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Pony POV Series Fluttercruel POV May The Best Pet Win Behind The Scenes Side-Story

Written By lz0291 and Edited By Alex Warlorn and Kendell2

Optional-Canon

Geeze, first you guys won't shut up about Trixie and now you won't stop asking me questions? Why don't you talk to Purple or Marshmallow? Rude? But when I say it it's with endearment!

Huh? I was the one complaining about her stealing my spotlight? Got me there, fine.

Sigh. So you want to hear about Rainbow getting Tank from my point of view? Whao-kay, just don't bet on a lot of ponies reading this interview! Yeah this took place between getting our trick from Celestia and the festival. Like I said, don't expect many ponies to read this one.

I don't mind the pet outings that much. Surprised? It's mostly cause I like Angel's attitude. I like how he was able to keep 'Shy on track before I came along. So anyway, after the pet fivesome had nearly given Rainbow a heart-attack and Rainbow was given the low down, Fluttershy asked actually surprised.

"I thought you knew. You didn't know? She didn't know?"

I, on the other hoof, groaned inside and mentally facehoofed.

' Of course she didn't know, blondie! She spends most of her day napping. '

Shy ignored me however, too busy fretting about letting down Rainbow. Pink, though, was explaining, and I decided to take a look around while 'Shy was freaking out.

Pink rambled off. "We were totally gonna invite you, Rainbow, then Twilight remembered that you don't even have a pet..."

'Which makes bringing you to a pet playdate dumb.' I don't technically have a pet but I don't have a choice in the matter, and don't tell 'Shy that, you'll see in a moment what I mean. Besides, like I said, I like Angel. Maybe Rainbow should bring that orange filly?...

"...and Rarity remembered that you really like to take naps in the afternoon..."

'See?'

'Shy ignored me in favor of more mental fretting.

'Please don't be mad at us please don't be mad at us....'

"...so Applejack figured you wouldn't be missing out on anything anyway, and Fluttershy and I nodded our heads in agreement like this."

I was looking at Pinkie in the corner of my eye, but my co-habitant wasn't all there.

'Please don't be mad at us EEK WHAT'S THAT?!'

I thought fast before Fluttershy took control back and yelped -not as fast as I could have- but faster than 'Shy screaming out loud because somepony has no definition of 'personal space'.

"Please don't be mad at us!" I said to everypony else, hoping it sounded like 'Shy.

Neither of us was really in charge enough to stop our head moving back and forth, but there were more pressing matters. How does the whole one body locomotion thing work when we're ponies of two minds? I know I use the word 'control' but it's not so much one of us pushing the other out out of the driver's seat as it sounds. I read somewhere of Siamese twin pegasi who could fly in spite of having only one set of wings, so I think it's like that. Don't forget I have a full set of 'Shy's memories up until the Old Man zapped her. It's like we're a pilot and copilot who switch places every so often.

'Calm down, it's just Pinkie grabbing you. Me. Us.'

'Oh. Right. Sorry. '

Rainbow was replying at the same time.

"...Not much point of a Pony Pet Playdate for me if I'm a pony without a pet, right?"

"Eeexactly. So, if'n you'll excuse us... " Applejack replied to her.

Direct and to the point, no reason to drag it out. I approve.

Everypony got down to business playing with the animals.

This wasn't my first Pony Pet Playdate, or my second. But for the first few 'Shy had me on a mental leash and muzzle with me wanting to dangle Angel in front of a starving Opal or Owlowiscious and throw Opal and Winona in a bag together and giggle like some sick buck. What? I know I was messed up!

Owlowiscious was flapping from one leg to another holding a chat with Twilight only they seemed to understand.

Pink was using herself a trampoline for Gummy (heh, I imagined when Gummy would be three times her size and she could use him to bounce on, or eat her, whichever happened first).

Rarity was being coy with one of Opal's fake mice (it amazed me the spoiled fat cat had enough muscle to go rabbit hunting when Rarity wasn't looking).

Winona and the orange apple? Playing fetch.

'Shy naturally just watched Angel run around... in circles?

'You brought him to the park to run around in circles in an area smaller than our kitchen table?'

'He wanted the fresh air remember?'

Yeah. He did. Fluttershy explained for Angel these were his 'imagination rounds' he'd imagine entire worlds and adventures on the adrenaline high as he jogged in circles. Considering that was about all I used to be able to do while locked up in my own head other than wallow in self-pity, I can understand.

Rainbow's never liked anyone stealing the spotlight from her.

"Hey, now wait a minute! Just because I don't have a pet now..." Rainbow began to say.

'Isn't she called Scoopapoo?' I snarked.

'Sssh!' 'Shy scolded me.

"...It doesn't mean I never want a pet!" Rainbow finished.

Oh horseapples.

Click.

"Oh! Y-y-oh really?" Fluttershy said. Ka-pow. And me hit by a tidal wave of smilie faces.

"You really want a pet? Really? 'cause I've got so many wonderful choices at my house." 'Shy buzzed around Rainbow like a bee that had had too much honey.

Just for your information, sharing a body with somepony who just became more excited than a cat in a silo full of catnip is not much fun when it happens without much time to brace.

"Oh, and I know you'll just love them, and they'll love you, oh! And you'll be best friends forever and ever! Oh!"

She then began to drag, quite literally drag, Rainbow Dash back to our house. The others just watching in awe. Rainbow took off eventually, but I could tell Dash wasn't enjoying the ride. Angel caught a lift on our tail.

"Uh, Fluttershy? Can you let me fly myself?" Dash asked.

"Oh there's... Oh, sorry. I'm just so excited!" She gave out a little charged-up squeaking noise as Dash was freed. "Oh, there's so many pets that might work for you!"

Fluttershy then descended into excited rambling, both inside and out. Dash seemed to zone her out.

'Oh, she might want a kitty... Or a puppy. Or a birdy....'

'Honey Badger' I suggested. If Rainbow Dash wanted a fearless and tough pet, she couldn't do much better than one of those.

"...Oh, maybe a... no, wait, what about a..."

'A beehive!' Shy thought suddenly.

'NO, NOT THE BEES!'

Honey Badger, not Honey Makers!

'Oh, there's so many different pets that would be great for Rainbow and that Rainbow would be great with! Ohmygoshohmygosh this is so exciting! So many of the animals want to be pets and this is just so so super I, I... Yay!'

I'd had enough. This was too much.

''Shy, can I ask for a little warning next time before you go crazy, please!' I moaned without really thinking.

Almost instantly, she seemed to deflate. She cut herself off mid-babble outside and in, enough for even Rainbow Crash, a pony who could accuse mountains of 'coming out of nowhere' to see it.

I'd messed up, big.

"Uh, Fluttershy? Are you okay?" She asked as she landed. Home was barely twenty meters away.

'Fluttershy?' I asked as well.

She was silent. She actually lowered our head so our mane was covering our eyes.

'I'm sorry, I didn't mean it like that! It's-it's okay 'Shy! You weren't being bad I swear! I was, agh! Can we please move on? You, we still have to figure out Rainbow's pet right? ' I tried desperately.

"?...Your pet?..." She said outside gathering herself back together.

"What about them? Is something wrong?" Dash said.

She shook our head.

"...It's, um, it's fine. I guess I just... I was just a little too excited. I... I really want to..."

I sighed.

'I'll explain it. Just calm down a little...'

"It was my fault. I said something stupid. I'm sorry," I said our color and cutie mark shifting to mine. I rose our head and looked at her.

Rainbow's eyes narrowed.

"Fluttercruel?"

"Yeah. Who else would it be?" I said almost automatically, then I saw the look on her face. Open mouth, insert hoof.

"What did you do to her?" RD asked.

I cringed. "I said something stupid. Don't worry. She just needed a second to calm down."

"Well, try and think before you speak will you?" She said in my face. Hypocrite.

I gritted my teeth, "Don't need to tell me twice." Chatting with 'Shy was so much easier when we had a mirror handy.

"Whatever. She's okay though, right?"

I nodded, even if I wasn't actually sure.

'You're okay, right?'

'I... I'm okay. I shouldn't have run my mouth off like that?...'

'Trust me 'Shy, it's an improvement. I'm the one who shouldn't have ran her mouth off.'

"As long as she's okay change back. No offense, but I don't want you suggesting a pet for me. You'd give me a pit viper or something..."

"Honey Badger," I said. Seriously? A pit viper? A skunk maybe, I'm not THAT cruel…anymore…

"...Really? Those are kinda cool. Too bad they don't fly."

I sighed, and let 'Shy slip into my place as we went around the back, her colors and markings replaced mine. She seemed happy again, but far more subdued as all the animals sprang out to meet her. I zoned out a little, remembering when we'd first 'met', Dash had been pretty suspicious of me...

And then I felt 'Shy really perk up. Wait. Is she...

"Now, Rainbow my dear, I cannot express my delight..."

She is.

'Okay, I'm out of here.'

Abandon ship! Please find a band on the ship and please make them play metal pony instead of the song she'd sing!

I've nowhere to run.

Oh what the Smooze, just go with it. 'Shy can carry a tune even better than Pink.

Rainbow Dash couldn't wait to get started, but first she set a few rules, it was of utmost importance the pet that she get but super and awesome and cool!

"Awesome, cool, got it!"

She needed something real fast like a bullet to keep up with her.

"Sure! How 'bout a bunny?

They're cutesy and wootsie and quick as can be!"

Cutesy? Wootsie? Have you even met her?

"Rainbow, have faith

You see, I will bet you

Somewhere in here is the pet that will get you."

I admit I did get a laugh when 'Shy presented Dash with the cutest kitten in Equestria.

"I have so many wonderful choices for you to decide

There are otters and seals

With massive appeal."

Otters and seals don't fly 'Shy.

"Maybe not, but I've seen this particular seal catch ten feet of air when he breaches the water!"

But we had to refill the pool from the splash down. Oh, who am I kidding? I'm with 'Shy on this one, that rocked!

Next came lady bugs and cute crickets, did she really think that was going to fit the ticket?

"I've got just the thing in that tree, Dash

Meet your new fabulous pet, Squirrely."

Come on 'Shy, you know the flying squirrel won't get adopted without the moose, he's his best friend.

Fluttershy, pal, this won't cut it

She needs a pet to keep up with her

Something awesome, something flying

With coolness that defies gravity!

"I'm sensing you want an animal that can fly."

'Ya think?'

"Ya think?" Rainbow said at the same time.

"I have plenty of wonderful creatures who soar in the sky

Like a sweet hummingbird or a giant monarch butterfly."

Better, but cooler.

"I see. How 'bout an owl," I shoved myself in! "Or a wasp!" Then 'Shy shoved out of the spotlight, "Or a toucan?"

Oh no you don't Fluttershy!

Shy's not the only singer in this family tree! I took my turn!

"There's so many wonderful creatures the likes of that.

There are falcons and eagles

They are both quite regal

Or perhaps what you need is a dark and mysterious bat!"

"Now you're talking!" Smiled RD. See 'Shy?

"But instead of just one standout, now that's too many. So many choices, and such riches aplenty."

"Not a bad problem to have, if you ask me." I said.

"The bat would be awesome, but the wasp I'm digging too

D'you have something in a yellow striped bat?"

"No." Then Shy stepped in.

"I've got a hot pink flamingo, just dying to meet you."

Then Rainbow took off in every sense of the world. Her brain working as fast as her wings as she declared she'd put the animals who wanted be hers through her version of the Equestria Rodeo.

"Don't forget style, that should be considered!" I threw in.

"Then we'll know for sure who's best of the litter!"

"The one who is awesome and cool!" I said back excited as 'Shy now.

"Just like me

Can't settle for less, 'cause I'm the best"

"So a contest we will see!"

"Who's the number one, greatest, perfectest pet"

In the world for me

May the games

begin~

"And may the best pet win!"

And it was like a spell was broken. Had I really just sung? Had I actually -enjoyed- singing? -With- Shy? Sure I sung before but I was making fun of her before but . . . but now?

I resisted the urge to shake our head and played dumb.

'Is it over? Can I come out now?' I cautiously asked.

'Yes, we've stopped.'

Phew. I don't know if she really didn't notice or if she was being kind.

'So, did she pick one?'

'Not yet. She's wanting to have tryouts.'

Meanwhile, Rainbow was talking, as we stared off into space like Derpy on a good day.

"Okay, uh, Fluttershy, can you bring, say, a dozen or so to the town square that might fit the bill so we can have tryouts?"

"Certainly, Rainbow Dash! We'll bring them along shortly!"

Dash nodded, "Great! I'll tell the others and get everything set up! See you there!" And flew off.

"So... Angel, 'Cruel, what do you think we should take? You both pick out four?"

Angel was happy that we finally remembered he was there and tossed aside the carrot chips he had been eating for our musical number.

Ever pragmatic, Angel would point out the Falcon, Eagle, Hummingbird, and plus a brown duck.

Dangit, there went three of my top choices already. If I didn't know Angel better I'd say the little rodent had done that on purpose.

I took control for a second to point at...

"The Neighsian Giant Hornet, the Bat, I guess the Owl, that sort of works . . . would it kill us to have a wyvern?"

'Just pick four out.' 'Shy gently instructed as the three creatures in question backed up nervously.

"...Those three and that duck."

'But Angel already picked that one.'

"The other duck." I pointed at the green and grey one.

"Oh... Right, that duck. Uh, okay. Add the Ladybug, Flamingo, Toucan, and Our Monarch Butterfly."

"You want Him as Rainbow's pet?" I asked surprised at her picking Our Butterfly.

"If he's picked he can help out Rainbow in more ways than one."

Then something nudged us on the hind leg.

It was a turtle. Or a tortoise. Either way he gave me an idea...

"Oh? Do you want to come and try too?" 'Shy asked.

He slowly nodded.

"You realize he's completely the opposite of what Dash wants, right?"

"But he looks so desperate to try..."

"Oh, I know, I think he should have a go at least?...."

We grinned. This should be fun...

Watching as Fluttershy began to round the animals up and politely lead them into town wasn't, so I decided to zone out a little again... handling animals was 'Shy's special talent not mine. Pst. Don't get the wrong idea. I'm not some lazy flank parasite who comes out when she wants something. 'Shy's simply more delicate with animals then me. Made we wish we had a honey badger to submit too while we were at it.




Rainbow Dash already had her competitors lined up and sure enough, we were moving forward so 'Shy could recommend a certain shelled competitor.

"Now, you just pay attention, and try your best, and..."

"Seriously, Fluttershy! The turtle? What did you bring that thing here for?"

Then all my fun and games changed. That thing? Thing? My blood boiled. Okay Dash, I hope this turtle was trained by a radical rat just so he make you eat those words! I knew that little guy was really old, 'Shy said he predates Ponyville, so maybe he has a few tricks up his shell.

"Technically he's a tortoise, and he's always dreamed of being somepony's pet. He just wants a chance to compete, he won't get in the way. You won't even know he's here. " 'Shy clarified.

Ah, so he's a tortoise: yeah, I don't pay attention to 'Shy's animals as much as I should.

The turtle blinked slowly. Dash just stared at him with a 'what the buck' expression.

Reality informed me Rainbow won't know he's there because the rest are gonna make him eat their dust.

"No," She said.

"Oh, just let him try!" 'Shy begged.

"But there's no way he can possibly keep up. Look at him!"

I found myself rooting for my 'joke application.'

'Shy kept up her pleading, and in the end Rainbow gave in. You know how hard it is to resist 'Shy's puppy dog eyes. She warned him the games weren't games, making me glad I wasn't in control at the time. She then added to her want list what I and Twilight Sparkle would call five things.

"Speed, agility, guts, style. Coolness. Awesomeness. And radicalness," Dash sounded off.

"Aren't those all the same thing?" Twilight Sparkle asked.

"You would think that Twilight. And that's why, you would never qualify to my pet."

I'll trust the purple encyclopedia's opinion more than yours, Rainbow.

Lucky I wasn't in control. Dash might get the wrong idea about me saying something like 'your face is coolness, awesomeness and radicalness.'

We moved along, heading for a small race track. Fluttershy seemed to notice something at this point.

"Where's Trixie?"

"Oh, she's still freaking out a little over the festival. She's got an idea for her magic act but she wants it better than perfect. Still, at least she's got her plan now, if she was still worried about coming up with an idea it'd be a lot worse..." Twilight answered without actually saying where Trixie was.

'I guess she's in the library? ' I wondered.

'Probably.' 'Shy replied. 'Which explains where Spike is.'

++++

"You're not touching that spell book!"

"Oh yes Trixie is touching that spell book!"

The entire library shook followed by blue smoke slowly rising from all the windows.

"…I'll get the broom…"

++++

We reached the little race course. Rather obviously, Dash wanted to test the speed of her potential pets.

I just sat back figuratively and watched the fun. By the end of it though...

'Our little turtle didn't even cross the line...' I said.

'Tortoise.' 'Shy corrected.

Whatever.

"That's just sad," Dash muttered.

We then moved onto agility testing, heading for a bunch of things Dash hadn't even built yet. She seemed to be struggling with some of the poles and stands.

"...Uh, y'all maybe need a helping hoof there?" Applejack offered.

"We could lend a horn as well," Rarity suggested, earning a nod from Twilight.

"Ooh! Ooh! Let me help! It'll be a blast!" Pinkie said.

There was a moment where all six others, and all thirteen potential pets, gave her a look.

"Not literally!"

Once it was done and everypony had put some distance between them and Pinkie during the work, just in case, Dash deemed the course to be sufficiently awesome.

"Okay, thanks for helping, Everypony. I might need a hoof later too, that cool?"

Everypony nodded.

"I know we'll do a bang up job!" Pinkie said with a smile.

That was when a little gremlin crept into my brain and I got a wonderful idea.

'Saaaay, 'Shy. I have an idea. What's Rainbow planning to do to test out how brave these pets are again?'

'Oh, uh... I'm not sure. I think she was going to set up a haunted house.'

...Given that setting up a bunch of obstacles on poles had given her trouble, I doubted her haunted house was going to be ready by the end of next year's Winter Wrap-Up. I had a mental image of her looking for a cool spot to build the house on for three hours. By the time she was done our little turtle would probably be the only pet left alive to even try it.

'Well, I can think of something much faster to set up...'

And so I laid the plan to Fluttershy, and she duly let me take it to Dash, who agreed it would be quicker. So did Rarity.

"Opal won't get hurt will she?" Rarity asked.

" Opal get hurt? That's a good one." I actually laughed.

Eventually, Dash's obstacle course was done with minimal casualties. Everypony looked at their handiwork.

"Agility!" Dash said, even though we all knew since we'd been waiting there or helping build her obstacle course.

In this one, the turtletoise had been deemed the 'opposite of agile.' The others had varying skill and agility, but Our Butterfly crashed. Not too strange, but he really should have made it...

"I'll go ahead and make sure she's ready for you, Dash!" Rarity said as Dash was tallying the scores for this round, and she trotted off.

The winner was the Hummingbird, but she shaved a point off when it failed to high-hoof her. With one of the wings he had to use flying. Even I thought that was a little cruel, but it still won the course by a good margin, and we were on our way.

I felt Angel give me one of his signature kicks to the flanks. He looked at me expectantly.

"Fine." I sigh and handed him two bits for Our Butterfly not coming in first.

And the next part of my little plan was on the way too. I decided to sit back again... It was funny, first time I saw Opal I imagined installing a cat-proof fence around a bumper crop of catnip...




It seemed my little scheme was bearing fruit. Fitting I was pondering catnip...

"Which of you has the guts to try and get Opal's favorite toy away from her?" Dash said to the potentials.

Out came the cat of doom. I'm convinced she has Wolverine heritage. Maybe even Honey Badger.

I wonder if that's even possible? Eh, if I'm the spawn of Disharmony anything's possible.

The pets were terrified of the ball of furry claws and death that was Rarity's little whatever-sickeningly-cute-nickname-she-gave-it-was. I'm glad the one pony catzilla likes is the one I'm sharing a body with. Anyway, the end of it was that they were frozen with fear....all except Our Butterfly. He just flew forward, while I watched and...

He seemed to hypnotize the felidae mortis ...Everypony else could only think that what it did was very odd. Impressive, but odd.

I could see Twilight out of the corner of our eye. At first she was as impressed as Dash was, and then she frowned.

"Fluttershy... About that butterfly..." She began, and 'Shy turned us to face her. Just in time to hear a clattering and an angry meow.

We looked back to see the turtle had nudged Opal's basket over. The angry possible-wolverine-in-disguise leapt upon the hapless reptile and began fruitlessly clawing his shell. It resembled an army of ponies armed with butter knives trying to tear down a castle.

Dash, however, simply walked off without any comment.

It was fun watching the irresistible force wail away at the immovable object.

"...Fluttercruel? You suggested using Opal, didn't you?" Twilight challenged.

"....I might have."

Twilight sighed.

"Rarity's going to be furious if Opal breaks a claw you know. And what would happen if she'd attacked another pet?"

We shrugged.

"She'd need to get used to the other pet eventually if Dash is joining the pony pet playwhatvers."

I stood back and 'Shy finished up.

"She's right, Twilight. It's kind of cruel but that's just nature. Cats are predatory animals. She has to adjust. And if they're going to enjoy the play dates, they have to get used to being around her."

I have to admit, I was actually proud of 'Shy for that.

"...So this was actually a sensible test? What was Dash going to do originally?"

"A haunted house I think."

Twilight seemed to groan. "I dread to think what kind of things she'd call scary."

Dash however wasn't listening to us. I was paying attention to her though, in case the next madcap test was another time-waster.

"Okay, Rarity, gonna need your help again. Next contest: Style!"

I think me and Orange Apple both fell asleep through that one.

Pink cheered, "Rainbow Dash always dresses style!"

"No she doesn't, she usually doesn't even wear clothes." AJ pointed out.

"Sorry, this just brings back memories," Pink said. No one asked her what she meant, almost like our brains just rolled over it.

At least 'coolness' was short and to the point.

Owlowiscious I think approved of his distant cousin winning the 'awesomeness' leg of the contest. So much for Spike's opinion of owl head spinning being 'creepy.'

Needless to say, the old turtle failed at both. So much for being a secret animal martial arts student or something.

The turtle and the radicalness contest? Yeah, me and 'Shy both helped set up the death course he wanted to try. Not a bad idea since being indestructible was a proven talent of his. Too bad he tripped on his first jump. Points for the guts to try it, not so much being as nuts as his potential master.

Rainbow started to get creeped out by an elderly turtle that wasn't giving up no matter what. Personally, I could appreciate not giving up till the end, but there was such a thing as picking your battle.

RD declared the last contest would be a race against her, with the Owl, Bat, Eagle, and Falcon as the finalists.

'Shy gave a hug and pat on the head to the wasp and Our Butterfly for trying their hardest while Angel took the rest back to the cottage but would hook back up with us at the gorge the race was to be at.

And not just any gorge.

We'd flown down here looking for a missing bunny last week.

Those poor Quarray Eels. They got Stared so hard when they gave us trouble.

Wait, they weren't poor at all. They deserved it! Plotholes!

I spotted our forlorn little turtle...

'Hey, 'Shy.... Don't you feel a little sad for that turtle?'

"Tortoise."

'Whatever. Point is, I think Dash might have made an unfair assumption. He can be a pet for her... We should take him with us. I'm pretty sure those Eels are in more danger of breaking a tooth than he is of getting hurt. '

This should be fun. Seeing Dash have to put him in.

Through a place like Ghastly Gorge? Likely the only one to not come out as bones and a few feathers.

Maybe he'll even win. I was half expecting him to be the only one brave enough to give it a shot.

The look on Rainbow's face. Turtles can't fly, after all... That would be hilarious.

Did you know Griffons used to use turtles like weapons? They used to just drop them to try and break the shells but they soon learned they were pretty tough. So instead they just dropped them onto the heads of other things...

 




Of course Rainbow would turn the introduction to the final examine into a tribute to herself. 'Honor and glory' of being her pet? Oh come on. And of course she'd never imagine any living thing being able to pass her.

Spike had chosen to join us. When Twilight reminded him she had told him to keep an eye on Trixie, Spike responded with a few words I didn't hear that made Twilight face burn slightly and she whispered they'd talk more when they got home.

None of the finalists chickened out. Dash sure had picked animals that were like her.

After the turtle began to slowly trot across the bottom of the gorge Twilight teleported us the relatively short distance (for her) to the finish line.

Don't ask what we did while waiting. It was very boring. Pink kept playing Tic-Tac-Toe with herself when no one wanted to loose to the reigning champion again.

At least with Rainbow Dash leading the pack it was going to be a short wait. To kill time I imagined little Opals attacking castle turtle with buckets of water getting dumped on them. Hey, I said imagined, don't push your luck! Angel looked as bored as us. Skipping a lot of details? Nothing important.

"Yeah, he sucks at consistency. It'll be over soon though." Pinkie suddenly blurted out.

"...What?" Applejack asked.

"The owl. Haven't you noticed he keeps having short bursts of speed instead of a level race?"

The winners were approaching. The Falcon crossed the line, then the Eagle. The Bat and the Owl brought up the rear, but everypony seemed to be nervous.

"Something's not right here..." Twilight said, raising binoculars.

I knew what wasn't right. I barged my way in behind the binoculars.

"...Where's Rainbow Dash?"

Applejack then barged in too.

"...Great galloping galoshes! There's been an avalanche in there!"

'Silly Applejack, that's snow. Avalanches are snow. That's a landslide....' I thought.

Wait.

' LANDSLIDE?!'

Everyone else was instantly concerned. Fluttershy just started quietly mumbling something even I couldn't make out.

There was only one logical reason that a landslide would have stopped RD. I pictured her wing pinned under a rock and her having to cut it off to avoid being a sitting duck. Then an image of Dash  flashed through my mind buried under tons of rock bleeding to death before she'd get a chance to suffocate.

No no no! This isn't right! I just wanted to see Rainbow put down a peg! Like during the mess with the Mare-Do-Well! Please no! Dash had given me a scare a week back during my cute-ceaņera but I didn't want this.

"Wait, look!" Pinkie shouted. Despite not having binoculars.

I dared hope.

"It's the turtle!" I said, quickly looking through them.

"TORTOISE!" Everyone shouted.

"...Whatever."

"And he's carrying something on his back..." Twilight noted.

It was Rainbow Dash. She was alive. Mostly in one piece. Looked like the tortoise kept bandages in that shell of his not just sunglasses. I relaxed a little, relieved.

The look on Rainbow's face, she looked small, but happy, maybe, enlightened?

Had I worn that face when 'Shy made me see I had a life and I couldn't just throw it away?

I'd just been playing a game with the tortoise. He had apparently saved Rainbow. Still it would have been fun if he had won... Heh, now I sound like one of 'Shy's pony-tales.

"...But I said whoever crosses the finish line with me gets to be my pet." Dash said, breaking me out of my little funk.

Wait.

That means.... She has a pet that can't fly!

I stopped laughing in our head eventually. 'Shy was not too happy.

Dash meanwhile, was saying how 2-D she had been for wanting only a pet that was focused totally on winning and a top athletic. Apparently the tortoise had something of more value.

The Falcon looked surprised, sad, then resigned when RD spelled it out that the pet that chose to stop and save her flanks was worth more than any contest winner.

Seriously you know all this, why are you having me repeat it all? You're going to bore your readers to tears. Me? Fine. I felt relieved Dash was safe after the nasty things I had been thinking about her all day and she could have been eaten by Eels. I felt sad for the Falcon coming in first but getting his positioned handed off because he had acted like a simplified version of Rainbow caring only for the win. I guess I was a relieved that none of the animals had gotten themselves killed in Rainbow's death race. And I was happy for the old turtle too I guess, having broken out of his role as the 'joke competitor.'




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Back home, 'Shy insisted we give the Falcon a talk after coming in second, he and the rest were, after all, still under our care. I agreed.

"Hey, so if you're ever ready, I'm right here. Until then, CHIN UP! Rainbow wanted you as a pet because you-, er, look . . ." Giving speeches to animals was 'Shy's department.

'So let me try instead.' "Just because you didn't get Rainbow Dash as your master isn't the end of the world. I know if you want a master that bad then you'll find a pony for you. But only if you don't give up. You came in second place, out of the dozen other animals that took part. I'm sure you'll find a master someday."

It actually felt good to see the bird nod. I knew what it was like to seemingly be just chaff.

"Hey 'Shy, I'm a good Element of Kindness aren't I? I'm not just a one trick pony right?" I said out load, the mental chatting was proving a bother anyway.

"You helped Tank continue."

"I just wanted to get under Rainbow's hide. Just because something good came about from it doesn't make it good."

"Then be happy that some good came about anyway, and learn from it. You're a different kind of Kindness than I am, don't judge yourself based on me."

Yeah, we ponies are good at dishing out advice we have to have served back to us later.

You know what that's like? How? Fine, keep your secrets.

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We went to the library to get Dash some books on tortoise care to completely ignore. We didn't ask why the library smelled like blue or why Trixie's eyebrow needed regrowing. I was too busy basking in the comedy. Of all the possible pets...

The next day, Fluttershy was going to meet Dash to see if she had any more questions. Possibly questions like 'how do I stop a tortoise from falling out of a house made of clouds?'

He's tough. He'd bounce. Remember what I said about them and griffins? And there was Twilight's cloud-walking spell.

"Rainbow Dash? Are you and Tank in?" Fluttershy shouted at her cloud-house.

I really don't get the name. What's a tank meant to be anyway? A water tank? Weird.

Of course I had made the mistake of saying so around Twilight.

"Well Earth Ponies during one of Equestria's previous wars had to rely on their physical strength and invented heavily armored mobile artillery, powered by their own muscles. At first they were treated purely as blockade breakers, and to shield them from air-born enemies dropping rock on them, but were eventually seen as highly effective at other functions. Tank was actually a code word short for water 'tank' when the weapon was first produced in secret in the year-" Yeah. That one lasted a while. Need to ask Rainbow what a bullet was sometime too.

Rainbow called from inside. Scootaloo was at school. "Yeah, there in a sec, 'Shy."

Ah, she probably had to hold onto him all night...

Oh.

That's not fair.

Pink built him some sort of flying thing! She was the only pony in Equestria who'd have invented such a gizmo!




My fun was ruined, but 'Shy and Dash simply watched Tank fly like a brick with his dumb fun-ruining flying propeller hat thing. Meh. He'd get used to it.

Rainbow asked, "Uh, 'Shy? I kinda... I've got a little question about Tank. He... Okay, he's tough. I doubt a volcanic eruption would stop him..."

Sure can't slow him down then. One is his top and only speed...

"...But... How long has he got? He looks kind of... old."

We both laughed at that. Me and 'Shy.

"Oh, Rainbow Dash. He'll probably outlive you..." 'Shy began.

"...After all, tortoises can live for over a hundred years!" I finished. Made me wonder what stories behind those beady eyes.

Dash blinked, then smiled

"That's good to know!"

Then she took on a serious face.

"But for future reference you two finishing each other's sentences is creepy as hay."

I smiled.

"I know." I looked at how excited Rainbow was, just enjoying Tank's company. It didn't matter if he was perfect, what she wanted, or if he had overstepped his role. He had beaten the odds, he had shown compassion and devotion to someone who had kept telling him to give up and go home. It hadn't mattered. He had helped her anyway. And she was so, gentle with him.

Was this the Rainbow Dash who had always existed underneath all that boasting?

"Hey, Dash."

"Yeah?"

"You . . . " I made tiny circles in the cloud we were standing on, I let my colors and Cutie Mark appear. I wasn't sure how to get started, I didn't want her to be mad at me. "This isn't easy for me to say but, but I think you've grown a little thanks to Tank."

"Hey! That's the whole point of the letters to Princess Celestia remember? We're telling her what we learn."

"Yeah. Heh. I guess. Ya know Dash, you're alright after all."

Rainbow didn't talk for a bit, I think she was thinking something over. "…Hey, I don't think I ever thanked you…"

"Thank me? For what?"

"That was you back at Sugarcube Corner, wasn't it? The one who helped Pinkie pull me back from becoming a Nightmare?"

Needless to say, that surprised me.

"H-how did you know?"

"Did you really think I wouldn't figure it out?"

"…AJ told you, didn't she?"

"…Uh…N-no! Not at all!" she replied, not really hiding her surprise well. "…Anyway, I just wanted to thank you…I'd be Nightmare I-Don't-Wanna-Know right now if you hadn't been there…I guess you're not just Discord's evil minion after all."

"…You're welcome, I guess…But hey, as much as I hate to admit it, without 'Shy, I'd still be the Old Man's little wind-up toy."

"Yeah, I guess so…I gotta admit, I'll take you over your 'Old Man' any day," she said, putting her hoof on my shoulder.

I said lowly, "That's not a very high mark to fly past."

Rainbow cringed. She wasn't good at these kind of speeches either. "Look, I'm sorry for my attitude. I just don't believe in 'forgotten' along with 'forgiven.' I'd say I'm not used to having my flanks saved but, dangit, I'm sayin' that I'm sorry I was a jerk, I'm sorry I put a black spot on the day that was your day, and I'm really happy you're around! Rainbow Dash -never- turns her back on anypony who's ever helped her and that includes you!" Then she smiled at me, "Pal."

I smiled, I felt my eyes soften. That was the Rainbow most ponies knew, but I could finally see the real Rainbow Dash behind it too. "Thanks Rainbow."

Now You want to hear about my cute-ceaņera? After making everypony fall asleep from that one? Heh. It's about time.
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The chapter begins with Fluttercruel mockingly asking why she and Trixie get so much focus lately while Twilight and Rarity are seemingly ignored by the interviewers. Then again the daughter clearly loves getting attention, so she isn't seriously complaining about it. Now it is her turn to tell the story of how Rainbow Dash got a tortoise of all things for a pet. The pet playtime is actually not that boring for Cruel but mostly since she likes Angel, the rest of the animals did not interest her that much until Rainbow Dash got interested. Fluttercruel isn't that surprised that her fellow pegasus managed to miss this activity since Dash spends so much of the day with naps. Maybe she needs to recharge so often because of her exhausting stunts and speedy flying? For now Fluttercruel is just happy to ignore this conversation and she would herself rather not point out that she has no pet for herself. One reason is that Angel is kinda her pet as well and the second one is that she doesn't want to activate Fluttershy's “pet pairing” mode. Her mother on the other side seems to panic a bit about letting Rainbow Dash down but this fear would have gotten MUCH worse when Pinkie Pie suddenly starts to move Fluttershy's head. To counter the breakdown the daughter takes control and manages to give a convincing short performance as Fluttershy. On the one hand it is a bit unnerving that even longtime friends of Fluttershy have trouble to tell the difference with this mother-daughter duo from time to time. But on the other side this skill might eventually come in handy when they need to deceive others.

Afterwards she manages to calm down her mother and notices how much progress she has made. In comparison on the first few playdates Cruel wanted to make the animals viciously attack each other. Her mind has certainly become sharper as well as she effortlessly manages to sum up the interaction between pets and owners and in a few cases seems to know more about the pet then the owner themselves. Yet she is still puzzled why Angel is just hopping around in circles. But it is a bit more then that, these are “imagination rounds” and the rabbit is imagining entire worlds and stories from the adrenaline he gets while doing so. Pandora would approve and Fluttercruel can understand the pet better then she wants to admit. She herself was also trapped running circles in her own head. The calmness however is over once Rainbow admits that she might want to have a pet. Now Fluttershy fully enters “pet pairing” mode and her daughter is overpowered with feelings of intense happiness about a new bond between a pet and a pony.

Fluttershy begins to ramble and literally drags Rainbow Dash with them. Her choices would obviously be something cute while Fluttercruel would like to go for a wilder and more powerful pet. But while they have no problem to disagree on this, the daughter crosses the line when she tells the obsession of her mother crazy. The cheerful pony is instantly broken much to the shame of her daughter. Discord tried so hard to break Fluttershy and fails while Fluttercruel keeps doing so without even wanting it to happen. Even Dash notices the sudden change and Fluttercruel tries to calm down her mother again but it isn't as easy this time. She has cut her deep after Fluttershy experienced TRUE insanity and now she needs some time to recover from these words. But Fluttercruel takes responsibility and gives her mother the time she needs while admitting to Rainbow that it was her fault. It is not easy to talk with the other pegasus since both tend to talk before thinking it through and tend to insult each other. But both do care about Fluttershy and actually their tastes in pets are somewhat similar.

Meanwhile Fluttershy has recovered and how! Much to the horror of her daughter she begins to sing about getting a pet. It is really not the kind of music she enjoys but she prefers to hear the voice of her mother compared to the songs Pinkie Pie puts together. So Fluttercruel just relaxes and comments on the direction of the conversation/song and has a much easier time to understand that Rainbow Dash wants a flying pet. Eventually she begins to join the song as well and even begins to enjoy doing so. The three really fit well together at this point and sing in perfect unity. Maybe her mother didn't notice but it would make even more sense if Fluttershy would pretend to have missed this to not embarrass her daughter. She knows that Fluttercruel is not a fan of overly cutesy things and would not like to admit what she has just done. But now it is time for Rainbow Dash's extreme tryouts and a dozen of these animals have the chance to become her new pet. So Fluttercruel, Angel and Fluttershy make their choices including the Monarch Butterfly who is clearly different from the others pets.

The other outstanding pet is a certain tortoise that is clearly the total opposite of what Rainbow wants but his determination motivates both mother and daughter to at least give him a chance. Fluttercruel cheerful mocking tone changes once she hears Rainbow calling the tortoise a thing. Cruel herself did suffer from identity issues and saw herself as a mere thing and she will not accept anybody else making the same mistake. At this moment she really wishes that the tortoise would have some secret ninja training and could kick Dash's tail for this comment. But it seems that while the animal is incredible old (older then Ponyville in fact), he did not learn combat lessons while doing so. Eventually Fluttershy is able to convince Rainbow to at least give him a chance while Fluttercruel's words would have been much less kind. She isn't too fond on this entire egoistical setup either but it is pretty clear that both Rainbow and Fluttercruel tend to clash with each other because they have both such strong egos. Dash does mean well but she can't stop turning all of this into a grand show with herself in the center. Meanwhile both Spike and Trixie are busy messing with magic in the library. It is for preparation for the festival but the results are slightly explosive.

At the same time the tortoise has it even worse and doesn't even cross the finish line of the local race track for the speed test. The agility test isn't even prepared yet but the entire group manages to put something together quite fast. While doing so Fluttercruel suggests changing the next test from a haunted house to a simpler act involving Opal. It might be cruel but it is unlikely that somebody will get seriously hurt. Unsurprisingly the tortoise fails the agility test as well so the next test involves taking Opal's favorite toy from her. This time the tortoise actually manages to put up a good show by showing no fear towards the cat and effortlessly taking anything Opal could dish out. But he is still not getting any praise from Dash. On the other side Twilight is the only one observant and smart enough to realize that there IS something special about the butterfly. The unicorn also understood that Fluttercruel suggested the cat test but Fluttershy makes clear that it is for the best as Dash's future pet will be part of the upcoming playdates, so she needs to be able to endure Opal. The next tests don't turn out much better for the tortoise and eventually the final test will be the race against Rainbow Dash through a certain gorge.

It is the home of the always hungry Quarray Eels and while Rainbow Dash might be able to handle them, they might be too much for the potential pets. Except the tortoise that seems truly indestructible. To Fluttercruel's surprise it turns out that Rainbow knew the pets well enough and none of them is giving up on this final challenge, they really are as stubborn as she is. The tortoise certainly doesn't fear the eels and so Rainbow and the remaining pets enter the gorge while the rest waits ahead. The wait is relatively boring (but Pinkie Pie shows her surprisingly sharp mind by effortlessly predicting that the owl is overall the slowest of the flying pets) and soon enough the four flying pets arrive. But there is no sight of Rainbow. It doesn't take the ponies long to realize that there was a landslide inside the gorge and Fluttercruel is shocked to her core. She did want Rainbow's ego to be knocked down, not see the prideful pegasus getting seriously injured. By now she has a clear line that she draws with her cruelty.

But it turns out that the turtle (tortoise!) whatever... has saved Rainbow Dash. She seems humbled from the experience but at the same time she grew from it. At this point Fluttercruel really wishes that it would be possible for the tortoise to be Rainbow's pet and much to her surprise the fellow pegasus declares him the winner for being the only one to cross the finish line WITH her. And how could you go wrong with somebody who always has sunglasses and bandages ready? Afterwards Fluttershy gives the falcon a pep talk since he still lost after trying so hard to win. Now he needs to learn a lesson from Tank and not give up. He can find a master for himself. Meanwhile Fluttercruel also feels like she just missed her chance to be a good Element of Kindness, while something good came from it, her original intentions were not exactly pure. She is a different kind of Kindness then her mother, yet like Fluttershy, she still has a lot to learn about herself and her abilities.

Fluttercruel is still cruel enough to wonder how hard it will be for the pegasus to handle a flightless pet but she certainly doesn't want Tank to fall to his death. But she finds the idea of Rainbow hugging the tortoise for dear life until somebody casts a cloudwalking spell on him pretty hilarious. Amusingly she has no idea what a tank or a bullet is but never say something like this around Twilight or she will enter “ultra lecture” mode. Fluttercruel's fun is also completely ruined by the fact that Tank can now hover with his little helicopter. It is likely a construction from Pinkie Pie, maybe she should become an inventor instead of an baker. Meanwhile Dash is actually worried for her new pet and wonders how long he still has to live but both mother and daughter ensure her that Tank will probably outlive the speedy pegasus. Fluttercruel's good observing skills are also shown by the fact that she can perfectly sum up why Rainbow Dash did fall in love with the old tortoise that went against all odds and helped Dash after everything she had done: There couldn't be a more loyal pet in this world and his loyalty managed to reach the heart of his new owner.

It is not easy for Fluttercruel to actually admit it but despite all her mocking of Rainbow Dash, she has actually begun to like her. In turn Rainbow thanks her for her efforts to stop Dash from becoming a Nightmare way back after her confession but she isn't particular good at these friendship speeches as well. But with her second attempt she manages to nail it by apologizing for her faults and ensuring Cruel that from now on Rainbow will be loyal to her new friend. It is a boastful declaration but Fluttercruel can see the heart behind it.

Overall the chapter did manage to balance Fluttercruel's kindness and cruelty quite well. She wanted Rainbow to suffer from the results of her own actions but there was always a line that she would not cross. There was never the wish that somebody would be genuinely harmed. Besides that she was also a very sharp and capable observer that managed to notice a few things before the others did so. Both she and Rainbow Dash do have a lot in common especially the fact that both hide their kindness behind a boastful presentation. They can become wonderful friends if they continue this path.
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I found a few minor mistakes:

Then 'Shy shoved out of the spotlight, "Or a toucan?" should be Then 'Shy shoved me out of the spotlight, "Or a toucan?"

" Opal get hurt? That's a good one." I actually laughed. Here there is an additional space between '' and Opal

"She'd need to get used to the other pet eventually if Dash is joining the pony pet playwhatvers." could be "She'd need to get used to the other pet eventually if Dash is joining the pony pet playwhatevers."

“Dash meanwhile, was saying how 2-D she had been for wanting only a pet that was focused totally on winning and a top athletic.” should be “Dash meanwhile, was saying how 2-D she had been for wanting only a pet that was focused totally on winning and being a top athletic.”
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At least with Rainbow Dash leading the pack at least it was going to be a short wait.

You might want to take one of the "at leasts" out of that sentence.
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Done. And thank you.
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I can't believe it took me this long to read this one! This is one of the funniest and most touching chapters in the story, what with how 'Shy and 'Cruel deal with Dash's desire for a pet.

And I liked the "Doesn't she have Scoopapoo?" line. Poor Scoot! :rofl: I have to admit, I was thinking that myself when I first saw the episode.

And I love the historical* reference here: Did you know Griffons used to use turtles like weapons? They used to just drop them to try and break the shells but they soon learned they were pretty tough. So instead they just dropped them onto the heads of other things...

Kinda wish I could've heard the rest of Twilight's little lecture on earth pony waggenbergs too.

Great chapter!

* -- Our-World history, not Pony World history.
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"I can't believe it took me this long to read this one! "

You're supposed to read these in order. Though this is the chapter I'm LEAST proud of.

" This is one of the funniest and most touching chapters in the story, what with how 'Shy and 'Cruel deal with Dash's desire for a pet. "

Takes all kinds.

"And I liked the "Doesn't she have Scoopapoo?" line. Poor Scoot! I have to admit, I was thinking that myself when I first saw the episode."

That's what got written? 0-0

"And I love the historical* reference here: Did you know Griffons used to use turtles like weapons? They used to just drop them to try and break the shells but they soon learned they were pretty tough. So instead they just dropped them onto the heads of other things..."

Hehe.

"Kinda wish I could've heard the rest of Twilight's little lecture on earth pony waggenbergs too."

You know Twilight, she always has another lecture.

"Great chapter!"

Be sure to tell LZ0 THAT!
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I think this was a pretty good chapter, myself, showing the girls and 'Cruel when they didn't have some disaster to deal with. It's a lovely piece of work.
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Heh. *hugs* Be sure to tell LZ0.
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DracoDei Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
SPOILER ALERT!!!




Huh? I was the one complaining about her stealing my spotlight? Got me there, fine.
-Consider replacing the comma with a period, or maybe even an ellipses.

Whao-kay, just don't bet on a lot of ponies reading this interview!
-Somehow this seemed out of character when I read it, but on thinking about it, she really is a extremely pessimistic and self-loathing in her history, and that isn't going to completely go away any time soon I guess.

getting our trick from Celestia
-What trick?

It's mostly cause I like Angel's attitude.
-*Snerk*

Fluttershy asked actually surprised.
-I think you mean "acted", but I could be wrong. Or it could be you meant that she asked about Rainbow Dash not knowing about the PPPD with actual surprise, but if so you should probably re-write that last phrase.

' Of course she didn't know, blondie! She spends most of her day napping. '
-Spaces inside of the single-quotes seem extraneous.

blondie!
-Paused briefly to wonder if this would make sense as an insult in Pony society, then I decided "Why not?".

and I decided to take a look around
-Look at what? The other pets to take stock of them and consider their relationships with their owners? Or just watching the conversation rather than staring at the ground like 'Shy might be doing while fretting?

and don't tell 'Shy that, you'll see in a moment what I mean.
-Thinks that 'Shy would insist on her picking out one?

Besides, like I said, I like Angel.
-But what does Angel think of her? Probably hasn't warmed up to her yet, although I imagine Fluttershy is trying.

Maybe Rainbow should bring that orange filly?...
-MAYBE reverse the order of the question mark and the ellipses. Also, standard joke is standard, but not a bad thing.

'Shy ignored me in favor of more mental fretting.
-'Cruel can hear the fretting, right, as in they can't hide their thoughts from each-other?

I was looking at Pinkie in the corner of my eye,
-Well, that makes me realize you already answered my earlier question about what she was looking at.

"Please don't be mad at us!" I said to everypony else, hoping it sounded like 'Shy.
-Ah, thus the "Not thinking as fast as I could have" bit in that she just said what was on 'Shy's mind.

Neither of us was really in charge enough to stop our head moving back and forth,
-Of course, in the original interpretation, Fluttershy was just being compliant.

Don't forget I have a full set of 'Shy's memories up until the Old Man zapped her.
-Which is merely to say she knows how to walk and fly?

starving Opal
-Which would require holding Opal captive for a day or three one assumes?

(heh, I imagined when Gummy would be three times her size and she could use him to bounce on, or eat her, whichever happened first).
-Well, she IS an Earth-Pony, but I guess she hasn't been training him NOT to bite.

(it amazed me the spoiled fat cat had enough muscle to go rabbit hunting when Rarity wasn't looking).
-Apparently she is just fluffy, if you trust the one scene with Rarity holding her in the shower instead of assuming they just drew her skinny to make her look more pathetic. This also makes me wonder if the "steal the toy from Opal" test was 'Cruel's idea, as a catharsis/redirecting of her prior desire to dangle Angel in front of a starving Opal. Not that she would want to do that anymore, but...


Winona and the orange apple?
-Apple

'You brought him to the park to run around in circles in an area smaller than our kitchen table?'
-Yes, well, he is being sociable about it. I guess? Plus a change of scenery for running?

'He wanted the fresh air remember?'
-And probably fewer other animals around than there are on the front lawn.

on the adrenaline high as he jogged in circles.
-Was this inspired by some obscure rabbit behavior? Not that it couldn't stand on its own merits, just wondering.

Considering that was about all I used to be able to do while locked up in my own head other than wallow in self-pity, I can understand.
-Huh, I wonder how good her imagination was? Perhaps pretty good given all the practice her shared history had with imagining disaster scenarios.


'Isn't she called Scoopapoo?' I snarked.
-Took me a second to get the meaning. Probably something about servanthood (see throwing the apple core away in Owl's Well That Ends Well), although it COULD be an incontinence joke, but the only one I have heard the fandom applying that to is Sweetie/Poopie Belle.

And me hit by a tidal wave of smilie faces.
-Is this your grammar error, or is 'Cruel knocked a bit loopy by the force of 'Shy's enthusiasm?

is not much fun when it happens without much time to brace.
-So she could enjoy it if she had some warning? Or would it merely be tolerable?

Angel caught a lift on our tail.
-I guess one has to think too much while running through town to imagine. Also I guess that he enjoys the PPPD's since everypet else is acting a bit silly, so he can do something silly-looking without seeming out of place as he might among his normal peer-group around Fluttershy's house. I also wonder if he enjoys bedtime stories of adventurous nature, or if he can read well enough that he doesn't need a reader. Certainly Owleious(sp) can almost certainly fetch books by name. This is more likely in your version since he narrates a chapter, but that may have been Luna empowering him permanently before sending him to Twilight or something like that. Actually that probably isn't part of this setting, but whichever.

'Honey Badger' I suggested. If Rainbow Dash wanted a fearless and tough pet, she couldn't do much better than one of those.
-Not a bad suggestion per se. Although RD's life is more like a trapeze act at the circus than "Jackass".

'NO, NOT THE BEES!'
-Is cruel making a joke, or did they get stung and 'Shy was much more phlegmatic about it (possibly more concerned with the poor bees that died needlessly than their own pain?).

Honey Badger, not Honey Makers!
-Imperfect mind-reading, was 'Shy not liking the honey-badger idea but inspired by it, or was it just coincidence?

She cut herself off mid-babble outside and in, enough for even Rainbow Crash, a pony who could accuse mountains of 'coming out of nowhere' to see it.
-Only when being distracted by Pinkie, who may possibly win Tic-Tac-Toe by being so nuts that her opponents forget what they are doing.

Home was barely twenty meters away.
-Consider an appropriate number of "pony-lengths" for more immersion, but whichever. Then again, that is less important when you aren't trying to avoid "feet" and their derived unit "yards".


'I'm sorry, I didn't mean it like that! It's-it's okay 'Shy! You weren't being bad I swear!
-"Once burned, twice 'Shy" from her Nightmare episode?

'I'll explain it. Just calm down a little...'
"It was my fault. I said something stupid. I'm sorry," I said our color and cutie mark shifting to mine. I rose our head and looked at her.
-On reading the first line I thought that 'Cruel was going to explain what she meant exactly to 'Shy about 'Shy's behavior, not explain matters to RD. I wonder if we are going to get a long back-story about one 'Shy's history with pets.

Hypocrite.
-True.

Chatting with 'Shy was so much easier when we had a mirror handy.
-Gets the facial expressions across better?

'Trust me 'Shy, it's an improvement.
-Yes. And I suspect that PDP may be able to give 'Shy some advice... then again I think that PDP still wears her heart on her sleeve just as much as she used to, she just no longer has the emotional pointer of her heart nailed on "Happy".

"Honey Badger," I said. Seriously? A pit viper? A skunk maybe, I'm not THAT cruel…anymore…
-Well, she is honest... Also, when I was in college, I had an Environmental Psychology class that was co-taught by the then-director of the Atlanta Zoo. My final project (a group effort) was to redesign the petting zoo to be more ethical (children can be REALLY harsh on animals without meaning to, or sometimes intentionally). We were told to ignore any considerations of budget, since it is easier to cut a grandiose idea down than to take a conservative idea and make it more awesome. I asked the director after the class if we could also ignore legal considerations. He said no, and asked me why I asked (maybe in that order, maybe not). I said I wanted to specify non-descented skunks, since the idea that negative actions should have negative consequences is a very ethical idea. Naturally there would be signs warning of this. I recall him seeming pleased with my creativity.

"...Really? Those are kinda cool. Too bad they don't fly."
-Because Rainbows life is not COMPLETELY unlike an episode of Jackass, just MORE like a trapeze artist pushing their limits enough that they hit the net a lot. I DO hope that 'Cruel doesn't end up rigging the cliff to steer RD to the actual correct choice.

Is she...
"Now, Rainbow my dear, I cannot express my delight..."
She is.
-Nice reference to S1E2.

Please find a band on the ship and please make them play metal pony instead of the song she'd sing!
-Nice jumbled up titanic reference. Not sure about the word "pony" though.

Oh what the Smooze,
-*Giggle* somehow this works better than "Taurtarus".

'Shy can carry a tune even better than Pink.
-Well, she IS more melodic, but for someone who prefers metal both would be about equally bad...


Cutesy? Wootsie? Have you even met her?
-Is the idea that Rainbow's side of the duet is actually 'Cruel in 'Shy's head thinking on behalf of RD? Also, it seems that they CAN'T hear each-other's every thought.

Oh, who am I kidding? I'm with 'Shy on this one, that rocked!
-*Giggle*

"I've got just the thing in that tree, Dash
-Is this line really in the song?

Come on 'Shy, you know the flying squirrel won't get adopted without the moose, he's his best friend.
-LOL! Excellent...

Then 'Shy shoved out of the spotlight,
-"shoved me" with an optional "back" at the end of it.

Shy's not the only singer in this family tree!
-"I'd like to be a tree..."? Does this mean that 'Cruel would enjoy being a thorn-bush? Previously I'm thinking either Kudzu (a real pest), or poison oak...

Had I really just sung? Had I actually -enjoyed- singing? -With- Shy? Sure I sung before but I was making fun of her before but . . . but now?
-Huh, and here I thought it was perfectly in-character and she was just trying to resolve the situation properly.

I cautiously asked.
-Was thinking this was a typo when I first saw it.

I don't know if she really didn't notice
-I would think it would be kinda hard to miss, but ok.

'Not yet. She's wanting to have tryouts.'
-Must be possible to retreat very far into the mind to miss that much... or maybe not THAT far. No harder than zoning out in a car with two people talking.

You both pick out four?
-Angel is that interested and maybe even that competent? I guess the second at least makes perfect sense, even if he doesn't seem like the sort to get to know the other animals... well, maybe he watches them but pretends like he doesn't care.

Falcon, Eagle, Hummingbird, and plus a brown duck.
-Consider removing either "and" or "plus".

would it kill us to have a wyvern?
-To close to dragon... give her a few more years around Spike (and that may have taken a step back when he turned dangerous for a while), then try the next stage of the desensitization. Also, she seems to stick to the less magical species... dire butterfly's and wasps (although there may be hornets or wasps that big) sure, but nothing on-site with the Magical Beast type.

Our Butterfly.
-Originally I thought that the capitalization of "our" was a typo, now I am smelling backstory again. I wonder if it will be from when they were one pony, or something they did to tie their cutie-marks together?

"If he's picked he can help out Rainbow in more ways than one."
-Oh, wait... that is the butterfly that visits the hospital? Uh, wow... that's... problematic if it gets taken away from that job.

This should be fun...
-So 'Cruel is doing it for the joke?

handling animals was 'Shy's special talent not mine.
-I have forgotten what 'Cruel's special talent is specifically... meh, guess I will risk the distraction of skimming a few of the previous chapters.

-While I was re-reading I found the following typo back in The Foal of Omelas:
Her muscled bulged,
-"muscles" or "muscled legs"

In an inverted wing shape was a pair of pony hooves, pressing together, one larger and that of a mare, holding up the hoof of a filly.
"My... my cutie mark's true meaning... OUR cutie marks' true meanings are... to help those who can't, who won't help themselves."
And an outline of a helping hoof glowed on Fluttercruel's right foreleg.
-Ah, there we go, back to "Cruel's Best Pet"... but it seem that Fluttercruel's Stare might be more tuned to Ponies, with "Monsters" being an overlapping shared area? I mean Nightmare Whisper was certainly in-equine in form and mindset.

was trained by a radical rat
-I remember what inspired this line... nice.

'Shy said he predates Ponyville,
-Wow... thought THOSE sorts of Tortoises were bigger. Guess all bets are off in Equestria.

I found myself rooting for my 'joke application.'
-Rigging the cliff now sounds more possible, but... it would have had to have been ahead of time, since the Flutter-body was at the finish-line with everypony else.

I'll trust the purple encyclopedia's opinion more than yours, Rainbow.
-Rainbow IS the more experienced in the area though.

"Oh, she's still freaking out a little over the festival.
-Nice cover.

Still, at least she's got her plan now, if she was still worried about coming up with an idea it'd be a lot worse..." Twilight answered without actually saying where Trixie was.
-Giving her a lack of interruptions, or is she practicing some place dangerous or mystically powerful? Or maybe with visiting her family, and trying to work with them for a premiere performance when she returns to the stage with them?

'I guess she's in the library? ' I wondered.
'Probably.' 'Shy replied. 'Which explains where Spike is.'
-Spike maybe, Trixie probably not from the way you are writing.

"Oh yes Trixie is touching that spell book!"
The entire library shook followed by blue smoke slowly rising from all the windows.
-Slips back into her old mode of speech when stressed... I think I remember that from earlier. Also, I wonder what is in the spell-book. Probably just stuff that requires a LOT of prior experience to be able to cast correctly.

'Saaaay, 'Shy. I have an idea. What's Rainbow planning to do to test out how brave these pets are again?'
-Ah, rigged FAR in advance. Wonder if she will just be rigging it to try to catch ALL of them somehow... not sure what she would use for the trigger though.

I think she was going to set up a haunted house.''
-What?!

Given that setting up a bunch of obstacles on poles had given her trouble, I doubted her haunted house was going to be ready by the end of next year's Winter Wrap-Up.
-Good point. I wonder if RD HAD flown Ghastly Gorge before, or at least frequently.

"Opal won't get hurt will she?" Rarity asked.
-Oh, THAT part... right.

" Opal get hurt?
-Extraneous space after the quote.

Everypony looked at their handiwork.
-hoofiwork? Too cutesy?

turtletoise
-Snerk.

but Our Butterfly crashed. Not too strange, but he really should have made it...
-Interesting... wonder if it was a gift from Celestia to Fluttershy and Celestia was tweaking things? Probably not.

Even I thought that was a little cruel, but it still won the course by a good margin, and we were on our way.
-Given it is possible for Philomena and that this is a top-level contest, where if the judging wasn't harsh it might be a tie of perfect scores...

I sigh and handed him two bits for Our Butterfly not coming in first.
-"sighed" also, nice touch.

It was funny, first time I saw Opal I imagined installing a cat-proof fence around a bumper crop of catnip...
-Interesting...

Eh, if I'm the spawn of Disharmony anything's possible.
-Point... of course in my fanon Celestia and Luna engage in various magical versions of genetic engineering on volunteers (or parental volunteers when they have to work in-utero for a specific project). Derpy is actually a failed experiment.

...Everypony else could only think that what it did was very odd. Impressive, but odd.
-Miniature version of The Stare? And yeah, that WAS a bit odd. I put it down to "This is Equestria, of course some of the normal and only slightly abnormal looking creatures have magical abilities".

At first she was as impressed as Dash was, and then she frowned.
-I wonder how many chapters it will be before we find out how THAT conversation went... I also wonder if the Butterfly will be responsible for destabilizing the cliff, and was ABOUT to trigger it on the contestants when RD crashed into it, setting it off... come to that the Butterfly could have teleported Tank, and then strength-boosted him... perhaps even a little subtle spacial warping to get them to the finish-line faster?

possible-wolverine-in-disguise
-Consider "possibly-wolverine-in-disguise".

"...Fluttercruel? You suggested using Opal, didn't you?" Twilight challenged.
-THAT is her question, NOT the Spell-Like Ability of the butterfly? Or is she working up to the Butterfly in stages, laying her groundwork as far as Motive?

playwhatvers
-"playwhatevers" or maybe "playwhatev's"

She has to adjust. And if they're going to enjoy the play dates, they have to get used to being around her."
-Same logic as fully justifies RD running them through Ghastly Gorge, despite some fans saying it was too harsh/risky.

Twilight seemed to groan. "I dread to think what kind of things she'd call scary."
-Well, apparently, getting struck by small lightning-bolts... although that might not be what she would go for since it is "general prank" not "scare" really. She was trying to be scary just before the cliff collapsed in S1E2.

Orange Apple
-This is her nickname for Applejack, right? I don't think AJ came back with OJ inside her brain accidentally.

Pink cheered, "Rainbow Dash always dresses style!"
-Nice use of fan-references.

At least 'coolness' was short and to the point.
-Was that the yelling, or the talent contest?

Yeah, me and 'Shy both helped set up the death course he wanted to try.
-Ok, so that was the talent contest.

not so much being as nuts as his potential master.
-Actually, in this contest that WOULD be a plus.

Personally, I could appreciate not giving up till the end,
-Due to having had that bite all of Equestria in the flank that one time?

Those poor Quarray Eels. They got Stared so hard when they gave us trouble.
-Nice one... I was going to say something about it being nice that Fluttershy can use it in her OWN defense (apparently) but then I realized that the bunny might have been swallowed in front of her, or that Fluttercruel might have done the Staring. Or Fluttershy might have been doing it in defense of Fluttercruel, but that is functionally equivalent in effect to self-defense, even if it isn't quite the same as far as character development.

Plotholes!
-Nice one. Wonder if she learned that swear from Pinkie, or if it is a pre-existing one? I could imagine how it could evolve from Song of Solomon-esque poetry in which the groom references "The fertile plot of land", which would turn into a less specific area of the body (and perhaps no longer gender specific), which would in turn turn into a DIFFERENT specific area with the addition of the suffix "hole".

We should take him with us.
-Ok, so no cliff-rigging YET. I wonder if the control of Our Butterfly is psychic rather than verbal so 'Cruel can give it orders without 'Shy overhearing her?

I was half expecting him to be the only one brave enough to give it a shot.
-Shows how much she knows...

Turtles can't fly, after all... That would be hilarious.
-Well, not until a (demi-)goddess makes a propeller for them, perhaps from a design by a reality-warping artificer...

So instead they just dropped them onto the heads of other things...
-Huh... and here I was expecting them to use ones with a good bite too and not worry about aiming quite as much. Also I wonder if you included this so that propeller failure wouldn't be a worry... or maybe just to explain how he got down the cliff at the start, since "just crawled off the edge" was suggested on RPG.NET.

'Honor and glory' of being her pet? Oh come on. And of course she'd never imagine any living thing being able to pass her.
-Pretty much... maybe not so much the first point, but she really is that fast.

When Twilight reminded him she had told him to keep an eye on Trixie, Spike responded with a few words I didn't hear that made Twilight face burn slightly and she whispered they'd talk more when they got home.
-Why is he so anxious to watch it? Not like the view is any good from where they were standing. Maybe he just wanted to get away from Trixie, who seems to be backsliding a bit... also good way of lampshading his absence.

Dash sure had picked animals that were like her.
-Of course... just not like her in the BEST way.

Twilight teleported us the relatively short distance (for her) to the finish line.
-Thought so...

when no one wanted to loose to the reigning champion again.
-lose

castle turtle
-Consider capitalizing to make it a proper noun.

"Yeah, he sucks at consistency. It'll be over soon though."
-She talking to you as the author?

"The owl. Haven't you noticed he keeps having short bursts of speed instead of a level race?"
-And then covering up for it?

'Silly Applejack, that's snow. Avalanches are snow. That's a landslide....' I thought.
-Ok, so she didn't rig it...

Fluttershy just started quietly mumbling something even I couldn't make out.
-The Butterfly teleporting+strengthening+distance warping may still be on the table though.

I pictured her wing pinned under a rock and her having to cut it off to avoid being a sitting duck. Then an image of Dash flashed through my mind buried under tons of rock bleeding to death before she'd get a chance to suffocate.
-Nice way of stepping it up from the fandom idea, which is actually pretty silly since in this case the rescuers know exactly were to look and that there is a problem, so the wing-pin isn't a big deal per se. Then again, that was the direction RD's thoughts were going (well, not to chewing off her own wing, but that she wouldn't be rescued).

Dash had given me a scare a week back during my cute-ceaņera but I didn't want this.
-Pranking her? How could she be sure not to get Fluttershy by accident in a switch? I guess if the "trigger" pull on the pranks was fast enough she could just look at the cutie-mark. Alternatively she was being threatening to 'Cruel, trying to protect 'Shy.

"It's the turtle!" I said, quickly looking through them.
-Well, that explains that mistake... not that an explanation was REQUIRED since 'Shy could have messed up due to everypony ELSE getting it wrong all the time, and being under stress.

Looked like the tortoise kept bandages in that shell of his not just sunglasses.
-Interesting point. Of course, I could see the Butterfly conjuring those too.

Had I worn that face when 'Shy made me see I had a life and I couldn't just throw it away?
-I would have expected more of a shocked look, but a hybrid would make perfect sense.

I'd just been playing a game with the tortoise. He had apparently saved Rainbow. Still it would have been fun if he had won... Heh, now I sound like one of 'Shy's pony-tales.
-Yes.

That means.... She has a pet that can't fly!
-So Gaia-power enchanted the propeller? Or maybe 'Cruel is just learning a leason about friends not having to be anything like you (al la "Look Before You Sleep").

I stopped laughing in our head eventually.
-Ah, or she could just crack up at RD's expense... that makes sense too...

Shy insisted we give the Falcon a talk after coming in second, he and the rest were, after all, still under our care. I agreed.
-Seems like something that they both could be useful for...

"Hey, so if you're ever ready, I'm right here. Until then, CHIN UP! Rainbow wanted you as a pet because you-, er, look . . ." Giving speeches to animals was 'Shy's department.
-She is saying she would take the Falcon as her pet?

I knew what it was like to seemingly be just chaff.
-Interesting point, even if the reasons are VERY different.

"Then be happy that some good came about anyway, and learn from it. You're a different kind of Kindness than I am, don't judge yourself based on me."
-Point. And see point about "friends don't have to be like you" but twisted around to "you don't have to be just one thing".

You know what that's like? How? Fine, keep your secrets.
-Trying to remember who the interviewer is...

get Dash some books on tortoise care to completely ignore.
-*Chuckle*

smelled like blue
-So it was really POWERFUL magic then...

Possibly questions like 'how do I stop a tortoise from falling out of a house made of clouds?'
-Point...

And there was Twilight's cloud-walking spell.
-Exactly...

What's a tank meant to be anyway? A water tank? Weird.
-Nice lampshading...

Of course I had made the mistake of saying so around Twilight.
-Oh... fix incoming!

Tank was actually a code word short for water 'tank' when the weapon was first produced in secret in the year-" Yeah. That one lasted a while. Need to ask Rainbow what a bullet was sometime too.
-Good tweaking of the RL origin of the word. And then more lampshade hanging.

Ah, she probably had to hold onto him all night...
-So really tired?

Oh.
-Well, looks like Twilight sent her Friendship Letter in really fast, and Celestia had a free moment to do the enchantment...

Pink built him some sort of flying thing! She was the only pony in Equestria who'd have invented such a gizmo!
-Well, the shaft glows so... random other unicorn? Perhaps it is a stock perpetual rotation device (or tapped into the ley lines from the hydro-arcanic dam). Anyway, she might have had it in a box of parts.

Sure can't slow him down then. One is his top and only speed...
-Having admired the description of a WWII design jeep I rode in (owned by my mentor, who as a engineer found it a practical vehicle, partially due to being old enough to not need emissions inspections) I can relate... said description was along the lines of "Will do 0 to 30 in nothing flat... and 60... eventually."

"...But... How long has he got? He looks kind of... old."
-Yeah, that is a good one.

"But for future reference you two finishing each other's sentences is creepy as hay."
-Snort... and interesting that she can tell. Do their voices sound that different?

what she wanted,
-consider "what she had wanted"

He had helped her anyway. And she was so, gentle with him.
-Sounds ODDLY familiar somehow... ;)

I made tiny circles in the cloud we were standing on, I let my colors and Cutie Mark appear. I wasn't sure how to get started, I didn't want her to be mad at me.
-Fluttercruel NERVOUS? Talk about character development...

"That was you back at Sugarcube Corner, wasn't it? The one who helped Pinkie pull me back from becoming a Nightmare?"
-Oh, yeah, that would be a big deal, wouldn't it... Interesting she NOTICED the weirdness.

"…Uh…N-no! Not at all!" she replied, not really hiding her surprise well.
-Lying I assume?

as much as I hate to admit it, without 'Shy, I'd still be the Old Man's little wind-up toy."
-Interesting point.

I'll take you over your 'Old Man' any day,"
-Well... (see next comment)

"That's not a very high mark to fly past."
-That was about what I was going to say.

I just don't believe in 'forgotten' along with 'forgiven.'
-That can be wise I think... depending on how you define it.

Rainbow Dash -never- turns her back on anypony who's ever helped her and that includes you!" Then she smiled at me, "Pal."
-Nice.

That was the Rainbow most ponies knew, but I could finally see the real Rainbow Dash behind it too.
-No, most ponies know the braggart and the solo athlete I should think.

Now You want to hear about my cute-ceaņera? After making everypony fall asleep from that one? Heh. It's about time.
-That sounds good, and I guess this will be a more intimate look? Oh, wait, we saw the post-Gaia festival, not the cute-ceaņera, right?
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lz0291.deviantart.com/ You should post your comment for this chapter there since Kendell2 and I merely edited this chapter. And I don't feel right answering your comments because of that reason. *hugs* Thank you for your long comments.
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Did so via PM, since I couldn't find the story in their pages.
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