Gas."

"Ah dangit." Scootaloo nearly threw the comic across the room. "That adventure was so cool! Why do the authors always have to make the old stories be holograms, or a diversion, or that pony was possessed and didn't really turn evil after his city got blown up and he wanted to reset the universe to fix it?"

"It does kinda make ya feel lousy if everything ya read turns out to be bogus somehow." Applebloom spoke leafing through another, "I mean, Ah thought Mareneto was dead, again."

"Who cares? Look at Iron Pony punch Loki in the face! Ka-pow!" Spike said his face buried in another.

Me? I was left totally confused on what they were even talking about! Eventually I eyed a copy of Wonder Filly and inched my way through the panels.

"HEY!" Sweetie Belle said, "We could be Cutie Mark Crusader Super Heroes!"

"We did that last week." Scootaloo didn't look up.

"Oh right."

Believe it or not, the day was still young, okay by now it was half past noon, but Applebloom had brought along various apple confections she had liberated from her family's stockpiles. They weren't zap apples of course, those sold out in days, usually before they were even picked from what Applebloom said.

Did these fillies ever get tired? From the look on Spike's face, he was amazed as me at how fast these girls flirted from one venture to the next.

Scootaloo wanted to try out some new maneuvers with her scooter and I swear it's like these fillies are joined at the hip. Spike and me just came along for the ride. It was kinda awe inspiring seeing how well they fit together, like they had been cut from the same cloth. No, like they were all cut from different cloths, but complimented each other perfectly.

Dragging along an extra pony and one dragon was taking its toll on Scootaloo but she didn't complain, something else I found weird, she wasn't a servant, so why wouldn't she?

At the park, we ran across a yellow pony whose name was apparently Junebug who was planting flowers. Don't ask me what flowers have to do with a beetle that shows up during the summer. She politely greeted us but looked hesitant around Spike.

"Er, June, sorry about last time, I was kinda just excited about everything," the purple dragon said profusely to her. "I didn't mean to bother you like that... Actually I did. I was being a greedy jerk and I'm sorry."

Apparently used to dealing with plants more than people the yellow pony replied, "Um, okay, that's alright, I think, uh, I have a lot to do right now so, I don't mean to cut this short but-"

Spike sighed. "I gotcha." The CMC moved closer to him as Junebug began planting flowers on the other side of the park.

"Spike? You okay?" Scootaloo asked.

"I...  I never apologized for trying to steal your scooter did I?"

"Twilight explained, it was just a phase all dragons go through, right?" Scootaloo asked.

"Yeah, just a phase." Spike said lowly.

A sense of uninvolvement was battering at me. I didn't like it. "Can someone please explain to me what's going on?"

Thankfully Sweetie Belle did. Apparently during and right after his birthday, Spike had hit a 'phase,' as Twilight called it, where a dragon begins collecting their hoard, and Spike not having been raised by dragons, went nuts before some kind words from Rarity helped the urge burn itself out.

These ponies stank at lying. I take that back, they were fairly good, but they would have never cut it in high society where lying through your teeth was an expected part of the game. I hadn't practiced handing them out but I knew them. A filly like me raised to be a part of the game of little white lies and blatant falsehoods? They'd have better luck trying to outstare a cockatrice.

But as part of the game, flat out saying they were lying was improper, and I didn't care about their 'dirty little secrets,' yet. Being made a secret keeper was a sign of loyalty and trust among high class ponies, like me and Diamond. They had the same 'he did something bad, but would hurt him to say what' look Spike had talking about Twilight earlier.

As it happened, a middle class working family was also at the park that day. The Cakes, I think they had catered to my birthday once or twice, and they had catered to Diamond Tiara's Cute-ceañera. But I didn't remember them having a pair of babies with them. They were, a pegasus and unicorn? How did that work? I wondered if Mrs. Cake had been seeing other stallions. What? You're surprised a filly my age knows about that sort of thing? You don't understand the upper class as much as you say you do then, miss.

Then I got a double helping of confusion and surprise when the baby pegasus began -flying-! In diapers, not looking a year old, and flying! Check please. Less strange was the giant flood of purple slime I saw earlier today (or five thousand years ago depending how you did the math).

Then I remembered Scootaloo, who very much -couldn't- fly. There was only one logical reaction she'd take! I took one look at her and saw... she as happily waving at the flying baby?

Maybe I was poking the Ursa with a stick, but my curiosity this time wouldn't let me go.

"Scootaloo."

"Yes?"

"I just noticed. You're okay that that baby can fly, and you can't?" It felt like something Diamond Tiara would say, it gave me comfort. But...  it was different, I wasn't trying to hurt her, it was pure curiosity...  That felt strange.

Scootaloo thought for a moment putting a hoof to her chin and then looked down at the grass.

"I'll admit, when I first saw Pound Cake flying, I was hurting inside, it was awful. I've been struggling to fly with wings that just won't grow all my life. And this little colt comes along, born from two Earth ponies, not even potty trained, begins flying around when he's just a month old!

"I actually ran and cried where no pony could see me. I actually -hated- him. A stupid baby and I hated him. Or I thought I did. All my effort, all my sore wings and bruises and cracked hollow bones, and he's flying around without even learning. But I couldn't be angry at a little baby who didn't even care if I hated him or not!

"I needed something, anything to lash out at, something I could just be angry at and feel good about being angry, somepony I could treat like they weren't even a person and not feel the least bit guilty about. I ran into Fluttershy. I snapped and told her how much I hated her squandering her gift of being a pegasus. How much I hated her for acting like an Earth pony and acting like her wings weren't even there half the time. I told her she was betraying every pegasus in the world for living the way she did.

"She looked ready to cry, then suddenly she looked angry. I tried to run away and fast but she caught me anyway. She then took me up to the smallest and highest cloud she could find and dropped me on top of it. I was scared stiff.

"She told me I needed to grow up. She told she had already stopped pretending to be an Earth Pony in a pegasus' body. And she told me just how small I was really being. Then her whole attitude changed and asked me what was really bothering me, that kind of surprised me.

"I told her. She laughed. She apologized and said that all foals start out like that. Their gifts go wild when they're little but settle down as they get older and they learn how to actually use them. She then told me to ask Sweetie Belle how she felt about Pumpkin Cake.

"And Sweetie thought Pumpkin was just cute. When I brought up Pumpkin being able to do magic, Sweetie wondered if I was being weird. She didn't care. She said all unicorns go through magic surges, but that doesn't make them magic prodigies. So yeah, I felt kinda small then."

"Didn't your parents teach you that sort of thing if it was common for all ponies?"

"My parents... kinda missed that part."

"Oh."

"I apologized to Fluttershy first chance I got...  But I haven't forgotten how I felt. I was angry and hurt, I couldn't be angry at who I wanted to be angry at, so I was angry at a pony I didn't think it would matter. But it did... "

"Blank flanks! Blank flanks!"

I shook my head free of the memory. But it remained at the back of my mind at Scootaloo's whole performance. It was like a parasprite eating at the back of my mind. As for Scootaloo's show? I didn't know the first thing about stunt performance so I couldn't tell you if it was inspired or cliche. But it was daring, and that's after the whole time travel episode we'd began the day with. Made me wonder how this pony hadn't broken her neck already.

Don't ask me why I did what I did next. All I knew was that memory wouldn't leave me alone. "HEY! You ponies want to see a real show? My family has a tab at the Ponyville Theater! We can watch as many shows as we want!"

Applebloom tilted her head, "Ya'all sayin' our show wasn't real?"

A spark of panic went through me. Wrong move. "I think you can get some inspiration from it!"

"Oh, right, that sounds nice." Sweetie Belle smiled and nodded.

+++

"Your guilty conscience may make you vote for Lunacrats, but in your hearts you know you want the Celestians in charge who will strip you of your freedoms and rule you like a king! And when they get in! I get out! Me and all my criminal buddies! Bwahahahha!" Cackled the villain as the ponies dressed up as royal guards dragged him off stage.

In a small VIP seat with the others Scootaloo raised an eyebrow, "This play doesn't make a lick of sense. How does that bit even fit in with the rest of the story?"

Sweetie Belle said, "I'm starting to think the fella' who wrote this play doesn't like Princess Celestia."

I looked at her dully, 'You think?'

"I guess this is kinda what you meant about our play, Silver Spoon... " She finished.

Applebloom declared maybe a little too loud, "Ah think whoever wrote this play has never MET Princess Celestia!"

"I think they've never even been to Canterlot," Spike added, I wonder what he knew about that. "It's still not as bad as that last play though. What's the fun of a giant battle with everypony apologizing every five seconds?"

"Silver Spoon Ah'm startin' ta think these here plays aren't all that fun," Applebloom said.

I looked at the leaflet, I saw what play was due next after the intermission. "I promise. You girls will like this next one."

The title of the next show read 'Pater Pan.'

The girls liked the show. They were surprised at how a filly was playing the role of a colt. I had to explain it was for the sake of the wires. They could be done with unicorn magic sure, but it had been part of the play's original style, and the theater had wanted to stay true to that. Though Applebloom did find the idea of an Earth Pony flying without wings thanks to Flutterpony Dust down right enchanting. Scootaloo joked she wanted to know where to get some.

Scootaloo did like the part where Pan started killing the pirates and turning them against each other. Spike was shocked where Tinker Bell drank the poison Hook had left for Pan. Spike of course was cheering for the crocodile.

I think I heard Sweetie Belle sniffle a bit at the end where Pan met Wendy Bird again as an old mare.

We all left the theater in an unspoken agreement after that play ended.

"Hey Applebloom you okay?" Spike asked shaking her a bit.

"It's nothing."

"Ever since the part where Pan talked about how foals never had to earn their cutie marks in Never Never Land you looked scared."

"It just reminds me, of when I was alone in the Everfree Forest."

"Really?" Scoots and Sweetie got into her personal space. "When? How? Why?"

"I'll... tell ya when we're all back at the club house."

"Why not now?"

"I... want a bit to think it over."

This pacified them enough to accept the small wait. How much time she'd have to tell it was another matter. Celestia's sun was going to be setting soon enough.

No. I'm not going to tell you what Applebloom told me, Spike, Sweetie and Scootaloo. But I'll never think of Applebloom as weak, or 'just' a blank ever again. And now I know how much meaning to Applebloom that gray filly we had kept seeing, when the fog kept trying to take us all back in during Princess Gaia's reign (and failing). And I'll never look at Everfree Forest the same way again either. She actually thanked us afterwards, she was happy to share it. She told us she felt finally free now that she had shared it with us.

But that wasn't here nor there, yet. The bigger knocking to me happened as we trotted back to the clubhouse.

"Ah can't believe that 'Peter Pan' wanted to live without his parents," Applebloom said.

"The day he was born? Because he didn't like what his parents were planning for him?" Scootaloo asked.

"Your parents are just there to provide for you, to make sure you carry on their legacy. If you could live without them, why wouldn't you?" I breathed out.

Applebloom and Scootaloo turned and looked at me like I was crazy.

"How can ya'll say that?" Applebloom asked in shock.

"Why not? Parents just make you. Like something at a factory. You're around only because they know they won't be forever."

Everyone stopped. I bumped into Sweetie Belle.

Applebloom got a determined look on her face that sent me for a loop. "Parents don't 'make' ya, they raise ya! They don't build ya, they rear ya! Parents look after ya, they're there for ya! They love ya! They teach ya how ta be a mare!"

"Parents are the ones you can always turn to no matter what," Scootaloo said getting in my face, I didn't shove her away like I should have. "They're-they're-" Scootaloo's lips quivered, "They're wonderful to have! You know when you wake up alone in the dark that they'll come for you! They're everything when they're around! Or that's what parents are SUPPOSED to be!"

Feeling scared I trotted back several paces, the fillies just trotted along with me.

"How-how can you say that?" I gasped out.

"Silver Spoon, isn't that what your parents are like? Don't they love you?" Sweetie Belle asked, the look in her eyes. I couldn't bear it.

"I'm just an investment to them! When I'm in danger it's an investment in danger! I'm not a pony to them!"

"Girlie. I don't buy that," Spike said.

"What do you know! What do any of you know! You don't know me!" I felt tears coming down my face.

"Yer ma and pa sure seemed worried at the festival to me."

"Let me tell you something kiddo," Spike said, "You could have everything you want, and it would STILL SUCK without your mom there with you!"

"Don't you know how LUCKY you are-?!" Scootaloo and Applebloom said together, they looked at each other in complete surprise.

A part of me wanted to run. Badly.

"If Ah could have just one more day with mah parents I'd trade mah mane for it!"

"Parents are a gift," Scootaloo said softly like I was ignoring some fundamental truth, but, she didn't sound -superior- about it. Was this pegasus ever going to stop confusing me?! Was, was she -crying-?

Stop it, stop it please. I held my hooves to my head. If this had been weeks earlier and we saw her crying, I'd have just followed Diamond Tiara in MAKING her cry...  So why did I feel like this now?!

The herd gathered around me. Concerned adults stopped and took a look at the scene I was making. This wasn't proper. That made it worse.

"I'd never want to be without my parents. I'd never want to be in a world where I didn't have them." Sweetie Belle gently moved closer. She wasn't being condescending or mean, she sounded worried. "You'd want to be in a world where you didn't have yours?"

"Dust Mop! Clean Dishes! Somepony! Call a doctor!"

"Where's my baby?! She is alright-?! Oh Celestia! Is she going to be okay?! Are these going to scar?! Will she walk again?! Why isn't anyone telling me anything?!"

I fell to my rear hooves, and sobbed. I felt so ugly.

The fillies and dragons looked at me. They weren't laughing.

"Silver Ah didn't mean-" "-Ah man-" "-it's okay just let it out-" "-are you hurt?"

The Cakes, who happened to be nearby with their foals, came over to see what was wrong with the filly who was crying with her friends.

I barely answered their questions. They accepted that.

The Cakes gave us a place where I could finish crying without everypony watching. They weren't in my family's employ, why didn't they ask for a favor in return? Diamond would tell me they were just serving the upper class ponies. But they weren't being submissive about it either! The others all just waited patiently for me. Why didn't they leave me behind? How could they be so... kind to a filly who was their enemy?

"How much?" I managed to croak to the Cakes as we left.

"Eh?" Mr. Cake responded confused.

"How much will you charge my parents for helping me?"

"Charge?" Mrs. Cake responded from where she was tending to her foals.

"You mean to tell me you helped a stranger for nothing?" My head hurt.

Mr. Cake knelt down to be on my level, he, the tone he used, it was so strange, "There are no strangers in Ponyville."

It was like being hit by a gail wind.

In Ponyville, there was no such thing as a stranger. All this time I thought I was alone, there were so many I could've turned to but I never realized it...

My parents. When was the last I had even tried to hug them? When was the last time I had even said I loved them? What kind of cruel filly was I?

We made it to the club house after I finished crying, Applebloom as promised told her story, and as I said I realized how strong she really was.

The day was waning however, and we all had family waiting for us back home. Don't ask me why I stuck around to the end. We exchanged hugs and left. Applebloom, having the least distance to go, left last.

"Applebloom... " The word wasn't one I was used to saying, but I made due, "Thank you. Today was a," I swallowed, "a good day."

"Yeah, we really saw a lot didn't we?"

"And you didn't get your cutie mark."

"Yep."

"And you don't care."

"Nope. Cause I got to spend time with friends."

"But that makes it a waste."

"How can time spent with friends ever be a waste?"

"... You love being with your friends don't you?"

"Don't you?"

"It always just felt, natural to be around my friends, friend, before."

"Sounds like friendship to me!"

I look at this filly, no wealth, her family doesn't carry their legacy like a badge, no sophistication in the least. But she'd done more with herself than I ever had. And maybe I had grown a little too.

"I really really better get home. My dad is waiting for me," I said.

"Ah gotcha. Thanks for hanging out with us today, it was fun!"

"You're welcome... " I began to trot, but stopped. "Applebloom."

"Yeah?"

"Don't let your friends drift away. Never. Or you'll find a hole in your heart that you'll never be able to fill."

"Ah, ah think Ah got whatcha meant, goodnight Silver Spoon. Maybe we'll see each other again real soon, if that's alright with you."

"Goodnight Applebloom... And I think I'd like that... "

"... Silver Spoon?" She asked looking back to me.

I look back to her. "Y-yes?"

"... Let me finish before yah say anything. But Ah used to tell myself that you and Diamond Tiara's Cutie Marks were just useless, that yah had no real purpose."

I felt like I'd just been stabbed in the heart, what Diamond Tiara had said rushing back to my mind.

"But Ah was wrong, and Ah'm sorry Ah ever thought that."

"W-what?"

"Ah realized it on Family Appreciation Day. When yah were the first pony to start clappin' for Granny Smith, even though Diamond Tiara was still tryin' to hurt me an' her. That's when Ah noticed somethin' about yer Cutie Mark Ah hadn't ever noticed before. There's that little heart right there in the handle of it. How you've been actin' today and at the festival just proved it to me. There's a lot more to you and yer Cutie Mark than Ah thought... Maybe the same thing's true about Diamond Tiara... Anyway, goodnight, Silver Spoon."

As we parted ways, I looked back at my Cutie Mark, at the little heart in the handle. It was something even I had never noticed before... Maybe I belong in the 'Cutie Mark Crusaders' more than I thought. After all, I may have found my Cutie Mark... But that doesn't mean I'm done finding out about it...  

And I'm finally free to explore it.

+++

There was a knock on the door, Twist's parents were busy so she opened it herself. Her heart jumped a little when she saw who it was. "Hiya Twist."

"Whao, er, hiya Applebloom."

"Been a while, mind if Ah all come in?"

"Whao, eith, be my guesth." The candy making pony made way and let the other filly enter. They had a lot of catching up to do.

+++

"Daddy? I'm home."

+++

Dear Princess Celestia.

I'll admit I was surprised when you asked me to help organize the notes to the latest round of interviews of the various points of view of Ponyville's population of ponies. Like any bout of organizing it's proven to be relaxing and comforting to me. The interviewers were a strange herd to work with. But it's also been enlightening, and I think I understand why you gave me this assignment.


There are a thousand and one tales in Ponyville, one for each link in the chain that connects us ponies together, each one as special and unique as the next. I fear to say there are not enough books in Equestria to contain all of the stories it holds. And if you try to write them all down, you'll never get anything but cliff notes on most of us. It is a task that no one pony can do alone, or should attempt alone. The best each pony can do is write but a small piece of the puzzle in the most in-depth detail we can. So in future generations, if they wish to explore the Ponyville that existed after Equestria was saved from eternal chaos, all they need do is explore our books.

Each of us has a story to tell, but no one pony can hope to write them all down. So we'll do our best to write down but a few to get a glimpse of our world to future generations.

-- Your Faithful Student Twilight Sparkle


~Fin (For Now.)
Discord's beaten, but invisible scars take the longest to heal for the mane six and all of Ponyville. Anyone can die, living is the actually challenge.

A lot of ponies have been interviewed, and a few non-ponies too. Can enemies really come friends? This is Silver Spoon's story. Judge her for yourself.


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The chapter begins with Silver Spoon thinking about her role. She was always supporting Diamond Tiara and followed her as the second Bully. But the filly also acted the same with her parents, taking the advice of her mother to find a husband before she becomes too old and too ugly and never to befriend their hired help to heart. Her father always wanted her to act like a lady and to not argue with Filthy Rich about his racism. She never really thought about the consequences of her actions. If Diamond said to mock the ones without cutie marks, Silver simply did so. If her mother didn’t want her to socialise with her servants, Silver simply did so. It was the easy choice. But once Diamond Tiara was gone, the child felt empty, lost and without guidance.

She remembers the day of chaos when everything became nonsense. Many suffered under Discord’s evil, including her own family. Her mother was cursed into strange cross of a child and an elderly person and her wrinkles were always visible, no matter what she did to hide them. The Draconequus took her fear of aging and twisted it into a sick torture and caricature. The only thing she still can do is to hide from everything. But that is nothing compared to what Discord had done to her father. He has taken his old ancestral axe and is trying to KILL his own daughter with it. The mother at least only suffering herself but the Draconequus twisted the father into an insane murder. Soon the corruption reaches the little child as well and her eyes vanish and reappear on her glasses. Not only that but her entire body seems to have turned into soft silver and by merely poking it, she is able to piece her skin. In this state her father could kill her very easily. Just in the last moment she is able to dodge the deadly attack and in her insane state her mother will not be of any help towards her. To sum it up: The Draconequus placed a mere child into a position where her own father tries to murder her and her mother will do nothing about it. Not only that but her discorded father claims that he is something this to preserve her looks and that she as a nice obedient filly should follow his orders and LET HIM KILL HER. So far she did everything he told her to do for without asking questions. But what was once safe is now trying to murder her. Just running into a coach injures the little filly and she leaves a trail of silver behind. There seems to be no escape and her father keeps hunting her down no matter where she hides. Soon her fragile condition keeps injuring her and she can’t run anymore. As her father moves in for the kill…

… the rainbow of Harmony hits both and restores them to their normal states. But neither her fear of her own father nor the injuries she got from this desperate chase aren’t gone. Now back to sanity he desperately calls for his servants. Luckily Clean Dishes/Clean Bandages - one of the servants she wasn’t supposed to befriend - knows first aid and saves her life with this. But she isn’t the only one. Discord’s merciless chaos injured many, many ponies and if it would have just lasted a few seconds longer this child would have died. Eventually her sane mother returns but has a panic attack and in this state she is so worried about her filly that she is of no help for her own child. In the end the medical ponies come in and heal her. Understandably her father also has a mental breakdown and can only insult them to hurry up to heal the child he almost killed. He is unable to face that ugly truth of what he did and instead gets angry at those trying their best to help. Her body recovered soon but her spirit remains hurt. When she sees her father the next day she panics and tries to run away. Her father tries to apologise and has a mountain of toys with him. Is he trying to buy her love back? But it does nothing to lessen her fear. Silver is even afraid of her own glasses but since contacts don’t work for her and she desperately needs aid to see something, the filly can’t live without them. But she is much more afraid of her own father and tries to stay away from her home as long as possible.

And Silver Spoon isn’t the only filly who changed. Diamond has trouble to act like a bully around Sweetie Belle. After Discord turned both Sweetie Belle and Diamond Tiara into dolls that exchanged parts, the former bully has a connection with Rarity’s sister and afterwards the bully began to form a connection with Rarity, making it even harder to hurt the little sister of the pony that was so kind to her. When the Cutie Pox incident happened Diamond wasn’t able to bully Applebloom effectively but once the family appreciation day happened, Tiara had a new plan to humiliate the farm pony. Silver Spoon couldn’t be happier that things finally are back to normal but the plan backfires like Pinkie Pie's prototype Party Cannon MK II. We learn later how much of an epic failure this prototype was. Silver is completely exited about Granny Smith’s role and applauds her. In turn Diamond Tiara just became worse and worse and after her father told her a lesson about humility she became almost apathetic towards the CMC and her school work. But the hatred she always concentrated on the fillies is now directed on her own father and once Silver dares to ask why her friend is doing this she also becomes the target of Diamond’s bullying. What she hated before is now treated with apathy while what she loved once is now hated. It hurts Silver Spoon much more because she really believed the two were friends. After what happened the filly is unable to love her father anymore and now she has even lost her only friend, the one who she always supported.

Now Silver has no friends left and doesn’t even view Silver Axe as her own father anymore. She just calls him “the stallion.” But she isn’t alone. The CMC try their best to be there for her and Cheerilee offers her own advice. Then after Applejack saw the Truth, the farmer tries to tell her that her name is NOT her destiny and if she doesn’t know if her father truly WANTED to kill her, then she should get to know him better. It is very sad if you think about it that a daughter is not sure that her father would never think about harming her if he was sane.

Silver doesn't even understand why the CMC try so hard to help her. Then the Gabby Gums incident cements her view on them deep down being just the same bullies she and Diamond are. But she is insulted that Tiara didn't even ask for her assistance as a school printer. Silver saw her the last time on Hearts and Hooves day and despite everything Diamond had done and said to her she was still happy that her friend got one card from Alula. She wasn't envious but just relieved that others also cared for Diamond. Tiara herself was too broken at this point to realise it. Then Cheerilee leads the fillies into the fog and Silver's wish is merely to be reunited with Diamond. That was her only desire at this point. But eventually the heroes were able to break this illusion. And even in the dream she wasn't alone, she was hugging Applebloom. Afterwards she realises how strongly she wants to be friends with Diamond again. Silver was willing to go back into the fog to embrace that illusion again but the others and especially Cheerilee won't let her do this. Not only that but a strange grey filly with completely yellow eyes keeps leading them around the forelegs of the fog. Soon Princess Gaia is defeated and her fog is gone. As the celebration happens Silver is still terrified of her own father. Not even melting the ancestral axe into spoons and changing his own name could regain her trust. She just wants to get away from home but now that her only friend is gone, she has no other place to escape to.

But then she remembers three blank flanks that were there for her. As she arrives at their show there is only one other other guest there and the show is so violent and disturbing that Silver’s parents would never get close to this. At first she is only here to escape her own family but over time she notices how much effort the CMC had put into it and how much they enjoy to perform for others. They like her company, to them she does matter. Slowly she opens up towards them and asks if she could just spend some time with them. And they do agree without hesitation and try their hardest that she will have fun. But her hatred for Princess Gaia isn't gone and she seriously considers throwing a rock at her. Yet someone else is faster. As Fluttershy accepts this as a consequence of her action, Silver Spoon is shaken by this display of kindness. The pegasus just forgave the one pony who threw a rock into her face and will continue to try to become a better person. Not only that but Fluttercruel's part of the song of being alone and fearing to not exist also moves the filly. But Silver Spoon isn't the only one who cries and the fact that the CMC have a similar reaction allows her to not be ashamed of showing such emotions.

Silver has trouble to understand how the CMC can even work without a clear leader. She is so used to this strict leader structure from her own life and what she saw of her family that it is a genuine shock to see that there are other ways of living. And despite everything Silver believes in the CMC do work and also manage to pull off so many impressive feats for such young fillies. Maybe there is a special reason that these three are able to do all of this. Eventually Silver’s family finds her and her mother arrogantly reminds her that she doesn't need to replace Diamond with them. The filly wonders if this was really the reason that she did spend time with the other children and both Applebloom and Scootaloo are furious. But Sweetie is able to defuse the situation by pointing out VERY politely that Silver Spoon spends time with fillies of families who DO matter even in the eyes of the local Ponyville rich. At the next day Silver still needs a place to go to and since she can't reach Cloudsdale and is afraid of the "dirty" farm, the Carousel Boutique is the only option left. Rarity is shaken to see her after all that happened but eventually she allows the filly to meet her sister. Before Silver can go the white unicorn gives her the advice that she doesn't have to choose between family and friendship and that the love for one person doesn't mean that you automatically love somebody else less. Silver is actually impressed by Rarity's fame and Sweetie's good taste and merely seeing the inside of the Carousel Boutique is enough to allow her to appreciate this. The CMC allow the filly in without hesitation and talk about their show at the festival. Unsurprisingly the CMC take what Rarity and Applejack said as compliments. They can be rather dense sometimes but Rainbow did genuinely enjoy some action scenes. Yet even they noticed that nobody enjoyed violence against the bad version of Princess Celestia. Okay there was one but that was Celestia in disguise. Silver actually tries to point out why everyone hated that and saw this as bullying against the Princess. But the CMC are too innocent to really understand this argumentation and she tries to explain it in a way they can understand. Silver tells them that stories, where Applejack, Rarity or Rainbow Dash would be painted as the villains, would be an insult towards the real ones. The true heroes try so hard to do the right thing and to help others. She also reminds them at the Gabby Gums incident but before she can continue Spike walks into the room.

At first the child is terrified of the bady dragon, even as he acts friendly and calm. Silver Spoon’s reaction shows that she never met Spike and believes that all dragons eat ponies. She really had a protected lifestyle to miss something like that. The dragon lived for one year with Twilight in Ponyville and even if it would be very understandable that she wouldn’t know him, it seems strange to miss a dragon that lives in such a small town as Ponyville. But her reaction to learning that he rather eats gems is pretty hilarious. It is another thing that completely shakes her world view. While he heard that she and Diamond bullied the CMC, he is willing to give her at least some trust if the other children believe her. But he hints that this could change soon if she would hurt his friends. The dragon is here to help them with their newest plan to gain their cutie marks. It involves lighting fireworks and a living flamethrower is very useful in this situation. Apparently the last time someone let them near mere matches they managed to summon a fire elemental.

So what could go wrong this time? They also use a flux-capacitor (borrowed from Dr. Whooves), a rocket and railway tracks. That can not end well. With these items mere children were able to violate half of the known laws of physics and several unknown ones. Applebloom brought a piece of the Smooze with them but it seems that Spike is able to stop the slime very effectively. And this just happens after Applebloom sang about how nothing can stop it. Scootaloo is singing the intro theme of 3,5 generation about Rainbow Dash, herself, Cheerilee but it seems that she is no longer able to say Starsong’s name after she was erased from existence. From now on they will believe Lickety-Split’s stories and it is nice to see that Spike is smart enough to see if they have brought more unwanted passengers with them. According to Doctor Whooves they managed to travel sideways through time. I just wonder who the first one who managed to do that was. Maybe it was Twilight. So far she didn’t get a time travel adventure in the Pony POV Series. Applebloom is just happy that they didn’t alter time in their quest to learn what their cutie marks would be. By now Silver can hardly believe what they do regularly and how they keep on questing for cutie marks if they weren’t able to gain any by doing that until now. They start to think about it and eventually realise that the quests itself and the time they spend with each other is what they truly enjoy. That they are all blank flanks brought them together but what keeps them together is their friendship. So even if one of them manages to gain their cutie mark, it would not end their connection. It would be more likely that after celebrating it, the one who gains her cutie mark would try twice as hard to help the others to gain their own ones. And they think that it was more than the money of their families that brought Silver Spoon and Diamond Tiara together. But Silver Spoon realises that before her development she would have done what her parents had told her and abandoned Diamond if her family would loose their riches. The filly is absolutely shocked to realise what a puppet she was.

But the CMC are able to distract her and they move on. Silver Spoon begins to think about Spike and the age he will be able to reach and suggests that he should invest in a bank account to become rich the easy way once he is an adult. That is a very good idea. I wonder if other dragons had ever done something like that. Spike begins to share some of his tales with them and in them he is always the hero who saves Rarity from great danger like the Diamond Dogs or the giant dragon that attacked Ponyville. Thinking about it, the last one isn’t a complete lie. The fact that the dragon was Spike saved Rarity’s life. She could reach his heart. Silver has trouble to believe the fact that he is the personal assistant of Twilight Sparkle who is the Personal Apprentice of the eternal Sun Goddess herself. When you spell it out like that it does sound slightly strange… But Silver Spoon is afraid that they will just replace her now with the dragon. She fears that she will be soon forgotten and that their friendship doesn’t matter at all. In this moment she remembers what Rarity told her and has an existential crisis. She always thought that following orders would be the right thing to do and would make her a good pony. Spike pragmatically points out that blind obedience is not always a good thing and could lead to her doing horrible or self-destructive things. The dragon doesn’t allow himself to talk about the Smarty Pants incident but is able to tell them at if he had followed Twilight’s orders blindly as her sanity eroded and not warned Princess Celestia the situation could have become MUCH worse. True loyalty means standing up to your friends if they are about to make a horrible mistake. Silver remembers how strange Diamond acted and that she could have told somebody else. She knew her better then anybody, she knew that there was something very wrong with her but she was afraid of changes of her status quo and Silver kept following her. She acted like nothing was wrong.

Soon they are in their clubhouse and Silver is impressed what the fillies managed to create. There she notices that there is a locked box and the children are absolutely horrified that it might spread like an infection if they would try to throw it away or that Spike might abuse it. Then Scootaloo shows that diplomacy will not be her special talent and accidently reveals that it is the love poison. Both Silver and Spike break down laughing from the sweet tale. It is funny until you really think about it. But once they reveal that the potion completely overrides the personality with an artificial love Spike is no longer interested. He loves Rarity too much to do something like this to her. But since they ARE children they can effortless switch topics to comic books just afterwards. Scootaloo doesn’t like the newer developments like the reveal that Superstallion needs to tune out most of the cries for help or he will go insane from hearing so many cries, he will not be able to answer. Silver pragmatically points out that being a hero 100 % of the time would never allow you to rest and will kill you sooner or later. Even heroes can’t be perfect, usually overcoming their own flaws and weaknesses and still being able to stand up for others is what makes them a hero. The pegasus misses the simpler times when comics didn’t try so hard to be realistic and fantastic at the same time. And none of the fillies seem to be fans of retcons that retrospectively change the events into something fake, bring back famous dead characters or take the easy route and just say that this character turned evil because he was possessed and now he or she is good again. All these things serve the status quo. The heroes are often trapped in endless circles of heroism and if new writers appear, old character development is cancelled to make room for a fresh start (and to allow them to repeat famous stories in different forms). But Spike just enjoys the action scenes. Silver Spoon feels like the fifth wheel (and she IS the fifth member of this group) yet eventually she is willing to try a comic herself. In her privileged life her mother surely didn’t allow any room for comics. There are also a lot of references to famous comic characters: Superstallion (Superman), Batmare (Batman), ScarePony (Scarecrow), Mareneto (Magneto – Welcome to die!), Iron Pony (Iron Man), Wonder Filly (Wonder Woman) and Loki as himself.

They just enjoy they time together and Applebloom has brought them something sweet to eat. Silver is just amazed by the raw energy and endurance these other children have. But she can see that Spike also notices that this is very impressive for fillies and it is not just her fault for being too slow. Soon Scootaloo tries out some new maneuvers with her scooter and takes her friends with her. Even now Silver has trouble to understand why the pegasus should do so much for them if she doesn’t have to. Then they run into Junebug and Spike tries to apologise for what he did when he was taken over by his dragon nature. He fully admits that he was a greedy jerk but by her reaction it is clear that she is not over it and she decides to avoid him for now. Forgiveness isn’t easy. The CMC are there for him but it just reminds the dragon that he wanted to steal Scootaloo’s treasured scooter as well. Sometimes it is the hardest to forgive yourself. Silver wonders what happened to him and they basically give her the abridged version of what really happened. She doesn’t believe them. She was raised into the belief that personal secrets must be hidden and that lies are a constant companion. So she can only conclude that the fillies and the dragon share a secret. Next the Cakes appear and as Silver sees their children her first reaction is to think that Mrs. Cake must have affairs.
As Pound Cake flies around, Silver Spoon is sure that Scootaloo MUST be envious on his ability to fly.

But she isn’t anymore. At first the Pegasus was furious to being outperformed by a newborn while she was cursed with underdeveloped wings. She cried, she hated him but there was no point in being angry at him. Anger needs something to build up and if the other person doesn’t even understand what you are talking about then anger can’t grow. But Hatred is another story. Hatred can endure and seek other targets to express itself. Hatred can be like an addiction, making the person always come back for more because of the short moment when they are able to express their hatred and the pressure diminishes. But by this point Hatred will always be back. Letting it out on its own terms will never make it go away completely. The only way to free yourself from it at this point is to let go of it. Scootalloo found Fluttershy and she seemed to be the perfect target. She could take a stone thrown to her head, so something like this shouldn’t matter to her and Scootaloo would feel better afterwards. Fluttershy had to listen to a speech about how she betrayed every pegasus in existence by wasting her gift of flight. But by this point Fluttershy had joined with Flutterrage and was able to express her anger at this unprovoked attack. She takes the other pegasus to the smallest and highest cloud she can find. Here Scootaloo will neither be able to run away from Fluttershy nor from herself. Fluttershy tells her that she is acting immature even for her age and that she is small. But after her anger starts to vanish, her kindness returns and she asks her WHY she said all these hurtful things. After learning the reasons the older pegasus tells her that this is just a phase newborn pegasi can go through and that she should ask Sweetie Belle what she thinks about Pumpkin Cake outperforming her. And Sweetie Belle didn’t care about it at all and just thought that the child was cute. Now it really makes Scootaloo feel smart. Silver Spoon immediately realises that this is something her parents should have told the pegasus. But in her case… Soon Scootaloo regreted what she did and how lowly she treated Fluttershy just to be angry at somebody. It gives Silver flashbacks to when she and Diamond bullied the CMC for their blank flanks. Compared to this impressive character development the stunt show itself does almost not matter anymore but Silver is impressed of what the pegasus that is unable to fly is willing to do. That takes a lot of bravery.

Eventually Silver invites the CMC to the Ponyville Theater and the play that is happening there is a reference to the Simpsons episode where Sideshow Bob and took over Springfield as a republican mayor. Here the villain gives a similar speech about the “evil” Celestians/Republicans. It makes the CMC realise how easily the line between a satire and an insult can be crossed. It is strange how often you need somebody else to show you when you have done something wrong. Of course you thought it was the right thing to do, otherwise you wouldn’t have done it. But seeing somebody else do something very similar can sometimes make you understand what you really did. The next play is Pater Pan and they each enjoy or a moved by a different aspect of that play but overall share the same positive opinion about it. But the scene where Pan talked about never having to earn cutie marks in Never Never Land did open old wounds for Applebloom. Scoots and Sweetie immediately want to learn about her time in the Everfree Forest but she asks them to give her some time to think about it. And they are willing to wait. But eventually she shares the Story of the Blanks with them. Now Silver truly understands how strong and determined Applebloom really is. And she also understands that Ruby was the one who guided the children and their teacher through the fog of Princess Gaia. The earth pony feels better afterwards, freer and happy that her friends are willing to believe her.

But that wasn’t the biggest shock of that day for Silver Spoon. That happened just after the play. Applebloom can’t believe that Pater Pan would want to live without his family and Scootaloo has also trouble with this idea because of her own experiences. But Silver talks way too adult about how family merely cares for you so that you will carry on their legacy. It is somewhat disturbing to hear this from a little child. By now her own connection to her family is so dead that she is merely able to see family as a function to continue life. Applebloom instantly tells her that family is about more and that families raise their children out of love. It is really heart-breaking to hear Scootaloo talk about how wonderful family is and how it should be. While her biological family is not there for her, her connection to Rainbow Dash is so strong that she is able to understand how a family should be. But Sweetie Belle understands that this is about Silver’s own family and asks her if she really does believe that they don’t love her. At this point Silver Spoon only seems to see herself as an investment for her family and that she is not even her own person. Spike doesn’t believe that she truly thinks that.

In return Silver screams that they know nothing about her but Applebloom calmly points out that her parents did seem worried about her at the festival. Spike, Applebloom and Scootaloo no longer have their parents with them and in the case of the dragon he never even got to meet his mother or father. The privileged filly just wants to run away but she will never outrun these energetic friends. Applebloom would be willing to do almost anything to meet her parents for another day and Scootaloo reminds her that she can be happy that she still has her parents. The pegasus isn’t feeling superior, she just wants to the other filly to understand that she still has a family that loves her on her side. As Scootaloo cries Silver feels hurt and is shocked to realise that seeing her crying was something she and Diamond always found hilarious when they bullied the CMC. Despite her parents so often avoiding her, Sweetie Belle still would never be willing to live in a world without her parents. She knows that they love her and asks Silver if she truly wanted to live in a world without her parents. Finally she is able to understand that her mother panicked after her child got injured because she loved her that much. The earth pony is forced to realise that her parents do love her. It shocks her to understand how horribly she had treated them and she starts to cry.

But her friends are with her. Applebloom says that she should let it all out. The Cakes walk over to them and wonder why she is crying. They give Silver a place where she can cry without everybody else seeing it. As they ask for nothing in return, she just can’t understand their kindness or the patience of her friends. She thought was alone all the time. She thought that they have no reason to help her. When Silver asks them why they are doing this for a stranger, they merely say that there are NO strangers in Ponyville. Finally the filly understands that she was never alone but decided to be alone. All this time she could have reached out for help and she would have gotten it. Again she is reminded how cruel she treated her parents and she doesn’t even remember the last time she hugged them or told them that she loved them. After that she was told Applebloom’s story and soon it is time to go back to their families.

Eventually only Silver and Applebloom are left. It is hard for her but Silver Spoon is able to admit that she enjoyed the day she spent with the CMC. They didn’t get their cutie marks but what does that matter compared to the wonderful day they just had? Silver still thinks way too adult and pragmatic and wonders if a day with an unreached goal might be a waste but they did achieve one goal: They spent time with the persons they loved. Silver Spoon always took her own friendship with Diamond Tiara for granted. That was just how her life was like. But now that her life did change, Silver Spoon began to change with it. She is finally able to see how much the filly she merely bullied before had managed to do despite lacking everything she once thought was important. Now she decides that it is time to think about her father and walk home before he gets worried. But before they go their own ways Silver pleads the other filly to not loose her friends or the loneliness in her heart will leave her empty. Both decide to meet again but before the day is over Applebloom has to admit something. She once thought that Diamond Tiara’s and Silver Spoon’s cutie marks and destinies were useless. It really hurts to hear that from a friend but the earth pony did change her mind. It happened on Family Appreciation Day when Silver was the first one to applaud Granny Smith despite knowing what her one and only friend Diamond wanted to happen. Only then did she notice that Silver Spoon’s cutie mark contains more than you can see at the first glance. There is a little heart on the handle of the spoon. And she showed at the festival and on this day they just had how kind she really can be. Applebloom wonders if Diamond also has something good hidden under the role of the bully.

Silver has to admit that even she never really noticed the heart or thought about it. Merely getting her cutie mark is not the end, it is only the beginning of her journey to herself. Soon Applebloom visits another friend she hasn’t spend time with for quite a while. And as Silver Spoon walks back home, she is finally able to call her father “daddy” again.

The story ends with Twilight organising the notes of the interviewers and really enjoying it. She realised that every life in Ponyville has its own tale to tell, its own struggles, its own failures, its own triumphs and its own journey. These lives are all connected to together they are much more than the sum of the individual pieces. They all write their own tale themselves. Twilight knows that truly writing them all down is impossible but these few stories allow at least a glimpse into the very soul of Ponyville.

Overall this was a wonderful story driven by character development. There was no villain to fight or a catastrophe to prevent. It was the story of a lost soul and how others managed to guide her back to the light. Silver Spoon was more then simply the second bully from the very beginning. She had a backstory and her own views that shaped her into the person the others were only able to view as a bully. And if her life hadn’t changed that drastically she could have been unable to ever become more than a bully.

The sudden changes and hardships nearly broke her completely. But the Cutie Mark Crusaders were there for her. And slowly she did open up towards them. Even as she still followed some of her old ideology they showed her that there are other ways to live and that she can find happiness. And in the end she is able to embrace what she has learned and her new friends allow her to love her family again.

Spread your wings little butterfly. You will be able to fly high.
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Jared55 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
I don't know how i found this story, but i'm glad i did. Such an interesting read. I am looking forward to the other stories as well.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
Thanks!

This was one of my favorite chapters in the series as a whole.

What happens when the satellite character no longer has that character to orbit around? Of course in fiction, when they happen to orbit the local 1-D bully, they normally just dissolve into nothingness, but what happens if they didn't?

That question is explored here. Silver Spoon has defined her life based around Diamond Tiara for so long, so what happens when she's no longer around to give her definition? 
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Jared55 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
Yes it was definitely an interesting read. Although i looked at all the stories you have available ... I got a lot of reading to do. But first I'll finish this current series. After that well i guess I'll start from the back, and work my way forward.
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ardashir Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013

Great to read this one again. And I love the cover image.

 

"Well, you see, lots of ponies love the Princess, so um," I'm more used to dishing this out than explaining it. "What if someone did a show where your big sisters were shown as mean nasty ponies? And Scootaloo, what if someone did a show where your teacher was a sadist who threw fillies into the Pegasus Machine?"

 

Hmm, maybe someone should tell the poor fillies that it's been done. To death.

 

"Well, we didn't learn what our Cutie Marks were going to be. What do you think those humans in business suits meant by 'cancelled?' " Scootaloo asked.

"Who cares? It's not like it's the end of the universe," Applebloom said as thunder boomed in the far distance.

 

Did we just hear Mother Entropy growl there? And given what happened in that little trip, I kind of wish we could have seen it happen rather than merely read about it, as fun as that is.

 

"I think they've never even been to Canterlot," Spike added, I wonder what he knew about that. "It's still not as bad as that last play though. What's the fun of a giant battle with everypony apologizing every five seconds?"

 

I somehow never thought to ask -- just which story or movie or whatever is this a reference to?

 

I still love this chapter!

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ItsfromPeople Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
Her cutie mark looks pretty beautiful like this. It does remind me a bit of an exotic blade, like the ones you see in many RPGs.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
Given how her cutie mark become a small but important plot point, I felt it was proper. 
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KurseofKings Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
"Who cares? Look at Iron Pony punch Loki in the face! Ka-pow!" Doesn't Iron Mare sound better?
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
Can't have them all be named 'Mare'. I have Batmare after all. 
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TheOneBehindYou Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Student Writer
I really love this fanfiction series, even if Season 3 is coming out, this will always be my head-cannon for an Alternate Universe of the ponies lives.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012
*hugs*
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TheOneBehindYou Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Student Writer
~is hugged~ o.o.... owo ~hugs back~
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Pewycert Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012
Wait, so who was doing the interviews? Celestia? Or do we not know yet?
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012
No it was not Celestia. The identity of the Interviewers becomes a major plot point as the story moves on.
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DracoDei Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
SPOILER ALERT!!!






"Friends and family are both incredibly important things to have, don't ever throw away either. And just because you love one pony, doesn't make you love another pony less."
-Some lingering trace of Princess Gaia's power, much like the butterflies in the hospital(s)?

I'm a good pony right? I always do what I'm told, that makes me a good pony right?
-No, by the D&D alignment grid(a useful tool) that makes you Lawful... probably Lawful Neutral at the moment heading from Lawful Evil to Lawful Good.

"What if it was somepony important? And they knew something you didn't?"
-Good points, but still just excuses in this context.

Twilight had done something bad, and Spike knew it, but if he said it now, he'd be stabbing her in the back.
-Lesson Zero, going into Trixie's mind herself instead of leaving it to professionals (although that worked out for the best) or something else? This also shows that SS KNOWS a lot of what she is being told is wrong, because she said she recognized the look.

Big part of being loyal to someone is to know when they -wouldn't- be telling you to do something if their head was on right."
Diamond Tiara's snarling face flashed in my head.
"I see," I whispered.
-Good progress.

"'Some?' Applebloom, this place was good as condemned when we first saw it."
-Careful there, you might have to actually give them their marks in another 20 chapters or so... not that that would be a bad thing for the continuity since you aren't laboring under "episodes should be watchable in any order".

Well, it wasn't fantastic or anything,
-No, you had it right the first time... trust your instincts here.

but the idea that one Earth Pony had been able to put all this together, I was left in awe.
-This coming from someone who is/was best friends with a Earth-Pony Surpemicist.

I also noticed a small box in the corner, covered in locks and chains and 'danger do not open!' 'This means you!' stickers with the lid welded shut.
-And this is where I realized I must have already written out my review for the rest of this chapter and give up in disgust since it won't be a blind read any more and I also HATE redoing work (even if it is fun THE FIRST TIME). I shall move on to the next chapter now.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013
""Friends and family are both incredibly important things to have, don't ever throw away either. And just because you love one pony, doesn't make you love another pony less."
-Some lingering trace of Princess Gaia's power, much like the butterflies in the hospital(s)?"

Naw. This one has nothing to do with lingering magic of Princess Gaia.


"I'm a good pony right? I always do what I'm told, that makes me a good pony right?
-No, by the D&D alignment grid(a useful tool) that makes you Lawful... probably Lawful Neutral at the moment heading from Lawful Evil to Lawful Good."

Indeed. If an ignorant child can be called evil.

"What if it was somepony important? And they knew something you didn't?"
-Good points, but still just excuses in this context."

In other words, it's a good argument, for the wrong reasons.


"Twilight had done something bad, and Spike knew it, but if he said it now, he'd be stabbing her in the back.
-Lesson Zero, going into Trixie's mind herself instead of leaving it to professionals (although that worked out for the best) or something else? This also shows that SS KNOWS a lot of what she is being told is wrong, because she said she recognized the look."

Lesson Zero, something Spike doesn't want to bring up. And it has to do with her being part of the upper class and learning from those around her how to recognize tells.

"Big part of being loyal to someone is to know when they -wouldn't- be telling you to do something if their head was on right."
Diamond Tiara's snarling face flashed in my head.
"I see," I whispered.
-Good progress."

Yes indeed. Silver Spoon IS incredibly loyal to Tiara, but she doesn't understand the full meaning of loyalty.

"'Some?' Applebloom, this place was good as condemned when we first saw it."
-Careful there, you might have to actually give them their marks in another 20 chapters or so... not that that would be a bad thing for the continuity since you aren't laboring under "episodes should be watchable in any order"."

20? More like 60 or a 100 by my count.

"Well, it wasn't fantastic or anything,
-No, you had it right the first time... trust your instincts here."

Ironic. And you're right.

"but the idea that one Earth Pony had been able to put all this together, I was left in awe.
-This coming from someone who is/was best friends with a Earth-Pony Surpemicist."

Silver Spoon's family never actuall bought into it. And Filthy Rich's prejudice is only as old as his change to Onyx Tiara.

"I also noticed a small box in the corner, covered in locks and chains and 'danger do not open!' 'This means you!' stickers with the lid welded shut.
-And this is where I realized I must have already written out my review for the rest of this chapter and give up in disgust since it won't be a blind read any more and I also HATE redoing work (even if it is fun THE FIRST TIME). I shall move on to the next chapter now."

That contains the rest of the love poison.

Sorry for the long wait.  
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
You never finished it I believe.
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DracoDei Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
SPOILER ALERT!!!


-Ok, so I decided to keep reading, and it turned out that I might not have gotten very far past

where my first post ended. Incidently, I don't promise I hit the high standards of alertness I

mentioned as being the lacking quality keeping me from continuing my reviews, but I figured you

would prefer it this way, since I DO forget (more than I am used to in past years actually) and

besides speed over quality has SOME advantages. I am PRETTY good though, so I doubt the quality

will suffer much from tiredness. EDIT: Not even going to check the spelling on this after I

copy-paste it from notepad.




Why do the authors always have to make the old stories be holograms, or a diversion, or that

pony was possessed and didn't really turn evil after his city got blown up and he wanted to

reset the universe to fix it?"
-How very meta... I approve.

"Superstallion needs to tune out ninety-nine percent of the cries for help around the world he

hears with his super hearing to keep from going crazy?"
-I recommend inserting "Do you think" at the start of this sentence.

Eventually I eyed a copy of Wonder Filly and inched my way through the panels.
-Inching her way because she isn't sure she wants to be involved in anything that the CMC are?

"We did that last week." Scootaloo didn't look up.
-Remarkably reasonable given that two of them are basically the younger sisters of a Sentai team

or something. Not to mention the whole RD vs Mare-Do-Well thing.

usually before they were even picked from what Applebloom said.
-So they take pre-orders for the zap-apples, but not the cider? I guess that is reasonable.

No, like they were all cut from different cloths, but complimented each other perfectly.
-Just friendship, or Destined Friendship, as defined by the ending of "The Cutie-Mark

Chronicles"? The first is more philosophically meaningful for the reader so that is what I am

going with until proven otherwise.

Dragging along an extra pony and one dragon was taking its toll on Scootaloo
-Wait, was she practicing tricks that involved keeping the wagon ATTACHED? Probably not, since

SS doesn't mention or noticably gloss over any screaming in terror or vomiting (nor tree-sap

removal).

she wasn't a servant, so why wouldn't she?
-1.) Not actually a servant. 2.) Not everypony has those as bad as your parents for a boss. I

mean look at Pinkie. Granted Pinkie is an outlier in as much as she redefines the meaning of the

word "upbeat"... or at least used to, and may have simply told the Cakes she was moving in with

them, and proceeded from there, thus not really being a servant technically...

Don't ask me what flowers have to do with a beetle that shows up during the summer.
-What does "Pinkemena Diane Pie" have to do with partying? Also, you can't be using your

Cutie-mark talent 24/7...

She politely greeted us but looked hesitant around Spike.
-Took this for me to remember who she was.

"Er, June, sorry about last time, I was kinda just excited about everything," the purple dragon

said profusely to her. "I didn't mean to bother you like that... Actually I did. I was being a

greedy jerk and I'm sorry."
-Took him this long to appologize to her? I guess he was more focused on cleaning up than

appologizing to everyone he had "swindled" (or maybe even robbed).

Apparently used to dealing with plants more than people the yellow pony replied, "Um, okay,

that's alright, I think, uh, I have a lot to do right now so, I don't mean to cut this short

but-"
-The color and the "used to dealing with plants more than people" makes me wonder if she might

be a distant (or not so distant?) relative of Fluttershy's.

"Twilight explained, it was just a phase all dragons go through, right?"
-Extrapolating a conclusion based on only one data-point? Seems Twilight put diplomacy ahead of

accuracy... or Scootaloo is SLIGHTLY misremembering and she actually said "For all we know it

could be a phase that all dragons go through."

A filly like me raised to be a part of the game of little white lies and blatant falsehoods?

They'd have better luck trying to outstare a cockatrice.
-Ah, so they are INTENTIONALLY shading the truth? Perhaps about Spike being the giant dragon?

Then again he was shouting his name every other minute so I don't see how it COULDN'T be common

knowledge. Granted SS might be that sheltered, but I'm not sure the CMC would know that.

They had the same 'he did something bad, but would hurt him to say what' look Spike had talking

about Twilight earlier.
-Huh... I wonder if when she graduates from "Real Friendship Kindergarden" Dash will be one of

her next teachers... wait, she has Scootaloo, which is almost as good as far as "lessons from

Rainbow Dash" goes.

They were, a pegasus and unicorn? How did that work? I wondered if Mrs. Cake had been seeing

other stallions.
-So she doesn't know it can work that way? Is it really rare? Nah, probably just FAIRLY rare,

and she hadn't heard of it. Then again, maybe Mr Cake has reproductive problems he doesn't like

to talk about, and they were feeling especially egalitarian when they hit the sperm-bank? Or

maybe Gaia messed something up? Or Discord did (I can just see him setting it up so she would

look unfaithful to the max), and since it wasn't HARMFUL the Elemental Harmony Blast didn't fix

it? Seems unlikely it wouldn't change it back though.


Then I got a double helping of confusion and surprise when the baby pegasus began -flying-! In

diapers, not looking a year old, and flying!
-Just sheltered then... Rainbow Dash predicted it I think... or maybe she just said he would be

a handful WHEN it happened, and it is only unicorn magic surges that are well-documented?

Less strange was the giant flood of purple slime I saw earlier today (or five thousand years ago

depending how you did the math).
-She was along on that? Must have been a while since I read (and if I reread starting from the

Gaia arc again I will get distracted and it will be another month before I start reviewing

again).

I took one look at her and saw... she as happily waving at the flying baby?
-Scootaloo has never seemed to be unhappy about being unable to fly. Besides which, she has a

REALLY good teacher now, which means she has hope. And, or course, she is too nice to begrudge

others success in areas that are poor for her. It has been noted that she and Sweetie didn't

even have a split second of envy showing in "The Cutie-Pox".

Maybe I was poking the Ursa with a stick, but my curiosity this time wouldn't let me go.
-This will turn out well, with Scootaloo explaining some or all of the points I mentioned,

although not as pridefully as to call herself "nice" and not mentioning that Rainbow Dash is

teaching her... and is the "Ursa" Scootaloo's supposed sore point about not knowing how to fly?

It felt like something Diamond Tiara would say, it gave me comfort. But... it was different, I

wasn't trying to hurt her, it was pure curiosity... That felt strange.
-Good point, and I wonder if Scootaloo WILL be sore, thus demonstrating the difference between

goodness and tact. Actually, SS probably has tact coming out of her little pointy ears _when she

decides to use it_.

I'll admit, when I first saw Pound Cake flying, I was hurting inside, it was awful. I've been

struggling to fly with wings that just won't grow all my life.
-Ah, so it DOES hurt. Didn't think it was a medical condition though... I don't remember RD

wondering about getting her to a doctor. Of course, maybe she knows enough that she is confident

in her diagnosis, and that the perscription would be "physical therapy" which Rainbow Dash

considers herself competent to provide given she probably paid CLOSE attention in health class,

and IS a leader-type (see: training MOST of the Ponyville pegasi in Hurricane Fluttershy).

"I actually ran and cried where no pony could see me. I actually -hated- him. A stupid baby and

I hated him. Or I thought I did. All my effort, all my sore wings and bruises and cracked hollow

bones, and he's flying around without even learning. But I couldn't be angry at a little baby

who didn't even care if I hated him or not!
-Do hollow bones take longer to heal? Or is she just underling how her body is adapted to flight

in most ways, and so she WANTS to fly? In any case this is even better than her being that

mature from the beginning. It also makes me think that Pound may be a prodigy, since she doesn't

mention having felt that way before. Maybe because RD's isn't the only cloud-home so she doesn't

see most pegasus foals, but she saw him since the Cakes live on the ground?

"I needed something, anything to lash out at, something I could just be angry at and feel good

about being angry, somepony I could treat like they weren't even a person and not feel the least

bit guilty about.
-Wow... REMARKABLY close to home with SS. Of course, we will see how long it takes SS to realize

it...

I snapped and told her how much I hated her squandering her gift of being a pegasus.
-Let me guess... Fluttershy has a legitimate disability too? Nah, probably not. Probably in the

middle of the bell-curve genetically for most things, and maybe a bit higher for speed, and

REALLY out of shape due to her anxieties keeping her from flying as much.

She then took me up to the smallest and highest cloud she could find and dropped me on top of

it. I was scared stiff.
-Recommend removing the word "then". Also, I wonder if 'Cruel will just be making a point while

she talks to her, or will be seriously threatening to leave her up there, at least before 'Shy

reigns her in. I also note that either this is before the post-Gaia party(but I don't think it

is), Fluttershy didn't tell all of Ponyville about 'Cruel, or Scootaloo hasn't internalized the

idea that there are two souls in that body now.

She told she had already stopped pretending to be an Earth Pony in a pegasus' body.
-In other words she WAS doing that, but trailed off over the course of the series to date?

Then her whole attitude changed and asked me what was really bothering me, that kind of

surprised me.
-Right, Scootaloo doesn't know about 'Cruel.

She apologized and said that all foals start out like that. Their gifts go wild when they're

little but settle down as they get older and they learn how to actually use them.
-Ah... a popular theory, but for some reason this chapter seemed to imply you weren't using it.

She then told me to ask Sweetie Belle how she felt about Pumpkin Cake.
-Good point...

"And Sweetie thought Pumpkin was just cute. When I brought up Pumpkin being able to do magic,

Sweetie wondered if I was being weird. She didn't care. She said all unicorns go through magic

surges, but that doesn't make them magic prodigies. So yeah, I felt kinda small then."
-The more you know... (rainbow).


"Didn't your parents teach you that sort of thing if it was common for all ponies?"
-Ok, more lies coming up... or SS gets the honor of keeping a secret.


"Blank flanks! Blank flanks!"
I shook my head free of the memory.
-Well, that was medium fast of her to make the connection.

It was like a parasprite eating at the back of my mind.
-Poor analogy, parasprites are FAST eaters.

But it was daring, and that's after the whole time travel episode we'd began the day with. Made

me wonder how this pony hadn't broken her neck already.
-Because she would have already had her cutie-mark if she weren't so blind, and she is cut from

the same cloth as Rainbow Dash... or maybe I should say "has cut herself"?

"HEY! You ponies want to see a real show? My family has a tab at the Ponyville Theater! We can

watch as many shows as we want!"
-I wonder if this IS before the Gaia celebration, and this is what inspired them to try theater

again?

"Your guilty conscience may make you vote for Lunacrats, but in your hearts you know you want

the Celestians in charge who will strip you of your freedoms and rule you like a king! And when

they get in! I get out! Me and all my criminal buddies! Bwahahahha!" Cackled the villain as the

ponies dressed up as royal guards dragged him off stage.
-Please tell me this ISN'T a real world political commentary in any way?

How does that bit even fit in with the rest of the story?"
Sweetie Belle said, "I'm starting to think the fella' who wrote this play doesn't like Princess

Celestia."
-Is it going over their heads, or is it really an shoe-horned in political commentary by the

play-write? I wonder if SS will explain matters to them to one degree or another?

"Ah think whoever wrote this play has never MET Princess Celestia!"
-Well, Applebloom not withstanding, I doubt MOST Ponies have ever really met her per se.

"Ah think whoever wrote this play has never MET Princess Celestia!"
-Given that Celestia is, by word of a writer, basically Spike's MOTHER in his earlier years...

and he grew up there... does SS not know that?

What's the fun of a giant battle with everypony apologizing every five seconds?"
-Shakespere?

"I promise. You girls will like this next one."
-The one they will put on? Or maybe just something half as violent? Or maybe a dramatization of

the defeat of Nightmare Moon (in other words a story about their idols)? That last seems

unlikely given how Rarity is still struggling for name recognition, but maybe that play hasn't

made it out of Ponyville yet?

The title of the next show read 'Pater Pan.'
-Complete with pixie-dust? I wonder if it duplicates the effects of Twilight's wing-spell or

just skips the wings? Certainly the CMC would fit in with "The Lost Foals"... except for the

fact that they VERY MUCH want to "grow up" in one particular way. EDIT: Also, even after reading

forward to after they are back at the club-house, I am not getting the pun with "Pater" which

would mean "father" which would be entirely opposite of the themes of the character, which makes

me think it might be a typo.

They could be done with unicorn magic sure, but it had been part of the play's original style,

and the theater had wanted to stay true to that.
-Interesting point... my own fanon is that the only reason Twilight has never thought to try to

fly under her own TK is that it is horribly dangerous since a single second's lapsed

concentration can put you into a feedback-loop of terror and plumpeting. I actually have a

plot-bunny about her finally teaching herself how to never need to worry about falling off a

cliff again.

Though Applebloom did find the idea of an Earth Pony flying without wings thanks to Flutterpony

Dust down right enchanting.
-Well, that covers that... although I didn't guess "Flutterpony" which seems obvious in

retrospect.

Spike of course was cheering for the crocodile.
-LOL! ... I wonder what Pinkie would think about the whole situation given she owns Gummy?

I think I heard Sweetie Belle sniffle a bit at the end where Pan met Wendy Bird again as an old

mare.
-For some reason this seems meaningful to me, with Rarity having very definite ideas about

grace-in-old-age to defend her mind from the specter of being old and ugly... or maybe she

wasn't entirely faking real fear of it when she broke down in fake tears when the Diamond Dogs

called her a mule?

"Ever since the part where Pan talked about how foals never had to earn their cutie marks in

Never Never Land you looked scared."
-Makes sense. I wonder if SS will use her outsider's perspective to try to get them on the right

tracks?

"It just reminds me, of when I was alone in the Everfree Forest."
-Oh... yeah... didn't make that connection... ouch... How much does SS know about that? Probably

nothing. A BIT surprised that Spike knows about it.

"Really?" Scoots and Sweetie got into her personal space. "When? How? Why?"
-Apparently Scootaloo and SB HAVEN'T heard that story...

"I... want a bit to think it over."
-Buying time against the fear? Trying to decide if she wants SS and/or Spike to know?

How much time she'd have to tell it was another matter. Celestia's sun was going to be setting

soon enough.
-Giving yourself an excuse to say they put it off? Or maybe they will have a sleepover and that

will be the ghost story... and as such won't entirely be believed... or maybe it WILL be

believed and none of them will sleep a wink... or WILL but only after a lot of comforting and

then they will sleep all huddled together... maybe including SS?

No. I'm not going to tell you what Applebloom told me, Spike, Sweetie and Scootaloo.
-Well, that answers that question...

But I'll never think of Applebloom as weak, or 'just' a blank ever again.
-Progress... and she IS the little sister of a well-rounded athlete, and S.M.A.T. member.

And I'll never look at Everfree Forest the same way again either.
-More scared of it? Or maybe recognizing it as necessary in some way?

The bigger knocking to me happened as we trotted back to the clubhouse.
-Suggest "knock".

"The day he was born? Because he didn't like what his parents were planning for him?" Scootaloo

asked.
-Ah, yes, close to home... think I may have actually missed this... maybe I am more out of it

than I thought?

"Your parents are just there to provide for you, to make sure you carry on their legacy. If you

could live without them, why wouldn't you?" I breathed out.
-Those may be the saddest words she has ever spoken... I wonder if Scootaloo will spill the

beans in a angry speech about how she... wait, no... Scootaloo ran away, so she might agree with

her. Applebloom OTOH probably misses her parents very much (especially if they are dead, which

seems to be the popular fanon).

and Scootaloo turned and looked at me like I was crazy.
-So... maybe I am mis-remembering and Scootaloo either was abandoned, or got over not liking her

parents after being away from them for a while, but by that time she couldn't easily find them

again?

"Why not? Parents just make you. Like something at a factory. You're around only because they

know they won't be forever."
-Wow... I would think that one statement would be enough to get Foal Protective Services

interested (At least if they thought they had a chance against such influential ponies?)

although not necessarily enough to take action on even when proven to be actually the way her

parents treat her (maybe less so after the Day of Discord, but she is too afraid of her dad to

notice?).

"Parents don't 'make' ya, they raise ya! They don't build ya, they rear ya! Parents look after

ya, they're there for ya! They love ya! They teach ya how ta be a mare!"
-But first they DO decide they WANT to do all that, which would SLIGHTLY support SS's

position... but many start with the "Love" part.

Or that's what parents are SUPPOSED to be!"
-She talking about both hers and SS's, or just SS's? Again, it has been a while and I forget

what vague details you gave about how Scootaloo ended up seperated from her parents.

Feeling scared I trotted back several paces, the fillies just trotted along with me.
-So they are facing her down? If so, I would consider replacing the second "trotted" with

"moved" or even "matched my travel".

Sweetie Belle asked, the look in her eyes.
-The look of "I'm keeping a secret"? Doesn't seem likely. Determined? "You are crazy"?

I'm not a pony to them!"
-I wonder if that, at some level, means she realizes that they aren't typical? Probably not. I

mean if there are exactly two people out of hundreds each pony knows who don't consider them a

person to make it a non-trivial deviation from the average of how one pony looks at another.

"Girlie. I don't buy that," Spike said.
-Huh, and here I thought she was being accurate up until now. Guess she has a false preception.

"Yer ma and pa sure seemed worried at the festival to me."
-Ok, so that DID already happen then.

"You could have everything you want, and it would STILL SUCK without your mom there with you!"
-I wonder if he is thinking of Celestia, Twilight, or his biological mother?

"If Ah could have just one more day with mah parents I'd trade mah mane for it!"
-Well, that confirms that...

If this had been weeks earlier and we saw her crying, I'd have just followed Diamond Tiara in

MAKING her cry... So why did I feel like this now?!
-Because the CMC have induced Growth in you to a certain extent... and, to your credit, that

required your cooperation to one degree or another.

They weren't in my family's employ, why didn't they ask for a favor in return? Diamond would

tell me they were just serving the upper class ponies. But they weren't being submissive about

it either!
-So blind...


"How much?" I managed to croak to the Cakes as we left.
"Eh?" Mr. Cake responded confused.
-Oh dear... she thinks they want to be paid... or thinks that her father paid them to ensure his

investment was safe... or a combination in which they will be hitting her father up for money,

perhaps with minor black-mail threats about letting their customers know they found SS crying.


"How much will you charge my parents for helping me?"
-Ok, last guess was right.

the tone he used, it was so strange,
-Not sure what tone to imagine, even after seeing the words he says.

"There are no strangers in Ponyville."
-Nice... I guess some cities are harder than that though.

It was like being hit by a gail wind.
-Odd choice of analogy, but it works VERY well actually. Doesn't seem the sort of thing that would hit especially hard with her, but I guess it is probably more the context of having been helped so unexpectedly, rather than the specific explaination he is giving.

In Ponyville, there was no such thing as a stranger. All this time I thought I was alone, there were so many I could've turned to but I never realized it...
-Oh, I see.

My parents. When was the last I had even tried to hug them? When was the last time I had even said I loved them? What kind of cruel filly was I?
-Interesting point. I wonder if she had given up and they had improved post-Discord and/or post-Gaia, or if it is just that she will be trying again, and thus being a good pony even if nothing comes of it per se?

Applebloom as promised told her story, and as I said I realized how strong she really was.
-Good reminder of the chronology. Keeps all the ideas together for the reader since you aren't jumping back to AB telling the story and what came of it emotionally for SS. You are just mentioning it here as a reminder of the order of events.

Don't ask me why I stuck around to the end.
-Because you are hungry Friendship (its magic don't'ja know?).

"Thank you.
-If she doesn't say this much, I think you want "words" not "word"... or maybe "you" gets used often enough and she is being pretty literal.

"But that makes it a waste."
-Priorities are ALL wrong. She is _actually more oblivious than a Crusader_... WOW... that really puts things in context.

But she'd done more with herself than I ever had.
-A good point to recognize...

But Ah used to tell myself that you and Diamond Tiara's Cutie Marks were just useless, that yah had no real purpose.
-Well, I would agree with everything but the last 6 words.

There's that little heart right there in the handle of it.
-Interesting point!

It was something even I had never noticed before...
-Try "thought about" instead of "noticed". I rather suspect she might have spent some time gazing fondly at it (I bet most ponies do...).

But that doesn't mean I'm done finding out about it...
-Good way of looking at it. Although it does rather put the cart before the horse as far as how the Cutie-Marks actually work I think... I mean they COULD have meaning deeper than what the pony understands, but I think they only have as much meaning in their actual icongraphy as the pony has in their understanding of their special talent at the moment they get their mark.

"Hiya Twist."
-Is Twist one of the reporters now? Perhaps via the Foal Free Press? Probably not.

"Whao, eith, be my guesth."
-Seeing SS made AB realize she needed to rebuild this old friendship?

"Daddy? I'm home."
-Three words for a scene? One of the Dark Tower series by Stephen King has a chapter 4 words long, so I approve.

various points of view of Ponyville's population of ponies.
-I was going to say this seemed like awkward phrasing, but then I realized it was a reference to the series-title... "Point of View"

Like any bout of organizing it's proven to be relaxing and comforting to me.
-So VERY Twilight...

and I think I understand why you gave me this assignment.
-Studying the role of friendship in emotional survival?

So in future generations, if they wish to explore the Ponyville that existed after Equestria was saved from eternal chaos, all they need do is explore our books.
-Ah... and in this case "emotional survival" as the final step of victory against that fiend...


Each of us has a story to tell, but no one pony can hope to write them all down. So we'll do our best to write down but a few to get a glimpse of our world to future generations.
-Is this susposed to make the world feel bigger to your reader, or get them to understand why you can't write everything they want to see, or what?
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Jarkes Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012
Wait, if the G3 timeline doesn't exist anymore, then how did the CMC, Spike, and Silver Spoon travel there?

Also, you have no idea how much I wish something like this could happen on the actual show... There were several points during this one where I almost started crying...
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012
"Wait, if the G3 timeline doesn't exist anymore, then how did the CMC, Spike, and Silver Spoon travel there?"

Traveled sideways through time and broke SEVERAL laws of physics remembers?

"Also, you have no idea how much I wish something like this could happen on the actual show... There were several points during this one where I almost started crying..."

It runs with a basic question I have in mind often.
Can a genuinely bad person become a genuinely good one?
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Jarkes Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012
"Traveled sideways through time and broke SEVERAL laws of physics remembers?"

Huh, good point.

"It runs with a basic question I have in mind often.
Can a genuinely bad person become a genuinely good one?"

Yeah, I've noticed that that's one of the overarching themes of this series.
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DracoDei Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Copying this over from where I accidentally posted it on the wrong chapter.

SPOILER ALERT!!!
(Part 1 of what I hope will ONLY be 2 parts to my review of this chapter)










Just pretend to agree when Mr. Rich/Tiara talks about how only Earth Ponies earn what they have

dad says.
-Well, at least she still is pretending (or thinks she is... it is a fuzzy line, but the fact

that she thinks it is a hopeful sign regardless of the finer details).

What are those pegasus doing-?!
-Do you mean "pegasi", is SHE making a mistake, or do you have the plural being the same as the

singular in your concept?

like they were fighting over a doll.
-Forshadowing... I wonder if that actually happened in this time-line and if she was involved in

it if it did?

Holding the spoon shaped battle axe
-Good clarification of a point I had wondered about for a while.

My hide was now shimmering silver, but it was soft like tin foil. I poked it, and I pierced my

skin.
-So is she hollow inside? I wonder if she could have (painfully) survived decapitation if so.

I bled
-Not hollow then.

and left a trail <SNIP> I thought if I made myself small enough he couldn't find me.
-Yeah, the blood-trail is going to make hiding hard assuming her father is thinking clearly in

that regard, which, knowing Discord, he probably is.

I lost a good deal of my tail as I scurried out like a rat as the axe came down through my

mattress.
-Dad knows how to swing the thing apparently (maybe part of the Discording, maybe not)...

actually it could be a magically enhanced spoon/battle-axe.

I was stabbed by my own bones when I tried to put weight on two of my hooves.
-Brittle silver bones? Nah, probably just the natural result of jumping off a balcony. Then

again AJ did the equivalent multiple times with only minor injury. So probably brittle silver

bones countering her earth-pony toughness.

"Dust Mop! Clean Dishes! Somepony! Call a doctor!"
-Took me a second to realize that the first two sentences are the names of servants. Also, it is

interesting that the World Healing Wave didn't reverse secondary effects like the injuries

(wouldn't have been surprised if it didn't reverse death, but short of that I would have

thought...). Then again maybe she IS healed and but since he remembers having hurt her... Yeah,

her missing a few weeks of school with broken legs would be noticeable. Then again you may have

said that school didn't resume for that long.

I was really leaving a big red stain on our ancestral family rug.
-Ok, so secondary effects aren't covered. Or at least not all of them.

Guess that wasn't a wash rag on her flank after all.
-Is this on the subject of the mutability of cutie-marks? Were you the one who had Cheerilee's

cutie-mark really representing gardening? Or did Clean ______ go through a period of CMFIS after

that, then recover(perhaps it is expected and the colleges have programs to prevent/treat that

that they can refer ponies to)?

outside of,
-Retcon, or just the fact that Discord focused MOST of his attentions on Ponyville and Canterlot

Castle making her think there IS an outside that is still within the borders of Equestria?

Are these going to scar?! Will she walk again?!
-The order is telling, but at least she is back to caring about her daughter.

with that red cross all medical ponies seem to have of some sort as their cutie mark.
-with that red cross all medical ponies seem to have some varient of as their cutie mark.

Skin mended, bones reconnected. He was apparently the best.
-And Rainbow Dash doesn't have as good of medical insurance? Probably retcon.

I didn't have a single scar you could see.
-See through her coat, or see because the scars are on her soul? Nice ambiguity...

When he came next I just tried to hide.
-Well, that is progress.

Then came the time to get up and go to school again.
-Or maybe she DID receive the same level of care as RD, and it is just a matter of it taking

time for the fusing to completely bond?

The first day I wore contacts that made my eyes red, it was unbearable.
-Good point to bring up.

I tried to go with neither. Falling down the stairs twice cured me of that fear.
-I don't know if that would "cure", just overpower it with a greater fear.

That hayseed blank Apple bloom finally got her cutie mark, and spent all day showing it off at

school.
-Retcon of "The Cutie-Pox" or did I forget and you had her get her mark for real? Probably not

the second.

Then she went and got a -second- cutie mark?
-Ah, so only the duration of the showing of is changed...

I thought Diamond was going to jump on the chance for revenge on the fraud.
-This is an interesting thought about canon... I can only assume that DT and SS were hiding hard

enough that they didn't see her until after the episode ended.

I knew Diamond Tiara was best pony.
-Interesting to see "best pony" used by a character who ISN'T meta-aware like AJ and PDP are.

Then again, the way AJ used it didn't feel like it was an outgrowth of her meta-awareness.

This blew up in her face like Miss Pie's prototype Party Cannon MK II.
-Interesting "noodle incident".

The two were connected by fate!
-Dunno if I would call that "fate" exactly...

I barely knew the stallion who fathered me.
-Distant all along, or is she just feeling a distance in her heart after the day of Discord?

Now it was the day of the monsters all over again.
-No actual word from Canterlot about the actual causes, or does she just prefer her own name

over the official term? Or maybe the official term hadn't solidified yet? I would think it would

have by that time.

to not standing the sight of him!
-to not being able to stand the sight of him!

This wasn't like me and that stallion!
-"that stallion" being Silver Spoon's father? Or is her father her step-father? Or was Silver

Spoon sexually abused by somepony? Probably the first.

Big mistake.
-Not necessarily... might just require longer to pay off.

Diamond, had hurting Applebloom really become that important to you? Why? You said they were

nothing. Blanks. Why should it matter if Applebloom is proud of her family or not?
-Because it hurts to have evidence that they AREN'T "nothing". Of course, there are other

reasons, but those are the ones that SS has the evidence to figure out if she had the

knowledge-base/wisdom to do so.

after all, I wear glasses, that must mean I'm supposed to study a lot right?
Cheerilee didn't believe me.
-"Glasses=study a lot". Hah!

I didn't want to be near the stallion who nearly cut my head off.
-Ah, so it IS her father.

And I didn't want to be near the princess who had torn my heart out.
-You MIGHT want to find a better word than "princess", but maybe it is actually good. Depends on

how much arrogance you want to say that DT has and/or how much of a pedistal you want to say

that SS puts her on.

That Cheerilee's name and cutie mark didn't imply she was a teacher but she was one all the

same.
-Well, that confirms my foggy memory.

Easier said than done.
-His willingness wear off since the hospital, or is it just her fears getting in the way?

Gabby Gums. Those three hypocrites. All the times they looked down on me for helping Diamond

Tiara tease ponies they go and do the same. Then they abandon her too.
-Nice retcon!

And Diamond didn't even demand I take over her 'job' as school printer? How could she forget me?
-Desiring the return of abuse, rather than nothingness? Well, I guess that is realistic, not

that I would really know.

But she looked confused instead of happy.
-Discord telling her to ignore the sign of friendship?

And that freaky gray filly with yellow eyes kept leading us out of the fog's warm forelegs! Ugh.
-Took me a second to realize this was Derpy... no, wait, Ditzy? No... I don't know who it could

be. Derpy and Ditzy are both at their house at this point I think.

I had no idea where three fillies got that much fake blood.
-I forget... did the CMC put on a play of "Cupcakes"?

Somepony beat me to it.
-Ah, guess that makes sense in retrospect. She isn't prone to physical violence, and isn't THAT

angry. Really angry? Yes. THAT angry? Well, not enough so to be quick on the draw.

Maybe it was because Princess Gaia didn't scream, she didn't call out to have the one that had

done it lynched...She accepted it. She accepted that somepony had nailed her in the head with a

rock?! How is that even possible?! She put it right in her speech how she knew some ponies would

never forgive her for what she did.
-Makes sense, but not the sort of sense that I would THINK would make a difference in the spur

of the moment.

The herd broke out into
-Good lexicon.

-Incidently, given the length of this chapter I am suspecting the plot will be restarting in

it... either that or MAYBE SS will be important when the main plot DOES start up, and you are

filling in the gaps in her story so that her interaction with DT will have more depth to it.

And it wasn't just the ice-cream talking.
-Does icecream fall under the same catagory as salt-licks and/or donuts? Maybe the donuts,

almost certainly not the salt-licks.

But didn't group just naturally have leaders and followers? That was how herds worked right?
-Sometimes, not always (for humans I mean). And variations based on what is happening make sense

in such a diverse group as the CMC (Beauty, Brains, and Brawn).

But these fillies, they were just together. How could any herd not be just some aimless blob

without a pecking order?
-It may be there, but not very obvious since it isn't as important to them? Or maybe not... I'm

too much of a recluse to understand these things much.

Substitute? Is that what they were? Was I really just replacing Diamond Tiara with them?'
-Oh dear... I hope she isn't so inexperienced as to be taken in by that, but she probably is.

"HEY!" Scootaloo snapped in my mother's face,
-Oh, the mother said it within the CMC's hearing. That alters the balance a lot.

Sweetie Belle looked like a deer caught in the train lights.
-Ah, hasn't come into her big sister's social-fu quite yet.

"My big sister owns Carousel Boutique, we sell to Canterlot and super-stars! Applebloom's family

founded Ponyville! Scootaloo is apprentice to Best Young Flyers' Reigning Champion and world

record holder for Sonic Rainbooms!" Sweetie Belle threw in a quick bow with pushing her friends'

heads down, "Madam!"
-...Ok, so she just needed a second. No PERSONAL accomplishments, but then again the fact that

the CMCs list of real accomplishments is rather short, although by no means completely absent,

is kinda the point of the CMC. The talent show was actually pretty good for their mismatch and

experience levels, the giant valentine was attractive, and... well, I guess the point is

ACTUALLY that they DO have accomplishments, but they are blind to the biggest of them.

I actually looked at Sweetie Belle with appreciation at how she had laid it on thick with that

last one, Diamond Tiara would have been proud.
-So SS thinks it is a lie that Scootaloo is "apprentice" to Rainbow Dash? Or is she saying that

the bow was a stroke of genius?

and coughed out at Sweetie's sudden etiquette,
-Consider removing the word "out". Also, it seems my second guess may have been the correct one.

Applebloom and Scootaloo looked like they had been stung by a bee.
-Makes sense.

with father remaining silent and keeping his distance.
-Giving his daughter some space, or his wife? Probably the first.

I can't fly, and there was no way on this side of the Everfree Forest I was getting near a farm

I was likely to get covered in fertilizer or something.
-Comma after "farm" I think.

So that left me with only one real place I could go the next morning with Miss Cheerilee having

put classes on hold once again.
-Recovery from Gaia? But I would think that the party would have come AFTER that?

"Welcome to the Carousel Boutique, how may I help you this fine, erm, day young miss?"
-And it is only now that I realize what the first paragraph of this section meant (About not

being able to fly and not wanting to get near the farm).

What did I want to talk to her about? The filly who I barely knew anything about? "Anything she

wants to talk about."
-Interesting point.

The way she said it, there was something almost...pleading about it.
-Rarity has her guesses about what might have driven DT to do what she did, even if she may be

focusing on the wrong parent?

Sweetie's Belle's room was, fairly impressive.
-Extranious comma. If you want SS to be reluctant to admit it, replace it with an ellipses.

Rarity said she never saw anything like it!"
-I suspect diplomatic "Jedi Truth" on Rarity's part.

"And AJ called the entire thing unbelievable!"
-Ok, DEFINITELY Jedi Truth here...

I tore the eye out of the Cyclopes and crashed it into the army of zombie pegasi!
-The eye, or the cyclopes? "Cyclopes" probably shouldn't be capitalized if it isn't a unique

creature.

But I think that Earth Pony hanging out with Twilight seemed to like it."
-Dr Whooves? For whom the idea of Evil!Celestia isn't THAT far-fetched?

Just how oblivious can these fillies be-?!
-To paraphrase Discord as best I can without looking it up: "Perhaps you haven't met them? These

are the Cutie Mark Crusaders, the fillies with the most intractable mental blind-spots in all of

Ponyville, if not all of Equestria."

"Maybe they thought you were being bullies to Princess Celestia?"
-Interesting to hear her willingly use the word "bullies" to describe something.

What's more silly than anyone being able to beat up The Princess and The Princess being bad?
-Well, the first part is CANON now, but that probably wasn't true when the split-off happened.

Or are they still influenced by the heart-world to some degree? I forget how you said that

works.

How was I going to explain the refined logistics of bullying to these three pure innocent naive

fillies?
-Don't know if "logistics" is the word you want... logistics would be like "How can I best

balance risk of detection with disgustingness and travel time when giving swirlies in each area

of the building/neighborhood?" This seems to be more at the strategic or tactical level if you

want to use military analogies.

"Well, you see, lots of ponies love the Princess,
-Probably including the CMC.

I'm more used to dishing this out than explaining it.
-Huh... either heading for cognitive dissonance for SS, or she is going to turn out to be

noticably sociopathic or psychopathic (I'm not enough of a shrink to know which). Because

KNOWING you are doing something just to be cruel would be pretty out there.

I must admit, I was rather impressed Scootaloo had already come to realize that.
-Because Rainbow Dash beat it into her brain, right?

Then my spotlight got stolen by the advent of one scaly purple baby -dragon- walking into the

room. I yelped and scurried back.
-Are dragons part of her parents' conspiracy theories? Do her parents' share the same conspiracy

theories as Diamond Tiara's, I forget? And it has been a while so I can't remember for sure if

dragons were part of it. I certainly find it odd that she is afraid of something that nopony

else bats an eyelash at.

"HUH? That's it?"
-... She probably doesn't realize that she is talking to the "little brother/son" of the leader

of the hoof-picked team that Princess Celestia used to make up with an ex-omnicidal-maniac. He's

seen bigger divides get healed, not even counting Gaia. Of course both of those sets of

relationships started out in positive ways. SS and DT may have NEVER been friends with any of

the CMC.


"You say you've made up? I think I'll gave ya the benefit of the doubt this time, I mean for

now."
-OTOH Rarity may have clued him in to a few things.

This time?
-Yeah, good point... when did he NOT give her the benefit of the doubt? I can't remember them

interacting either in the show or in your story.

I swear, couldn't the Apples afford elocution lessons like Diamond Tiara's dad had for her?
-Well, no, actually they can't, but they have other ways of getting such things if she really

wanted them. Aunt and Uncle Orange seemed perfectly happy to provide that for AJ, and I am sure

that Rarity would be willing to give her a few pointers if AB had a genuine interest... all of

which is irrelevant since I suspect AB would rather chew broken glass than learn how to talk

like Diamond Tiara.

"Well, remember how none of our families will let us near matches after we accidentally summoned

that fire elemental?"
-LOL, *great* noodle incident.

We four fillies and one baby dragon stumbled away from the wrecked rocket. Its wheels still

spinning in the air from its fall off the old railway tracks the group now staggered alongside.

The smoke from the burned out fireworks slowly rose into the air. Dr. Whooves had already

borrowed back the flux-capacitor the CMC had borrowed from the scrap pile in his backyard.
-Is this a reference to... some sort of cowboy-era stuntmen who suffer mishaps? I saw a few

videos on YouTube. I get the Back to the Future III joke of course.

Just know that we probably violated at least half the known laws of physics and, according to

Dr. Whooves, several unknown ones!
-Ah! An outstanding success by the standards of experimental science/engineering then!... either

that or something that Pinkie Pie does as a matter of course.

"Nothing-can-stop the Smooze~," Applebloom sang in a rather contrary upbeat voice her eyes still

spinning.
"Smooooooze," said a tiny purple blob on Applebloom's shoulder that Spike efficiently

incinerated on the spot.
-Oh dear...

"Rainbow Dash always dresses in style," Scootaloo sang skipping along fluttering her wings,

"I'll teach us games to play. Maybe we'll hear a story from Cheerilee, or maybe one of . . .

whose melody again?"
-The "I'll" part is a nice touch. Apparently they have been dimension hopping (the Smooze OTOH

could have been part of Equestria's direct past without any cross-time-line shenanigans).

only the second he had ever seen
-only the second time he had ever seen

Well, we didn't learn what our Cutie Marks were going to be.
-Wait a second... I don't think there WERE blank-flanks in earlier generations, so they must

have had cutie-marks (or been able to ask somepony what SHOULD be on their flank? If they would

have thought of that?)... then again I GUESS they could be smart enough to trust Dr Hooves when

he said that that was irrelevant to there cutie-marks in THIS timeline? Maybe he had them keep

their blankness hidden under clothing so that they wouldn't stand out?

"Who cares? It's not like it's the end of the universe,"
-Well, actually, in some cases it might have been (in others I suspect it was more of the

"Freedom" of the universe).

What do you think those humans in business suits meant by 'canceled?'
-*Snerk*


"How? How can you be so cheerful about it? It sounds like you've done a hundred things, and none

of them made your cutie mark realize. I'd have given up and just stayed a blank flank. I'd live

longer."
-Because they are having FUN doing those things, regardless of whether they realize it, or if

they get their cutie-marks... me-thinks Princess Celestia may wish to recruit them in a few

years... or maybe they will just end up getting invited along by their two big sisters and one

adopted-sister-but-not-legally when they reach that point. They certainly have the guts and

perhaps even jack-of-all-trades versitility for it.


"But-but being blanks is the only reason you're together."
-That stopped being true by the third attempt probably... now they are friends who happen to be

looking for their cutie-marks together.

Being blanks is what brought us together. We've stuck together because of each other.
-That's what I said...

Did me and Sweetie dump Applebloom when it looked like she earned her Cutie Mark or she dump us?
-I would have brought that up, but the situation didn't last long enough for them to meet up

aftger the "victory party" was over after accomplishing her goal before it turned into an

emergency.

You and Diamond Tiara didn't stay together just because your parents both had money, right?"
-They also shared some prejudices against non-earth-ponies, but I could be misremembering... But

yeah, good point.

Who am I kidding? My parents would have said it would been unsightly to be seen with ponies who

had lost everything and I would have abandoned my best friend like the good little obedient

filly I'd always been.
-The term "necessary but not sufficient" comes to mind as a possibility to be considered. In

other words just because it is required that they both be rich for the friendship to continue

doesn't mean that that is the only reason it continues. Of course that is a higher level of

philosophy then she is learning here... one thing at a time! (of course she could learn what I

just said by the end of the chapter for all I know... which reminds me, I don't think that we

will see any mega-plot advancement for this chapter, except maybe at the very end. This is in

comparison to my earlier guess that the length of this chapter indicated that there would be

large-scale events by the end of it.

while taking out the little thing with the familiar wagon.
-Taking it out of where?

All four of us got in abandoning the wreck in the middle of the woods that the defunct rail line

cut through.
-This sentence confused me at first, thus I recommend a comma after "got in".

No, we didn't bother to douse the fireworks, so sue us. My parents could buy your law firm.
-Dr Whooves didn't make sure that was done?

"You should invest in a bank account now," I said thinking of my economics lessons I hadn't

slept through. "By the time you're an adult dragon you could buy Ponyville."
-Or he could just be named regent over Ponyville and three other cities when his big sister

retires due to old age. I'm sure the alicorns can find MANY useful positions of power and

influence for somebody who they won't have the hastle of replacing (or perhaps having replaced

with an incompetent heir, although I doubt that heritary positions have much power any more)

after a piddling century or two.

"Not funny."
-Sweetie Belle knows somepony who tried to commit suicide?

"Big sister."
-Incidently the correct answer, although Spikes arguement was only vaguely relevant to the

situation (not totally irrelevant though). And I don't THINK dragons get THAT big. They MIGHT

get that strong though.

as he spun together one recount of his adventures after another,
-recounting

each one with him as the hero and Miss Rarity as the damsel.
-You would think he would know better than to immitate The Great and Powerful Trixie like

that... then again The One and Only Trixie may have given him some pointers on the safe limits

of showmanship...

He was also the one who saved Miss Rarity from the giant dragon who stomped through Ponyville.
-Ah, that one IS true, if only in a "Jedi Truth" sort of way. And his account was probably

completely inaccurate.

I wouldn't know, mom stuffed me in the basement until she was sure the monster was gone.
-That would explain why SS is scared of dragons, even if they aren't included in the conspiracy

theories.


Apparently also he was the Number One Assistant to Princess Celestia's Personal Apprentice

Twilight Sparkle. That one I almost believed on account of it being too crazy to be made up.
-Completely true... and easy enough to verify.

First these ponies want to be my friend more than anything, and now that the big lizard shows up

I'm pushed aside for the new show? What right did he have?
-"Make new friends, but keep the old." <- One more lesson she needs to learn.

-To be continued.
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"Dust Mop! Clean Dishes! Somepony! Call a doctor!"
-Took me a second to realize that the first two sentences are the names of servants. Also, it is interesting that the World Healing Wave didn't reverse secondary effects like the injuries
(wouldn't have been surprised if it didn't reverse death, but short of that I would have thought...). Then again maybe she IS healed and but since he remembers having hurt her... Yeah,
her missing a few weeks of school with broken legs would be noticeable. Then again you may have said that school didn't resume for that long.


Guess that wasn't a wash rag on her flank after all.
-Is this on the subject of the mutability of cutie-marks? Were you the one who had Cheerilee's cutie-mark really representing gardening? Or did Clean ______ go through a period of CMFIS after that, then recover(perhaps it is expected and the colleges have programs to prevent/treat that that they can refer ponies to)?

Her name was originally Clean Bandages. She basically tried and failed. I always figured that for some reason or another she either couldn't find work, or was unable to get work, I simply had the idea of her being a medic underneath her maid uniform.

outside of,
-Retcon, or just the fact that Discord focused MOST of his attentions on Ponyville and Canterlot Castle making her think there IS an outside that is still within the borders of Equestria?

Discord had managed to hit a lot of locations across the map, it's easier to name the places he didn't. To sum it up, Doctor made doctors like Nurse Redheart apathetic and indifferent to the suffering of others rather than torture them outright.

And yeah, this is from Silver Spoon's perspective. The limited POV of characters is a writer's best friend when covering his rear.

"Are these going to scar?! Will she walk again?!
-The order is telling, but at least she is back to caring about her daughter."

She always did.

Skin mended, bones reconnected. He was apparently the best.
-And Rainbow Dash doesn't have as good of medical insurance? Probably retcon.

Look at it this way, would you WANT RD back in the air like it was nothing after a nasty crash, or have time to think about it?


Then came the time to get up and go to school again.
-Or maybe she DID receive the same level of care as RD, and it is just a matter of it taking time for the fusing to completely bond?

We don't know that RD wasn't in the emergency room after she crashed. Possibly she had to recover the old fashioned way after she saved her.

I tried to go with neither. Falling down the stairs twice cured me of that fear.
-I don't know if that would "cure", just overpower it with a greater fear.

She had no choice but to accept it, and her fear of her father was center stage.

This blew up in her face like Miss Pie's prototype Party Cannon MK II.
-Interesting "noodle incident".

Not as noodle as you think. You read about the cutie mark party yet?

I barely knew the stallion who fathered me.
-Distant all along, or is she just feeling a distance in her heart after the day of Discord?

Explored in Mind Games.

Now it was the day of the monsters all over again.
-No actual word from Canterlot about the actual causes, or does she just prefer her own name over the official term? Or maybe the official term hadn't solidified yet? I would think it would have by that time.

Her own name for the day.

This wasn't like me and that stallion!
-"that stallion" being Silver Spoon's father? Or is her father her step-father? Or was Silver Spoon sexually abused by somepony? Probably the first.

Her father. Period.

Easier said than done.
-His willingness wear off since the hospital, or is it just her fears getting in the way?

Fear.

But she looked confused instead of happy.
-Discord telling her to ignore the sign of friendship?

She doesn't know how to understand this kind of random kindness.

And that freaky gray filly with yellow eyes kept leading us out of the fog's warm forelegs! Ugh.
-Took me a second to realize this was Derpy... no, wait, Ditzy? No... I don't know who it could be. Derpy and Ditzy are both at their house at this point I think.

Ruby of Sunnytown.

I had no idea where three fillies got that much fake blood.
-I forget... did the CMC put on a play of "Cupcakes"?

Alicorn Of War.


And it wasn't just the ice-cream talking.
-Does icecream fall under the same catagory as salt-licks and/or donuts? Maybe the donuts, almost certainly not the salt-licks.

Naw.



I actually looked at Sweetie Belle with appreciation at how she had laid it on thick with that last one, Diamond Tiara would have been proud.
-So SS thinks it is a lie that Scootaloo is "apprentice" to Rainbow Dash? Or is she saying that the bow was a stroke of genius?

Both?

So that left me with only one real place I could go the next morning with Miss Cheerilee having put classes on hold once again.
-Recovery from Gaia? But I would think that the party would have come AFTER that?

Possibly her idea of a holiday.


The way she said it, there was something almost...pleading about it.
-Rarity has her guesses about what might have driven DT to do what she did, even if she may be focusing on the wrong parent?

She doesn't know DIscord is involved.

But I think that Earth Pony hanging out with Twilight seemed to like it."
-Dr Whooves? For whom the idea of Evil!Celestia isn't THAT far-fetched?

Sunny Day was hanging out with Twilight that day.

Just how oblivious can these fillies be-?!
-To paraphrase Discord as best I can without looking it up: "Perhaps you haven't met them? These are the Cutie Mark Crusaders, the fillies with the most intractable mental blind-spots in all of Ponyville, if not all of Equestria."

:-)



I'm more used to dishing this out than explaining it.
-Huh... either heading for cognitive dissonance for SS, or she is going to turn out to be noticably sociopathic or psychopathic (I'm not enough of a shrink to know which). Because KNOWING you are doing something just to be cruel would be pretty out there.

"It's what Diamond wanted."

I must admit, I was rather impressed Scootaloo had already come to realize that.
-Because Rainbow Dash beat it into her brain, right?

Yes.

Then my spotlight got stolen by the advent of one scaly purple baby -dragon- walking into the room. I yelped and scurried back.
-Are dragons part of her parents' conspiracy theories? Do her parents' share the same conspiracy theories as Diamond Tiara's, I forget? And it has been a while so I can't remember for sure if dragons were part of it. I certainly find it odd that she is afraid of something that nopony else bats an eyelash at.

No. No. And Silver Spoon is treated like a glass doll by her mother.


This time?
-Yeah, good point... when did he NOT give her the benefit of the doubt? I can't remember them interacting either in the show or in your story.

'This time' he's thinking about all the times with Trixie he was a jerk to her.



"Well, remember how none of our families will let us near matches after we accidentally summoned that fire elemental?"
-LOL, *great* noodle incident.

:-)

We four fillies and one baby dragon stumbled away from the wrecked rocket. Its wheels still

spinning in the air from its fall off the old railway tracks the group now staggered alongside.

The smoke from the burned out fireworks slowly rose into the air. Dr. Whooves had already

borrowed back the flux-capacitor the CMC had borrowed from the scrap pile in his backyard.
-Is this a reference to... some sort of cowboy-era stuntmen who suffer mishaps? I saw a few

videos on YouTube. I get the Back to the Future III joke of course.

It was partially inspired by 'rocket on tracks' imagery.



Well, we didn't learn what our Cutie Marks were going to be.
-Wait a second... I don't think there WERE blank-flanks in earlier generations, so they must have had cutie-marks (or been able to ask somepony what SHOULD be on their flank? If they would have thought of that?)... then again I GUESS they could be smart enough to trust Dr Hooves when he said that that was irrelevant to there cutie-marks in THIS timeline? Maybe he had them keep their blankness hidden under clothing so that they wouldn't stand out?

They were trying to find out what their cutie marks were in the future.


Who am I kidding? My parents would have said it would been unsightly to be seen with ponies who had lost everything and I would have abandoned my best friend like the good little obedient filly I'd always been.
-The term "necessary but not sufficient" comes to mind as a possibility to be considered. In other words just because it is required that they both be rich for the friendship to continue doesn't mean that that is the only reason it continues. Of course that is a higher level of philosophy then she is learning here... one thing at a time! (of course she could learn what I just said by the end of the chapter for all I know... which reminds me, I don't think that we will see any mega-plot advancement for this chapter, except maybe at the very end. This is in comparison to my earlier guess that the length of this chapter indicated that there would be large-scale events by the end of it.

Basically SS is dead wrong about what ties their families together.

while taking out the little thing with the familiar wagon.
-Taking it out of where?

"My scooter, duh," Scootaloo said with a smile while taking out of the bushes the little thing with the familiar wagon.

There.

No, we didn't bother to douse the fireworks, so sue us. My parents could buy your law firm.
-Dr Whooves didn't make sure that was done?

He could come back and do so. But he was more interested in the flux compassitor. Besides, ponies need to learn forest fires are a NATURAL part of the forest's life cycle.



"Not funny."
-Sweetie Belle knows somepony who tried to commit suicide?

They aren't funny in general. Sorry how my family raised me.


each one with him as the hero and Miss Rarity as the damsel.
-You would think he would know better than to immitate The Great and Powerful Trixie like that... then again The One and Only Trixie may have given him some pointers on the safe limits of showmanship...

Wish fulfillment.



First these ponies want to be my friend more than anything, and now that the big lizard shows up I'm pushed aside for the new show? What right did he have?
-"Make new friends, but keep the old." <- One more lesson she needs to learn.

You bet to high heaven she does.

AND DONE!!! I'm finally through all your comment!!! AT LAST!!!!

Now onto the zillion replies I have to go through and PMs.
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twilightgamer92 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012
Well, that was a nice note to end this chapter of the saga on. Reading about what Fluttershy did to Scootaloo, I couldn't help but wonder if that was Fluttercruel or angry Fluttershy. Also, the "Lunacrats" and "Celestians" bit REALLY makes me want to see a Sideshow Bob pony.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012
"Well, that was a nice note to end this chapter of the saga on. "

THANKS!

"Reading about what Fluttershy did to Scootaloo, I couldn't help but wonder if that was Fluttercruel or angry Fluttershy."

Up to readers to decide I guess.

"Also, the "Lunacrats" and "Celestians" bit REALLY makes me want to see a Sideshow Bob pony."

It was basically meant as a 'TAKE THAT!' to all the political demonizing that happens in animated family comedies.
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ourimaler Featured By Owner May 30, 2012
...Wow.
You're wonderfully skilled at giving these characters depth, and this one of the finest displays of your skill.

Hm. So Diamond Tiara still gets the crypto-Nazi dad instead of the friendly neighborhood capitalist dad?

Serious bit of fridge horror with the discorded scene - if someone had died as an indirect consequence of the discording, odds are the reharmonization wouldn't have brought them back to life. oO

But I think that Earth Pony hanging out with Twilight seemed to like it.

Hm?

"Well, you see, lots of ponies love the Princess, so um," I'm more used to dishing this out than explaining it. "What if someone did a show where your big sisters were shown as mean nasty ponies? And Scootaloo, what if someone did a show where your teacher was a sadist who threw fillies into the Pegasus Machine?" Sure, I wasn't a pegasi, but knowing all the urban legends and boogiemen of the other tribes came with the territory of being a bully.

Heh...Rainbow Factory reference? (Haven't read it, haven't read Cupcakes either, but got the cliff notes.)
And was that a riff on the whole Tyrantlestia thing?

Kinda odd that Diamond Tiara doesn't seem to even know who Spike is. I mean, he kinda stands out in this small town.

"Well, remember how none of our families will let us near matches after we accidentally summoned that fire elemental?"

Heheheheheheh...

"Nothing-can-stop the Smooze~," Applebloom sang in a rather contrary upbeat voice her eyes still spinning.

"Smooooooze," said a tiny purple blob on Applebloom's shoulder that Spike efficiently incinerated on the spot.

"Rainbow Dash always dresses in style," Scootaloo sang skipping along fluttering her wings, "I'll teach us games to play. Maybe we'll hear a story from Cheerilee, or maybe one of . . . whose melody again?"

"I had no idea Rainbow Dash's ancestor was a fashion designer," Sweetie Belle said using me as support.

"I think I'm going to have to apologize to Lickety-Split for laughing at his family stories," Spike said checking Applebloom and himself over for any more hitchhikers, then the rest of us and the surrounding area. I was never going to laugh at Lickety-Split's stories again.


BWAHAHAHAHAH!

"Well, we didn't learn what our Cutie Marks were going to be. What do you think those humans in business suits meant by 'canceled?' " Scootaloo asked.

"Who cares? It's not like it's the end of the universe," Applebloom said as thunder boomed in the far distance.


*cold shiver*

"You should invest in a bank account now," I said thinking of my economics lessons I hadn't slept through. "By the time you're an adult dragon you could buy Ponyville."

As always, there are lots of nice touches - too many for me to comment on them all. But it's nice seeing this aspect of her used constructively.

"I think I like these comics better when they just had Superstallion and Batmare with her Bat-Cannon redirecting the course of the Planet of the Zombie-Ponies from colliding with Equestria."

So Scootaloo's a silver age fan, eh?

"Ah dangit." Scootaloo nearly threw the comic across the room. "That adventure was so cool! Why do the authors always have to make the old stories be holograms, or a diversion, or that pony was possessed and didn't really turn evil after his city got blown up and he wanted to reset the universe to fix it?"

Not a fan of retcons, I take it?

Applebloom got a determined look on her face that sent me for a loop. "Parents don't 'make' ya, they raise ya! They don't build ya, they rear ya! Parents look after ya, they're there for ya! They love ya! They teach ya how ta be a mare!"

Ideally.

"You mean to tell me you helped a stranger for nothing?"

I imagine he would.

"Hiya Twist."

*thumbs up*

I guess I can't really pin down what I liked about this story with any single quote. It's just that you've managed to give real depth to all these characters, and made Silver Spoon credible and sympathetic.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012
"...Wow.
You're wonderfully skilled at giving these characters depth, and this one of the finest displays of your skill."

Thank you great one.

And giving background characters souls is a favorite hobby of mine in this fandom it seems. And I like this chapter just for being so CHARACTER driven.


"Hm. So Diamond Tiara still gets the crypto-Nazi dad instead of the friendly neighborhood capitalist dad?"

Keep reading the series. That's all I'll say.

"Serious bit of fridge horror with the discorded scene - if someone had died as an indirect consequence of the discording, odds are the reharmonization wouldn't have brought them back to life. oO"

You're likely right.

"But I think that Earth Pony hanging out with Twilight seemed to like it.

Hm?"

That was Sunny Day. Celestia's alias form. You read about her before. During Pearl Necklace part 3 and during the Gaia Festival, and during the butterflies chapters with Pinkie.

"Well, you see, lots of ponies love the Princess, so um," I'm more used to dishing this out than explaining it. "What if someone did a show where your big sisters were shown as mean nasty ponies? And Scootaloo, what if someone did a show where your teacher was a sadist who threw fillies into the Pegasus Machine?" Sure, I wasn't a pegasi, but knowing all the urban legends and boogiemen of the other tribes came with the territory of being a bully.

"Heh…Rainbow Factory reference? (Haven't read it, haven't read Cupcakes either, but got the cliff notes.)"

Yes.

"And was that a riff on the whole Tyrantlestia thing?"

That too. And Molestia.

"Kinda odd that Diamond Tiara doesn't seem to even know who Spike is. I mean, he kinda stands out in this small town."

You mean Silver Spoon.

And I hadn't really considered that. But Silver Spoon has likely been treated like a glass doll by her mother.

"Well, remember how none of our families will let us near matches after we accidentally summoned that fire elemental?"

Heheheheheheh…"

Of course you'd love that.

""Nothing-can-stop the Smooze~," Applebloom sang in a rather contrary upbeat voice her eyes still spinning.

"Smooooooze," said a tiny purple blob on Applebloom's shoulder that Spike efficiently incinerated on the spot.

"Rainbow Dash always dresses in style," Scootaloo sang skipping along fluttering her wings, "I'll teach us games to play. Maybe we'll hear a story from Cheerilee, or maybe one of . . . whose melody again?"

"I had no idea Rainbow Dash's ancestor was a fashion designer," Sweetie Belle said using me as support.

"I think I'm going to have to apologize to Lickety-Split for laughing at his family stories," Spike said checking Applebloom and himself over for any more hitchhikers, then the rest of us and the surrounding area. I was never going to laugh at Lickety-Split's stories again."

BWAHAHAHAHAH!

I assume that was actually funny and not you just laughing at characters you dislike.


"Well, we didn't learn what our Cutie Marks were going to be. What do you think those humans in business suits meant by 'canceled?' " Scootaloo asked.

"Who cares? It's not like it's the end of the universe," Applebloom said as thunder boomed in the far distance.

*cold shiver*"

Welcome to reality.

""You should invest in a bank account now," I said thinking of my economics lessons I hadn't slept through. "By the time you're an adult dragon you could buy Ponyville."

As always, there are lots of nice touches - too many for me to comment on them all. But it's nice seeing this aspect of her used constructively."

:-) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)

"I think I like these comics better when they just had Superstallion and Batmare with her Bat-Cannon redirecting the course of the Planet of the Zombie-Ponies from colliding with Equestria."

"So Scootaloo's a silver age fan, eh?"

I imagine she might like the 90s anti-heroes, at first, only cause they remind her of RD in her fantasies.

"Ah dangit." Scootaloo nearly threw the comic across the room. "That adventure was so cool! Why do the authors always have to make the old stories be holograms, or a diversion, or that pony was possessed and didn't really turn evil after his city got blown up and he wanted to reset the universe to fix it?"

"Not a fan of retcons, I take it?"

Not when you can TELL it's a retcon!

"Applebloom got a determined look on her face that sent me for a loop. "Parents don't 'make' ya, they raise ya! They don't build ya, they rear ya! Parents look after ya, they're there for ya! They love ya! They teach ya how ta be a mare!"

Ideally."

And that's what these ponies BELIEVE IN!

And like anything, Discord exploits it.

""You mean to tell me you helped a stranger for nothing?"

I imagine he would."

This is Ponyville.

""Hiya Twist."

*thumbs up*"

Of course 'Bloom HAS made friends with the toadie of the school bully. Which Twist doesn't know yet.

"I guess I can't really pin down what I liked about this story with any single quote. It's just that you've managed to give real depth to all these characters, and made Silver Spoon credible and sympathetic."

Thank you. Makes me wish I could shed tears to shed tears of joy.
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ardashir Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012
I like the new references to Gabby Gums. They work very well at getting the point Silver Spoon is trying to make across as you use them here.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012
Thanks dude.
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ardashir Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012
I re-read this story, and I like what you did with the Cakes and Spoony, and the bit at the club house about the Hearts and Hooves Day troubles. It really does help the story.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012
THANKS! GOod to know! Expanding or adding scenes is ALWAYS a gamble worried you'll disrupt the flow.
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r1ck3t Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2012
start rising and setting the sun <- Can't use 'rising' as a transitive verb, replace with 'raising'

winkled face <- Replace with 'wrinkled'

Great-Granny Silver had had <- Remove a 'had'

She finally eyed me, she hide behind the parasol <- Change tense to 'hid'

our family had had since before <- Remove a 'had'

We ran through the house like on a fox hunt. Father cheering and calling out to me as my heart tries to bust <- Change tense to 'tried'

I hid in a closet. He just smashed through it. I ran between his legs. I hide under my bed. <- Change tense to 'hid'

Nurse Redheart and Tenderheart and the local Doctor were scrambling like crazy and doctors from outside of, whatever had happened, were being brought in by Pegasi and unicorn teleportation <- Outside of what?

When she came to she bumped heads with Clean Dishes she stood up so fast. <- Recommend writing this as "she stood up so fast that she bumped heads with Clean Dishes", and adding a comma between 'to' and 'she'

he snarled at them for being as late as they had. <- Replace with 'were'

I spent as much time at Diamond Tiara's, school, anywhere as long as it wasn't home. <- 'as' needs something to compare to, recommend adding 'as possible' after 'time'

Miss Golden Tiara <- Replace with 'Mrs.'

Even after that day everything went crazy <- Recommend replacing with 'the' to reduce ambiguity

It was like Diamond had taken all the viciousness she had poured at Applebloom and her friends, and had redirected full throttle at her father. <- Missing 'it' between 'redirected' and 'full'

It's one thing to KNOW she's a bully and have her do it to you, it's completely different when you thought you were friends! <- Change tense of 'thought' & 'were' into 'think' & 'are'

Cheerilee lead us away from the fog. I wanted to go back into it. <- Replace with 'led'

But didn't group just naturally have leaders and followers? <- 'group' should be plural

I obeyed my parents, they followed Mayor Mare's orders, she follows Princess Celestia's orders, and the family servants followed my orders. <- Currently, this implies that only Mayor Mare still follows orders, check the underlined verbs again for context

that you'll go right back to where you were and being best of friends! <- Consider rewriting this as "to where you were, being best of friends"

Applebloom added ears pinned. <- Missing comma between 'added' and 'ears'

Sweetie Belle threw in a quick bow with pushing her friends' heads down <- Use 'while' to replace 'with'

She had just single hoofedly adverted making a lifetime enemy <- 'adverted' means to have advertised, use 'averted' instead

mother pulled me along with father remaining silent and keeping his distance. <- Recommend a comma between 'along' and 'with'

I was getting near a farm I was likely to get covered in fertilizer <- Rewrite this as 'likely to get me covered'

She breathed in deep <- Replace with 'deeply'

Sweetie's Belle's room <- Replace with "Sweetie Belle's"

~"Rainbow would NEVER do that!" <- Remove the '~'

"Your friends with a dragon? " <- Replace 'Your' with "You're", remove the space after 'dragon'

those ponies whose always making fun <- Replace with "who's"

I think I'll gave ya the benefit of the doubt <- Change tense to 'give'

We four fillies and one baby dragon stumbled away from the wrecked rocket. Its wheels still spinning in the air from its fall off the old railway tracks the group now staggered alongside. <- Replace 'We' with 'Us', change 'the group' to 'our group'

Applebloom sang in a rather contrary upbeat voice her eyes still spinning. <- Replace 'contrary' with 'contrarily', recommend comma between 'voice' & 'eyes'

canceled <- Replace with 'cancelled'

would have said it would been unsightly <- Missing 'have' between 'would' & 'been'

All four of us got in abandoning the wreck <- Recommend comma between

you don't eat bricks and not jewels <- Rewrite this as 'eat jewels and not bricks'

Scootaloo grunted as she supplies the motor power <- Change tense to 'supplied'

Always doing what your told? <- Replace with "you're"

Spike scratch his face. <- Replace with 'scratched'

Scotaloo <- Replace with 'Scootaloo'

a small box in the corner covered in locks and chains <- Missing comma between 'corner' & 'covered'

but worried it then infect the entire water supply <- Missing 'might' between 'it' & 'then'

"Rarity's ugly reject dresses!" <- Recommend writing this as 'rejected dresses'

"So that stuff works?" Spike asks. <- Change tense to 'asked'

I think I like these comics better when they just had <- Change tense to 'liked'

was taking it's toll <- Replace with 'its'

Spike had hit a 'phase' as Twilight called it where a dragon begins collecting their hoard <- Missing comma after 'phase' and after 'it'

they would have never cut it in high society where lying through their teeth was <- Replace with "one's"

as you say you do then miss. <- Missing comma between 'then' & 'miss'

not feel the least bit guilt about. <- Replace with 'guilty'

She said all unicorn go through <- Pluralize 'unicorn' to 'unicorns'

I was angry at a pony I didn't think it would matter. <- Add in 'to' after 'matter'

ponies dressed up as royal guard <- Pluralize 'guard' to 'guards'

when we're back all at <- Rewrite this as 'all back'

Scootsaloo <- Replace with 'Scootaloo'

meaning to Applebloom that gray filly had we kept seeing <- Replace with 'we had'

Pater Pan. <- Since 'Peter Pan' is referred to by name as a character, I recommend changing this

Parents are the one <- Pluralize to 'ones'

When I'm in danger its an investment in danger! <- Replace with "it's"

"But that makes it waste." <- Missing 'a' between 'it' & 'waste'

But she'd done more with herself I ever had. <- Missing 'than' between 'herself' & 'I'

Twists parents <- Replace with "Twist's"

I had nopony to turn to I trusted…Except maybe…When <- All of the following need a space after the '…'

it was just to hide…But

once or twice…I

with them…I

I don't regret it…For

I had FUN…They

good time…It

still a void…I

Diamond Tiara…And

lynched…She

It felt…weird

something almost…pleading

she was before…That

how she did it…But

really exist…And

think, Doctor…Doctor

Whooves meant…when

that was…was only…only

the second he had ever

seen…anypony…travel

Applebloom…And

Ah thought…Maybe

Diamond Tiara…Anyway

noticed before…Maybe

Cutie Mark…But

Currently I've been correcting the canon chapters in reverse chronological order, but should I instead start from the beginning?
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012
Thank you very much for all your help. Thank you very very very much. 1134 messages to go before I can start work on the next chapter. (not count Santafer's PM edits.)
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012
I was angry at a pony I didn't think it would matter. <- Add in 'to' after 'matter'

She's being impersonal and going back to the idea of treating someone like a thing so there is no 'one' to be mean 'to.'
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012
Nurse Redheart and Tenderheart and the local Doctor were scrambling like crazy and doctors from outside of, whatever had happened, were being brought in by Pegasi and unicorn teleportation <- Outside of what?

Outside of whatever had happened.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012
Great-Granny Silver had had <- Remove a 'had'

The double past tense is supposed to tell the reader that her ancestor is dead.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012
"Currently I've been correcting the canon chapters in reverse chronological order, but should I instead start from the beginning?"

Either way works for me.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012
Either way works for me!
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wanderingmagus Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
Nice addition to the chapter, it fits and shows the (very slowly) developing maturity of the girls. Although, seeing as how the H&H day incident was set before the Day of Discord, why didn't Old Man use up the rest? I can imagine "lol it'd be funny to watch adamantly heterosexual and upstanding stallions suddenly start rutting each other in public" being a thought that goes through the bastard's head.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
"Although, seeing as how the H&H day incident was set before the Day of Discord, why didn't Old Man use up the rest?"

Because it wasn't in my head canon.

"I can imagine "lol it'd be funny to watch adamantly heterosexual and upstanding stallions suddenly start rutting each other in public" being a thought that goes through the bastard's head."

While Discord might be that depraved, I'm not.

"Nice addition to the chapter, it fits and shows the (very slowly) developing maturity of the girls. "

Thanks. I actually thought of this BEFORE anyone started asking 'what happened to the rest of the love poison.'
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Charanty Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
"I might use what now?" Spike scratched his

His what?
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
Scalp. Fixed.
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Charanty Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
Awesome.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
Thanks. I don't think the many would think the girls would HAVE extra, and after fessing up to their families, I think they'd be too chicken to bring this to the attention of higher authorities.
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Charanty Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
Welcome.
Agree on that.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
And happy that plot hole fill works.
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Charanty Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
if there is a plot hole then...we need a plot hole closing plunger!
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
The thing is that before I was counting on the feedback from the trope pages on fridge logic and invoked tropes on how to best shape the story. Now that the trope page has gone more or less silent compared to before I'm having to muddle through.
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Kendell2 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
I think the addition works pretty well. It's funny, but also shows the CMC have REALLY thought out the consequences of improperly disposing of the love poison.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
Thanks. Some are saying that they should have gone to the authorities, but they're just kids! They (and most adults) I think would be too chicken to confess this sort of thing after having spilled the beans to their families and having been given their punishment for it already. And WOULDN'T want their authority figures reminded of their epic screw up.
(BTW: I have to agree with a poster on TVTropes, the idea of them being competition, but thoughtless, makes much better sense at this point then them being cursed to always fail. It makes more fun to see their plans work, but their plans end results not being thought out.)
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Kendell2 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
Yeah, they're more thoughtless than stupid. The gigantic Hearts and Hooves Day poster that they made for Cheerilee shows that I think.
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